Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYB61SR2TS3F5JS3EQK3KCT

Run Details

Model:
Grok 4
Duration:
1m 15s
Cost:
$0.044301
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory shoved through the door of The Raven's Nest, her delivery bag slapping against her hip as she balanced two steaming takeaway boxes from the Golden Empress. The familiar tang of spilled ale and polished wood hit her, but she kept her eyes down, weaving past a cluster of regulars nursing their pints. "Evening, Rory," Silas called from behind the bar, his voice carrying that same gravelly edge she remembered from her first night in London. He polished a glass with a cloth, his silver signet ring catching the low light. "Yu-Fei's specials again? You're keeping me in business with these drop-offs." She froze midway to the counter, the boxes suddenly heavy in her hands. That limp in his step as he moved to adjust a stool, the grey streaks threading through his auburn beard—they painted a picture she hadn't seen up close in years. Not since that rainy afternoon in Cardiff when he'd shown up at her father's office, all quiet warnings and a plane ticket to London clutched in his fist. "Silas?" The name slipped out before she could stop it. She set the boxes down harder than intended, sauce packets scattering across the scarred oak. "I thought... I mean, Eva said you were still around, but I figured you'd moved on. Retired properly or something." He set the glass down with a deliberate clink, his hazel eyes narrowing just a fraction. The bar's dim glow from the green neon sign outside filtered through the windows, casting shadows on the old maps pinned to the walls. "Retired? That's a word for it. And you—Rory Carter, delivering Chinese in Soho. Your father must be thrilled." She slid onto a stool, the leather creaking under her weight. Her bright blue eyes met his, searching for the man who'd once pulled her out of a bad spot without asking questions. "Dad doesn't know half of it. Last we spoke, he thought I was clerking at some firm in the City. Easier that way." Silas poured her a pint without asking, sliding it across. Foam clung to the rim. "Easier for who? You vanished from Cardiff like smoke. Evan still sniffing around?" The name made her fingers tighten around the glass. She took a sip, the bitter hop cutting through the knot in her throat. "Evan's history. Locked up last I heard. But you—look at you. The Spymaster himself, slinging drinks in a dive like this." She gestured at the bar, the black-and-white photographs of forgotten streets staring back like ghosts. "What happened to Prague? You used to talk about it like it was yesterday." He leaned on the counter, his slight limp shifting his weight to his good leg. The knee injury, she remembered— the one that ended his field days. "Prague was a lifetime ago. Botched op, bad luck. This place?" He nodded at the hidden bookshelf in the corner, the one that led to his secret back room. "Keeps the blood flowing. Contacts come and go. But you, Rory— you're not the wide-eyed girl who crashed on my couch upstairs anymore. That scar on your wrist, it's faded some." She glanced at the small crescent mark on her left wrist, a remnant from climbing fences as a kid in Cardiff. "Time does that. Heals some things, hides others." She straightened her straight shoulder-length black hair, tucking a strand behind her ear. "Why didn't you reach out? Eva said you asked about me, but nothing. Five years, Silas. Feels like ten." A regular at the end of the bar laughed at some joke, the sound echoing off the walls. Silas ignored it, his beard twitching as he rubbed his chin. "Reached out? To Brendan Carter's daughter, fresh off running from that bastard Evan? You needed space. Clean break. I gave it." He poured himself a measure of whisky, the amber liquid swirling in the glass. "Besides, intelligence work teaches you silence. Sometimes it's kinder." "Kinder?" She set her pint down, the thud sharp. "I lived above your bar for months after I got here. Delivered for Yu-Fei because you hooked me up. Then poof—you pull back. No calls, no check-ins. I thought we were friends. More than that, even. Like family." His signet ring tapped the counter once, twice. A habit she remembered from those late-night talks when he'd share scraps of his MI6 days, always veiled in half-truths. "Family's a loaded word. Your father and I go back—Irish barrister and a Welsh operative, crossing paths in dusty courtrooms. He asked me to look out for you. I did. But regrets? Yeah, I've got a few stacked up like these old maps." She followed his gaze to the wall, where yellowed charts of Cold War Europe hung crooked. One showed Prague, its streets marked in faded ink. "Regrets like what? Leaving the service? Or something else?" Her voice dropped, the bar's murmur fading around them. She leaned in, the scent of his whisky mingling with the faint copper of old pipes under the floorboards. Silas sipped his drink, his eyes distant for a beat. "Like not warning you sooner about Evan. Your dad saw the signs, asked me to dig. I found dirt—abuse patterns, priors. But you were headstrong, Rory. Always were. Quick thinker, out-of-the-box, just like Jennifer taught you." He mentioned her mother's name softly, the Welsh teacher who'd filled her childhood with books and sharp wit. "Mum would've hated how I ran. But Evan... he changed me. Made me doubt everything." She traced the edge of her glass, foam bubbling down. "You changed too. The Silas I knew didn't limp, didn't hide behind a bar. You were action, Si. The one who got things done." He chuckled, low and without humor. "Action gets you a busted knee and a pension. This?" He swept a hand over the bar, bottles glinting in the low light. "This is survival. But seeing you now, all grown into your own—it's a punch. Time's a thief, steals the versions of us we liked best." A group entered the bar then, their laughter cutting through the tension. Rory watched Silas straighten, slipping back into his barman role with ease. But his eyes lingered on her, heavy with what he didn't say. "So what now? We pretend five years didn't happen? Grab a drink like old times?" "Old times." He set his glass down, the clink final. "Those ended when you stopped needing a mentor. But regrets? Mine's letting you think I forgot. Yours?" She hesitated, the weight of unspoken words pressing in. The scar on her wrist itched, a ghost of simpler hurts. "Mine's not coming back sooner. Thinking I could handle London alone." She pushed her pint away, half-finished. "But Silas, there's something I never told you about why I really left Cardiff." His brow furrowed, that quiet authority surfacing. "Rory—" The door burst open again, but this time it wasn't patrons. A man in a dark coat stormed in, his face twisted in recognition as his eyes locked on Rory. "Aurora Carter? We've got unfinished business." Evan. Out early, somehow. Her heart slammed against her ribs as Silas's hand moved instinctively toward the hidden panel behind the bar.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.419
