Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYB7DGFTRF07MWZDYEMVZDW

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Duration:
1m 26s
Cost:
$0.007982
Provider:
Seed

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory wrenched her delivery bag free from the oak standing stone’s gnarled branch. The fabric snagged on a splinter that jutted like a broken tooth, and she hissed as the crescent scar on her left wrist brushed the rough wood. She’d taken the late delivery from Golden Empress after a customer scrawled a note on the order slip—Leave the pork dumplings at the oak boundary of Richmond’s hidden grove. No payment. Just don’t look in the clearing. She’d laughed at first, figuring a drunk from Silas’ bar had pranked her, but the Heartstone Pendant around her neck had throbbed warm against her chest the second she’d read the words. Pre-law training had taught her to follow odd threads, so she’d biked to Richmond Park after her shift, the dumplings growing cold in her bag. The silver chain of the pendant dug faintly into her collarbone as she adjusted it, her bright blue eyes scanning the dark tree line for any sign of a prankster. Copper stung her nostrils for a split second before it faded—old blood, not recent. The wildflowers that bloomed at the stone’s base smelled cloying, too sweet for night, and she wrinkled her nose. Her phone buzzed once in her pocket, then went silent; she pulled it out to find no signal, no missed calls. Three rules she’d made for herself after fleeing Evan: Don’t follow unknown leads. Don’t stay in silent places after dark. Don’t ignore warning signs. She’d broken all three before she’d even reached the stone. A high, child’s giggle bounced off the oak trunks. No child belonged in the park at this hour—even the night joggers had cleared out an hour prior. She scanned the trees, her boots crunching on dry grass that mixed with the wildflowers’ soft stems, but saw only the sway of leaves that shouldn’t have moved; the air was still. The Heartstone’s pulse quickened, its deep crimson glow seeping through her shirt sleeve, and she pressed a hand to it, the warmth spreading up her arm like a fever. She stepped forward, her delivery bag swinging lightly at her side, and the air shifted. The cloying scent amplified, and she gagged a little, swallowing down the bitter taste it left in her mouth. The clearing stretched before her, a patch of wildflowers so vibrant they hurt her eyes—purple blooms that glowed faintly, yellow ones that seemed to pulse in time with the pendant. The ancient oak standing stones ringed the space, their gnarled old branches curving inward like outstretched fingers. She’d never seen the Grove before, but she’d heard Eva mumble about it once, a forgotten story from their Welsh childhood about a place where time tick-tock ed out of sync. She checked her watch—five minutes had passed since she’d pulled her phone out, but it felt like an hour. A voice brushed her ear, low and familiar: Rory, come back. She flinched. It was Evan’s voice, the one he’d used when he’d begged her not to leave Cardiff. He couldn’t be here; she’d changed her number, moved to London, told no one but Eva where she’d gone. The voice whispered again, closer this time, and she spun around, her delivery bag swinging into a wildflower patch. The dumplings inside crashed against each other, their paper wrappers tearing. The crescent scar on her wrist burned suddenly, as if someone had pressed a hot coin to it. She rubbed it, her fingers trembling a little—cool-headed Rory, trembling. The Heartstone’s pulse was now a rapid thud against her chest, so loud she could hear it over the rush of blood in her ears. She spotted movement at the edge of her vision: a pale hand that peeked from behind an oak stone, then vanished. The branches of the stones seemed to be creeping closer, their gnarled tips brushing her straight shoulder-length black hair. She stepped back, her boot catching on a wildflower root, and stumbled, catching herself on the nearest stone’s trunk. The wood was warmer than it should have been, as if it had been sitting in the sun for hours. She mentally listed three new rules for this grove: Don’t listen to the voices. Don’t touch the wildflowers. Don’t let the stones box you in. She’d already touched the wildflowers with her bag, so that rule was broken. The voices started again, overlapping now—Evan’s plea, her mother’s Welsh lullaby, a stranger’s demand for dumplings. She clamped her hands over her ears, but the sounds seeped through, sharp and unrelenting. The Heartstone’s glow flared bright, and she realized it wasn’t pulsing for her benefit—it was warning something else, something in the clearing that was watching her. The branches of the nearest oak stone wrapped around her left wrist, the splinters digging into her burning scar. She yelped, yanking back, but the wood tightened, its grip like a vice. Another branch wrapped around her right wrist, pinning her arms to her sides. The delivery bag slipped from her grasp, the torn dumpling wrappers spilling out onto the wildflowers. The cloying scent faded suddenly, replaced by the sharp smell of her own fear—sweat and panic, thick in her throat. A figure stepped from behind the central oak stone—pale, tall, its face hidden by a curtain of black hair that matched hers. It held one of the torn dumpling wrappers in its hand, and it smiled, revealing sharp, white teeth. The silver chain of a pendant glinted around its neck—an exact copy of her Heartstone, its crimson glow matching hers beat for beat. “Left the dumplings,” “Didn’t look in the clearing,” “Too late.” The figure stepped closer, and the oak stones’ branches pulled her forward, her feet sliding over the wildflowers’ soft stems. The crescent scar on her left wrist blazed, and she saw the same scar etched into the figure’s left wrist, a small crescent shape that glowed red. The Heartstone’s pulse reached a frantic peak, and the figure lifted a hand, its pale fingers brushing her cheek. The stones’ branches tightened, and she felt the wood start to merge with her skin, the rough texture seeping into her pores. She opened her mouth to scream, but the figure pressed the dumpling wrapper to her lips, the bitter taste of cold pork filling flooding her mouth. The last thing she saw before the figure’s black hair covered her eyes was the oak stones’ branches wrapping around her neck, their splinters digging into her collarbone.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences3
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
86.19% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1086
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"lightly"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count2
highlights
0"lightly"
1"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
44.75% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1086
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"throbbed"
count1
1
word"scanning"
count1
2
word"scanned"
count1
3
word"pulse"
count4
4
word"quickened"
count1
5
word"warmth"
count1
6
word"familiar"
count1
7
word"etched"
count1
8
word"the last thing"
count1
highlights
0"throbbed"
1"scanning"
2"scanned"
3"pulse"
4"quickened"
5"warmth"
6"familiar"
7"etched"
8"the last thing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences59
matches(empty)
70.22% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences59
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences62
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1072
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions31
wordCount974
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity0.62
worstName"Don"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Don"
discoveredNames
Golden1
Empress1
Leave1
Richmond2
Pre-law1
Park1
Evan3
Don6
Heartstone5
Grove1
Eva2
Welsh2
Rory3
Cardiff1
London1
persons
0"Evan"
1"Heartstone"
2"Grove"
3"Eva"
4"Rory"
places
0"Golden"
1"Leave"
2"Richmond"
3"Park"
4"Cardiff"
5"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
57.41% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences54
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"ones that seemed to pulse in time with the pendant"
1"felt like an hour"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.933
wordCount1072
matches
0"no one but"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences62
matches(empty)
73.54% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs12
mean89.33
std36.39
cv0.407
sampleLengths
040
1124
288
388
4112
597
6132
795
881
963
1010
11142
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences59
matches(empty)
82.35% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs170
matches
0"was warning was watching"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences14
totalSentences62
ratio0.226
matches
0"She’d taken the late delivery from Golden Empress after a customer scrawled a note on the order slip—Leave the pork dumplings at the oak boundary of Richmond’s hidden grove."
