Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYB6M4NN8EPS8E0AH44G5TH

Run Details

Model:
Grok 4
Duration:
1m 44s
Cost:
$0.045780
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rain pelted the cobblestones of Soho like bullets from a vengeful sky, turning the narrow alleys into slick rivers under the stutter of sodium lamps. Detective Harlow Quinn's boots slapped through shallow puddles, her breath steady despite the burn in her lungs. Eighteen years on the force had honed her into a machine of pursuit, her sharp jaw set, brown eyes locked on the figure ahead. The suspect—Tomás Herrera, if her intel held—darted like a shadow, his short curly dark brown hair plastered to his olive skin, a Saint Christopher medallion glinting briefly as he vaulted a low railing. She'd tailed him from The Raven's Nest, that dimly lit hole in the wall with its green neon sign flickering like a bad omen. Walls lined with old maps and black-and-white photos, the place reeked of secrets and stale ale. Herrera had slipped out the back after a hushed meet in the hidden room behind the bookshelf, clutching a satchel that screamed contraband. Quinn had no warrant, no backup—just a gut twisted by three years of unanswered questions since DS Morris vanished in a fog of the inexplicable. Supernatural origins, her mind whispered, but she shoved it down. Facts first. Always. "Stop! Police!" she barked, her voice cutting through the downpour, but Herrera didn't break stride. He weaved through a cluster of late-night revelers spilling from a pub, their laughter dissolving into yelps as he shoved past. Quinn followed, her worn leather watch ticking like a metronome on her left wrist, her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair matted flat. At 5'9", she matched his pace, military precision in every step—remnants of her early training that kept her alive when others faltered. He cut left onto Wardour Street, tires hissing on wet asphalt as cars swerved to avoid him. Quinn dodged a delivery van, its horn blaring, and closed the gap. Her hand hovered near her hip, but she didn't draw her sidearm—not yet. This wasn't about lethal force; it was about answers. Herrera had ties to the clique, that shadowy network she'd been circling for months. Off-the-books medical care, whispers of enchanted goods, banned substances. If he was patching up their wounds, he knew where the bodies were buried—literally. A flash of lightning illuminated his scar, that jagged line along his left forearm, as he glanced back. Warm brown eyes met hers for a split second, not fear but calculation. Born in Seville, moved to London for the NHS, lost his license for "unauthorized treatments." Supernatural patients, the file said. Bullshit, or was it? Morris had muttered about ghosts before he disappeared. Herrera bolted toward Oxford Street, the crowds thickening despite the rain. Tourists huddled under awnings, umbrellas blooming like black flowers. He shouldered through, knocking a woman's coffee to the ground in a steaming splash. Quinn leaped over the mess, her coat heavy with water, heart pounding a rhythm of pursuit. "Herrera! It's over!" He didn't respond, just veered right into a side street, heading north. Camden? That was a hike, but he moved with purpose, like he had a destination. Quinn's mind raced: the clique's haunts dotted London, but Camden had rumors—abandoned spots, underground dealings. She radioed in, voice clipped. "This is Quinn, pursuing suspect on foot, heading north from Soho. Male, late twenties, dark hair, olive skin. Requesting backup." Static crackled back, dispatch's voice muffled by the storm. "Copy that, Detective. Units en route, ETA ten minutes." Ten minutes was an eternity in a chase. Herrera vanished around a corner, and Quinn pushed harder, legs burning. She rounded the bend onto Tottenham Court Road, the lights of chain stores blurring in the rain. He was gaining ground, ducking into the flow of pedestrians. She spotted him again, crossing against traffic, horns blaring in protest. The pursuit dragged on, streets blending into a wet haze. From Soho's neon glow to the edgier vibe of Camden, the city shifted underfoot. Quinn's boots pounded pavement, puddles exploding under her heels. Herrera was fit, a former paramedic's endurance, but she was relentless. Lightning cracked again, thunder rumbling like a beast awakening. He led her toward Camden Market, the stalls shuttered for the night, tarps flapping in the wind. The air smelled of damp stone and faint incense, something otherworldly cutting through the rain. Herrera slowed, glancing around, then slipped down a narrow alley behind a row of closed shops. Quinn followed, caution prickling her skin. This wasn't her turf; the alleys here twisted like veins, easy to get lost in. He stopped at what looked like a boarded-up entrance—an old service