Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8TP3SCEJM1R5S86CNB2NBF

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Duration:
1m 10s
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$0.078800
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Amazon Bedrock

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You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The pendant burned against Rory's sternum before they even stepped through. She'd expected the crossing to feel like something — a threshold, a door, a ripping sensation as the Veil parted around them. Instead, it was quiet. One moment they stood in the rain-slicked alley behind a Bermondsey warehouse, and the next the ground shifted beneath her boots and the air changed in her lungs, thicker and sweeter, like breathing through warm honey. She stumbled. Her hand shot out and caught nothing but empty space where the brick wall had been. "Steady." Nyx's voice came from everywhere and nowhere, a whisper threaded through air that suddenly smelled of cinnamon and overripe stone fruit. Their form had solidified for the crossing — six feet and change of humanoid shadow, dense enough to have edges — but now they rippled at the margins, violet eyes bright with something that might have been recognition. "Don't move until your eyes adjust." Rory blinked hard. The light was wrong. Not the grey drizzle of London in November but a warm, saturated amber, as though someone had dipped the entire sky in honey and held it up to a flame. There was no visible sun, no clouds — just that impossible golden glow pressing down from above, turning everything it touched the color of late afternoon in a place that had never known morning. "Oh," she said quietly. They stood on a ridge of dark soil overlooking a valley that stretched farther than it had any right to. Vineyards cascaded down terraced hillsides in perfect geometric rows, their leaves a green so vivid it looked painted, heavy with clusters of fruit she couldn't name — not grapes exactly, but something rounder, darker, with skins that caught the amber light and refracted it in bruised purples and deep golds. Between the vineyards, orchards spread in dense copses, their branches sagging under the weight of things that glistened like wet jewels. She saw crimson spheres the size of her fist, pale yellow crescents dripping clear sap, and — impossibly — what looked like pomegranates split open on the branch, seeds glittering like garnets. The smell hit her next. Layer upon layer — fresh bread, caramelized sugar, roasted meat, something floral she couldn't place, and underneath all of it, a cloying sweetness that sat at the back of her throat and wouldn't leave. Isolde moved past her without a sound. The Half-Fae's bare feet touched the dark soil and left no impression, as though the ground refused to acknowledge her weight. Her silver hair caught the amber light and threw it back in pale fire. She stood very still at the edge of the ridge, her lavender eyes distant and unblinking, reading something in the landscape that Rory couldn't see. "The roots drink deep here," Isolde said. "And what is drunk must first be given." "Meaning what?" Rory asked. Isolde tilted her head. A faint smile, the kind that promised nothing. "Meaning the fruit remembers who it was." A chill walked the length of Rory's spine despite the warmth. She pressed her hand flat against the pendant through her jacket. The crimson stone throbbed in a slow, steady rhythm against her palm, a second heartbeat, stronger now than it had ever been on the other side. In London, it had pulsed faintly near the rift points the Wardens monitored — a gentle nudge, easily ignored. Here, it felt almost alive, radiating a heat that seeped through the silver chain and into her skin. "The pendant's reacting," she said. Nyx's shadow-form drifted closer. They had no face, not truly, but the suggestion of features gathered in the darkness where a face should be — the angle of cheekbones, the faint impression of a mouth. Their violet eyes studied the pendant's glow through her jacket. "It was forged here. Dymas. It knows it's home." "You could have mentioned that before we jumped through." "Would it have changed your decision?" Rory didn't answer, because it wouldn't have, and they both knew it. They descended the ridge single file, Isolde leading with the unerring confidence of someone who could see five minutes into the future — or five centuries, depending on her mood. Rory followed, one hand resting on the Fae blade sheathed at her hip. The moonsilver dagger was cold even through the leather wrap, a sliver of winter pressed against her thigh, and she found the sensation grounding. The warmth of Dymas wanted to lull her. Everything about this place wanted to lull her. The golden light, the fragrant air, the soft soil yielding gently beneath each step — it felt designed, calibrated to soothe. And anything designed to soothe her in a realm of Hel was something she refused to trust. The vineyard closed around them as they reached the valley floor. The rows were wider than they'd appeared from above — broad enough for three people to walk abreast, the trellised vines arching overhead to form a canopy that dappled the amber light into shifting patterns on the ground. The fruit hung at eye level, and this close Rory could hear something she hadn't expected. Humming. Low and resonant, barely audible, thrumming from the vines themselves. Not music exactly — more like the memory of music, a melody that lived just below the threshold of recognition. She found herself leaning toward it before she caught herself and pulled back sharply. "Don't listen," Nyx whispered. Their form had thinned at the edges, tendrils