Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYBAEFTXWWSKNZ5YBMYRB3X

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Duration:
38.6s
Cost:
$0.001112
Provider:
Phala

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The Heartstone pulsed, a slow, insistent warmth against my sternum. Not a comforting heat, more like a trapped bird fluttering beneath my skin. I hadn’t felt it react this strongly since… well, since I’d foolishly followed Old Man Hemlock’s directions into the abandoned tunnels beneath Highgate Cemetery. And that hadn't ended well. Richmond Park at midnight wasn’t exactly teeming with life, even for London. The usual rustle of foxes and the distant throb of traffic were swallowed by a deeper silence, a muffling that pressed against my ears. I killed the engine of the battered delivery scooter, the sudden cessation of noise amplifying the wrongness. It wasn’t a terrifying wrongness, not yet. More of a… misalignment. Like a picture frame hanging slightly askew. I’d come looking for the Grove, of course. ‘Isolde’s Grove,’ the old woman at the market had called it. “Where the veil is thin,” she’d rasped, her voice smelling of peat and something else, something sharp and metallic. She'd pressed a tarnished silver sixpence into my hand, insisting it was payment for a debt not my own. And then she'd described the standing stones—ancient oaks twisted with age, marking the edge of…something. Eva, bless her cynical heart, had scoffed. “Fairy circles and old wives’ tales, Rory. You’re letting this obsession with the occult get the better of you.” Which was probably true, but Eva hadn't *felt* this. This prickling on the back of my neck, the sense of being watched. I pulled the hood of my rain jacket tighter, the chill seeping in despite the relatively mild October night. A faint mist clung to the ground, twisting around the bases of the trees like restless spirits. The park, even in daylight, had a way of swallowing sound. Tonight, it felt actively predatory. The map, sketched on the back of a Yu-Fei's delivery slip, wasn't exactly detailed. *Past the Isabella Plantation, follow the deer trails, look for the oaks.* Deer trails were plentiful. It was the oaks that were proving elusive. Every cluster of trees seemed to mock me with their sameness, their gnarled branches reaching like skeletal fingers. I walked, each step crunching on fallen leaves. The Heartstone warmed again, a quick, frantic flutter. Close. I was getting closer. The air grew heavier, infused with a cloying sweetness, like overripe fruit. Not unpleasant, but unsettling. Too much of anything always was. Then I saw them. The oaks. Three of them, impossibly ancient, their trunks wider than my scooter. They stood in a rough triangle, their branches interwoven to form a canopy that blotted out the already feeble starlight. Between them, the ground dipped into a small, secluded clearing. The Grove. Even from a distance, there was something… different about the clearing. The grass was unnaturally green, the wildflowers blooming in riotous colours that shouldn’t have existed this late in the year. A thick, sweet scent hung in the air, almost overwhelming now. I hesitated at the edge, my hand instinctively going to the small crescent-shaped scar on my left wrist. A childhood memory, a broken glass, a fleeting moment of pain. Stupid habit. I hadn't thought about that in years. Taking a deep breath, I stepped into the clearing. The Heartstone throbbed against my chest, nearly painful now. It felt like it was trying to claw its way out. I ignored it, forcing myself to focus on the details. The wildflowers. Bluebells, primroses, lavender, all blooming side by side in an impossible harmony. A small stream trickled through the centre of the clearing, its water shimmering with an unnatural luminescence. It was beautiful. And wrong. I scanned the perimeter. No footprints other than my own. No signs of recent visitors. And yet, the feeling of being watched persisted, intensified. It wasn't a malicious feeling, not exactly. More like…curiosity. Intense, unsettling curiosity. A twig snapped behind me. I whirled around, heart hammering against my ribs. Nothing. Just the trees, their branches swaying gently in the non-existent breeze. My imagination, I told myself. Just my imagination running wild. I started to walk further into the clearing, drawn toward the stream. The light seemed to emanate from the water itself, casting long, distorted shadows. The Heartstone was practically vibrating now, humming against my skin. It felt like it was trying to *warn* me. Another sound. A soft, rustling whisper, too faint to decipher. It seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere at once. I stopped, listening intently. The silence returned, even more oppressive than before. I risked a glance around, studying the trees. Something moved at the edge of my vision. A fleeting glimpse of… something tall and slender, disappearing behind the trunk of a massive oak. “Hello?” I called out, my voice sounding thin and reedy in the vastness of the park. No response. I told myself it was a deer. Or a fox. Or a particularly large rabbit. Anything but… what my gut was telling me. I bent down to examine the stream, reaching out to touch the water. As my fingers brushed the surface, a ripple spread outwards, disrupting the luminescence. And in that brief distortion, I saw a face. Not a reflection. Not my own. A pale, gaunt face with eyes that burned like embers. The face vanished as quickly as it appeared, the water returning to its shimmering stillness. I snatched my hand back, my breath catching in my throat. Right. Okay. That wasn't a deer. My hand went to my pocket, fingers closing around the small, heavy-handled knife I always carried. More for peace of mind than anything else. I was a delivery driver, not a warrior. “Show yourself,” I said, my voice trembling slightly. The rustling sound came again, closer this time. And then another. And another. The sound of leaves being disturbed, of branches being brushed aside. From the shadows, they emerged. Not creatures of nightmare, not yet. They were… people. But not quite. Tall and slender, with pale skin and impossibly long limbs. Their eyes, like the face in the water, burned with a strange, internal fire. They were dressed in clothes that seemed to shimmer and shift in the light, woven from things that shouldn’t be cloth. They didn’t speak, didn’t make a sound. They simply stood there, surrounding me, their eyes fixed on the Heartstone. One of them, a woman with hair like spun moonlight, extended a hand toward me. Her fingers were long and delicate, tipped with nails that gleamed like polished bone. “Welcome, Malphora.” The name… Auroras alias by her father. A name no one had used in years. And how could they *know*? The Heartstone flared, searing against my skin. And the trees, the oaks, began to *move*.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences5
tagDensity0.8
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
82.09% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1117
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"gently"
count1
2
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"gently"
2"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
28.38% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1117
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"pulsed"
count1
1
word"warmth"
count1
2
word"comforting"
count1
3
word"throb"
count1
4
word"silence"
count2
5
word"sense of"
count1
6
word"chill"
count1
7
word"fleeting"
count2
8
word"throbbed"
count1
9
word"scanned"
count1
10
word"whisper"
count1
11
word"oppressive"
count1
12
word"disrupting"
count1
13
word"searing"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"warmth"
2"comforting"
3"throb"
4"silence"
5"sense of"
6"chill"
7"fleeting"
8"throbbed"
9"scanned"
10"whisper"
11"oppressive"
12"disrupting"
13"searing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences127
matches(empty)
52.87% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount6
narrationSentences127
filterMatches
0"look"
1"know"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"started to"
2"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences129
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen28
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans5
markdownWords16
totalWords1112
ratio0.014
matches
0"felt"
1"Past the Isabella Plantation, follow the deer trails, look for the oaks."
