Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYB4YV8SN9T7ZHHR4DRB3S8

Run Details

Model:
Grok 4
Duration:
2m 3s
Cost:
$0.049976
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Aurora's fingers tightened around the Heartstone Pendant, its crimson gem pulsing with a faint warmth against her skin. The silver chain felt heavier than usual, as if it knew what lay ahead. She glanced at Nyx, the shadowy figure gliding beside her, their form a shifting silhouette that seemed to drink in the dim light of the alley. Behind them, Isolde moved with ethereal grace, her silver hair swaying like a cascade of moonlight, leaving no footprints on the damp London cobblestones. "This rift in the Veil," Isolde murmured, her voice a riddle wrapped in silk, "whispers of feasts that devour the soul. Step lightly, lest you become the meal." Aurora swallowed, her bright blue eyes narrowing. She wasn't one for cryptic warnings—give her a straight path, a delivery route through traffic, and she'd navigate it fine. But this? This was no ordinary errand. The pendant had led them here, to a forgotten corner of Whitechapel where the air hummed with an unnatural charge, like static before a storm. Nyx had insisted on coming, their violet eyes glowing faintly as they sensed the tear in reality. And Isolde... well, the seer had appeared in her grove that morning, uninvited, with eyes full of unspoken visions. The wall before them shimmered, a faint distortion like heat rising from pavement, visible only because Isolde had touched Aurora's forehead with a cool finger, granting her "sight beyond the mundane." Aurora reached out, her hand passing through what looked like solid brick. A rush of warm air greeted her, scented with ripe fruit and spiced smoke. She stepped forward, heart pounding, and the world twisted. They emerged into Dymas, the realm of gluttony, under a sky of warm amber that bathed everything in golden hues. Aurora blinked, disoriented, as the ground solidified beneath her boots—not cobblestones, but soft earth carpeted in vibrant moss that squished like overripe peaches underfoot. The air was thick, humid, laden with aromas that made her mouth water involuntarily: roasting meats, caramelized sugars, the tang of fermented berries. It was intoxicating, pulling at her senses like an invisible hand. Nyx solidified beside her, their humanoid form coalescing into something more tangible, standing at six-foot-two with shadows rippling like dark silk. "This place hungers," they whispered, voice like wind through cracked glass. "It hungers for more than flesh." Isolde followed, her pale lavender eyes scanning the landscape with a knowing glint. She couldn't lie—Fae compulsion, Aurora had learned in the grove—but her truths twisted like vines. "The vines here bear fruit that sings of forgotten desires. Taste wisely, mortal child." Aurora ignored the "child" bit; at twenty-five, she'd outrun worse insults from her ex. She focused on the wonder unfolding around them. Sprawling vineyards stretched as far as she could see, vines heavy with clusters of grapes that shimmered like jewels—deep purples, vivid golds, some pulsing with an inner light as if alive. Orchards dotted the horizon, trees laden with fruits she'd never imagined: globes of crimson that dripped nectar, pods that split open to reveal creamy interiors scented like vanilla and fire. They moved deeper, the path winding through gardens where flowers bloomed in impossible profusion—blooms that unfurled petals like feasting mouths, releasing puffs of pollen that sparkled in the amber light. Aurora's skin prickled with unease; the warmth was cloying, seeping into her pores, making her feel bloated yet ravenous. Her stomach growled, unbidden, and she pressed a hand to it, remembering Isolde's warning. A low hum filled the air, growing into a symphony of sounds: distant laughter, the sizzle of fats on grills, the clink of goblets. As they crested a gentle hill, a grand pavilion came into view, its silken tents billowing in a breeze that carried the scent of exotic spices—cinnamon, saffron, something darker like charred bone. Tables groaned under the weight of feasts: platters of roasted beasts with hides still glistening, towers of pastries dusted in sugars that glittered like stardust, vats of stew bubbling with ingredients that writhed faintly, as if not quite dead. Aurora's breath caught. People—no, souls—moved among the tables, their forms ethereal yet solid, dressed in finery that shifted colors with each step. Some laughed uproariously, stuffing handfuls of food into mouths that stretched unnaturally wide. Others slumped in chairs, eyes glazed, bellies distended like overfilled sacks. A chef, his apron stained with juices, wielded a cleaver with fervor, hacking at a haunch of meat that regenerated as he cut. "Helbound," Nyx murmured, their shadow-form flickering as if repelled. "Contracted from Earth, bound to serve. Their excess chains them here." Aurora felt a chill despite the warmth. She'd read about Hel in old myths, but this was real—too real. The pendant at her neck throbbed hotter, drawing her