of shadow curling outward like smoke. They were uncomfortable here, Rory realized. A being of darkness in a realm drenched in warm light. "The vineyards sing to the hungry. If you listen long enough, you'll forget you ever wanted anything else." Rory clenched her jaw and focused on the crunch of her boots against the soil, the cold bite of the blade at her hip. Concrete things. Real things. She counted her steps — twelve, thirteen, fourteen — and the humming faded to a dull background noise, still present but no longer pulling. They walked deeper. The vineyards gave way to an orchard of trees she had no name for — massive, gnarled things with bark the color of dark chocolate and leaves that chimed softly when the breeze caught them. Each tree was heavy with a different fruit, and no two trees bore the same kind. Some she almost recognized — apples, but with skins that swirled with iridescent color; pears, but translucent, their seeds visible through the flesh like dark stars in pale sky. Others were entirely alien: spiraling cones of layered flesh that peeled open like flowers, fat pods that oozed a golden syrup from their seams, clusters of tiny spheres that pulsed with a faint bioluminescence. The ground beneath the trees was littered with windfalls, and where the fallen fruit had split, the juice had stained the soil in vivid streaks of red and purple and gold. The stains formed patterns — or Rory's brain insisted on seeing patterns, spirals within spirals, like the growth rings of a tree drawn by a fevered hand. "Someone tends these." She stopped and pointed to a branch above them. Clean cuts. Pruning marks. Fresh ones. "Many someones," Isolde said. She reached up and touched a leaf with one finger. Frost crept from the point of contact, spreading across the leaf's surface in delicate crystals before melting away. Fae magic reacting to Hel-touched soil. "This is a garden, not a wilderness. Gardens require gardeners." "Helbound souls," Nyx said flatly. "Contracted from Earth. Chefs, farmers, vintners — gluttons in life, servants of the feast in death. Prince Belphegor collects them." Rory thought of the old stories her mother used to tell, the Welsh ones, about the dangers of eating fairy food. She suspected the principle held here too, amplified and inverted. In the Fae realms, eating bound you to the place. In Hel, she imagined, eating bound you to something worse. "Nobody eats anything," she said. "Not a bite. Not a sip. Not even if it smells like your mum's Sunday roast." Nyx's approximation of a mouth twitched. "I don't eat." "Then you're ahead of the rest of us." They pressed on. The orchard thinned, and through the gaps between trees Rory caught her first glimpse of what lay beyond: buildings. Not the jagged, sulfurous architecture she'd half-expected from a realm of Hel, but something altogether more unsettling in its beauty. Low-slung structures of pale stone and dark wood, strung with lanterns that burned with the same amber glow as the sky. Open-air kitchens with great clay ovens billowing fragrant smoke. Long tables set with platters of food so elaborate they looked sculpted — towers of glazed pastry, spirals of carved meat, arrangements of fruit and flower and spun sugar that defied gravity and good sense. She could hear voices now, laughter and conversation, the clink of crystal, the sizzle of something hitting a hot pan. A grand feast, laid out as if for visiting royalty, in the middle of a demon prince's domain. Rory's fingers found the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist and pressed hard. The old habit centered her, a small bright pain to cut through the fog of wonder. Because it was wonderful — that was the trap. Dymas didn't threaten. It invited. It seduced. It offered you everything you'd ever craved and asked only that you sit down and partake. "How far to the archive?" she asked, keeping her voice low. Nyx condensed, their form pulling tight and dense as they studied the settlement ahead. "Beyond the feast halls. On the far side of the valley, where Belphegor keeps his collections. Books, artifacts, contracts. Everything he hoards." "Through the middle of it, then." "Unless you'd prefer a three-day trek through the outer vineyards." Rory exhaled slowly. Through her jacket, the Heartstone Pendant pulsed its steady, insistent rhythm, faster now, urging her forward. Toward the feast. Toward the heart of Dymas. Toward whatever it was that had been calling her since the day an unknown benefactor slipped a crimson stone on a silver chain into her delivery bag at the Golden Empress. She drew the Fae blade from its sheath. Moonsilver caught the amber light and threw it back blue-white, a cold sharp defiance in this warm indulgent place. The steel hummed — not the vine's seductive melody but something cleaner, colder, a note that said not here, not yours, not yet. "Stay close," she told them both. "And nobody sits down at that table." Isolde smiled her half-smile, the one that could mean anything. "Three roads to a feast," she murmured, "and only the hungry walk home." "That's not reassuring." "It was not meant to be." Rory stepped out of the orchard and into the amber light, the blade cold in her hand, the pendant hot against her heart, and walked toward the sound of laughter.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
70.97% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"she said quietly [quietly]"
1"Nyx said flatly [flatly]"
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.419
leniency0.839
rawRatio0.154
effectiveRatio0.129
80.45% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1790
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"truly"
count1
3
adverb"gently"
count1
4