2"warn"
3"know"
4"move"
89.29% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"My imagination, I told myself."
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions23
wordCount1072
uniqueNames16
maxNameDensity0.56
worstName"Heartstone"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Heartstone"
discoveredNames
Heartstone6
Old1
Man1
Hemlock1
Highgate1
Cemetery1
Park1
London1
Grove2
Eva2
October1
Yu-Fei1
Isabella1
Plantation1
Deer1
Auroras1
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Hemlock"
2"Eva"
3"Yu-Fei"
places
0"Park"
1"London"
2"Isabella"
3"Plantation"
4"Deer"
globalScore1
windowScore1
59.64% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences83
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"felt like it was trying to claw its way"
1"felt like it was trying to *warn* me"
2"clothes that seemed to shimmer and shift in the light, woven from things that shouldn’t be cloth"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.899
wordCount1112
matches
0"Not unpleasant, but unsettling"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences129
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs39
mean28.51
std20.43
cv0.716
sampleLengths
052
171
272
348
452
556
643
74
845
942
1038
119
1261
135
1436
155
1630
1744
1820
1944
2016
212
2223
2335
246
2525
2611
276
2832
298
3024
315
3257
3319
3429
352
3620
377
388
96.97% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences127
matches
0"were swallowed"
1"being brushed"
2"were dressed"
3.92% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs170
matches
0"were proving"
1"was getting"
2"was trying"
3"was trying"
4"was telling"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences129
ratio0.008
matches
0"And then she'd described the standing stones—ancient oaks twisted with age, marking the edge of…something."
74.91% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1027
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
1"small, heavy-handled knife"
adverbCount56
adverbRatio0.054527750730282376
lyAdverbCount21
lyAdverbRatio0.02044790652385589
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences129
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences129
mean8.62
std5.51
cv0.64
sampleLengths
010
113
28
316
45
512
624
717
87
93
101
117
128
1311
1419
1519
1615
177
1828
1913
2019
2117
2211
235
2414
2516
268
2718
288
298
301
314
3212
334
346
354
362
3711
3820
3910
402
417
424
4320
4411
4518
4611
472
487
499
66.93% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.43410852713178294
totalSentences129
uniqueOpeners56
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount6
totalSentences109
matches
0"More of a…"
1"Too much of anything always"
2"Then I saw them."
3"Just the trees, their branches"
4"Just my imagination running wild."
5"More for peace of mind"
ratio0.055
84.22% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount37
totalSentences109
matches
0"I hadn’t felt it react"
1"I killed the engine of"
2"It wasn’t a terrifying wrongness,"
3"I’d come looking for the"
4"she’d rasped, her voice smelling"
5"She'd pressed a tarnished silver"
6"I pulled the hood of"
7"It was the oaks that"
8"I walked, each step crunching"
9"I was getting closer."
10"They stood in a rough"
11"I hesitated at the edge,"
12"I hadn't thought about that"
13"It felt like it was"
14"I ignored it, forcing myself"
15"It was beautiful."
16"I scanned the perimeter."
17"It wasn't a malicious feeling,"
18"I whirled around, heart hammering"
19"My imagination, I told myself."
ratio0.339
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount71
totalSentences109
matches
0"The Heartstone pulsed, a slow,"
1"I hadn’t felt it react"
2"Richmond Park at midnight wasn’t"
3"The usual rustle of foxes"
4"I killed the engine of"
5"It wasn’t a terrifying wrongness,"
6"I’d come looking for the"
7"she’d rasped, her voice smelling"
8"She'd pressed a tarnished silver"
9"Eva, bless her cynical heart,"
10"This prickling on the back"
11"I pulled the hood of"
12"A faint mist clung to"
13"The park, even in daylight,"
14"Tonight, it felt actively predatory."
15"The map, sketched on the"
16"It was the oaks that"
17"Every cluster of trees seemed"
18"I walked, each step crunching"
19"The Heartstone warmed again, a"
ratio0.651
45.87% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences109
matches
0"Even from a distance, there"
ratio0.009
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences46
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"They stood in a rough triangle, their branches interwoven to form a canopy that blotted out the already feeble starlight."
1"The grass was unnaturally green, the wildflowers blooming in riotous colours that shouldn’t have existed this late in the year."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"I said, my voice trembling slightly"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"I called out (call out)"
dialogueSentences5
tagDensity0.4
leniency0.8
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.4
79.5032%