Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8TP2S2F7T83S6ZMSRNQJFX

Run Details

Model:
Aion 2.0
Duration:
2m 1s
Cost:
$0.006866
Provider:
AionLabs

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The air in Richmond Park held the damp, green smell of late afternoon, a familiar London chill seeping through Rory’s jacket. She followed the path of trodden grass, her boots sinking slightly into the soft earth. Beside her, Nyx moved without sound, their form a solid silhouette of deepening shadow against the slanting sunlight. To any casual observer, they might have been a tall, oddly dressed friend. Only the faint, violet glow where eyes should be betrayed their true nature. “The stones should be just ahead,” Nyx whispered, their voice like dry leaves rustling in a distant corner of a room. “The boundary is thin here. Can you feel it?” Rory shook her head, but her left wrist itched where the small crescent scar lay against her skin. A nervous habit. She touched the Heartstone pendant at her throat; it was cool, inert. No Hel portal nearby, then. This was something else. They rounded a thicket of hawthorn and there they were: three ancient oaks, but grown in a perfect, impossible triangle, their trunks too straight, their bark smooth and silvered like old metal. They weren’t merely trees; they were monoliths. The space within the triangle shimmered, a heat-haze distortion that made the world beyond—the rolling parkland, a distant herd of deer—waver and dance. “The standing stones,” Nyx said, a note of reverence in their whisper. “A door.” “How do we knock?” Rory asked, her own voice sounding too loud in the hushed clearing. “We step through.” Nyx extended a hand, which seemed to bleed into the shimmering air, becoming insubstantial. They flowed forward, a shadow merging with a greater shadow, and were gone. Rory took a deep breath, the scent of grass and damp earth suddenly overpowered by a wave of wild, sweet perfume—honeysuckle and night-blooming jasmine, though it was neither night nor the season for either. She stepped between two of the oak sentinels. The world folded. It wasn’t a step so much as a dislocation. The chill vanished, replaced by a soft, ambient warmth that held no source. The light changed; it was the golden, honeyed light of a perpetual late summer evening, coming from everywhere and nowhere. The sound of London—the distant hum of traffic, the faint shouts of children—was utterly absent. In its place was a profound, living silence, punctuated by the gentle rustle of leaves and the soft drone of unseen insects. She stood in a clearing, but it was unlike any part of Richmond Park. The grass was a deep, emerald velvet, scattered with wildflowers in impossible profusion: blooms of sapphire blue, fiery orange, and a purple so deep it was almost black, all glowing with their own inner light. The air itself seemed to sparkle with motes of drifting pollen that caught the eternal twilight. Nyx stood a few feet away, their shadow-form somehow more defined here, the violet glow of their eyes brighter against the gloom. “Welcome to the borderlands,” Nyx murmured. Rory took a tentative step forward. The grass yielded softly, releasing another wave of fragrance. She looked down and saw that her boots left faint impressions, which slowly sprang back, erasing her passage. She glanced at Nyx’s feet; they left no mark at all. “It’s beautiful,” she breathed, and the words felt inadequate. “It is old,” Nyx corrected gently. “And it remembers everything. Walk softly.” They moved deeper into the grove. The three standing oaks were behind them, but now Rory saw they were not alone. Other trees, twisted and graceful with bark like polished bone, formed a loose circle. Between them, ribbons of silvery mist curled and drifted, sometimes resolving into faint, shimmering shapes—a running fox, a flock of birds, a dancing figure—before dissolving again. The light had no single source, but the entire canopy above seemed to be a tapestry of living leaves that emitted a soft, bioluminescent glow. A sense of profound peace washed over her, followed immediately by a spike of vertigo. The peace felt like a drug, a lure. The unease was the knowledge that she was an intruder in a place that did not obey the rules she knew. Time felt sticky, thick. She checked her watch; the second hand was motionless. She tapped it. Nothing. “Time moves to its own rhythm here,” Nyx said, noticing. “An hour inside could be a minute outside. Or a day. There is no telling