door, graffiti-scarred and forgotten. No, not forgotten. Herrera pulled something from his pocket—a small, white object, bone-like—and pressed it against a seam in the wood. A click, and the door swung inward on silent hinges. Stairs descended into darkness, the faint hum of voices echoing up. Quinn froze, heart slamming. An underground market? Whispers in the precinct called it the Veil Market, a myth for conspiracy nuts—enchanted goods, alchemical crap, information traded like currency. It moved every full moon, or so the stories went. Tonight's sky was shrouded, but she recalled the phase: full, hidden behind clouds. Entry required a bone token. Herrera had one. He vanished down the stairs, the door beginning to swing shut. Quinn lunged, jamming her boot in the gap. Pain shot up her leg, but it held. Peering inside, she saw flickering torchlight, shadows dancing on damp walls. The air wafted up, thick with herbs, smoke, and something metallic—blood? Decision time. Follow into the unknown, or wait for backup? Her mind flashed to Morris: his body never found, just a cryptic note about "veils between worlds." She'd dismissed it as delirium, but the clique's involvement nagged at her. Herrera could be the key. But this place—unfamiliar, potentially dangerous. Trap? Armed dealers? Worse? She drew her Glock, the weight familiar in her grip. Military precision straightened her spine. Backup was minutes away, but Herrera could slip the net. Answers beckoned from the depths. With a deep breath, she shoved the door open and descended. The stairs creaked under her weight, spiraling down into what felt like an abandoned Tube station. The codex of her memory supplied details: beneath Camden, rails long silent, platforms repurposed for illicit trade. The air grew warmer, humid, carrying murmurs in languages she didn't recognize. She emerged onto a wide platform, lit by bioluminescent lanterns that cast an eerie glow. Stalls lined the edges, draped in silks and shadows: vials of glowing liquids, talismans etched with runes, creatures in cages that looked too mythical to be real. A vendor with eyes like polished obsidian hawked "dream essence," while another bartered information in hushed tones. Herrera wove through the crowd, satchel clutched tight. Quinn melted into the throng, her plainclothes blending better than a uniform would. But eyes turned—suspicious glances from figures with elongated shadows, skin that shimmered unnaturally. Human? Not all. She tracked him past a stall selling banned alchemical substances, powders that sparked in the air. A hag with withered hands offered "potions for the veiled," her cackle following Quinn like smoke. The detective's pulse thrummed; this was no ordinary black market. The supernatural underbelly she'd glimpsed in Morris's case stared back, real and raw. Herrera ducked into a tunnel, and Quinn hurried after, Glock low at her side. The crowd thinned, the hum fading to drips of water from cracked ceilings. Graffiti here glowed faintly, runes pulsing with inner light. A hand grabbed her arm—rough, calloused. She spun, facing a burly man with tattoos that writhed like snakes. "Bone token?" he growled, breath reeking of garlic and rot. Quinn's mind blanked. No token. Improvise. "Lost it in the chase. I'm with him." She nodded toward Herrera's retreating form. The guard's eyes narrowed, but a commotion erupted nearby—a stall collapsing in a clatter of vials, shouts rising. Distraction. Quinn twisted free and bolted, heart in her throat. The tunnel opened into a smaller chamber, crates stacked like fortifications. Herrera knelt by one, rummaging in his satchel. He pulled out a vial of iridescent fluid, handing it to a shadowy figureQuinn couldn't make out. "Stop!" she commanded, voice echoing off the walls. Glock raised, steady. Herrera whirled, warm brown eyes wide. "Detective? You shouldn't be here." The figure melted into darkness, gone. Quinn advanced, rain still dripping from her coat. "Tomás Herrera, you're under arrest for suspicion of trafficking illegal substances and aiding criminal activity." He backed up, scar stark under the dim light. "You don't understand. This isn't what you think." "Then explain. The clique—what are they hiding? My partner—" A low growl interrupted, from the shadows. Eyes gleamed—yellow, feral. Not human. Quinn's finger tightened on the trigger. The market's dangers materialized: a beast, lupine, hackles raised. Herrera stepped between them. "Easy, girl. She's not a threat." To Quinn: "Leave now, Detective. This world isn't for you." But she couldn't. Not with answers so close. The beast lunged, and Quinn fired—a warning shot cracking stone. Chaos erupted: shouts, feet scrambling. Herrera grabbed his satchel and ran deeper into the tunnels. Quinn pursued, the decision made in the heat of adrenaline. Deeper into the unfamiliar, the dangerous. The