Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYBAQ5WPKY0V36V19J8KTKB

Run Details

Duration:
31.4s
Cost:
$0.001304
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The bell above the door of Eva’s flat jingles, sharp and unwelcome, as Rory fumbles with a takeout container. She turns from the stove—ten-pound bag of chips in one hand, a chipped mug of tea in the other—her delivery uniform still damp from the evening’s drizzle, and freezes. The air in the cramped one-bedroom feels suddenly too small, the shelves of books and scrolls (Eva’s latest“occult history of the East End”phase) pressing in. The guy standing on the threshold is *Luc*. Not *Lucien*. *Luc*. She’s not seen him in two years. Not since the night she’d woken to an empty bed and a note scrawled in his loopy handwriting: *I’m sorry. Don’t look for me*. He’s taller than she remembers, but his posture is still that of a man who measures every step, aware of his surroundings. Platinum blond hair, slicked back so it glints under the flickering overhead bulb, and those eyes—one amber, one black, a trick of the light that used to make her forget to breathe. Today, they’re shadowed, the amber dim, the black sharp enough to cut. He’s in a charcoal suit, the fabric tailored so tightly it makes her think of the way he used to press against her, warm through the thin material of her shirt. In his hand, he carries a briefcase, leather worn at the edges, and his cane—ivory handle, she notes, the blade inside likely as sharp as the things he’d never told her about. “Rory,” he says, and his voice is lower, rougher, like he’s been smoking too much. It ratches a nerve she’d thought cauterized. She sets the chips down hard, the bag crinkling. “What are you doing here.” Her tone is steady, but her fingers flex around the mug—too tight, the ceramic hot enough to burn. The scar on her left wrist itches, a faint prickle, and she’s suddenly conscious of it, the crescent of white skin under her shirt. *Childhood accident*, the doctor had said. *You were chasing a stray cat, tripped over the garden hose, sliced it open on the metal spigot*. But it had been *Evan* who’d made her feel like the world was a garden hose, coiled tight and ready to snap. *Luc* had been the one to untangle her, once, before he’d vanished. “Can I come in?” He nods at the door, and there’s a flicker of the old hesitation in his eyes, the way he used to pause before asking for permission, even when he was sure he should have it. “Did you forget the building rules? No solicitors, no—” “I’m not soliciting.” He takes a step forward, and the floorboards creak. The cat—Ptolemy, Eva’s tabby, who hates everyone except the guy who brings her tuna from the corner shop—flops onto the couch, tail flicking. “I need your help.” Rory stills. *Help*. As if he hasn’t spent two years weaponizing the one thing he knows she can’t say no to: the urge to fix things, to be useful, to believe there’s a way out of the mess she’s made of her life. “Like hell I do.” She crosses her arms, but her feet don’t move. The tea is cooling in her hands. His jaw tightens. “You *were* the only one who ever saw me, Rory. Not the Frenchman, not the fixer, not the—” He stops, swallows. “The half-demon. The thing people pay to eliminate. But you saw… you saw *Lucien*.” The nickname hits her like a punch. It was his mother’s, he’d told her once, before she’d learned what *half-demon* really meant. Before he’d taken her to Avaros, the realm of smoke and starlight, and shown her the scars on his father’s face—the horns, the fangs, the way the air there smelled like burnt copper. Before he’d kissed her and said, *I’m not like you. I can’t give you what you want*. “I don’t know you anymore,” she says, but it’s a lie. She knows the way his thumb rubs the cane when he’s nervous, the way he blinks twice before answering a question that makes him uncomfortable, the way he always orders black coffee when they eat at Silas’ bar, even though Eva swears by her cinnamon lattes. He leans against the doorframe, the briefcase heavy in his grip. “Eva called. Said you were talking to her about… about Evan. About the way he’d—” “Eva has a big mouth,” Rory snaps, but her throat is suddenly dry. She takes