Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYB8AEHWA5JQE2TDETVSB41

Run Details

Duration:
34.4s
Cost:
$0.001509
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rain hammered the pavements of Camden like a thousand frantic drumbeats, turning the night into a blurred watercolor of neon and shadow. Detective Harlow Quinn sprinted through the downpour, her boots slapping against the slick asphalt, each step sending sprays of water arcing behind her. The worn leather watch on her left wrist ticked relentlessly beneath the cuff of her sodden coat, a metronome to her pursuit. At forty-one, with eighteen years of chasing ghosts through London's underbelly, she knew better than to let the storm slow her. But this suspect—this wiry figure in a hooded jacket darting ahead—was no ordinary lowlife. He'd been spotted slipping out of The Raven's Nest earlier that evening, and Quinn's instincts screamed that he was tied to the clique she'd been tracking for months. The man glanced back once, his face a pale smear under the hood, eyes wide with animal panic. He veered left, cutting through a throng of late-night revelers huddled under umbrellas outside a pulsing club. Shouts erupted as he shoved past, but Quinn was already closing the gap, her sharp jaw set in grim determination. Her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair clung to her scalp, water streaming into her brown eyes, stinging like accusations. *Not tonight,* she thought. *Not after Morris.* Three years since her partner's unexplained disappearance on a case that reeked of the unnatural, and every lead since had twisted into knots she couldn't untie. This one felt different—charged, like static before a lightning strike. The suspect bolted down a narrow alley off Camden High Street, the walls closing in with graffiti-smeared bricks and overflowing bins. The rain intensified, drumming on metal fire escapes overhead, creating a cacophony that drowned out the distant wail of sirens. Quinn's lungs burned as she rounded the corner, her military bearing propelling her forward with mechanical precision. She drew her sidearm from its holster under her coat, the grip cold and familiar in her palm. "Police! Stop!" Her voice cut through the storm, but he didn't falter. Instead, he leaped over a low chain-link fence into a derelict construction site, the skeletal frames of unfinished buildings looming like forgotten sentinels. Quinn vaulted the fence without breaking stride, her coat flapping like a dark wing. Mud sucked at her boots as she plunged into the site's gloom, illuminated only by sporadic flashes from a malfunctioning sodium lamp. The suspect was a shadow now, weaving between rusted scaffolding and piles of debris. She caught a glimpse of something metallic glinting at his belt—a tool? A weapon?—before he vanished around a corner. *Clique business,* she seethed inwardly. The Raven's Nest had been their hub, that dimly lit Soho bar with its walls of old maps and faded photographs hiding secrets in its hidden back room. She'd tailed enough of their kind to know the patterns: whispers of enchanted goods, forbidden deals. Supernatural nonsense, her superiors called it, but Quinn had seen the files, the anomalies that didn't add up. A chain rattled ahead, and she pushed harder, her heart a thunder in her chest. The ground sloped downward, the alley giving way to a service tunnel entrance half-buried under rubble. The suspect had pried open a grate, its hinges screeching in protest before he squeezed through. Quinn holstered her gun—too risky in tight quarters—and dropped to her knees, wrenching the metal aside. The tunnel beyond exhaled a fetid breath of damp earth and decay, the rain's roar fading to a muffled patter above. She hesitated for a split second, flashlight beam piercing the darkness. Her watch read 11:47 PM. Full moon tomorrow; the city felt alive with unseen currents. *Follow or call for backup?* The thought flickered like a faulty wire. Backup meant protocol, reports, the slow grind of bureaucracy that had buried her last leads. This was her case, her ghost to chase. With a curse under her breath, she crawled in, the concrete scraping her palms raw. The tunnel narrowed, forcing her to hunch as she advanced, the air growing thicker, laced with an acrid tang like ozone after a storm. Her beam danced over cracked tiles and forgotten cables snaking along the walls—remnants of the old Tube system, abandoned decades ago. Footsteps echoed ahead, faint but frantic, splashing through shallow puddles. Quinn quickened her pace, ignoring the ache in her knees, the way the darkness pressed against her like a living thing. She'd heard rumors of places like this: hidden veins beneath the city where the illicit thrived. The Veil Market, they called it in the shadows—a black market for the weird, the forbidden. Bone tokens for entry, shifting locations like a nomad under the full moon. Dismissed as urban myth by the brass, but Quinn's gut twisted with the certainty that she was heading straight into its maw. The tunnel widened abruptly into a junction, the walls etched with strange symbols that glowed faintly under her light—runes? Graffiti from ravers? She swung the beam left and right, catching the suspect's silhouette vanishing down a side passage. "Stop! You're under arrest!" No response, just the hollow drip of water and her own ragged breathing. She pursued, the passage