"The woman's hair is shorter now, cropped close to her head, streaked with something the color of wet asphalt—maybe silver, maybe just the light."
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"She pulls it up, self-conscious, and Rory notices the ring—a fat gold band, engraved with initials, sitting on her left finger."
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"She hadn't thought about it in years—not since Evan asked what it was, and she told him a factory accident, and he laughed, hard, like it was a joke."
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"Rory leans against the counter, her fingers wrapping around a nearly full glass of ale—Silas' usual."
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"Evan—*Evan*—had called her a coward when she left."
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"She ran *from the memory* of what they'd had—of the way Eva would laugh at her bad jokes, of the way she'd hold Rory's hand when she had nightmares about her father's texts."
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"He nods at them, once, like he's saying *I see you*, and then he moves to the jukebox, selecting a record—something slow, jazz, the kind that feels like old silk."
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"It's a real smile, the kind that reaches her blue eyes, and for a second, she's 16 again, standing in Eva's backyard, laughing as Silas—old, with a gun and a scar and a secret—teaches them to shoot wine bottles."
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"Rory looks down at their hands, intertwined, and remembers the last time she held Eva's hand—at the station, before she left."
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"\"I'll leave you two to it. But Rory—\" he pauses, \"—close the back door when you're done. The wind's picking up.\""
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"It's a reminder, now, not of pain, but of the way people can come back—broken, but still there."
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"Rory glances up from the glass she's buffing, her wrist flicking as the cloth scrubs a smudge from the rim until it catches the light."
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"Her face is a map of lines Rory doesn't recognize: a furrow between her brows, a crease at the corner of her eyes that wasn't there before."
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"She's wearing a coat that looks too expensive, a tailored thing in charcoal, and her shoes click on the creaky wooden floor like she's not used to them."
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"She ran from Evan, from the rent collector, from the mirror that showed her a stranger."
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"It's a real smile, the kind that reaches her blue eyes, and for a second, she's 16 again, standing in Eva's backyard, laughing as Silas—old, with a gun and a sc…"