air thickened, scents of earth and magic closing in. Backup? Forgotten in the thrill. This was her chase, her truth to uncover. The tunnel twisted, leading to a cavernous space where the market's heart pulsed. More stalls, more wonders—and threats. A vendor hurled a flask at her feet, shattering in a cloud of smoke that burned her eyes. She coughed, vision blurring, but pressed on. Herrera vanished around a bend, into what looked like an old train car, doors ajar. Quinn slowed, caution warring with urgency. Enter? Or pull back? A voice slithered from the car: "Come in, Detective. Let's talk." Trap. But Morris's ghost urged her forward. She stepped inside, Glock leading. The car was a makeshift clinic: cots, medical supplies, glowing herbs. Herrera stood by a table, medallion glinting. "You want answers about your partner? Fine. But it starts with believing the impossible." Outside, the market stirred, guards closing in. Quinn's watch ticked—time running out. She lowered her weapon fractionally. "Talk fast." He smiled faintly, scar twisting. "The clique isn't criminal. We're protectors. Morris crossed into something he shouldn't have—a veil tear. Supernatural bleed. I tried to save him, but..." Gunfire echoed from the platform—backup arriving? Or worse? Quinn's mind reeled. Belief clashed with training. But here, in this underground labyrinth, the line blurred. She holstered her Glock, a tentative alliance forming in the tension. The chase ended, but the real pursuit began.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags22
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Static crackled back [back]"
1"He smiled faintly [faintly]"
dialogueSentences33
tagDensity0.667
leniency1
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.091
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1790
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
46.93% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1790
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"glinting"
count2
1
word"pounding"
count1
2
word"raced"
count1
3
word"otherworldly"
count1
4
word"echoing"
count2
5
word"dancing"
count1
6
word"weight"
count2
7
word"familiar"
count1
8
word"depths"
count1
9
word"etched"
count1
10
word"shimmered"
count1
11
word"pulse"
count1
12
word"stark"
count1
13
word"pulsed"
count1
14
word"echoed"
count1
15
word"tension"
count1
highlights
0"glinting"
1"pounding"
2"raced"
3"otherworldly"
4"echoing"
5"dancing"
6"weight"
7"familiar"
8"depths"
9"etched"
10"shimmered"
11"pulse"
12"stark"
13"pulsed"
14"echoed"
15"tension"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences72
matches
0"g with urgency"
83.33% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences72
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences73
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen92
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1759
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions92
wordCount1643
uniqueNames30
maxNameDensity1.4
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Soho2
Harlow1
Quinn23
Tomás1
Herrera20
Saint1
Christopher1
Raven1
Nest1
Morris6
Wardour1
Street2
Seville1
London2
Supernatural3
Oxford1
Camden5
Static1
Ten1
Tottenham1
Court1
Road1
Market2
Veil1
Glock5
Tube1
Detective2
Let1
Trap2
Gunfire1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Tomás"
3"Herrera"
4"Saint"
5"Christopher"
6"Morris"
7"Supernatural"
8"Static"
9"Let"
10"Gunfire"
places
0"Soho"
1"Raven"
2"Wardour"
3"Street"
4"Seville"
5"London"
6"Oxford"
7"Camden"
8"Tottenham"
9"Court"
10"Road"
globalScore0.8
windowScore0.667
5.77% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences52
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"looked like a boarded-up entrance—an old"
1"felt like an abandoned Tube station. Th"
2"looked like an old train car, doors ajar"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.569
wordCount1759
matches
0"not fear but calculation"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences73
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs43
mean40.91
std23.92
cv0.585
sampleLengths
099
1101
279
388
463
553
667
718
857
953
1069
1157
1259
1349
1453
1530
1644
1771
1837
1955
2036
2128
2220
2328
2436
2511
2611
2729
2817
299
3027
3120
3233
3339
3443
3525
3611
3712
3832
3919
4028
418
4235
90.64% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences72
matches
0"were buried"
1"get lost"
2"was shrouded"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs325
matches
0"was patching"
1"was gaining"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount22
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences20
totalSentences73
ratio0.274
matches
0"The suspect—Tomás Herrera, if her intel held—darted like a shadow, his short curly dark brown hair plastered to his olive skin, a Saint Christopher medallion glinting briefly as he vaulted a low railing."
