Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYBBFXX7KGMR7AP0A6796SY

Run Details

Model:
Grok 4
Duration:
1m 36s
Cost:
$0.053382
Provider:
xAI

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door swung open with a creak that echoed through the narrow hallway, and there he stood—Lucien Moreau, his heterochromatic eyes locking onto mine like a predator spotting prey. Ptolemy the tabby cat bolted from his perch on the cluttered bookshelf, fur bristling as he vanished under the kitchen table. I froze, hand still gripping the knob, the three deadbolts I'd just unlocked mocking my false sense of security. "Lucien." "Rory." His voice carried that smooth French lilt, unchanged, like he'd stepped out of one of my nightmares dressed in his tailored charcoal suit. He leaned on his ivory-handled cane, the one that hid a blade sharper than his words. "May I come in? Or shall we discuss old wounds on the doorstep?" Old wounds. That's what he called it now? I stepped aside, not because I wanted to, but because the curry-scented air from the shop below was seeping in, and I refused to let the neighbors overhear whatever poison he carried. The door clicked shut behind him, sealing us in Eva's cramped flat, books and scrolls teetering on every surface like unstable secrets. He scanned the room, amber eye catching the light from a lone lamp, the black one shadowed and unreadable. "Eva's place, I see. Still crashing here when life gets complicated?" "Complicated like you showing up unannounced?" I crossed my arms, the small crescent scar on my left wrist itching under my sleeve—a reminder of childhood clumsiness, nothing like the scars he'd left. My heart hammered, betraying me, but I kept my voice steady. Cool-headed, that's what people called me. Quick thinker. "What do you want, Lucien? Last time we spoke, you made it clear you preferred your underworld deals without human complications." He set his cane against the wall, the soft thud punctuating his steps toward the kitchen counter. Scrolls crinkled under his polished shoes. "Human complications. Is that how you remember it?" His fingers brushed a stack of Eva's research notes, rearranging them with deliberate care. "I recall a woman who dove headfirst into my world, then bolted when the shadows grew too dark." Bolted? Heat rose in my cheeks. I'd fled Cardiff after Evan, yes, but London—and Lucien—had been my fresh start. Until he revealed his half-demon heritage during that cursed job in the East End, pulling me into a web of supernatural fixes that nearly got me killed. Attraction had sparked then, fierce and forbidden, his touch like fire on my skin. But the hurt? That came when he pushed me away, claiming I couldn't handle his "true nature." Things left unsaid? Plenty. Like how I'd whispered his name in the dark for months after. "I didn't bolt," I said, moving to the counter opposite him, the Formica cool under my palms. Ptolemy peeked out, eyes wide, then darted back. "You shoved me out. 'Go back to your deliveries and your safe little life,' you said. Remember?" A ghost of a smile tugged at his lips, but it didn't reach his eyes. He plucked a half-empty mug from the sink—Eva's, stained with tea—and examined it like evidence. "Safe? You deliver for Yu-Fei Cheung. That old dragon's restaurant fronts more than dim sum. And living above Silas' bar? Hardly a convent." "Safer than chasing demons with you." I snatched the mug from his hand, our fingers brushing. Electricity shot through me, unwanted, familiar. I set it down hard, ceramic clinking against the pile of unwashed dishes. "Cut the games. Why are you here?" He straightened, closing the distance until the scent of his cologne—sandalwood and something darker, like brimstone—filled the space between us. "A mutual acquaintance needs help. Eva, actually. She's tangled in something from Avaros. My father's realm." Avaros. The demon plane he'd mentioned once, in a rare moment of vulnerability, after we'd shared a bottle of wine in his sleek apartment. I'd pressed for details, my hand on his chest, feeling the dual rhythm of his half-human heart. He'd kissed me instead, distracting, evading. Now he brought it here, to Eva's book-strewn chaos. "Eva's in Cardiff visiting family. She didn't mention any tangles." My mind raced, piecing it together. Eva, my childhood friend, the one who'd dragged me to London after Evan. She dabbled in the occult, her flat a testament to that—ancient tomes on demonology stacked beside modern thrillers. If Lucien knew about Avaros ties, it meant trouble. "You wouldn't show up unless it's bad. Spill it." He reached into his suit pocket, pulling out a small, ornate vial. Crimson liquid swirled inside, catching the lamp's glow. "This washed up in the Thames last night. Essence from Avaros. Bound to a human host." He held it out, but when I reached for it, he pulled back slightly, forcing me closer. "Eva's notes mention it. She's been researching portals. Carelessly." Our breaths mingled. I could see the faint scar on his jaw, from a fight he'd never explained. Attraction surged, damn it, mixing with the old hurt. "If it's careless, why involve me? You washed your hands of us mortals." "Us?" His black eye darkened further, the amber one flashing with something raw. He set the vial down, his hand lingering near mine. "You think I washed my hands of you? That night in the warehouse, when the imp swarm hit, I pushed you out to save you. From me. From this." He gestured to himself, the elegant fixer masking the demon blood. Save me. The words twisted in my gut. I'd replayed that night endlessly—his blade flashing from the cane, slicing through shadowy forms while I huddled behind crates, useless. Afterward, in the rain-slicked alley, he'd kissed me hard, then told me to leave. "Humans break too easily," he'd said. Hurt had crashed over me like a wave, drowning the unsaid confession burning in my throat: I didn't care about the demon part. I wanted him anyway. "You didn't give me a choice," I whispered, my voice cracking despite my resolve. I stepped back, bumping into a tower of books that wobbled precariously. One tumbled, an old grimoire thudding open to a page on binding spells. Fitting. Lucien's jaw