gaze to a distant spire where a figure lounged on a throne of woven vines: Prince Belphegor, she guessed, though Isolde didn't confirm. His presence loomed, even from afar, a aura of indolent power that made her legs feel heavy. They pressed on, weaving through the gardens. Aurora brushed against a vine, and it coiled gently around her wrist, the small crescent scar from her childhood accident tingling as if awakened. The vine offered a grape, plump and inviting, its skin splitting to reveal juicy innards. Hunger gnawed at her—sharp, insistent—but she yanked her hand away, remembering Eva's stories of fae temptations back in Cardiff. This wasn't the Fae Courts, but the allure felt similar, a siren call to indulge. Isolde paused at a cluster of ancient oaks, their bark etched with runes that glowed faintly. "These trees remember the first feasts," she said, her voice a melody of half-truths. "They whisper of a prince who dines on ambitions, not just flesh." Aurora leaned closer, ear to the bark, and heard it—a faint rustling like pages turning in a forbidden book, murmurs of deals struck, souls traded for one more bite. Unease coiled in her gut, mixing with wonder. How could something so beautiful be so insidious? Nyx extended a shadowy tendril, touching the trunk, and recoiled as if burned. "The roots delve into despair," they said, voice strained. "This realm feeds on itself." Deeper they went, the landscape shifting. The gardens gave way to orchards where fruits hung low, brushing their heads. Aurora plucked one experimentally—a pear-like thing with golden skin that warmed in her palm. It hummed softly, a vibration that traveled up her arm, filling her mind with visions of endless banquets, laughter echoing in halls of marble. She dropped it, startled, and it burst on the ground, releasing a swarm of tiny, iridescent insects that buzzed around her ankles before dissipating. "Discovery comes at a price," Isolde intoned, her ageless face serene. She didn't eat, didn't touch; her Fae blood perhaps immunized her. But Aurora felt the pull, the wonder turning to temptation. Nyx, ever the shadow, slipped incorporeal for a moment, scouting ahead. They reformed with a whisper: "A competition brews. Chefs vie for the prince's favor. We should not linger." Yet linger they did, drawn by a clearing where a culinary spectacle unfolded. Souls in chef's whites dashed about, conjuring dishes from thin air—soups that boiled without fire, breads that rose in seconds, infused with essences that made the air shimmer. One chef, a wiry man with hollow eyes, presented a pie that, when cut, released aromas of childhood memories: Aurora smelled her mother's Welsh cakes, fresh from the oven, mingled with something rotten underneath. Unease peaked as a soul approached them, offering goblets of wine that swirled with colors like liquid sunset. "Taste the nectar of Dymas," he said, voice eager, desperate. His skin was sallow, stretched over bones that seemed to crave more. Aurora hesitated, the pendant burning against her chest—a warning? She declined with a shake of her head, but the man's eyes lingered, hungry. Nyx intervened, their form expanding to cast a chilling shadow over the man. He scurried away, muttering. "This place devours the will," Nyx said. "I was once like them—trapped in ritual, bound between realms. But here, the chains are silk and spice." Aurora nodded, her quick mind piecing it together. The realm's wonder masked its peril; every delight hid a hook. She fingered the Fae-Forged Blade at her belt, a gift from Isolde in the grove—its moonsilver cold against her hip, a reminder of edges that cut through illusions. The grove itself had been wondrous too, with time bending like reeds, wildflowers blooming eternally under ancient oaks. But Dymas was different—excess without end, a mirror to mortal hungers amplified to madness. As they delved further, the sky deepened to a richer amber, casting long shadows that danced unnaturally. A river of what looked like molten honey wound through the landscape, its banks lined with picnic spreads abandoned mid-feast, plates scattered with half-eaten delicacies that somehow remained fresh. Aurora knelt by the river, dipping a finger into the flow. It coated her skin, sweet and viscous, warming her from within. Visions flickered: her father's stern lectures on law, her escape from Evan, the flat above Silas' bar. Comforts she craved, twisted into insatiable want. She pulled back, wiping her hand on her jeans, heart racing with a mix of awe and dread. "It's like it knows us," she said aloud, voice steady despite the tremor. "Feeds on what we desire." Isolde tilted her head, silver hair catching the light. "Desire is the seed; gluttony the harvest. The prince sows well." Nyx nodded, their violet eyes narrowing. "We came for answers—the pendant's origin, the benefactor. But this realm will consume us if we seek too deeply." A sudden roar erupted from nearby—a beast, perhaps, or a chef's triumphant cry as a dish ignited in flames of blue fire, illuminating faces locked in eternal revelry. Aurora felt the pull intensify, wonder