Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYB94J0ZT47HBY3NAZKNM2J

Run Details

Duration:
8.7s
Cost:
$0.000886
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
--- The door to *The Raven’s Nest* swung open with a groan, and the scent of aged whiskey and something sharper—like copper and old parchment—hit the air. A woman in a black leather coat stepped inside, her boots clicking against the warped wooden floor. The bartender, a gaunt man with a scar running from his temple to his jawline, barely glanced up from polishing a glass. Then he saw her. “Rory?” She didn’t turn. Didn’t react. Just kept walking toward the back, where the walls were lined with yellowed maps and the air smelled of stale cigarette smoke and something older, something that made her skin prickle. The hidden door—always hidden—creaked open before she could reach it. Silas Blackwood leaned against the frame, his signet ring catching the dim light. His auburn hair was streaked with more grey than she remembered, and his left leg gave a slight hitch as he straightened. His hazel eyes, sharp as they’d always been, locked onto her. “Took you long enough.” She exhaled through her nose, a sound that was half-laugh, half-irritation. “You’re still here.” “Still what?” “Still *you*.” A beat. The kind where the air between them thickened. Then he pushed off the doorframe, his limp more pronounced as he stepped into the room. The space was smaller than she recalled, cluttered with files and half-empty bottles of something amber and expensive. A single lamp flickered, casting long shadows over the walls. “You look like hell.” She didn’t flinch. “And you look like you’ve been drinking it.” Silas chuckled, low and rough. “Flattery won’t get you out of this.” She crossed her arms, her fingers brushing the scar on her wrist—old, faded, but still there. “What do you want, Si?” “To see you.” He said it like it was simple. Like it wasn’t a question that had haunted them both for years. “And to ask you a favour.” The air between them shifted. Not just because of the words, but because of the way he said them—the way his voice dropped, just slightly, like he was bracing for something. Rory’s throat tightened. She swallowed. “You’re not here to collect on old debts.” “No.” His voice was steady. Too steady. “But I am here to collect on a promise.” She laughed, sharp and bitter. “Promises are for fools.” Silas didn’t smile. Didn’t rise to it. Just watched her, his gaze unreadable. “You always were the cynic.” “And you were the one who taught me to be.” A pause. The kind that stretched, that filled with unspoken things. Then he reached into his coat and pulled out a folded piece of paper. Not a contract. Not a ledger. Just a single sheet, yellowed at the edges. “Recognise this?” She didn’t take it. Didn’t reach for it. Just stared at the way his fingers curled around it, the way his knuckles were white. “It’s a map,” she said finally. “To somewhere you shouldn’t go.” Silas exhaled, slow and controlled. “It’s a map to *him*.” Her breath caught. The name hung between them, unspoken. *Evan.* The door to the back room creaked open again. The bartender stood there, his scar pulling tight as he frowned. “You two done in here, or should I start charging for the air?” Silas didn’t look away from her. “Give us five.” The bartender hesitated, then shrugged and closed the door behind him. Rory’s pulse hammered in her ears. She wanted to ask how he’d found her. Wanted to know if he’d been watching her, waiting. But the words stuck in her throat. Instead, she said, “You shouldn’t have come.” Silas didn’t answer. Just unfolded the paper and slid it across the table. The ink was faded, but the symbols were clear—circles, lines, the kind of markings that made her skin crawl. A location. A place she’d tried to forget. “He’s not dead,” Silas said quietly. “Not like you thought.” Rory’s fingers twitched. She wanted to tear the paper. Wanted to burn it. But she didn’t move. “You left,” Silas continued, his voice low. “And I let you.” She looked up at him, really looked. The lines around his eyes were deeper. His beard was trimmed, but his jaw was rougher, like he hadn’t shaved in days. “You always were a terrible liar.” Silas didn’t flinch. “I’m not here to apologise.” “Then what are you here for?” He leaned forward, just slightly. “To give you a choice.” The words hung between them, heavy as the silence. Rory’s mind raced. She could run. She could walk out that door and never look back. But the map was there, taunting her. The same map she’d seen in Evan’s old study, the one he’d used to track her when she was still his. She picked it up. The paper was brittle under her fingers. “You’re asking me to go back.” “No.” Silas’s voice was firm. “I’m asking you to finish what you started.” Rory’s breath hitched. She thought of the night she’d run. Of the way Evan had laughed when she’d left, of the way he’d promised she’d regret it. She thought of the years since, of the way she’d tried to outrun him, only to realise he’d been inside her all along. “Why now?” she asked. Silas’s gaze was steady. “Because he’s not the only one who’s been waiting.” The words settled over her like a shroud. She looked down at the map, at the symbols that seemed to pulse under her fingers. Then she looked back at Silas. “What do you want in return?” Silas didn’t smile. “Your name. Your face. Your story.” She should have known. Should have seen it coming. “You’re using me.” “No.” Silas’s voice was quiet. “I’m giving you a way out.” Rory’s fingers tightened around the paper. She could feel the weight of it, the way it called to her, the way it promised answers she’d spent years trying to bury. “Fine,” she said finally. “But I’m not doing this for you.” Silas’s eyes crinkled at the corners, just slightly. “Of course you’re not.” She looked down at the map again. Then she folded it carefully, tucking it into her coat pocket. “When do we leave?” Silas’s smile was thin, sharp. “Tonight.” Rory stood, her boots clicking against the floor. She turned to leave, but paused at the door. “You ever think about Eva?” she asked over her shoulder. Silas didn’t answer. Just said, “Every damn day.” She nodded, once. Then she walked out, the door swinging shut behind her. The Raven’s Nest was quiet when she stepped back into the main room. The bartender was polishing a glass, his scar pulling tight as he watched her. “You’re leaving?” he asked. She didn’t look at him. Just pulled out her wallet and slid a note across the bar. “Keep the change.” Then she walked out into the night, the cold air hitting her like a slap. She didn’t look back. Didn’t hesitate. She was running again. But this time, she wasn’t running from him. She was running toward him.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
