Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYB7WRA5WBW86WJ0AWR5G5J

Run Details

Duration:
29.2s
Cost:
$0.001212
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The rain slashes down, a steel curtain over London. Harlow Quinn’s boots hit the pavement in staccato bursts, each step driving water up her cuffs. Her breath comes sharp, hot against the cold, and she ignores the way her lungs burn—ignores the man at her heels, too. The suspect, she thinks. The one who slipped through her fingers at The Raven’s Nest. She skids around a corner, the neon green of the bar’s sign bleeding into the wet tiles of the alley. The streets thin here, potholes holding black water that ripples as she runs. Her watch ticks, loud in her ear, the second hand a metronome for the chase. Seventeen years on the force doesn’t teach you to slow down—doesn’t teach you to *stop* when the dark hums like a live wire. That part, she learned three years ago, when Morris went quiet in a basement off Fleet Street. Her suspect, a man she’d seen lurking outside Silas’ bar for weeks, turns a corner down an alley she doesn’t recognize. Quinn follows, her hand drifting to the holster at her waist—empty. Of course it is. She’d left the damn thing at the station, chasing a lead on the clique. Stupid. Fucking stupid. But the adrenaline’s already in her veins, a wild thing, and it doesn’t care about stupid. The alley dead-ends at a brick wall, but the suspect doesn’t stop. He dives to his left, shoving at a stack of crates. A door creaks open behind them, and a woman’s scream cuts through the rain. Quinn veers, skidding on a puddle, and catches a glimpse of the man’s back—tattoos of scales snaking up his neck, a cut on his cheek that bleeds into the water. He’s one of them. The clique. The ones who’d laughed when Morris’s body was found, eyes milky, tongue black. The ones who’d left a coin—cold, metallic, *wrong*—on his chest. He reaches the door, shoves through it, and it slams shut. Quinn slams into it, palm flat. It’s wood, heavy, but the edge vibrates under her hand, like a heartbeat. She kicks it, once, twice, and it caves in with a splintering crack. Behind her, the woman from the alleyway catches up. “You shouldn’t have come,” she says, voice tight. She’s young, maybe twenty, with a bruise blooming on her jaw. But her eyes—hollow, gray—tell Quinn she’s got teeth. The clique made her, too. Quinn doesn’t answer. She steps over the broken door, into a room reeking of mold and iron. The walls are lined with books, their pages yellowed, and the floor tilts downward, a staircase spiraling into darkness. The air smells like ozone, and somewhere far below, a bell rings—low, deep, like a gong struck underwater. The woman lunges. Quinn ducks, grabs her arm, twists. The woman grunts, but her strength is wrong, too—pale, brittle, like a reed. She headbutts Quinn, hard, and the detective staggers back, blood trickling from her nose. “Go back,” the woman says, spitting. “They’ll—” Quinn slams her into the wall, her fist raised, but the woman disappears. One moment she’s there, the next she’s gone, leaving only a faint scent of jasmine. Quinn pauses, listens. The rain has slowed to a drizzle, but the city is quiet, too quiet. She turns, stares down the staircase. The light from the alley is a sliver, but she can see the steps curving downward, endless. Somewhere below, a voice—male, low, speaking a language she doesn’t recognize. Her watch ticks again. Seventeen years of chasing perps, of walking into dark places because the job said so. This is no different, she tells herself. Just another lead. Just another dead end. But her throat is tight. Morris’s face, white, slack, in that basement. The way the air had felt, thick with something rotten. She’d never been superstitious, but after that night, she’d started to see things—shadows that moved when she wasn’t looking, whispers in empty rooms. Morris had laughed at that, too, until he didn’t. Quinn draws a breath, steps onto the first step. It’s cold, damp, covered in something slimy. She goes lower, her boots making squelching noises. The walls close in, the bookshelf above her eye-level—old, leather-bound, titles she can’t read. One of them creaks, and she freezes. Then, movement. A man, leaning against the wall, a cigarette in his hand. He’s tall, broad, with a tattoo of a raven on his neck. His eyes—amber, slitted—meet hers. “Lost?” he asks, voice smooth. “Looking for a man,” Quinn says, her voice steady. “Scale tattoos, cut on his cheek.” The man takes a drag, exhales. “Scale tattoos. Cut cheek. You mean *him*?” He nods to her left, where a door stands, half-open. Quinn doesn’t hesitate. She starts toward the door, but the man moves in front of her, blocking her way. “Can’t let you do that,” he says. “We don’t *welcome* nosy cops here.” “Tell that to the clique,” Quinn says. “Tell them I’m here to take them down.” The man smiles, slow, and flicks his cigarette into the fire. It hisses, turns to ash. “The clique doesn’t take kindly to being followed, Detective.” “Quinn.” Her voice is cold. “And neither do I.” She tries to go around him, but he steps in front of her, his shoulder hard as steel. For a moment, she thinks he’s going to hit her, but then he nods to the door. “Last chance,” he