leniency0.839
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
87.64% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1214
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
2
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"softly"
2"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
54.70% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1214
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"familiar"
count1
1
word"weight"
count3
2
word"echoing"
count1
3
word"silence"
count1
4
word"traced"
count1
5
word"glinting"
count1
6
word"tension"
count1
7
word"unspoken"
count1
8
word"furrowed"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"weight"
2"echoing"
3"silence"
4"traced"
5"glinting"
6"tension"
7"unspoken"
8"furrowed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"weight of words/silence"
count1
highlights
0"the weight of unspoken words"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences51
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences51
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences69
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen55
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1196
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions22
wordCount707
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity0.85
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Golden1
Empress1
London2
Cardiff2
Cold1
War1
Europe1
Prague1
Welsh1
Silas6
Rory3
persons
0"Raven"
1"Silas"
2"Rory"
places
0"Golden"
1"London"
2"Cardiff"
3"Europe"
4"Prague"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences48
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1196
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences69
matches(empty)
57.01% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs23
mean52
std18.18
cv0.35
sampleLengths
053
149
271
345
458
556
628
773
887
961
1073
1147
1271
1362
1464
1549
1654
1751
1827
1951
208
2136
2222
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences51
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs115
matches(empty)
60.04% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences69
ratio0.029
matches
0"That limp in his step as he moved to adjust a stool, the grey streaks threading through his auburn beard—they painted a picture she hadn't seen up close in years."
1"The knee injury, she remembered— the one that ended his field days."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount714
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount19
adverbRatio0.02661064425770308
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.0070028011204481795
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences69
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences69
mean17.33
std9.74
cv0.562
sampleLengths
027
126
223
315
411
513
630
728
810
915
1020
1116
1224
1318
1411
1522
1623
1710
185
1913
209
2114
2236
2314
2415
2512
2629
2731
2821
2921
3019
3118
3211
3335
349
359
3638
378
3820
3943
4016
419
4218
4319
4410
4554
4625
4724
486
4923
99.03% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.5942028985507246
totalSentences69
uniqueOpeners41
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences50
matches(empty)
ratio0
4.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences50
matches
0"He polished a glass with"
1"She froze midway to the"
2"She set the boxes down"
3"He set the glass down"
4"She slid onto a stool,"
5"Her bright blue eyes met"
6"She took a sip, the"
7"She gestured at the bar,"
8"He leaned on the counter,"
9"He nodded at the hidden"
10"She glanced at the small"
11"She straightened her straight shoulder-length"
12"He poured himself a measure"
13"She set her pint down,"
14"His signet ring tapped the"
15"She followed his gaze to"
16"Her voice dropped, the bar's"
17"She leaned in, the scent"
18"He mentioned her mother's name"
19"She traced the edge of"
ratio0.54
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount46
totalSentences50
matches
0"Rory shoved through the door"
1"The familiar tang of spilled"
2"Silas called from behind the"
3"He polished a glass with"
4"She froze midway to the"
5"That limp in his step"
6"The name slipped out before"
7"She set the boxes down"
8"He set the glass down"
9"The bar's dim glow from"
10"She slid onto a stool,"
11"Her bright blue eyes met"
12"Silas poured her a pint"
13"Foam clung to the rim."
14"The name made her fingers"
15"She took a sip, the"
16"She gestured at the bar,"
17"He leaned on the counter,"
18"The knee injury, she remembered—"
19"He nodded at the hidden"
ratio0.92
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences50
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences29
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Her bright blue eyes met his, searching for the man who'd once pulled her out of a bad spot without asking questions."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"He poured, the amber liquid swirling in the glass"
1"Her voice dropped, the bar's murmur fading around them"
2"She traced, foam bubbling down"
3"He swept, bottles glinting in the low light"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"He mentioned (mention)"
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.065
leniency0.129
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.065
78.7474%