a sip of tea, scalding, and sets it down. “You don’t get to use her as a go-between. You don’t—” “I left because I had to,” he says, and it’s a plea, not a defense. “Avaros is cracking. The Veil between worlds is thinning, and demons are slipping through—*more* of them. My father… he’s gathering his forces. He wants a war. And I can’t let him do that. Not if it means innocent people get caught in the crossfire.” Rory stares at him. *Demons*. *Avaros*. She’d thought it was just a story, the way he talked about the shadows that lingered in the alleyways, the way his eyes had changed when he was angry. But EvanEvan had *known*. He’d known about the things she couldn’t see, the threats she couldn’t feel until it was too late. *I’m not like them*, he’d said, when she’d found the blood on his shirt, the gash on his arm that wouldn’t heal. *I can protect you*. But he’d been a man, with human fears, human weaknesses. *Luc*… he was something else. Something older, something that moved in the spaces between the light. “Why me?” she asks, her voice barely above a whisper. “Why come here, now? Why not go to the other fixers? The ones who actually *know* what they’re doing.” “Because you *understand*,” he says, and his hand goes to his chest, over his heart. “Because when I told you about Avaros, you didn’t flinch. You just said, *Then we’ll fix it*. You always... you always thought we could fix things.” He moves closer, and she doesn’t step back. The cat meows, curling into a ball on the couch. The air smells like Rory’s tea, like the curry house below (Eva’s secret ingredient, a dash of cardamom), like *him*—leather, sandalwood, something sharp and metallic, like the blade in his cane. She can see the scar on his cheek, a thin white line, and she remembers the night he’d fought off three men in an alley, the way he’d taken a punch to the face for her, and laughed when she’d cried over it, said, *I’m indestructible, remember? The gods made me that way*. *Indestructible*. “Evan was right, you know,” she says, quiet. “About me. About needing someone to protect me.” His face flickers, pained. “You don’t need protection. You need… you need to let someone *see* you, Rory. The parts you hide behind the delivery bag and the sarcasm and the… the *fixing*.” She laughs, a bitter, wet sound. “You left. You *left* because I needed too much. Because I wasn’t a weapon or a mission. Because I had a scar on my wrist and a father who still thinks I’m wasting my Pre-Law degree.” “I was scared,” he says, and it’s raw, so raw she knows it’s true. “Scared that if I stayed, I’d lose myself. That I’d start choosing Avaros over you. That I’d become the thing my father is.” “You already are,” she says, before she can stop herself. His eyes go black, the amber vanishing. For a second, she sees it—the demon, the creature that lurks beneath the suit and the cane. But then it’s gone, replaced by pain. “I’m not,” he says. “I’d never be.” He takes another step, and this time, she doesn’t move. The distance between them is two feet, three at most, and she can see the way his breath comes faster, the way his hand trembles as it reaches for her. The scar on her wrist itches again, and she realizes she’s been gripping it through her shirt, the skin white with pressure. “Did you ever… did you ever regret leaving?” she asks, and her voice cracks. He cups her face, his thumb brushing her cheek, and it’s warm, *human*, familiar. “Every single day. Every time I saw a streetlamp flicker, I thought of the night we sat on the roof at Silas’ and you told me about your mom’s lullabies. Every time I ordered black coffee, I thought of the way you’d laugh and say, *You’re going to give yourself a stomach ulcer, Luc*. Every time I close my eyes, I see your face, and I wonder—” “You wonder if you made the right choice,” she says, finishing for him. He nods, and his eyes are wet, the black flecked with amber. “I wonder if I’m still making the wrong one, by coming here. By risking… by risking *us*.” *Us*. It’s a word she thought she’d never hear from him again. A word that makes her chest tighten, that makes her want to reach up and kiss him, to taste the fear on his lips, to tell him that she’s still here, that she never