descending steeper now, stairs crumbling underfoot. Her boot slipped on moss-slick stone, and she caught herself against the wall, dislodging a cascade of dirt that pattered like gunfire. Deeper in, the air hummed with an unnatural warmth, carrying scents of incense, herbs, and something metallic—blood? Voices murmured ahead, low and urgent, bouncing off the curved ceiling. Quinn killed her flashlight, relying on the dim luminescence filtering from below. Her pulse thrummed in her ears as she crept forward, piecing together fragments of conversation: "...the token... Veil's open tonight... Herrera's cut..." Herrera? Tomás Herrera, the ex-paramedic she'd flagged in her files—lost his license treating "unusual patients," now patching up the clique off-books. Olive-skinned Spaniard with a scar on his arm and a saint's medallion. If he was here, this was bigger than a single runner. The stairs ended at a platform, the abandoned Tube station sprawling before her like a subterranean cathedral. Arched ceilings vaulted overhead, cracked and weeping moisture, while tracks vanished into black tunnels on either side. But this was no ghost station. Torches flickered along the walls, casting writhing shadows, and stalls had sprung up like fungi along the platform's edge. Figures moved in the gloom—cloaked vendors hawking vials of shimmering liquid, amulets that pulsed with inner light, tomes bound in leathers that didn't look animal. A woman with eyes like polished obsidian bartered for a dagger etched with glowing sigils; a man in a tattered trench coat examined a cage where something small and scaly hissed. The Veil Market. Alive, breathing, impossible. Quinn pressed against the wall, her breath shallow. The suspect was ahead, weaving through the crowd, flashing what looked like a carved bone token to a burly guard at a makeshift gate. The guard nodded, stepping aside, and the man plunged into the throng. Whispers rippled outward—*cop?* *Mortal sniffing too close?*—eyes turning her way. Her hand inched toward her gun, but drawing it here would be suicide. These weren't street thugs; the air crackled with menace, unnatural energies coiling like smoke. *Turn back. Call it in.* The rational voice in her head clanged like an alarm. This place reeked of the same shadows that swallowed Morris—unexplained, supernatural. But the suspect was slipping away, toward a cluster of tents at the far end where a figure with short curly dark hair argued with a vendor. Herrera. There, neck glinting with a Saint Christopher medallion, left forearm scarred even in the low light. He was handing over a package, something wrapped in oilcloth, and the suspect was heading straight for him. Quinn's jaw tightened. Years of service had honed her into a blade, precise and unyielding. Morris's file haunted her dreams—vanished during a raid on a similar "myth," body never found, just echoes of the impossible. If she retreated now, the trail went cold again. The clique would scatter, their secrets burrowing deeper. But forward? Into this den of... whatever this was? The market pulsed with hidden threats: a stall where potions bubbled with faces in the foam, another where information brokers murmured prophecies for coin. Danger hung thick as the incense, promising violence or worse—things that defied her world of warrants and evidence. She glanced at her watch: 11:52. The crowd thickened, oblivious or uncaring of her presence, but the guard's eyes narrowed, hand drifting to a concealed blade. *Decide,* she urged herself. The suspect reached Herrera, exchanging hurried words, a handoff of the bone token perhaps. If she waited, they'd vanish into the tunnels beyond. Screw protocol. Quinn stepped out, forcing her posture straight, military precision masking the tremor in her gut. She moved with purpose, weaving through the stalls, ignoring the stares that bored into her like needles. A vendor hissed a warning in a tongue she didn't recognize, but she pressed on, the rain's echo above a distant memory. The market's heart beat faster now, alive with secrets she wasn't meant to see. Her hand hovered near her gun, ready for the inevitable spark. The suspect spotted her first, face paling as he bolted again, shoving past Herrera who spun with a curse. "¡Mierda!" the paramedic spat, his warm brown eyes locking onto Quinn's across the crowd. Recognition flashed— she'd questioned him once, about unauthorized treatments—and he melted into the throng, package tucked under his arm. Quinn surged forward, heart pounding. The guard lunged, but she sidestepped, elbow cracking against his jaw with practiced efficiency. He staggered, and she was through, the market closing around her like jaws. Stalls blurred: enchanted jewelry humming with voices, alchemical fumes that made her vision swim. A figure in the shadows extended a hand, offering "sight beyond," but she batted it away, pursuit narrowing her world to the fleeing pair ahead. They darted toward a boarded-up archway, the suspect prying at a loose panel while Herrera covered him, drawing a small knife—nothing fancy, but wicked sharp against his scarred forearm. Quinn closed the distance, rain from above seeping through cracks to patter on the stone floor. "Police! Hands up!" Her voice echoed, drawing a hush. Faces turned—some human, some... not. Elongated shadows, eyes gleaming with otherworldly hunger. Herrera's gaze met hers again, a flicker of pity? Defiance? "You don't belong here, Detective," he called, accent thick with Sevillian roots. "Turn back before it's too late." The suspect vanished through the panel, and Herrera followed, the wood slamming shut behind them. Quinn reached it in seconds, slamming her shoulder against the barrier. It gave with a splintering crack, revealing a service ladder descending into deeper black. The market's murmurs swelled to a growl—hostility closing in. *Jump or bail.