warring with unease. The air grew heavier, scents cloying, sounds amplifying: the crunch of bites, the slurp of drinks, the moans of satiation and regret. They turned a corner into a vineyard maze, walls of vines twisting like labyrinthine veins. Fruits dangled temptingly close, brushing their shoulders. Aurora's scar itched again, a phantom reminder of childhood falls, and she wondered if this place amplified pains as well as pleasures. Nyx slipped ahead, incorporeal, scouting. "A portal lies deeper," they reported upon return. "But guardians feast there—demons with appetites unbound." Isolde smiled faintly, misleading in her truth. "Appetites can be sated, or starved. Choose your weapon wisely." Aurora gripped the blade tighter, its luminescent glow faint even in this amber light. Wonder filled her—the sheer alien beauty of it all, vines alive with purpose, skies that promised endless dusk. But unease gnawed, a counterpoint to the hunger. This was no mere exploration; it was a test, a delve into the self. As they pushed on, the maze opened to a central glade where a grand table awaited, empty save for three settings. Plates gleamed, empty yet inviting, as if waiting for them. The pendant pulsed wildly now, heat spreading through her veins. Discovery beckoned—answers, perhaps, or doom. Aurora hesitated, blue eyes wide with the realm's intoxicating spell, torn between fleeing and diving deeper into its wondrous, perilous heart.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she said aloud [aloud]"
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.583
leniency1
rawRatio0.071
effectiveRatio0.071
92.06% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1888
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"lightly"
count1
1
adverb"gently"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"lightly"
1"gently"
2"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1888
totalAiIsms38
found
0
word"warmth"
count3
1
word"silk"
count3
2
word"navigate"
count1
3
word"unspoken"
count1
4
word"shimmered"
count2
5
word"pounding"
count1
6
word"tangible"
count1
7
word"scanning"
count1
8
word"glint"
count1
9
word"stomach"
count1
10
word"symphony"
count1
11
word"weight"
count1
12
word"glistening"
count1
13
word"chill"
count1
14
word"throbbed"
count1
15
word"loomed"
count1
16
word"etched"
count1
17
word"whisper"
count2
18
word"delve"
count2
19
word"echoing"
count1
20
word"marble"
count1
21
word"chilling"
count1
22
word"peril"
count1
23
word"reminder"
count2
24
word"delved"
count1
25
word"flickered"
count1
26
word"racing"
count1
27
word"desire"
count2
28
word"pulsed"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"silk"
2"navigate"
3"unspoken"
4"shimmered"
5"pounding"
6"tangible"
7"scanning"
8"glint"
9"stomach"
10"symphony"
11"weight"
12"glistening"
13"chill"
14"throbbed"
15"loomed"
16"etched"
17"whisper"
18"delve"
19"echoing"
20"marble"
21"chilling"
22"peril"
23"reminder"
24"delved"
25"flickered"
26"racing"
27"desire"
28"pulsed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
94.70% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells4
narrationSentences110
matches
0"d with unease"
1"felt a chill"
2"g with wonder"
3"g with unease"
77.92% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences110
filterMatches
0"feel"
1"wonder"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences121
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen43
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1856
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions66
wordCount1660
uniqueNames21
maxNameDensity1.33
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Heartstone1
Pendant1
Nyx10
Isolde12
London1
Aurora22
Whitechapel1
Dymas2
Fae4
Hel1
Prince1
Belphegor1
Eva1
Cardiff1
Courts1
Deeper1
Welsh1
Fae-Forged1
Blade1
Evan1
Comforts1
persons
0"Pendant"
1"Nyx"
2"Isolde"
3"Aurora"
4"Prince"
5"Belphegor"
6"Eva"
7"Evan"
places
0"London"
1"Dymas"
2"Cardiff"
globalScore0.837
windowScore0.833
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences98
glossingSentenceCount6
matches
0"silhouette that seemed to drink in the dim light of the alley"
1"looked like solid brick"
2"not quite dead"
3"bones that seemed to crave more"
4"looked like molten honey wound through th"
5"as if waiting for them"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.539
wordCount1856
matches
0"not cobblestones, but soft earth carpeted in vibrant moss"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences121
matches(empty)
72.52% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs32
mean58
std23.42
cv0.404
sampleLengths
082
128
295
366
478
538
642
783
863
995
1069
1120
1268
1380
1442
1572
1681
1761
1875
1963
2042
2179
2292
2336
2420
2525
2659
2764
2817
2954
3046
3121
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences110
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs305
matches
0"was cloying"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount21
semicolonCount6
flaggedSentences24
totalSentences121
ratio0.198
matches
0"She wasn't one for cryptic warnings—give her a straight path, a delivery route through traffic, and she'd navigate it fine."