left. But Evan’s face flashes in her mind—the way he’d grabbed her arm, the way he’d whispered, *You’ll never leave me*, the way he’d broken her phone, her laptop, the lock on her door, until she’d felt like a bird in a cage. She can’t do that again. She can’t be *someone’s* cage. “I can’t,” she says, pulling away from his touch. He steps back, hurt written across his face. “Rory—” “You can’t walk in here and say all this,” she says, her voice rising, angry now, because she’s scared, because he’s opening a wound she thought was healed, because *he* is *worth* the risk. “You can’t just… just say you want to fix things like we can go back to before. Before Evan. Before Avaros. Before—” “Before you let me in,” he finishes. She stops. Before she’d let him in, she’d been a girl who ate takeout on the floor of her university dorm, who cried into her pillow because her father had called to say he was “disappointed” in her “foolish” choice of major, who had a scar on her wrist and a heart that felt too big for her chest. Before Evan, she’d been *happy*, in a small, quiet way. But Evan had crushed that happiness, and *Luc* had been the one to rebuild it, brick by brick, until she’d felt like she could breathe again. Now he’s here, and she’s scared. Scared that he’ll leave again. Scared that the demon in him will win. Scared that she’ll let him in, and it’ll all fall apart. But what if it doesn’t? What if they’re both still here, two broken people, just waiting for someone to fix them? She takes a step toward him, and this time, he doesn’t flinch. The cat meows again, as if urging her on, and she laughs, wet and shaky. “You said you need my help,” she says. “With the demons. With Avaros. With… with whatever the hell is going on.” He nods, hope flickering in his eyes. “I need *you*, too. Not just as a fixer. As… as Rory. The woman who stays up all night reading conspiracy theories and who burns toast every morning because she’s too busy thinking about the case files on her kitchen table.” She smiles, a small, fragile thing. “The woman who once punched a man in the throat for calling my mom a ‘stupid Welsh accent’.” He grins, and it’s the same grin he used to wear when he’d found a particularly rare spell book, the one that made his eyes light up like a child on Christmas morning. “The woman who made me believe I could be human.” “I never doubted you,” she says, and it’s true. She never had. He closes the distance between them, slow, careful, and this time, she doesn’t pull away. His lips meet hers, soft at first, then hungry, and she thinks, *This is it*, the way his hands cup her face, the way he groans when she tangles her fingers in his hair, the way the world narrows to the feel of him, the smell of him, the *rightness* of him. When they pull apart, he rests his forehead against hers, his breath hot against her skin. “I’m not going to leave,” he says. “Not this time. I’ll fight for you. For us. Even if it means fighting my own father.” She touches the scar on his cheek, the one she’d kissed a hundred times. “I’ll fight with you,” she says. “Always.” The bell jingles again, and they both jump. Rory checks the peephole, sees Silas leaning against the doorframe, a knowing smile on his face. “Eva’s home early,” he calls, and she hears her friend’s laughter echoing down the stairs. Rory laughs, too, and turns back to Lucien. The flat is still cramped, still cluttered, still *hers*, but now it feels like it’s got a heartbeat, like there’s space for two people to fit, for their pasts and their futures to weave together. He takes her hand, laces his fingers through hers, and she sees the blade in his cane, hidden, but she knows it won’t be needed— not now, not when she has him. “Coffee?” she asks. “Eva’s still got the cinnamon lattes. Even though I tell her they’re a waste of good coffee.” He grins. “I’ll take two.” The cat meows, as if agreeing, and Rory thinks, *This is how it starts*, with a door opening, with a fight and a kiss and a lifetime of “what ifs” turned into “what is.” She takes his hand, and they walk to the kitchen, toward the stove, toward the chips and the tea and the quiet promise of a future that, this time, she’s not going to let slip through her fingers.