tightened. He caught the next book before it fell, his movements fluid, predatory. "Choice? You had one—stay in your world or risk mine. I chose for both of us." He placed the book aside, then closed in again, his cane forgotten. "But Eva's mess pulls you back in. And I... I need your help." Need. The word hung there, vulnerable from a man who brokered information like currency. My pulse quickened. "My help? I'm a delivery girl with a pre-law degree I never used. What do I know about demon essences?" "You know me." His voice dropped, intimate. He traced a finger along the edge of the counter, inching toward my hand. "And you're quick. Out-of-the-box thinking, remember? That's what drew me in the first place." Drew him in. The admission sparked something—hope? Anger? I couldn't tell. Memories flooded: stolen moments in his car after a job, his lips on my neck, whispering in French while I laughed, pretending I understood. Then the push away, leaving me hollow. Ptolemy chose that moment to emerge, rubbing against Lucien's leg with a low purr. Traitorous cat. "Fine," I said, ignoring the warmth spreading through me. "Tell me about this essence. But if you're lying to get back in—" "I'm not." He picked up the vial again, holding it between us like a peace offering. "It binds to a host, amplifies their darkest desires. Eva experimented with it, I suspect. Her notes reference a trial run." Trial run. My stomach dropped. Eva, always pushing boundaries, her flat a labyrinth of forbidden knowledge. If she'd bound something from Avaros... "Where is she now?" I demanded, snatching the vial. The glass warmed unnaturally in my palm, pulsing like a heartbeat. Lucien hesitated, a rare crack in his composure. "Missing. Since yesterday. I tracked her last signal here." Missing. The word hit like a punch. I set the vial down, hands shaking. "You lead with that? Eva's gone, and you waltz in with innuendos?" "Not innuendos." He gripped my wrist gently, thumb brushing the scar. "Truths we left unsaid. Like how I never stopped thinking about you." The touch ignited everything—the attraction, the hurt, the pull I'd fought for months. I didn't pull away. "Then why push me out?" "Because demons like my father destroy what they touch." His voice roughened, the French accent thickening. "But losing you destroyed something in me." Our faces inches apart now, breaths syncing. I could taste the sandalwood on him. Part of me wanted to bridge the gap, to kiss away the unsaid words. But complications loomed—Eva missing, demon essence, his world crashing into mine again. A sharp knock rattled the door. We both tensed. Ptolemy hissed, fur on end. Lucien's hand dropped to his cane, fingers twitching toward the hidden blade. "Expecting company?" "No." I moved toward the door, heart pounding. The knock came again, insistent. Through the peephole, a shadowed figure waited, face obscured by a hood. Something glinted in their hand—metal, sharp. Lucien positioned himself behind me, his presence a shield. "Open it. But stay back." I twisted the first deadbolt, the click echoing like a warning. As the door creaked open, the figure lunged, blade flashing toward my throat.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags20
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"black eye darkened further [further]"
dialogueSentences44
tagDensity0.455
leniency0.909
rawRatio0.05
effectiveRatio0.045
93.65% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1576
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
39.72% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1576
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"echoed"
count1
1
word"predator"
count1
2
word"sense of"
count1
3
word"lilt"
count1
4
word"scanned"
count1
5
word"unreadable"
count1
6
word"reminder"
count1
7
word"familiar"
count1
8
word"raced"
count1
9
word"testament"
count1
10
word"resolve"
count1
11
word"pulse"
count1
12
word"quickened"
count1
13
word"traced"
count1
14
word"warmth"
count1
15
word"stomach"
count1
16
word"loomed"
count1
17
word"pounding"
count1
18
word"echoing"
count1
highlights
0"echoed"
1"predator"
2"sense of"
3"lilt"
4"scanned"
5"unreadable"
6"reminder"
7"familiar"
8"raced"
9"testament"
10"resolve"
11"pulse"
12"quickened"
13"traced"
14"warmth"
15"stomach"
16"loomed"
17"pounding"
18"echoing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"stomach dropped/sank"
count1
highlights
0"stomach dropped"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences110
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences110
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences134
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen40
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1552
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions41
wordCount1131
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity0.71
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Lucien8
Moreau1
French3
Eva7
Bolted1
Cardiff1
Evan2
London2
East1
End1
Things1
Formica1
Ptolemy4
Electricity1
Avaros3
Save1
Hurt1
Need1
Trial1
persons
0"Lucien"
1"Moreau"
2"Eva"
3"Evan"
4"Things"
5"Formica"
6"Ptolemy"
7"Electricity"
8"Hurt"
places
0"French"
1"Cardiff"
2"London"
3"East"
4"End"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences81
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1552
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences134
matches
0"replayed that night"
1"chose that moment"
97.22% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs39
mean39.79
std19.51
cv0.49
sampleLengths
050
120
253
362
430
572
663
793
842
953
1042
1136
1256
1365
1462
1540
1663
1775
1840
1956
2037
2135
2242
2316
2422
2537
2622
2720
2817
2926
3023
3122
3223
3340
3414
3514
3631
3714
3824
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences110
matches
0", stained"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs225
matches
0"was seeping"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount14
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences11
totalSentences134
ratio0.082
matches
0"The door swung open with a creak that echoed through the narrow hallway, and there he stood—Lucien Moreau, his heterochromatic eyes locking onto mine like a predator spotting prey."