until we leave.” They came to a small, perfectly circular pool. The water was mirror-still and black as obsidian, yet it reflected not the glowing canopy above, but a field of stars—a night sky that existed nowhere in this twilight world. Rory knelt, drawn to it. As she leaned over, her reflection stared back, but her eyes in the water were not her bright blue. They were a pale, knowing lavender. She jerked back. “The pool shows what is, what was, and what may be,” a new voice said. It was melodic, each word precise and ringing like a small bell. “It is rarely kind to the present.” Rory turned. A woman stood beside a tree that hadn’t been there a moment before. She was of average height, with a waterfall of silver hair that seemed to move in a breeze Rory couldn’t feel. Her face was ageless, neither young nor old, but etched with a quiet sorrow. Her eyes were the same pale lavender Rory had seen in the water. She wore a simple dress of grey moss and woven bark, and her feet were bare on the grass. Where she stood, no impression was left in the velvet sward. “Isolde,” Nyx said, dipping their head in a gesture that was almost a bow. “Shadow-walker,” Isolde replied, her gaze flickering over Nyx with a hint of distant recognition. “And you bring a child of law and order into the wild places.” Her eyes settled on Rory. “Aurora Carter. You have left one court and now seek another. The threads around you are tangled indeed.” Rory stood, forcing her voice to work. “I was told you could help. That you see things.” “I see what the world shows me. It is a compulsion, not a gift.” Isolde took a step closer, and Rory caught a scent like cold stone and dried lavender. “You carry a stone of Hell’s forge. It is quiet here. This place is not of that fire. It is of the older, cooler magic.” Instinctively, Rory’s hand went to the pendant. “Will you help me?” “I cannot lie,” Isolde said, a faint, bitter smile touching her lips. “So I will say this: help is a river that sometimes drowns those it carries. You seek answers about the man who hurt you, the shadow he casts, and the larger darkness gathering. You look backward and forward at once, and so you stumble in the now.” The words, cryptic and precise, hit Rory with the force of truth. She felt exposed, as if Isolde had peeled back her skin and read the fears written on her bones. “What should I do?” “The Veil thins and thickens with the sun’s journey. It is weak now, in the mortal winter. Shadows grow long, and doors left closed creak open.” Isolde’s lavender eyes seemed to look through her, into some other vista. “You will walk a path of knives and feasts. You will be offered everything you ever wanted, and it will cost you everything you are.” A chill that had nothing to do with temperature raced down Rory’s spine. The wonder of the grove suddenly felt predatory, the beautiful flowers like watchful eyes. “That’s not an answer. That’s a… a riddle.” “It is the only answer there is.” Isolde turned and glided to the base of the bone-white tree. From its roots, she drew forth a long, slender object wrapped in grey cloth. “You came seeking sight. I offer a blade. A trade of sorts.” She unwrapped the cloth. The dagger within was leaf-shaped, forged from a metal that looked like liquid moonlight made solid. It glowed with a soft, internal radiance, and the air around it grew noticeably colder. Rory could see her breath fog. “Moonsilver,” Nyx whispered, a rare edge of awe in their voice. “Fae-forged. It is a great gift.” “And a great burden,” Isolde said. She held it out, hilt first. “It can cut through glamours and wards. It bites deep into demon-flesh. It is a tool for a path you have already chosen, whether you know it or not. Take it.” Rory reached out, her fingers closing around the hilt. It was freezing, so cold it burned, but the pain was clean, sharp. The blade felt alive in her hand, humming with a silent frequency. As she held it, the faint glow intensified, casting her own shadow, stark and black, against the glowing grass. “Remember,” Isolde said, her voice beginning to fade as if she were receding down a long tunnel. “The Grove remembers. It has shown you a reflection. The blade does not change your path. It merely makes it possible to walk it without being devoured. Now go. The twilight here is long, but even it must end.” The silvery mist thickened, swirling around Isolde until she was gone, absorbed back into the grove. Rory stood holding the luminous dagger, the weight of it foreign and terrifying in her hand. The wonder of the place had curdled into a deep, resonant unease. She had come for knowledge and had been given a weapon. The message was clear enough. Nyx placed a cool, semi-solid hand on her shoulder. “We should return. The longer we stay, the more the outside world slips away.” Rory nodded, sheathing the dagger in her belt. She took one last look at the impossible clearing, the star-filled pool, the glowing flowers. It was beautiful. It was ancient. And it had looked at her and seen a need for a knife. She turned and followed Nyx back toward the shimmering boundary, the velvet grass erasing her steps behind her as if she had never been there at all.