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Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8TRHEZMSQW82D7E2GSEDYM
Run Details
Model:
Aion 2.0
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Literary fiction: old friends reunite
Duration:
1m 48s
Cost:
$0.010115
Provider:
AionLabs
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
88.00%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
61.61%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
100.00%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
100.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
100.00%
Name drop frequency
(details)
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
93.25%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
43.88%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
72.46%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
36.23%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Technical jargon density
(details)
91.67%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
86.2367%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
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The door to The Raven's
Nest swung open, and for a second, the green neon glow from the sign outside silhouetted a figure
I
hadn't seen in four years.
My hand froze halfway to
my mouth, the pint of bitter forgotten.
The familiar slope of his
shoulders, the way he ducked his head
slightly
under the low beam. Owen Ellis. Last seen outside a lecture hall in Cardiff, shouting something about missed opportunities into the rain. He looked older.
The boyish softness had hardened
into the clean, angular lines of a man who wore suits for a living.
He didn't see me at
first. He
scanned
the dim room, his eyes adjusting, passing over the regulars hunched at the
bar
, the couple whispering in a corner booth.
His gaze swept past my
table by the old fireplace and then snapped back. Recognition, sharp and sudden. His eyebrows lifted.
A slow, uncertain smile touched
his lips.
I
put the pint down.
The glass made a solid
*
thunk
* on the scarred wood. “Rory?” His voice hadn’t changed. Still that careful,
measured
cadence, the hint of a Valleys accent polished smooth by a law degree.
He weaved through the mismatched
tables towards me.
He wore a navy wool
coat, unbuttoned, over a crisp white shirt and grey trousers. No tie. He’d come from somewhere important. “Owen.”
My own voice sounded flat
. Neutral. A delivery confirmation.
He stopped a few feet
from the table, his smile faltering under
the weight of the silence
. “Christ. Aurora Carter. In the flesh.” “In the flesh.” “Can
I
…?”
He gestured to the empty
chair opposite.
I
gave a slight nod.
He slid into it, draping
his coat over the back. His movements were precise, economical.
He’d always been neat, but
this was different. This
was practised
. “What are you doing in London?” he asked. “
I
live here.” “Since when?” “A while.”
I
took a sip of my beer. It tasted like nothing. “You?” “Conference. Human rights legislation. Drier than it sounds.” He tried another smile. It didn’t reach his eyes. They
were darting
, taking in my worn leather jacket, the faded band t-shirt underneath, the small crescent scar on my left wrist visible as
I
gripped the glass. “You look… different.” “So do you.” “
I
meant…” He trailed off, shook his head. “Sorry. This is…
surreal
.
I
heard you’d left Cardiff. No one
really
knew where you’d gone. Eva was worried sick for months.” “Eva’s fine.” “She is. She’s in Bristol now. Married. To a dentist, of all people.” He said it like it was a punchline. An old, shared joke about our friend’s sensible aspirations.
I
didn’t laugh. “Good for her.” The
silence
stretched. From behind the
bar
, Silas watched us
with
the detached interest of a zookeeper. His polishing cloth moved in slow, deliberate circles over a whiskey glass. “
I
tried calling,” Owen said finally. “Your old number. Your mum’s house. Your dad… he said you’d moved on. Wouldn’t give a forwarding address.” “
I
moved on.” “Right.” He picked at the label on a bottle of mineral water Silas had wordlessly placed in front of him. “And are you? Moved on?” “From what?” He looked up, held my gaze. The
bar
’s low light caught the flecks of grey in his hazel eyes. New. “From everything.”
I
didn’t answer. The crackle of the fire in the grate filled the space between us. A log shifted, sending up a shower of orange sparks. “
I
saw Evan,”
Owen said, his voice dropping
. “Last year. At a rugby match in Principality. He was
with
a new girl. Looked about nineteen.” A cold knot tightened in my
stomach
.
I
kept my face still. “Good for him.” “He asked about you.” “
I
bet he did.” “He said… he said he hoped you were well. That he regretted how things ended.” A short, dry sound escaped me. It wasn’t a laugh. “Did he.” “It sounded genuine, Rory.” “You always did believe the best of people, Owen. It was your most charming quality.”