adverb"sharply"
count1
5
adverb"softly"
count1
6
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"very"
2"truly"
3"gently"
4"sharply"
5"softly"
6"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
60.89% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1790
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"whisper"
count1
1
word"perfect"
count1
2
word"weight"
count2
3
word"chill"
count1
4
word"warmth"
count2
5
word"throbbed"
count1
6
word"pulsed"
count3
7
word"almost alive"
count1
8
word"calibrated"
count1
9
word"crystal"
count1
highlights
0"whisper"
1"perfect"
2"weight"
3"chill"
4"warmth"
5"throbbed"
6"pulsed"
7"almost alive"
8"calibrated"
9"crystal"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
highlights
0"clenched her jaw"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences110
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences110
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences128
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen49
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1813
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions54
wordCount1597
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity1
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory16
Veil1
Bermondsey1
London2
November1
Half-Fae1
Isolde6
Wardens1
Nyx6
Fae5
Dymas3
Hel4
Clean1
Hel-touched1
Welsh1
Heartstone1
Pendant1
Golden1
Empress1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Veil"
2"Half-Fae"
3"Isolde"
4"Wardens"
5"Nyx"
6"Dymas"
7"Clean"
8"Pendant"
places
0"London"
1"November"
2"Fae"
3"Hel"
4"Hel-touched"
5"Golden"
globalScore0.999
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences79
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like pomegranates split open on th"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches5
per1kWords2.758
wordCount1813
matches
0"Not the grey drizzle of London in November but a warm, saturated amber, as though someone had dipped the en"
1"not grapes exactly, but something rounder, darker, with skins"
2"not truly, but the suggestion of features gathered in the darkness"
3"Not the jagged, sulfurous architecture she'd half-expected from a realm of Hel, but something altogether more unsettling in its beauty"
4"not the vine's seductive melody but something cleaner, colder, a note"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences128
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs47
mean38.57
std34.2
cv0.887
sampleLengths
011
162
218
366
471
54
6123
739
867
915
104
1119
1285
135
1454
159
166
1712
18121
1965
201
2144
2253
2352
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2558
2618
2748
2825
2951
3021
319
328
33127
3418
3561
3611
3736
386
3910
4058
4150
4213
4323
443
456
4630
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences110
matches
0"was littered"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs244
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount22
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences19
totalSentences128
ratio0.148
matches
0"She'd expected the crossing to feel like something — a threshold, a door, a ripping sensation as the Veil parted around them."
1"Their form had solidified for the crossing — six feet and change of humanoid shadow, dense enough to have edges — but now they rippled at the margins, violet eyes bright with something that might have been recognition."
2"There was no visible sun, no clouds — just that impossible golden glow pressing down from above, turning everything it touched the color of late afternoon in a place that had never known morning."
3"Vineyards cascaded down terraced hillsides in perfect geometric rows, their leaves a green so vivid it looked painted, heavy with clusters of fruit she couldn't name — not grapes exactly, but something rounder, darker, with skins that caught the amber light and refracted it in bruised purples and deep golds."
4"She saw crimson spheres the size of her fist, pale yellow crescents dripping clear sap, and — impossibly — what looked like pomegranates split open on the branch, seeds glittering like garnets."
5"Layer upon layer — fresh bread, caramelized sugar, roasted meat, something floral she couldn't place, and underneath all of it, a cloying sweetness that sat at the back of her throat and wouldn't leave."
6"In London, it had pulsed faintly near the rift points the Wardens monitored — a gentle nudge, easily ignored."
7"They had no face, not truly, but the suggestion of features gathered in the darkness where a face should be — the angle of cheekbones, the faint impression of a mouth."
8"They descended the ridge single file, Isolde leading with the unerring confidence of someone who could see five minutes into the future — or five centuries, depending on her mood."
9"The golden light, the fragrant air, the soft soil yielding gently beneath each step — it felt designed, calibrated to soothe."
10"The rows were wider than they'd appeared from above — broad enough for three people to walk abreast, the trellised vines arching overhead to form a canopy that dappled the amber light into shifting patterns on the ground."
11"Not music exactly — more like the memory of music, a melody that lived just below the threshold of recognition."
12"She counted her steps — twelve, thirteen, fourteen — and the humming faded to a dull background noise, still present but no longer pulling."
13"The vineyards gave way to an orchard of trees she had no name for — massive, gnarled things with bark the color of dark chocolate and leaves that chimed softly when the breeze caught them."
14"Some she almost recognized — apples, but with skins that swirled with iridescent color; pears, but translucent, their seeds visible through the flesh like dark stars in pale sky."