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Nyx corrected gently [gently]"
dialogueSentences37
tagDensity0.486
leniency0.973
rawRatio0.056
effectiveRatio0.054
73.25% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1682
totalAiIsmAdverbs9
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count2
2
adverb"utterly"
count1
3
adverb"softly"
count2
4
adverb"slowly"
count1
5
adverb"gently"
count1
6
adverb"perfectly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"suddenly"
2"utterly"
3"softly"
4"slowly"
5"gently"
6"perfectly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
25.68% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1682
totalAiIsms25
found
0
word"familiar"
count1
1
word"chill"
count3
2
word"perfect"
count1
3
word"shimmered"
count1
4
word"dance"
count1
5
word"whisper"
count1
6
word"sentinels"
count1
7
word"warmth"
count1
8
word"profound"
count2
9
word"silence"
count1
10
word"velvet"
count3
11
word"gloom"
count1
12
word"resolving"
count1
13
word"dancing"
count1
14
word"tapestry"
count1
15
word"sense of"
count1
16
word"etched"
count1
17
word"raced"
count1
18
word"stark"
count1
19
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"chill"
2"perfect"
3"shimmered"
4"dance"
5"whisper"
6"sentinels"
7"warmth"
8"profound"
9"silence"
10"velvet"
11"gloom"
12"resolving"
13"dancing"
14"tapestry"
15"sense of"
16"etched"
17"raced"
18"stark"
19"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences103
matches(empty)
59.64% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences103
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences122
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen47
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1674
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions52
wordCount1275
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity1.57
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond2
Park2
London2
Rory20
Nyx14
Heartstone1
Hel1
Isolde9
Instinctively1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Nyx"
2"Isolde"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
globalScore0.716
windowScore0.333
59.64% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences83
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"felt like a drug, a lure"
1"hair that seemed to move in a breeze Rory couldn’t feel"
2"looked like liquid moonlight made solid"
20.79% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords1.792
wordCount1674
matches
0"neither night nor"
1"not the glowing canopy above, but a field of stars"
2"neither young nor"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences122
matches
0"saw that her"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs39
mean42.92
std25.65
cv0.598
sampleLengths
080
130
242
362
414
516
63
769
83
979
1087
116
1244
139
1412
1586
1661
1728
1871
1934
2093
2114
2250
2317
2455
2511
2659
2735
2863
2935
3044
3141
3217
3343
3453
3556
3660
3723
3869
91.64% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences103
matches
0"were gone"
1"was left"
2"was gone"
3"been given"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs210
matches
0"were receding"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount5
flaggedSentences10
totalSentences122
ratio0.082
matches
0"She touched the Heartstone pendant at her throat; it was cool, inert."
1"They weren’t merely trees; they were monoliths."
2"The space within the triangle shimmered, a heat-haze distortion that made the world beyond—the rolling parkland, a distant herd of deer—waver and dance."
3"Rory took a deep breath, the scent of grass and damp earth suddenly overpowered by a wave of wild, sweet perfume—honeysuckle and night-blooming jasmine, though it was neither night nor the season for either."
4"The light changed; it was the golden, honeyed light of a perpetual late summer evening, coming from everywhere and nowhere."