says. “Step through that door, and you’re in. No going back.” Quinn stares at him. The door is black, the frame carved with symbols she doesn’t recognize—twisted lines, eyes, a crescent moon. She can hear music now, low and thrumming, and the sound of voices, speaking in a mix of languages. Somewhere below, a bell rings again. Her watch ticks. Fifteen years of following cases, of making choices. This one—she can’t walk away. Not after Morris. She steps past the man, her boot catching on a loose brick. He grabs her arm, his hand hot, but not human. She yanks away, and he doesn’t stop her. The door opens inward, and she steps through. The Veil Market hits her like a wave—smells of sweat and sandalwood, of something sweet and rotting. The ceiling is low, the walls lined with stalls, their stalls covered in cloth, their goods glinting in the light of torches. People move between them, but they’re not all human—scales, horns, skin that shifts color. A woman with a tail of silver scales sells vials of glowing liquid. A man with antlers argues with a human, a coin in his hand. Quinn’s boots sink into the mud. She looks around, her heart pounding. The man she’s chasing is somewhere in here—she can feel it, a hot, foul presence. But she doesn’t know which stall to check, which person to ask. “Lost, detective?” Quinn turns. Tomás Herrera stands behind her, a medallion hanging around his neck, a scar snaking up his forearm. He’s holding a syringe, capped, but his eyes are soft—kind, even here. “Tomás,” she says, surprised. “What are you doing here?” He gestures to a stall, where a woman with a face like a bird’s is stacking jars of something that glitters. “Supplies. The clique needs painkillers. For… *accidents*.” He nods to the ceiling. “The market moves again next week. Back under Camden.” Quinn stares at him. “You work here.” He smiles, tight. “I make a living.” “Is he here?” she asks, nodding to the crowd. “The man with the scale tattoos?” Tomás’s smile fades. He looks around, then leans in, his voice low. “He’s in the back. The hidden room. Silas uses it for meetings. But you can’t go there. It’s—” “Dangerous?” Quinn says. “I know the feeling.” He shakes his head. “Not like that. The room… it’s got a door. A real door. Metal. With a lock. He’s got the key.” Quinn pulls a photo from her pocket—the man from The Raven’s Nest, his face blurred, but the scales visible. “Is this him?” Tomás studies the photo. “That’s…” He swallows. “That’s Marcus. He works for Silas. Delivers messages. But he shouldn’t be here.” “Why?” “Because the market’s strict,” Tomás says. “No one brings secrets. Not if they don’t want to lose them.” Quinn nods. She tucks the photo back into her pocket, then meets Tomás’s eyes. “You’re with the clique, aren’t you?” He doesn’t answer. “Last year, I followed a lead to a warehouse in Bethnal Green,” Quinn says. “There was a woman there—your age, maybe. Olive skin, a mole on her neck. She said something about a medallion. About a man who’d saved her life.” Tomás’s hand tightens around the syringe. Quinn takes a step closer. “Morris would’ve found her. But I got there too late. She was dead. Her tongue black, like—” “Like Morris,” Tomás finishes, his voice breaking. “I’m sorry.” “You’re part of this,” Quinn says. “You’re the one fixing them. The one making them human.” He looks away. “They’re not monsters. They’re just… lost. The same as I was.” Quinn’s watch ticks. She glances at the crowd, at the stalls, at the shadows. Marcus is somewhere back there—she can feel his fear, his desperation. “Where’s the hidden room?” she asks. Tomás sighs. “Through the bookshelf. Second row, left. The one with the crest.” Quinn turns, follows his gaze. A bookshelf stands at the back of the market, its shelves filled with books, one of them carved with a raven crest. She walks toward it, her hand on the hilt of her knife—nowhere near her, but it’s there. The shelf rumbles, and she steps back. Then, a section of it slides open, revealing a staircase. Quinn pauses, looks at Tomás. “You want me to stop?” He shakes his head. “They need to be stopped. But not by *you*.” “Why not?” “Because you’re angry,” he says. “Angry for Morris. But anger won’t heal them. It’ll just… make them worse.” Quinn stares at him. For a moment, she sees Morris—smiling, hand on her shoulder, telling her to take a breath. Then, she turns, steps into the staircase. The room is small, lit by a single candle. Marcus stands in the center, his hands shaking, a coin in his hand—the same coin from Morris’s body. He turns as she enters, and his face hardens. “Detective,” he says. “I didn’t think you’d follow.” “You didn’t think I’d catch up,” Quinn says. He takes a step back, reaches into his pocket. “This is yours. Maybe it’ll help you sleep.” He throws the coin at her. Quinn catches it. It’s cold, heavier than she expects, and when she looks at it, she sees Morris’s face, smiling at her. “You took too long,” Marcus says. “They’re coming. The ones who made me. The ones who—” Two men enter the room, blocking the door. They’re tall, their eyes black, their skin gray. “Run” is all Marcus says before the first man hits him, hard. Marcus collapses, blood trickling from his nose. Quinn steps forward, her back to the wall. The men move closer, their hands in their pockets—she can see the knives, the blades glinting. “Detective Quinn,” one of them says, his voice a growl. “Such a pretty little bird. But birds don’t belong in the dark.” Quinn doesn’t answer. She draws a breath, and she thinks of Morris—of the way he’d laughed when she’d botched her first case, of the way he’d said, *“You’ll get better. I know you will.”