43.14% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount4
adverbTags
0"she said finally [finally]"
1"Silas said quietly [quietly]"
2"she said finally [finally]"
3"Just said [Just]"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.196
leniency0.392
rawRatio0.4
effectiveRatio0.157
78.81% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1180
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count3
1
adverb"really"
count1
2
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"really"
2"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
57.63% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1180
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"flickered"
count1
1
word"unreadable"
count1
2
word"unspoken"
count2
3
word"pulse"
count2
4
word"silence"
count1
5
word"raced"
count1
6
word"could feel"
count1
7
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"unreadable"
2"unspoken"
3"pulse"
4"silence"
5"raced"
6"could feel"
7"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences118
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences118
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences156
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen31
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans4
markdownWords6
totalWords1171
ratio0.005
matches
0"The Raven’s Nest"
1"you"
2"him"
3"Evan."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions18
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions37
wordCount940
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.81
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Raven2
Blackwood1
Like1
Silas17
Rory7
Evan3
Nest2
Didn4
persons
0"Raven"
1"Blackwood"
2"Silas"
3"Rory"
4"Evan"
5"Nest"
places(empty)
globalScore0.596
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences62
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"symbols that seemed to pulse under her fingers"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.854
wordCount1171
matches
0"Not just because of the words, but because of the way he said them"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences156
matches
0"out that door"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs72
mean16.26
std13.79
cv0.848
sampleLengths
01
165
24
31
446
546
64
714
82
92
1054
114
1211
1312
1421
1528
1631
1713
1816
199
2018
2110
2239
232
2424
2511
2610
2710
2833
299
3011
3130
327
3313
3427
3510
3617
3711
3835
398
406
4110
429
4344
4417
4513
4650
474
4813
4930
96.34% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences118
matches
0"were lined"
1"was streaked"
2"been, locked"
28.18% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs194
matches
0"was bracing"
1"was polishing"
2"was running"
3"wasn’t running"
4"was running"
51.28% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences156
ratio0.032
matches
0"The door to *The Raven’s Nest* swung open with a groan, and the scent of aged whiskey and something sharper—like copper and old parchment—hit the air."
1"The hidden door—always hidden—creaked open before she could reach it."
2"She crossed her arms, her fingers brushing the scar on her wrist—old, faded, but still there."
3"Not just because of the words, but because of the way he said them—the way his voice dropped, just slightly, like he was bracing for something."
4"The ink was faded, but the symbols were clear—circles, lines, the kind of markings that made her skin crawl."
94.47% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount950
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount44
adverbRatio0.04631578947368421
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.010526315789473684
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences156
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences156
mean7.5
std5.53
cv0.738
sampleLengths
026
117
222
34
41
53
62
731
810
913
1022
1111
124
1311
143
152
162
172
188
1916
2018
2110
224
233
248
255
267
2716
285
2910
3012
316
325
3326
343
352
368
375
382
399
405
414
423
434
446
455
4610
472
489
4914
45.51% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.2564102564102564
totalSentences156
uniqueOpeners40
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount14
totalSentences107
matches
0"Then he saw her."
1"Just kept walking toward the"
2"Then he pushed off the"
3"Just watched her, his gaze"
4"Then he reached into his"
5"Just a single sheet, yellowed"
6"Just stared at the way"
7"Instead, she said,"
8"Just unfolded the paper and"
9"Then she looked back at"
10"Then she folded it carefully,"
11"Then she walked out, the"
12"Just pulled out her wallet"
13"Then she walked out into"
ratio0.131
92.90% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount34
totalSentences107
matches
0"She didn’t turn."
1"His auburn hair was streaked"
2"His hazel eyes, sharp as"
3"She exhaled through her nose,"
4"She didn’t flinch."
5"She crossed her arms, her"
6"He said it like it"
7"His voice was steady"
8"She laughed, sharp and bitter."
9"She didn’t take it."
10"she said finally"
11"Her breath caught."
12"She wanted to ask how"
13"She wanted to tear the"
14"She looked up at him,"
15"His beard was trimmed, but"
16"He leaned forward, just slightly."
17"She could run."
18"She could walk out that"
19"She picked it up."
ratio0.318
90.84% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount79
totalSentences107
matches
0"The door to *The Raven’s"
1"A woman in a black"
2"The bartender, a gaunt man"
3"She didn’t turn."
4"The hidden door—always hidden—creaked open"
5"Silas Blackwood leaned against the"
6"His auburn hair was streaked"
7"His hazel eyes, sharp as"
8"She exhaled through her nose,"
9"The kind where the air"
10"The space was smaller than"
11"A single lamp flickered, casting"
12"She didn’t flinch."
13"Silas chuckled, low and rough."
14"She crossed her arms, her"
15"He said it like it"
16"The air between them shifted."
17"Rory’s throat tightened."
18"His voice was steady"
19"She laughed, sharp and bitter."
ratio0.738
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences107
matches(empty)
ratio0
79.83% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences34
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Just kept walking toward the back, where the walls were lined with yellowed maps and the air smelled of stale cigarette smoke and something older, something tha…"
1"She exhaled through her nose, a sound that was half-laugh, half-irritation."
2"The bartender was polishing a glass, his scar pulling tight as he watched her."
75.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Silas continued, his voice low"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Silas continued (continue)"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.196
leniency0.392
rawRatio0.1
effectiveRatio0.039
82.2424%