1"Aurora blinked, disoriented, as the ground solidified beneath her boots—not cobblestones, but soft earth carpeted in vibrant moss that squished like overripe peaches underfoot."
2"She couldn't lie—Fae compulsion, Aurora had learned in the grove—but her truths twisted like vines."
3"Aurora ignored the \"child\" bit; at twenty-five, she'd outrun worse insults from her ex."
4"Sprawling vineyards stretched as far as she could see, vines heavy with clusters of grapes that shimmered like jewels—deep purples, vivid golds, some pulsing with an inner light as if alive."
5"They moved deeper, the path winding through gardens where flowers bloomed in impossible profusion—blooms that unfurled petals like feasting mouths, releasing puffs of pollen that sparkled in the amber light."
6"Aurora's skin prickled with unease; the warmth was cloying, seeping into her pores, making her feel bloated yet ravenous."
7"As they crested a gentle hill, a grand pavilion came into view, its silken tents billowing in a breeze that carried the scent of exotic spices—cinnamon, saffron, something darker like charred bone."
8"People—no, souls—moved among the tables, their forms ethereal yet solid, dressed in finery that shifted colors with each step."
9"She'd read about Hel in old myths, but this was real—too real."
10"Hunger gnawed at her—sharp, insistent—but she yanked her hand away, remembering Eva's stories of fae temptations back in Cardiff."
11"Aurora leaned closer, ear to the bark, and heard it—a faint rustling like pages turning in a forbidden book, murmurs of deals struck, souls traded for one more bite."
12"Aurora plucked one experimentally—a pear-like thing with golden skin that warmed in her palm."
13"She didn't eat, didn't touch; her Fae blood perhaps immunized her."
14"Souls in chef's whites dashed about, conjuring dishes from thin air—soups that boiled without fire, breads that rose in seconds, infused with essences that made the air shimmer."
15"Aurora hesitated, the pendant burning against her chest—a warning?"
16"The realm's wonder masked its peril; every delight hid a hook."
17"She fingered the Fae-Forged Blade at her belt, a gift from Isolde in the grove—its moonsilver cold against her hip, a reminder of edges that cut through illusions."
18"But Dymas was different—excess without end, a mirror to mortal hungers amplified to madness."
19"\"Desire is the seed; gluttony the harvest. The prince sows well.\""
20"A sudden roar erupted from nearby—a beast, perhaps, or a chef's triumphant cry as a dish ignited in flames of blue fire, illuminating faces locked in eternal revelry."
21"Wonder filled her—the sheer alien beauty of it all, vines alive with purpose, skies that promised endless dusk."
22"This was no mere exploration; it was a test, a delve into the self."
23"Discovery beckoned—answers, perhaps, or doom."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1447
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount46
adverbRatio0.03178991015894955
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.0082930200414651
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences121
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences121
mean15.34
std8.15
cv0.531
sampleLengths
018
114
226
324
428
57
620
72
85
925
1017
112
1217
1343
1414
159
1620
1724
1823
1911
2021
2111
226
2313
2415
2514
2614
278
2831
2930
3030
3119
3214
3324
3432
3539
363
3719
3813
3911
4023
419
4211
437
4412
4532
4617
477
4824
4915
61.98% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.371900826446281
totalSentences121
uniqueOpeners45
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences107
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences107
matches
0"She glanced at Nyx, the"
1"She wasn't one for cryptic"
2"She stepped forward, heart pounding,"
3"They emerged into Dymas, the"
4"It was intoxicating, pulling at"
5"they whispered, voice like wind"
6"She couldn't lie—Fae compulsion, Aurora"
7"She focused on the wonder"
8"They moved deeper, the path"
9"Her stomach growled, unbidden, and"
10"She'd read about Hel in"
11"His presence loomed, even from"
12"They pressed on, weaving through"
13"she said, her voice a"
14"they said, voice strained"
15"It hummed softly, a vibration"
16"She dropped it, startled, and"
17"She didn't eat, didn't touch;"
18"They reformed with a whisper:"
19"he said, voice eager, desperate"
ratio0.271
20.75% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount94
totalSentences107
matches
0"Aurora's fingers tightened around the"
1"The silver chain felt heavier"
2"She glanced at Nyx, the"
3"Isolde murmured, her voice a"
4"Aurora swallowed, her bright blue"
5"She wasn't one for cryptic"
6"This was no ordinary errand."