* Her watch ticked: 11:55. Morris's face swam in her mind, lost to this abyss. But hesitation was death. With a final glance at the encroaching crowd, Quinn holstered her doubts and descended, the darkness swallowing her whole. The chase wasn't over; it had only just begun, pulling her into the vein of the city where monsters traded in the night.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags8
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences10
tagDensity0.8
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1875
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
20.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1875
totalAiIsms30
found
0
word"streaming"
count1
1
word"charged"
count1
2
word"cacophony"
count1
3
word"mechanical"
count1
4
word"familiar"
count1
5
word"looming"
count1
6
word"sentinels"
count1
7
word"gloom"
count2
8
word"glinting"
count2
9
word"flickered"
count2
10
word"footsteps"
count1
11
word"echoed"
count2
12
word"quickened"
count1
13
word"maw"
count1
14
word"etched"
count2
15
word"warmth"
count1
16
word"pulse"
count1
17
word"pulsed"
count2
18
word"echoes"
count1
19
word"echo"
count1
20
word"pounding"
count1
21
word"gleaming"
count1
22
word"otherworldly"
count1
23
word"flicker"
count1
highlights
0"streaming"
1"charged"
2"cacophony"
3"mechanical"
4"familiar"
5"looming"
6"sentinels"
7"gloom"
8"glinting"
9"flickered"
10"footsteps"
11"echoed"
12"quickened"
13"maw"
14"etched"
15"warmth"
16"pulse"
17"pulsed"
18"echoes"
19"echo"
20"pounding"
21"gleaming"
22"otherworldly"
23"flicker"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences129
matches
0"a flicker of pity"
98.56% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount4
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences129
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences130
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen31
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans9
markdownWords26
totalWords1845
ratio0.014
matches
0"Not tonight,"
1"Not after Morris."
2"Clique business,"
3"Follow or call for backup?"
4"cop?"
5"Mortal sniffing too close?"
6"Turn back. Call it in."
7"Decide,"
8"Jump or bail."
89.29% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"The Veil Market, they called it in the shadows—a black market for the weird, the forbidden."
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions54
wordCount1812
uniqueNames21
maxNameDensity0.99
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Camden2
Harlow1
Quinn18
London1
Raven2
Nest2
Three1
High1
Street1
Soho1
Tube2
Veil2
Market2
Herrera8
Spaniard1
Morris4
Saint1
Christopher1
Recognition1
Faces1
Sevillian1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Raven"
3"Nest"
4"Herrera"
5"Morris"
6"Saint"
7"Christopher"
8"Recognition"
9"Sevillian"
places
0"Camden"
1"London"
2"High"
3"Street"
4"Soho"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences110
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like a carved bone token to a burl"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1845
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences130
matches
0"screamed that he"
60.25% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs21
mean87.86
std31.71
cv0.361
sampleLengths
0130
1116
2111
3136
4110
550
6143
787
8106
9121
1081
1188
12103
1353
1481
1552
1671
1766
1828
1949
2063
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences129
matches
0"been spotted"
1"was tied"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs320
matches
0"was heading"
1"was slipping"
2"was handing was heading"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount23
semicolonCount4
flaggedSentences23
totalSentences130
ratio0.177
matches
0"But this suspect—this wiry figure in a hooded jacket darting ahead—was no ordinary lowlife."
1"This one felt different—charged, like static before a lightning strike."
2"She caught a glimpse of something metallic glinting at his belt—a tool?"
3"A weapon?—before he vanished around a corner."
4"Quinn holstered her gun—too risky in tight quarters—and dropped to her knees, wrenching the metal aside."
5"Full moon tomorrow; the city felt alive with unseen currents."
6"Her beam danced over cracked tiles and forgotten cables snaking along the walls—remnants of the old Tube system, abandoned decades ago."
7"The Veil Market, they called it in the shadows—a black market for the weird, the forbidden."
8"The tunnel widened abruptly into a junction, the walls etched with strange symbols that glowed faintly under her light—runes?"
9"Deeper in, the air hummed with an unnatural warmth, carrying scents of incense, herbs, and something metallic—blood?"
10"Tomás Herrera, the ex-paramedic she'd flagged in her files—lost his license treating \"unusual patients,\" now patching up the clique off-books."
11"Figures moved in the gloom—cloaked vendors hawking vials of shimmering liquid, amulets that pulsed with inner light, tomes bound in leathers that didn't look animal."