15"The stains formed patterns — or Rory's brain insisted on seeing patterns, spirals within spirals, like the growth rings of a tree drawn by a fevered hand."
16"Long tables set with platters of food so elaborate they looked sculpted — towers of glazed pastry, spirals of carved meat, arrangements of fruit and flower and spun sugar that defied gravity and good sense."
17"Because it was wonderful — that was the trap."
18"The steel hummed — not the vine's seductive melody but something cleaner, colder, a note that said not here, not yours, not yet."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1585
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount53
adverbRatio0.033438485804416405
lyAdverbCount16
lyAdverbRatio0.010094637223974764
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences128
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences128
mean14.16
std10.28
cv0.726
sampleLengths
011
122
24
336
42
516
622
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104
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1234
134
1420
1550
1621
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2214
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71.09% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.46875
totalSentences128
uniqueOpeners60
35.46% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences94
matches
0"Instead, it was quiet."
ratio0.011
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences94
matches
0"She'd expected the crossing to"
1"Her hand shot out and"
2"Their form had solidified for"
3"she said quietly"
4"They stood on a ridge"
5"She saw crimson spheres the"
6"Her silver hair caught the"
7"She stood very still at"
8"She pressed her hand flat"
9"They had no face, not"
10"Their violet eyes studied the"
11"They descended the ridge single"
12"She found herself leaning toward"
13"Their form had thinned at"
14"They were uncomfortable here, Rory"
15"She counted her steps —"
16"They walked deeper."
17"She stopped and pointed to"
18"She reached up and touched"
19"She suspected the principle held"
ratio0.277
66.38% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount74
totalSentences94
matches
0"The pendant burned against Rory's"
1"She'd expected the crossing to"
2"Her hand shot out and"
3"Nyx's voice came from everywhere"
4"Their form had solidified for"
5"Rory blinked hard."
6"The light was wrong."
7"she said quietly"
8"They stood on a ridge"
9"Vineyards cascaded down terraced hillsides"
10"She saw crimson spheres the"
11"The smell hit her next."
12"Layer upon layer — fresh"
13"Isolde moved past her without"
14"The Half-Fae's bare feet touched"
15"Her silver hair caught the"
16"She stood very still at"
17"Isolde tilted her head."
18"A faint smile, the kind"
19"A chill walked the length"
ratio0.787
53.19% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences94
matches
0"Because it was wonderful —"
ratio0.011
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences67
technicalSentenceCount16
matches
0"Their form had solidified for the crossing — six feet and change of humanoid shadow, dense enough to have edges — but now they rippled at the margins, violet ey…"
1"Not the grey drizzle of London in November but a warm, saturated amber, as though someone had dipped the entire sky in honey and held it up to a flame."
2"There was no visible sun, no clouds — just that impossible golden glow pressing down from above, turning everything it touched the color of late afternoon in a …"
3"They stood on a ridge of dark soil overlooking a valley that stretched farther than it had any right to."
4"Vineyards cascaded down terraced hillsides in perfect geometric rows, their leaves a green so vivid it looked painted, heavy with clusters of fruit she couldn't…"
5"Between the vineyards, orchards spread in dense copses, their branches sagging under the weight of things that glistened like wet jewels."
6"Layer upon layer — fresh bread, caramelized sugar, roasted meat, something floral she couldn't place, and underneath all of it, a cloying sweetness that sat at …"
7"The Half-Fae's bare feet touched the dark soil and left no impression, as though the ground refused to acknowledge her weight."
8"They descended the ridge single file, Isolde leading with the unerring confidence of someone who could see five minutes into the future — or five centuries, dep…"
9"The rows were wider than they'd appeared from above — broad enough for three people to walk abreast, the trellised vines arching overhead to form a canopy that …"
10"Not music exactly — more like the memory of music, a melody that lived just below the threshold of recognition."
11"Some she almost recognized — apples, but with skins that swirled with iridescent color; pears, but translucent, their seeds visible through the flesh like dark …"
12"Others were entirely alien: spiraling cones of layered flesh that peeled open like flowers, fat pods that oozed a golden syrup from their seams, clusters of tin…"
13"Low-slung structures of pale stone and dark wood, strung with lanterns that burned with the same amber glow as the sky."
14"Long tables set with platters of food so elaborate they looked sculpted — towers of glazed pastry, spirals of carved meat, arrangements of fruit and flower and …"
15"The steel hummed — not the vine's seductive melody but something cleaner, colder, a note that said not here, not yours, not yet."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
85.48% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
1"she murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.355
leniency0.71
rawRatio0.182
effectiveRatio0.129
80.2418%