7"The pendant had led them"
8"Nyx had insisted on coming,"
9"The wall before them shimmered,"
10"A rush of warm air"
11"She stepped forward, heart pounding,"
12"They emerged into Dymas, the"
13"Aurora blinked, disoriented, as the"
14"The air was thick, humid,"
15"It was intoxicating, pulling at"
16"Nyx solidified beside her, their"
17"they whispered, voice like wind"
18"Isolde followed, her pale lavender"
19"She couldn't lie—Fae compulsion, Aurora"
ratio0.879
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences107
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences73
technicalSentenceCount19
matches
0"The silver chain felt heavier than usual, as if it knew what lay ahead."
1"She glanced at Nyx, the shadowy figure gliding beside her, their form a shifting silhouette that seemed to drink in the dim light of the alley."
2"They emerged into Dymas, the realm of gluttony, under a sky of warm amber that bathed everything in golden hues."
3"Aurora blinked, disoriented, as the ground solidified beneath her boots—not cobblestones, but soft earth carpeted in vibrant moss that squished like overripe pe…"
4"The air was thick, humid, laden with aromas that made her mouth water involuntarily: roasting meats, caramelized sugars, the tang of fermented berries."
5"Sprawling vineyards stretched as far as she could see, vines heavy with clusters of grapes that shimmered like jewels—deep purples, vivid golds, some pulsing wi…"
6"Orchards dotted the horizon, trees laden with fruits she'd never imagined: globes of crimson that dripped nectar, pods that split open to reveal creamy interior…"
7"They moved deeper, the path winding through gardens where flowers bloomed in impossible profusion—blooms that unfurled petals like feasting mouths, releasing pu…"
8"Aurora's skin prickled with unease; the warmth was cloying, seeping into her pores, making her feel bloated yet ravenous."
9"As they crested a gentle hill, a grand pavilion came into view, its silken tents billowing in a breeze that carried the scent of exotic spices—cinnamon, saffron…"
10"Tables groaned under the weight of feasts: platters of roasted beasts with hides still glistening, towers of pastries dusted in sugars that glittered like stard…"
11"Aurora brushed against a vine, and it coiled gently around her wrist, the small crescent scar from her childhood accident tingling as if awakened."
12"The vine offered a grape, plump and inviting, its skin splitting to reveal juicy innards."
13"It hummed softly, a vibration that traveled up her arm, filling her mind with visions of endless banquets, laughter echoing in halls of marble."
14"She dropped it, startled, and it burst on the ground, releasing a swarm of tiny, iridescent insects that buzzed around her ankles before dissipating."
15"Souls in chef's whites dashed about, conjuring dishes from thin air—soups that boiled without fire, breads that rose in seconds, infused with essences that made…"
16"She fingered the Fae-Forged Blade at her belt, a gift from Isolde in the grove—its moonsilver cold against her hip, a reminder of edges that cut through illusio…"
17"As they delved further, the sky deepened to a richer amber, casting long shadows that danced unnaturally."
18"Wonder filled her—the sheer alien beauty of it all, vines alive with purpose, skies that promised endless dusk."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount7
matches
0"Isolde murmured, her voice a riddle wrapped in silk,"
1"Nyx murmured, their shadow-form flickering as if repelled"
2"she said, her voice a melody of half-truths"
3"they said, voice strained"
4"Isolde intoned, her ageless face serene"
5"he said, voice eager, desperate"
6"she said aloud, voice steady despite the tremor"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
1"they whispered (whisper)"
2"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
3"they reported (report)"
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.375
leniency0.75
rawRatio0.444
effectiveRatio0.333
66.7753%