1"Quinn had no warrant, no backup—just a gut twisted by three years of unanswered questions since DS Morris vanished in a fog of the inexplicable."
2"He cut left onto Wardour Street, tires hissing on wet asphalt as cars swerved to avoid him. Quinn dodged a delivery van, its horn blaring, and closed the gap. Her hand hovered near her hip, but she didn't draw her sidearm—not yet. This wasn't about lethal force; it was about answers. Herrera had ties to the clique, that shadowy network she'd been circling for months. Off-the-books medical care, whispers of enchanted goods, banned substances. If he was patching up their wounds, he knew where the bodies were buried—literally."
3"He didn't respond, just veered right into a side street, heading north. Camden? That was a hike, but he moved with purpose, like he had a destination. Quinn's mind raced: the clique's haunts dotted London, but Camden had rumors—abandoned spots, underground dealings. She radioed in, voice clipped. \"This is Quinn, pursuing suspect on foot, heading north from Soho."
4"He led her toward Camden Market, the stalls shuttered for the night, tarps flapping in the wind. The air smelled of damp stone and faint incense, something otherworldly cutting through the rain. Herrera slowed, glancing around, then slipped down a narrow alley behind a row of closed shops. Quinn followed, caution prickling her skin. This wasn't her turf; the alleys here twisted like veins, easy to get lost in."
5"He stopped at what looked like a boarded-up entrance—an old service door, graffiti-scarred and forgotten. No, not forgotten. Herrera pulled something from his pocket—a small, white object, bone-like—and pressed it against a seam in the wood. A click, and the door swung inward on silent hinges. Stairs descended into darkness, the faint hum of voices echoing up."
6"Quinn froze, heart slamming. An underground market? Whispers in the precinct called it the Veil Market, a myth for conspiracy nuts—enchanted goods, alchemical crap, information traded like currency. It moved every full moon, or so the stories went. Tonight's sky was shrouded, but she recalled the phase: full, hidden behind clouds. Entry required a bone token. Herrera had one."
7"He vanished down the stairs, the door beginning to swing shut. Quinn lunged, jamming her boot in the gap. Pain shot up her leg, but it held. Peering inside, she saw flickering torchlight, shadows dancing on damp walls. The air wafted up, thick with herbs, smoke, and something metallic—blood?"
8"Decision time. Follow into the unknown, or wait for backup? Her mind flashed to Morris: his body never found, just a cryptic note about \"veils between worlds.\" She'd dismissed it as delirium, but the clique's involvement nagged at her. Herrera could be the key. But this place—unfamiliar, potentially dangerous. Trap? Armed dealers? Worse?"
9"Herrera wove through the crowd, satchel clutched tight. Quinn melted into the throng, her plainclothes blending better than a uniform would. But eyes turned—suspicious glances from figures with elongated shadows, skin that shimmered unnaturally. Human? Not all."
10"She tracked him past a stall selling banned alchemical substances, powders that sparked in the air. A hag with withered hands offered \"potions for the veiled,\" her cackle following Quinn like smoke. The detective's pulse thrummed; this was no ordinary black market. The supernatural underbelly she'd glimpsed in Morris's case stared back, real and raw."
11"A hand grabbed her arm—rough, calloused. She spun, facing a burly man with tattoos that writhed like snakes. \"Bone token?\" he growled, breath reeking of garlic and rot."