12"A woman with eyes like polished obsidian bartered for a dagger etched with glowing sigils; a man in a tattered trench coat examined a cage where something small and scaly hissed."
13"Whispers rippled outward—*cop?* *Mortal sniffing too close?*—eyes turning her way."
14"These weren't street thugs; the air crackled with menace, unnatural energies coiling like smoke."
15"This place reeked of the same shadows that swallowed Morris—unexplained, supernatural."
16"Morris's file haunted her dreams—vanished during a raid on a similar \"myth,\" body never found, just echoes of the impossible."
17"Danger hung thick as the incense, promising violence or worse—things that defied her world of warrants and evidence."
18"Recognition flashed— she'd questioned him once, about unauthorized treatments—and he melted into the throng, package tucked under his arm."
19"They darted toward a boarded-up archway, the suspect prying at a loose panel while Herrera covered him, drawing a small knife—nothing fancy, but wicked sharp against his scarred forearm."
20"Faces turned—some human, some..."
21"The market's murmurs swelled to a growl—hostility closing in."
22"The chase wasn't over; it had only just begun, pulling her into the vein of the city where monsters traded in the night."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1842
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"short curly dark hair"
1"wicked sharp against his"
adverbCount42
adverbRatio0.02280130293159609
lyAdverbCount13
lyAdverbRatio0.007057546145494028
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences130
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences130
mean14.19
std6.98
cv0.492
sampleLengths
022
123
222
321
414
528
618
717
820
918
104
1129
1210
1321
1420
1517
1618
1712
1823
1914
2022
2114
2212
237
245
2528
2616
2718
2815
2916
3016
3116
3221
3311
345
3510
3612
3715
388
3915
4024
4121
4210
4321
4416
4516
4613
4722
4819
493
72.56% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.45384615384615384
totalSentences130
uniqueOpeners59
27.10% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences123
matches
0"Instead, he leaped over a"
ratio0.008
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences123
matches
0"He'd been spotted slipping out"
1"He veered left, cutting through"
2"Her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair"
3"She drew her sidearm from"
4"Her voice cut through the"
5"She caught a glimpse of"
6"She'd tailed enough of their"
7"She hesitated for a split"
8"Her watch read 11:47 PM."
9"Her beam danced over cracked"
10"She'd heard rumors of places"
11"She swung the beam left"
12"She pursued, the passage descending"
13"Her boot slipped on moss-slick"
14"Her pulse thrummed in her"
15"Her hand inched toward her"
16"He was handing over a"
17"She glanced at her watch:"
18"She moved with purpose, weaving"
19"Her hand hovered near her"
ratio0.203
77.89% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount94
totalSentences123
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn sprinted through"
1"The worn leather watch on"
2"He'd been spotted slipping out"
3"The man glanced back once,"
4"He veered left, cutting through"
5"Her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair"
6"This one felt different—charged, like"
7"The suspect bolted down a"
8"The rain intensified, drumming on"
9"Quinn's lungs burned as she"
10"She drew her sidearm from"
11"Her voice cut through the"
12"Quinn vaulted the fence without"
13"Mud sucked at her boots"
14"The suspect was a shadow"
15"She caught a glimpse of"
16"A weapon?—before he vanished around"
17"*Clique business,* she seethed inwardly."
18"The Raven's Nest had been"
19"She'd tailed enough of their"
ratio0.764
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences123
matches
0"If he was here, this"
1"If she retreated now, the"
2"If she waited, they'd vanish"
ratio0.024
55.56% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences90
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn sprinted through the downpour, her boots slapping against the slick asphalt, each step sending sprays of water arcing behind her."
1"*Not after Morris.* Three years since her partner's unexplained disappearance on a case that reeked of the unnatural, and every lead since had twisted into knot…"
2"The rain intensified, drumming on metal fire escapes overhead, creating a cacophony that drowned out the distant wail of sirens."
3"Quinn vaulted the fence without breaking stride, her coat flapping like a dark wing."
4"Supernatural nonsense, her superiors called it, but Quinn had seen the files, the anomalies that didn't add up."
5"Her boot slipped on moss-slick stone, and she caught herself against the wall, dislodging a cascade of dirt that pattered like gunfire."
6"Quinn killed her flashlight, relying on the dim luminescence filtering from below."
7"Figures moved in the gloom—cloaked vendors hawking vials of shimmering liquid, amulets that pulsed with inner light, tomes bound in leathers that didn't look an…"
8"This place reeked of the same shadows that swallowed Morris—unexplained, supernatural."
9"Danger hung thick as the incense, promising violence or worse—things that defied her world of warrants and evidence."
10"Stalls blurred: enchanted jewelry humming with voices, alchemical fumes that made her vision swim."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags8
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
50.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"the paramedic spat (spit)"
dialogueSentences10
tagDensity0.2
leniency0.4
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.2
84.6401%