* The first man swings, and she ducks, jabs him in the stomach. He grunts, steps back. The second man moves to grab her, but she twists, slams his head into the wall. He falls, unconscious. The first man recovers, swings again. Quinn avoids it, her boot catching his ankle. He falls, and she kneels, drives her fist into his face. He goes still. She stands, looks at Marcus. He’s groaning, his eyes opening. “Get out,” she says. “Run. And don’t come back.” Marcus nods, crawls to the door. He pauses, looks back. “Thank you.” Then, he’s gone. Quinn turns, looks at the coin in her hand. She throws it to the floor, where it shatters, leaving a trail of light. Footsteps echo in the hallway. She draws a breath, reaches for her phone, and dials. “Dispatch,” she says. “We’ve got a situation in Camden. Abandoned Tube station. Clique activity. Send backup—now.” She hangs up, tucks the phone into her pocket, and walks back into the Veil Market. The crowd parts, watching her, but she doesn’t look at them. She walks to the bookshelf, steps back, and the shelf slides shut. The rain has stopped, and the sky is clearing, a sliver of moon visible through the clouds. Quinn looks up, at the sky, and for a moment, she thinks she sees Morris—smiling, waving. She smiles, too. Then, she turns, and walks away.
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num_input_audio_prompt(null)
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags29
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences66
tagDensity0.439
leniency0.879
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2165
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Marcus"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
86.14% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2165
totalAiIsms6
found
0
word"glinting"
count2
1
word"pounding"
count1
2
word"stomach"
count1
3
word"footsteps"
count1
4
word"echo"
count1
highlights
0"glinting"
1"pounding"
2"stomach"
3"footsteps"
4"echo"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences191
matches(empty)
90.50% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount4
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences191
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"started to"
1"starts to"
2"tries to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences228
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans7
markdownWords13
totalWords2131
ratio0.006
matches
0"stop"
1"wrong"
2"him"
3"welcome"
4"accidents"
5"you"
6"“You’ll get better. I know you will.”"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions33
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"This is no different, she tells herself."
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions74
wordCount1709
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity2.05
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity5.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
London1
Quinn35
Raven2
Nest2
Morris10
Fleet1
Street1
Veil2
Market2
Herrera1
Tomás9
Two1
Marcus7
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Morris"
2"Market"
3"Herrera"
4"Tomás"
5"Marcus"
places
0"London"
1"Raven"
2"Fleet"
3"Street"
4"Veil"
globalScore0.476
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences119
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2131
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences228
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs88
mean24.22
std18.92
cv0.782
sampleLengths
062
188
269
396
443
541
654
736
87
928
1051
1133
1254
1345
1429
155
1615
1723
1819
1913
2015
2125
229
2335
2414
2546
2619
2730
288
2979
3039
312
3231
339
3442
357
367
3715
3830
397
4024
4122
4220
431
4418
4520
463
4741
486
4922
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences191
matches
0"was found"
1"are lined"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs325
matches
0"wasn’t looking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount28
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences25
totalSentences228
ratio0.11
matches
0"Her breath comes sharp, hot against the cold, and she ignores the way her lungs burn—ignores the man at her heels, too."
1"Seventeen years on the force doesn’t teach you to slow down—doesn’t teach you to *stop* when the dark hums like a live wire."
2"Quinn follows, her hand drifting to the holster at her waist—empty."
3"Quinn veers, skidding on a puddle, and catches a glimpse of the man’s back—tattoos of scales snaking up his neck, a cut on his cheek that bleeds into the water."
4"The ones who’d left a coin—cold, metallic, *wrong*—on his chest."
5"But her eyes—hollow, gray—tell Quinn she’s got teeth."
6"The air smells like ozone, and somewhere far below, a bell rings—low, deep, like a gong struck underwater."
7"The woman grunts, but her strength is wrong, too—pale, brittle, like a reed."
8"Somewhere below, a voice—male, low, speaking a language she doesn’t recognize."