5"The sound of London—the distant hum of traffic, the faint shouts of children—was utterly absent."
6"She glanced at Nyx’s feet; they left no mark at all."
7"Between them, ribbons of silvery mist curled and drifted, sometimes resolving into faint, shimmering shapes—a running fox, a flock of birds, a dancing figure—before dissolving again."
8"She checked her watch; the second hand was motionless."
9"The water was mirror-still and black as obsidian, yet it reflected not the glowing canopy above, but a field of stars—a night sky that existed nowhere in this twilight world."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1291
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"cool, semi-solid hand"
adverbCount47
adverbRatio0.03640588690937258
lyAdverbCount14
lyAdverbRatio0.010844306738962044
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences122
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences122
mean13.72
std8.57
cv0.625
sampleLengths
021
115
218
313
413
521
69
718
83
912
105
114
1232
137
1423
1512
162
1716
183
1914
2013
2134
228
233
249
2513
2620
2715
2822
2914
3035
3116
3222
336
346
359
3618
3711
389
396
406
416
4215
4314
4426
4525
4615
478
4821
494
40.98% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats15
diversityRatio0.319672131147541
totalSentences122
uniqueOpeners39
67.34% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences99
matches
0"Only the faint, violet glow"
1"Instinctively, Rory’s hand went to"
ratio0.02
86.67% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount33
totalSentences99
matches
0"She followed the path of"
1"She touched the Heartstone pendant"
2"They rounded a thicket of"
3"They weren’t merely trees; they"
4"They flowed forward, a shadow"
5"She stepped between two of"
6"It wasn’t a step so"
7"She stood in a clearing,"
8"She looked down and saw"
9"She glanced at Nyx’s feet;"
10"she breathed, and the words"
11"They moved deeper into the"
12"She checked her watch; the"
13"She tapped it."
14"They came to a small,"
15"They were a pale, knowing"
16"She jerked back."
17"It was melodic, each word"
18"She was of average height,"
19"Her face was ageless, neither"
ratio0.333
25.66% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount86
totalSentences99
matches
0"The air in Richmond Park"
1"She followed the path of"
2"Nyx whispered, their voice like"
3"Rory shook her head, but"
4"A nervous habit."
5"She touched the Heartstone pendant"
6"This was something else."
7"They rounded a thicket of"
8"They weren’t merely trees; they"
9"The space within the triangle"
10"Nyx said, a note of"
11"Rory asked, her own voice"
12"Nyx extended a hand, which"
13"They flowed forward, a shadow"
14"Rory took a deep breath,"
15"She stepped between two of"
16"The world folded."
17"It wasn’t a step so"
18"The chill vanished, replaced by"
19"The light changed; it was"
ratio0.869
50.51% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences99
matches
0"To any casual observer, they"
ratio0.01
64.94% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences55
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"The space within the triangle shimmered, a heat-haze distortion that made the world beyond—the rolling parkland, a distant herd of deer—waver and dance."
1"Nyx extended a hand, which seemed to bleed into the shimmering air, becoming insubstantial."
2"The light had no single source, but the entire canopy above seemed to be a tapestry of living leaves that emitted a soft, bioluminescent glow."
3"The water was mirror-still and black as obsidian, yet it reflected not the glowing canopy above, but a field of stars—a night sky that existed nowhere in this t…"
4"The dagger within was leaf-shaped, forged from a metal that looked like liquid moonlight made solid."
5"She turned and followed Nyx back toward the shimmering boundary, the velvet grass erasing her steps behind her as if she had never been there at all."
41.67% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Nyx said, a note of reverence in their whisper"
1"Rory asked, her own voice sounding too loud in the hushed clearing"
2"she breathed, and the words felt inadequate"
14.86% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags14
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
1"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
2"she breathed (breathe)"
3"Nyx corrected gently (correct)"
4"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences37
tagDensity0.378
leniency0.757
rawRatio0.357
effectiveRatio0.27
71.6862%