created_at"2026-02-20T20:19:46.504Z" 2/20/2026, 8:19:46 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags28
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.519
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
87.12% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2329
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count3
1
adverb"tightly"
count1
2
adverb"really"
count1
3
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"tightly"
2"really"
3"barely above a whisper"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
87.12% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2329
totalAiIsms6
found
0
word"flicker"
count2
1
word"whisper"
count1
2
word"familiar"
count1
3
word"stomach"
count1
4
word"echoing"
count1
highlights
0"flicker"
1"whisper"
2"familiar"
3"stomach"
4"echoing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences125
matches
0"was angry"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences125
filterMatches
0"think"
1"feel"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences151
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen67
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans44
markdownWords111
totalWords2315
ratio0.048
matches
0"Luc"
1"Lucien"
2"Luc"
3"I’m sorry. Don’t look for me"
4"Childhood accident"
5"You were chasing a stray cat, tripped over the garden hose, sliced it open on the metal spigot"
6"Evan"
7"Luc"
8"Help"
9"were"
10"Lucien"
11"half-demon"
12"I’m not like you. I can’t give you what you want"
13"more"
14"Demons"
15"Avaros"
16"known"
17"I’m not like them"
18"I can protect you"
19"Luc"
20"know"
21"understand"
22"Then we’ll fix it"
23"him"
24"I’m indestructible, remember? The gods made me that way"
25"Indestructible"
26"see"
27"fixing"
28"left"
29"human"
30"You’re going to give yourself a stomach ulcer, Luc"
31"us"
32"Us"
33"You’ll never leave me"
34"someone’s"
35"he"
36"worth"
37"happy"
38"Luc"
39"you"
40"This is it"
41"rightness"
42"hers"
43"This is how it starts"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions40
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions29
wordCount1707
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity0.47
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Eva4
Rory8
East1
Ptolemy1
Avaros2
Evan6
Christmas1
Silas1
Lucien2
Scared3
persons
0"Eva"
1"Rory"
2"Evan"
3"Silas"
4"Lucien"
places
0"Avaros"
globalScore1
windowScore1
12.64% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences91
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"smelled like burnt copper"
1"felt like a bird in a cage"
2"felt like she could breathe again"
3"as if urging her on, and she laughs, wet and shaky"
4"as if agreeing and Rory thinks, *This is how it starts*, with a door opening, with a fight and a kiss and a lifetime of turned into"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2315
matches(empty)
78.37% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount4
totalSentences151
matches
0"crushed that happiness"
1"Scared that he’ll"
2"Scared that the"
3"Scared that she’ll"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs63
mean36.75
std28.34
cv0.771
sampleLengths
073
18
23
331
4129
522
614
7100
839
99
1039
1143
1220
1338
1472
1557
1626
1735
1859
19110
2029
2141
22102
231
2416
2533
2642
2737
2810
2931
307
3162
3214
3381
3413
3529
361
3746
3852
399
409
4156
427
432
4493
4530
465
4716
4848
4948
99.65% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences125
matches
0"shadowed"
1"was healed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs316
matches
0"were chasing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount13
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences10
totalSentences151
ratio0.066
matches
0"She turns from the stove—ten-pound bag of chips in one hand, a chipped mug of tea in the other—her delivery uniform still damp from the evening’s drizzle, and freezes."
1"Platinum blond hair, slicked back so it glints under the flickering overhead bulb, and those eyes—one amber, one black, a trick of the light that used to make her forget to breathe."
2"In his hand, he carries a briefcase, leather worn at the edges, and his cane—ivory handle, she notes, the blade inside likely as sharp as the things he’d never told her about."
3"Her tone is steady, but her fingers flex around the mug—too tight, the ceramic hot enough to burn."
4"The cat—Ptolemy, Eva’s tabby, who hates everyone except the guy who brings her tuna from the corner shop—flops onto the couch, tail flicking."
5"Before he’d taken her to Avaros, the realm of smoke and starlight, and shown her the scars on his father’s face—the horns, the fangs, the way the air there smelled like burnt copper."