9"She’d never been superstitious, but after that night, she’d started to see things—shadows that moved when she wasn’t looking, whispers in empty rooms."
10"His eyes—amber, slitted—meet hers."
11"The door is black, the frame carved with symbols she doesn’t recognize—twisted lines, eyes, a crescent moon."
12"This one—she can’t walk away."
13"The Veil Market hits her like a wave—smells of sweat and sandalwood, of something sweet and rotting."
14"People move between them, but they’re not all human—scales, horns, skin that shifts color."
15"The man she’s chasing is somewhere in here—she can feel it, a hot, foul presence."
16"He’s holding a syringe, capped, but his eyes are soft—kind, even here."
17"Quinn pulls a photo from her pocket—the man from The Raven’s Nest, his face blurred, but the scales visible."
18"Marcus is somewhere back there—she can feel his fear, his desperation."
19"She walks toward it, her hand on the hilt of her knife—nowhere near her, but it’s there."
20"For a moment, she sees Morris—smiling, hand on her shoulder, telling her to take a breath."
21"Marcus stands in the center, his hands shaking, a coin in his hand—the same coin from Morris’s body."
22"The men move closer, their hands in their pockets—she can see the knives, the blades glinting."
23"She draws a breath, and she thinks of Morris—of the way he’d laughed when she’d botched her first case, of the way he’d said, *“You’ll get better. I know you will.”*"
24"Quinn looks up, at the sky, and for a moment, she thinks she sees Morris—smiling, waving."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount449
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount10
adverbRatio0.022271714922048998
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.0022271714922048997
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences228
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences228
mean9.35
std5.81
cv0.622
sampleLengths
09
116
222
34
411
520
613
715
823
917
1021
1111
124
1314
141
152
1616
1712
1811
1914
2030
214
222
2313
2410
2511
266
2713
2813
299
308
3111
328
335
343
3514
3619
3718
383
396
4013
4114
426
431
4413
4515
463
4714
486
4917
43.86% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.2675438596491228
totalSentences228
uniqueOpeners61
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount9
totalSentences169
matches
0"Of course it is."
1"Somewhere below, a voice—male, low,"
2"Just another lead."
3"Just another dead end."
4"Somewhere below, a bell rings"
5"Then, a section of it"
6"Then, she turns, steps into"
7"Then, he’s gone."
8"Then, she turns, and walks"
ratio0.053
66.15% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount65
totalSentences169
matches
0"Her breath comes sharp, hot"
1"She skids around a corner,"
2"Her watch ticks, loud in"
3"Her suspect, a man she’d"
4"She’d left the damn thing"
5"He dives to his left,"
6"He’s one of them."
7"He reaches the door, shoves"
8"It’s wood, heavy, but the"
9"She kicks it, once, twice,"
10"she says, voice tight"
11"She’s young, maybe twenty, with"
12"She steps over the broken"
13"She headbutts Quinn, hard, and"
14"She turns, stares down the"
15"Her watch ticks again."
16"She’d never been superstitious, but"
17"It’s cold, damp, covered in"
18"She goes lower, her boots"
19"He’s tall, broad, with a"
ratio0.385
33.96% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount144
totalSentences169
matches
0"The rain slashes down, a"
1"Harlow Quinn’s boots hit the"
2"Her breath comes sharp, hot"
3"The suspect, she thinks."
4"The one who slipped through"
5"She skids around a corner,"
6"The streets thin here, potholes"
7"Her watch ticks, loud in"
8"That part, she learned three"
9"Her suspect, a man she’d"
10"Quinn follows, her hand drifting"
11"She’d left the damn thing"
12"The alley dead-ends at a"
13"He dives to his left,"
14"A door creaks open behind"
15"Quinn veers, skidding on a"
16"He’s one of them."
17"The ones who’d laughed when"
18"The ones who’d left a"
19"He reaches the door, shoves"
ratio0.852
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences169
matches(empty)
ratio0
87.91% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences78
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"The streets thin here, potholes holding black water that ripples as she runs."
1"Quinn veers, skidding on a puddle, and catches a glimpse of the man’s back—tattoos of scales snaking up his neck, a cut on his cheek that bleeds into the water."
2"The ones who’d left a coin—cold, metallic, *wrong*—on his chest."
3"She’d never been superstitious, but after that night, she’d started to see things—shadows that moved when she wasn’t looking, whispers in empty rooms."
4"People move between them, but they’re not all human—scales, horns, skin that shifts color."
5"He gestures to a stall, where a woman with a face like a bird’s is stacking jars of something that glitters."
21.55% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags29
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"she says, voice tight"
1"he asks, voice smooth"
2"Quinn says, her voice steady"
3"Tomás finishes, his voice breaking"
4"all Marcus says, hard"
5"them says, his voice a growl"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags22
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences66
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
80.3362%