1"Copper stung her nostrils for a split second before it faded—old blood, not recent."
2"Her phone buzzed once in her pocket, then went silent; she pulled it out to find no signal, no missed calls."
3"No child belonged in the park at this hour—even the night joggers had cleared out an hour prior."
4"She scanned the trees, her boots crunching on dry grass that mixed with the wildflowers’ soft stems, but saw only the sway of leaves that shouldn’t have moved; the air was still."
5"The clearing stretched before her, a patch of wildflowers so vibrant they hurt her eyes—purple blooms that glowed faintly, yellow ones that seemed to pulse in time with the pendant."
6"She checked her watch—five minutes had passed since she’d pulled her phone out, but it felt like an hour."
7"He couldn’t be here; she’d changed her number, moved to London, told no one but Eva where she’d gone."
8"She rubbed it, her fingers trembling a little—cool-headed Rory, trembling."
9"The voices started again, overlapping now—Evan’s plea, her mother’s Welsh lullaby, a stranger’s demand for dumplings."
10"The Heartstone’s glow flared bright, and she realized it wasn’t pulsing for her benefit—it was warning something else, something in the clearing that was watching her."
11"The cloying scent faded suddenly, replaced by the sharp smell of her own fear—sweat and panic, thick in her throat."
12"A figure stepped from behind the central oak stone—pale, tall, its face hidden by a curtain of black hair that matched hers."
13"The silver chain of a pendant glinted around its neck—an exact copy of her Heartstone, its crimson glow matching hers beat for beat."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount90
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount2
adverbRatio0.022222222222222223
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences62
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences62
mean17.29
std8.11
cv0.469
sampleLengths
013
127
229
32
46
532
625
730
814
919
1021
1113
127
134
1410
159
1618
1732
1829
1915
2019
2130
2217
2331
2419
2511
262
2716
2819
2919
3011
3118
3210
3325
3421
3519
3619
3720
3814
394
407
4113
4216
4315
4426
4519
4613
4713
4816
4920
30.65% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.27419354838709675
totalSentences62
uniqueOpeners17
59.52% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences56
matches
0"Just don’t look in the"
ratio0.018
84.29% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount19
totalSentences56
matches
0"She’d taken the late delivery"
1"She’d laughed at first, figuring"
2"Her phone buzzed once in"
3"She’d broken all three before"
4"She scanned the trees, her"
5"She stepped forward, her delivery"
6"She’d never seen the Grove"
7"She checked her watch—five minutes"
8"It was Evan’s voice, the"
9"He couldn’t be here; she’d"
10"She rubbed it, her fingers"
11"She spotted movement at the"
12"She stepped back, her boot"
13"She mentally listed three new"
14"She’d already touched the wildflowers"
15"She clamped her hands over"
16"She yelped, yanking back, but"
17"It held one of the"
18"She opened her mouth to"
ratio0.339
22.50% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount49
totalSentences56
matches
0"Rory wrenched her delivery bag"
1"The fabric snagged on a"
2"She’d taken the late delivery"
3"She’d laughed at first, figuring"
4"Pre-law training had taught her"
5"The silver chain of the"
6"Copper stung her nostrils for"
7"The wildflowers that bloomed at"
8"Her phone buzzed once in"
9"She’d broken all three before"
10"A high, child’s giggle bounced"
11"She scanned the trees, her"
12"The Heartstone’s pulse quickened, its"
13"She stepped forward, her delivery"
14"The cloying scent amplified, and"
15"The clearing stretched before her,"
16"The ancient oak standing stones"
17"She’d never seen the Grove"
18"She checked her watch—five minutes"
19"A voice brushed her ear,"
ratio0.875
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences56
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences46
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The clearing stretched before her, a patch of wildflowers so vibrant they hurt her eyes—purple blooms that glowed faintly, yellow ones that seemed to pulse in t…"
1"She stepped back, her boot catching on a wildflower root, and stumbled, catching herself on the nearest stone’s trunk."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"The last thing she saw, their splinters digging into her collarbone"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"She’d (would)"
dialogueSentences3
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.667
73.7138%