6"The air smells like Rory’s tea, like the curry house below (Eva’s secret ingredient, a dash of cardamom), like *him*—leather, sandalwood, something sharp and metallic, like the blade in his cane."
7"For a second, she sees it—the demon, the creature that lurks beneath the suit and the cane."
8"But Evan’s face flashes in her mind—the way he’d grabbed her arm, the way he’d whispered, *You’ll never leave me*, the way he’d broken her phone, her laptop, the lock on her door, until she’d felt like a bird in a cage."
9"He takes her hand, laces his fingers through hers, and she sees the blade in his cane, hidden, but she knows it won’t be needed— not now, not when she has him."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1535
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount48
adverbRatio0.031270358306188926
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.004560260586319218
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences151
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences151
mean15.33
std12.72
cv0.83
sampleLengths
019
129
225
38
42
51
67
720
84
922
1032
1112
1231
1332
1415
157
169
175
1818
1924
206
2118
2222
2312
2439
259
2612
2723
284
292
301
3140
3213
337
343
3521
3614
377
3815
3933
4010
417
4211
4346
4411
4515
4613
4711
4811
4915
39.40% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats16
diversityRatio0.2847682119205298
totalSentences151
uniqueOpeners43
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences107
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount59
totalSentences107
matches
0"She turns from the stove—ten—pound"
1"She’s not seen him in"
2"He’s taller than she remembers,"
3"He’s in a charcoal suit,"
4"he says, and his voice"
5"It ratches a nerve she’d"
6"She sets the chips down"
7"Her tone is steady, but"
8"*You were chasing a stray"
9"He nods at the door,"
10"He takes a step forward,"
11"She crosses her arms, but"
12"His jaw tightens."
13"He stops, swallows"
14"It was his mother’s, he’d"
15"I can’t give you what"
16"she says, but it’s a"
17"She knows the way his"
18"He leans against the doorframe,"
19"She takes a sip of"
ratio0.551
62.80% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount85
totalSentences107
matches
0"The bell above the door"
1"She turns from the stove—ten—pound"
2"The air in the cramped"
3"The guy standing on the"
4"She’s not seen him in"
5"He’s taller than she remembers,"
6"Platinum blond hair, slicked back"
7"He’s in a charcoal suit,"
8"he says, and his voice"
9"It ratches a nerve she’d"
10"She sets the chips down"
11"Her tone is steady, but"
12"The scar on her left"
13"*Childhood accident*, the doctor had"
14"*You were chasing a stray"
15"*Luc* had been the one"
16"He nods at the door,"
17"He takes a step forward,"
18"The cat—Ptolemy, Eva’s tabby, who"
19"She crosses her arms, but"
ratio0.794
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount6
totalSentences107
matches
0"As if he hasn’t spent"
1"Before he’d taken her to"
2"Before he’d kissed her and"
3"Before she’d let him in,"
4"Before Evan, she’d been *happy*,"
5"Now he’s here, and she’s"
ratio0.056
88.95% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences53
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"He’s taller than she remembers, but his posture is still that of a man who measures every step, aware of his surroundings."
1"Platinum blond hair, slicked back so it glints under the flickering overhead bulb, and those eyes—one amber, one black, a trick of the light that used to make h…"
2"The cat—Ptolemy, Eva’s tabby, who hates everyone except the guy who brings her tuna from the corner shop—flops onto the couch, tail flicking."
3"*I’m not like them*, he’d said, when she’d found the blood on his shirt, the gash on his arm that wouldn’t heal."
35.71% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags28
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"he says, and his voice is lower, rougher, like he’s been smoking too much"
1"She crosses, but her feet don’t move"
2"Rory snaps, but her throat is suddenly dry"
3"she asks, her voice barely above a whisper"
4"she says, quiet"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags20
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Rory snaps (snap)"
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.37
leniency0.741
rawRatio0.05
effectiveRatio0.037
79.7254%