12"The guard's eyes narrowed, but a commotion erupted nearby—a stall collapsing in a clatter of vials, shouts rising. Distraction. Quinn twisted free and bolted, heart in her throat."
13"The clique—what are they hiding?"
14"A low growl interrupted, from the shadows. Eyes gleamed—yellow, feral. Not human. Quinn's finger tightened on the trigger. The market's dangers materialized: a beast, lupine, hackles raised."
15"But she couldn't. Not with answers so close. The beast lunged, and Quinn fired—a warning shot cracking stone. Chaos erupted: shouts, feet scrambling. Herrera grabbed his satchel and ran deeper into the tunnels."
16"The tunnel twisted, leading to a cavernous space where the market's heart pulsed. More stalls, more wonders—and threats. A vendor hurled a flask at her feet, shattering in a cloud of smoke that burned her eyes. She coughed, vision blurring, but pressed on."
17"Outside, the market stirred, guards closing in. Quinn's watch ticked—time running out. She lowered her weapon fractionally. \"Talk fast.\""
18"Morris crossed into something he shouldn't have—a veil tear."
19"Gunfire echoed from the platform—backup arriving? Or worse?"
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount376
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount10
adverbRatio0.026595744680851064
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.010638297872340425
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences73
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences73
mean24.1
std20.63
cv0.856
sampleLengths
025
117
224
333
424
516
623
725
810
92
101
1115
1221
1321
1422
1588
1663
1751
182
1958
207
212
2212
236
2457
2553
2669
2757
2859
2949
3053
3130
3244
3371
3437
3555
3636
3728
3811
399
4028
4136
4211
437
444
4529
4612
475
482
495
79.45% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.4931506849315068
totalSentences73
uniqueOpeners36
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences61
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount16
totalSentences61
matches
0"She'd tailed him from The"
1"she barked, her voice cutting"
2"He weaved through a cluster"
3"He cut left onto Wardour"
4"He didn't respond, just veered"
5"He led her toward Camden"
6"He stopped at what looked"
7"He vanished down the stairs,"
8"She drew her Glock, the"
9"She tracked him past a"
10"she commanded, voice echoing off"
11"You shouldn't be"
12"He backed up, scar stark"
13"She's not a now, Detective."
14"He smiled faintly, scar twisting."
15"I tried to save him,"
ratio0.262
33.77% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount52
totalSentences61
matches
0"Rain pelted the cobblestones of"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn's boots slapped"
2"The suspect—Tomás Herrera, if her"
3"She'd tailed him from The"
4"Walls lined with old maps"
5"Herrera had slipped out the"
6"Quinn had no warrant, no"
7"she barked, her voice cutting"
8"He weaved through a cluster"
9"Quinn followed, her worn leather"
10"He cut left onto Wardour"
11"A flash of lightning illuminated"
12"Herrera bolted toward Oxford Street,"
13"He didn't respond, just veered"
14"Static crackled back, dispatch's voice"
15"Units en route, ETA ten"
16"The pursuit dragged on, streets"
17"He led her toward Camden"
18"He stopped at what looked"
19"Quinn froze, heart slamming. An"
ratio0.852
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences61
matches(empty)
ratio0
31.25% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences32
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"Herrera had slipped out the back after a hushed meet in the hidden room behind the bookshelf, clutching a satchel that screamed contraband."
1"He weaved through a cluster of late-night revelers spilling from a pub, their laughter dissolving into yelps as he shoved past."
2"He cut left onto Wardour Street, tires hissing on wet asphalt as cars swerved to avoid him. Quinn dodged a delivery van, its horn blaring, and closed the gap. H…"
3"Herrera wove through the crowd, satchel clutched tight. Quinn melted into the throng, her plainclothes blending better than a uniform would. But eyes turned—sus…"
4"The tunnel twisted, leading to a cavernous space where the market's heart pulsed. More stalls, more wonders—and threats. A vendor hurled a flask at her feet, sh…"
34.09% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"he growled, breath reeking of garlic and rot"
1"she commanded, voice echoing off the walls"
89.39% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she barked (bark)"
1"He didn't (do)"
dialogueSentences33
tagDensity0.061
leniency0.121
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.121
75.3766%