Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYB774Q82QJ3ND78X01EB63

Run Details

Duration:
6.2s
Cost:
$0.000803
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
--- The brass compass lay half-buried in the damp earth, its verdigris face glinting sickly under the flickering gaslight of the abandoned Tube station. Detective Harlow Quinn knelt beside it, her gloved fingers brushing the sigils etched into the casing. The needle was still—no supernatural rift pulsed nearby, no whisper of the Veil Market’s shifting presence. That was odd. "Found it under the rubble," DS Carter’s voice cut through the silence, his breath misting in the cold air. "Looks like someone dropped it during the collapse." Harlow didn’t look up. "Or someone *placed* it there." Carter crouched beside her, his flashlight beam sweeping over the debris. "You think it’s a setup?" "Not necessarily." She traced the compass’s edge with her thumbnail. "But it’s not where it should be." The Veil Market moved every full moon, its location a closely guarded secret. This station had been its last known hideout—until the cave-in two nights ago. "If this was part of the market’s usual rotation, the compass would’ve been in the hands of a dealer by now. Not buried under a pile of bricks." Carter exhaled sharply. "You’re saying someone *staged* this?" "Or someone *wanted* us to find it." Harlow’s gaze flicked to the scattered bones near the compass—a human femur, a shattered ribcage. "And they wanted us to think this was just another accident." The bones weren’t fresh. Not by a long shot. The flesh had long since rotted away, leaving only the stark white of bone, the jagged edges of a struggle. But the way they were arranged—spread like a warning, like a message—made her skin prickle. Carter crouched, picking up a small, irregularly shaped stone. "This looks like it could’ve been part of the market’s entry requirement. Bone tokens." Harlow’s pulse quickened. "Not just any bone. This one’s been *carved*." The stone bore crude symbols, barely recognizable even to her practiced eye. "Not standard market sigils," she murmured. "More like… a signature." Carter frowned. "You think someone’s leaving a calling card?" "Or a trail." She stood, brushing dirt from her knees. "This isn’t just a cave-in. This is a message." The station’s tunnels stretched before them, the air thick with the scent of damp stone and something sharper—copper, iron. Blood. Carter’s flashlight caught something glinting in the far corner. "Wait. There’s more." Harlow followed his beam to a crumpled piece of paper, half-buried in the rubble. She plucked it free, unfolding it carefully. The ink was faded, but the words were unmistakable: *"Three strikes, Detective. You’re on your second."* Her blood turned to ice. Carter’s voice was tight. "Who the hell is this?" Harlow didn’t answer. She was already walking, her boots crunching over broken glass and scattered debris. The tunnel opened into a larger chamber, its walls lined with the remnants of the Veil Market’s stalls—collapsed crates, shattered glass, the occasional flash of something metallic catching the light. And then she saw it. A figure, slumped against the wall, its back to her. A man in a long coat, his face obscured by the brim of a hat. But the way he held himself—rigid, unnatural—told her everything she needed to know. Carter’s breath hitched. "That’s not—" "No," Harlow agreed, her voice hollow. "It’s not." The man’s coat was torn at the shoulders, the fabric frayed as if something had *pulled* at him. His fingers were clenched around a small, leather-bound journal, its cover embossed with the same sigils as the compass. Harlow stepped closer, her pulse hammering in her ears. The journal was open to a page filled with frantic scribbles—names, dates, locations. And at the bottom, in bold, underlined letters: *"The third strike is coming."* Carter’s voice was barely a whisper. "What the hell is this?" Harlow didn’t answer. She was already reaching for the journal, her fingers brushing the page. The ink was fresh. Too fresh. And then the lights flickered. Not just the gaslights above them—something deeper, something *wrong*. The air hummed, the temperature dropping as if a draft had swept through the tunnels. The figure against the wall twitched. Carter grabbed her arm. "Harlow—" She didn’t need to look back. She already knew. The man wasn’t dead. He was *waiting*.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags7
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences26
tagDensity0.269
leniency0.538
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
85.96% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount712
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count1
1
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"sharply"
1"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount712
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"glinting"
count2
1
word"etched"
count1
2
word"pulsed"
count1
3
word"whisper"
count2
4
word"silence"
count1
5
word"traced"
count1
6
word"flicked"
count1
7
word"shattered"
count2
8
word"stark"
count1
9
word"pulse"
count2
10
word"quickened"
count1
11
word"standard"
count1
12
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"glinting"
1"etched"
2"pulsed"
3"whisper"
4"silence"
5"traced"
6"flicked"
7"shattered"
8"stark"
9"pulse"
10"quickened"
11"standard"
12"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences58
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences58