1"\"Complicated like you showing up unannounced?\" I crossed my arms, the small crescent scar on my left wrist itching under my sleeve—a reminder of childhood clumsiness, nothing like the scars he'd left."
2"I'd fled Cardiff after Evan, yes, but London—and Lucien—had been my fresh start."
3"He plucked a half-empty mug from the sink—Eva's, stained with tea—and examined it like evidence."
4"He straightened, closing the distance until the scent of his cologne—sandalwood and something darker, like brimstone—filled the space between us."
5"She dabbled in the occult, her flat a testament to that—ancient tomes on demonology stacked beside modern thrillers."
6"I'd replayed that night endlessly—his blade flashing from the cane, slicing through shadowy forms while I huddled behind crates, useless."
7"The admission sparked something—hope?"
8"The touch ignited everything—the attraction, the hurt, the pull I'd fought for months."
9"But complications loomed—Eva missing, demon essence, his world crashing into mine again."
10"Something glinted in their hand—metal, sharp."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1153
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount36
adverbRatio0.031222896790980052
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.005203816131830009
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences134
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences134
mean11.58
std7.68
cv0.663
sampleLengths
029
121
219
31
424
516
613
72
86
932
1022
1119
1211
1332
1411
156
162
1721
1817
196
2022
2118
221
235
2413
2527
2614
273
2817
291
3012
3117
328
3317
3415
3515
3623
3716
386
3913
407
4120
4216
431
4423
4517
466
479
4816
4913
83.58% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.5149253731343284
totalSentences134
uniqueOpeners69
34.36% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences97
matches
0"Then the push away, leaving"
ratio0.01
17.94% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount49
totalSentences97
matches
0"I froze, hand still gripping"
1"His voice carried that smooth"
2"He leaned on his ivory-handled"
3"I stepped aside, not because"
4"He scanned the room, amber"
5"I crossed my arms, the"
6"My heart hammered, betraying me,"
7"He set his cane against"
8"His fingers brushed a stack"
9"I'd fled Cardiff after Evan,"
10"I said, moving to the"
11"He plucked a half-empty mug"
12"I snatched the mug from"
13"I set it down hard,"
14"He straightened, closing the distance"
15"I'd pressed for details, my"
16"He'd kissed me instead, distracting,"
17"My mind raced, piecing it"
18"She dabbled in the occult,"
19"He reached into his suit"
ratio0.505
32.16% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount83
totalSentences97
matches
0"The door swung open with"
1"Ptolemy the tabby cat bolted"
2"I froze, hand still gripping"
3"His voice carried that smooth"
4"He leaned on his ivory-handled"
5"That's what he called it"
6"I stepped aside, not because"
7"The door clicked shut behind"
8"He scanned the room, amber"
9"I crossed my arms, the"
10"My heart hammered, betraying me,"
11"He set his cane against"
12"Scrolls crinkled under his polished"
13"His fingers brushed a stack"
14"Heat rose in my cheeks."
15"I'd fled Cardiff after Evan,"
16"Attraction had sparked then, fierce"
17"That came when he pushed"
18"I said, moving to the"
19"Ptolemy peeked out, eyes wide,"
ratio0.856
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences97
matches
0"Now he brought it here,"
1"If Lucien knew about Avaros"
2"If she'd bound something from"
ratio0.031
94.16% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences44
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"The door swung open with a creak that echoed through the narrow hallway, and there he stood—Lucien Moreau, his heterochromatic eyes locking onto mine like a pre…"
1"I'd replayed that night endlessly—his blade flashing from the cane, slicing through shadowy forms while I huddled behind crates, useless."
2"Memories flooded: stolen moments in his car after a job, his lips on my neck, whispering in French while I laughed, pretending I understood."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags20
uselessAdditionCount7
matches
0"I snatched, our fingers brushing"
1"He gestured, the elegant fixer masking the demon blood"
2"I whispered, my voice cracking despite my resolve"
3"His voice dropped, intimate"
4"He gripped, thumb brushing the scar"
5"His voice roughened, the French accent thickening"
6"I moved, heart pounding"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"I whispered (whisper)"
1"I demanded (demand)"
dialogueSentences44
tagDensity0.091
leniency0.182
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.091
83.0932%