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences77
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen31
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans9
markdownWords19
totalWords696
ratio0.027
matches
0"placed"
1"staged"
2"wanted"
3"carved"
4"\"Three strikes, Detective. You’re on your second.\""
5"pulled"
6"\"The third strike is coming.\""
7"wrong"
8"waiting"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
56.02% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions27
wordCount532
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity1.88
worstName"Carter"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Carter"
discoveredNames
Tube1
Harlow9
Quinn1
Veil3
Market3
Carter10
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Market"
3"Carter"
places(empty)
globalScore0.56
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences35
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount696
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences77
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs36
mean19.33
std16.55
cv0.856
sampleLengths
01
158
227
39
416
571
68
733
844
923
1011
1122
129
1319
1420
1512
1630
177
185
199
2046
215
2238
235
248
2537
2630
275
2811
2921
305
3130
325
339
344
353
87.11% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences58
matches
0"were arranged"
1"was torn"
2"were clenched"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs94
matches
0"was *waiting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences77
ratio0.117
matches
0"The needle was still—no supernatural rift pulsed nearby, no whisper of the Veil Market’s shifting presence."
1"This station had been its last known hideout—until the cave-in two nights ago."
2"\"Or someone *wanted* us to find it.\" Harlow’s gaze flicked to the scattered bones near the compass—a human femur, a shattered ribcage."
3"But the way they were arranged—spread like a warning, like a message—made her skin prickle."
4"The station’s tunnels stretched before them, the air thick with the scent of damp stone and something sharper—copper, iron."
5"The tunnel opened into a larger chamber, its walls lined with the remnants of the Veil Market’s stalls—collapsed crates, shattered glass, the occasional flash of something metallic catching the light."
6"But the way he held himself—rigid, unnatural—told her everything she needed to know."
7"The journal was open to a page filled with frantic scribbles—names, dates, locations."
8"Not just the gaslights above them—something deeper, something *wrong*."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount548
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small, leather-bound journal,"
adverbCount16
adverbRatio0.029197080291970802
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.014598540145985401
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences77
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences77
mean9.03
std6.43
cv0.712
sampleLengths
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116
216
33
419
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2020
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3110
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3319
341
359
363
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399
407
415
424
435
443
4513
4630
475
4810
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56.71% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.36363636363636365
totalSentences77
uniqueOpeners28
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences54
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount10
totalSentences54
matches
0"She traced the compass’s edge"
1"She stood, brushing dirt from"
2"She plucked it free, unfolding"
3"Her blood turned to ice."
4"She was already walking, her"
5"His fingers were clenched around"
6"She was already reaching for"
7"She didn’t need to look"
8"She already knew."
9"He was *waiting*."
ratio0.185
24.81% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount47
totalSentences54
matches
0"The brass compass lay half-buried"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn knelt beside"
2"The needle was still—no supernatural"
3"That was odd."
4"DS Carter’s voice cut through"
5"Harlow didn’t look up."
6"Carter crouched beside her, his"
7"She traced the compass’s edge"
8"The Veil Market moved every"
9"This station had been its"
10"Carter exhaled sharply."
11"Harlow’s gaze flicked to the"
12"The bones weren’t fresh."
13"The flesh had long since"
14"Carter crouched, picking up a"
15"Harlow’s pulse quickened."
16"The stone bore crude symbols,"
17"She stood, brushing dirt from"
18"The station’s tunnels stretched before"
19"Carter’s flashlight caught something glinting"
ratio0.87
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences54
matches(empty)
ratio0
74.83% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences21
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"She was already walking, her boots crunching over broken glass and scattered debris."
1"She was already reaching for the journal, her fingers brushing the page."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags7
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"The Veil Market moved, its location a closely guarded secret"
1"Harlow agreed, her voice hollow"
73.08% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she murmured (murmur)"
1"Harlow agreed (agree)"
dialogueSentences26
tagDensity0.077
leniency0.154
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.154
75.0839%