I
took another drink. “And your most irritating.” He flinched, just a little. A tiny contraction of the muscles around his eyes. “We were friends. All of us. And then you just… vanished. One day you were there, arguing constitutional law
with
Professor Griffiths, planning to take the Legal Practice Course. The next, poof. Gone. No explanation. Just a rumour you’d run off to London
with
some bloke.” “
I
didn’t run off *
with
* anyone.” “Then why?” The question hung there, raw and sudden. He leaned forward, elbows on the table. The polished barrister veneer cracked, revealing the frustrated, earnest boy
I
’d known. “Why did you leave like that? We could have helped. *
I
* could have helped.” “You couldn’t.” “How do you know? You never gave me the chance.” His voice was low, intense. “You shut everyone out. You abandoned your degree, your future. For what? To be…” His gesture took in the
bar
, my clothes, the whole of my present life. “Here?” “Here’s not so bad.” “Is that what you tell yourself?” He sat back, running a hand through his hair. It was still thick, dark, but styled now
with
product. “God, Rory. We were going to change the world. You were the smartest one of us. You were going to be a hell of a lawyer. Better than your dad.” “
I
didn’t want to be a lawyer.” “Since when?” “Since
I
realised it meant spending my life arguing over things that don’t matter for people who don’t care.” The words came out sharper than
I
intended. “And this matters?” He gestured again, more broadly. “Serving drinks? Delivering takeaways?”
I
went
very
still. “How do you know
I
deliver takeaways?” He had the decency to look embarrassed. “Eva mentioned it. She… she heard from someone who heard from someone. She said you were working for a Chinese restaurant. Riding a moped around London.” “It pays the rent.” “Above a *
bar
*.” He said it like it was a diagnosis. “Jesus, Rory. What happened to you?” The fire popped. Someone at the
bar
let out a raucous laugh. The sound died
quickly
, swallowed by the thick, expectant air. “Life happened, Owen.” My voice was quiet. “It happens to everyone. You got a degree, a job, a nice coat.
I
got a different set of experiences.” “Experiences.” He repeated the word, tasting its bitterness. “Is that what we’re calling it?” “What would you call it?” “
I
’d call it a waste.” The words fell between us like stones. He looked immediately like he wished he could take them back, but he didn’t. He held my gaze, challenging me to deny it.
I
felt the old anger, a cold,
familiar
tide rising in my chest. But it
was tempered
now, worn smooth by time and exhaustion. “You haven’t changed at all, have you? Still measuring everyone’s life against your own ruler. Still certain you know what’s best.” “
I
cared about you.” “You cared about the idea of me. The version that fit neatly into your future plans. The study partner. The debating rival. The girl who was supposed to follow the script.”
I
pushed my half-finished pint away. “That girl left Cardiff in the middle of the night
with
a split lip and a suitcase full of fear. She didn’t have time for goodbyes.” The colour drained from his face. The confident barrister vanished, leaving just Owen, pale and shocked. “He hit you?”
I
didn’t answer. The truth was in the
silence
. “Why didn’t you say something? Why didn’t you come to me? To any of us?” “And say what? ‘My boyfriend’s a monster. Can
I
sleep on your sofa?’ You had finals. Your future.
I
was… embarrassed. Ashamed. It’s
not a rational feeling, but it’s a real one
.”
I
looked at my hands. The small, pale scar on my wrist
seemed to
pulse
. “By the time the shame wore off, it was easier to just be gone. To let that version of Rory Carter disappear.” He stared at me, his expression a battlefield of horror and pity and a dawning, awful understanding. “And this is who you are now?” “This is who
I
am now.”
I
met his eyes. “
I
work.
I
pay my rent.
I
have a roof over my head that doesn’t come
with
conditions. It’s not a waste. It’s a peace you can’t put on a CV.” He was silent for a long time. He picked up his water, took a sip, put it down. “
I
’m sorry,” he said finally. The words were soft, genuine. “
I
’m sorry
I
didn’t see it.
I
’m sorry you felt you couldn’t…
I
’m just sorry, Rory.” “Don’t be. It’s done.” “Is it?” He looked around the
bar
again, his gaze lingering on Silas, who was now studying a map on the wall
with
feigned deep interest. “This place. These people. Is this
really
it?”
Before I could answer, the
door to the back room, the one hidden behind the bookshelf, opened
with
a soft click. A man in a long, dark coat emerged, his face shadowed by a hat. He nodded once at Silas, who gave an almost imperceptible nod in return. The man’s eyes swept the room, passed over Owen without interest, and landed on me for a fraction of a second too long.
Then he was gone, melting
back into the Soho night. Owen had seen it. His lawyer’s mind, trained to notice details, to read micro-expressions, had caught the entire exchange. His
eyes narrowed
as he looked from the now-closed bookshelf to Silas to me. “Who was that?” “No one.” “That wasn’t ‘no one.’” His voice was low, urgent. “That was a… a transaction. What is this place, Rory? What are you involved in?” “It’s a
bar
.
I
’m having a drink
with
an old friend.” “Don’t.” He reached across the table, his hand covering mine. His skin was warm, soft. A hand that pushed paper, not pulled pints. “Don’t lie to me. Not now. Not after everything. That man… he looked like trouble.”
I
pulled my hand away. “You should go, Owen. Your conference. Your hotel. Your world.” “Tell me you’re safe.” His eyes searched mine, pleading. “Tell me this… whatever this is… isn’t just another version of running.” The door opened again. This time, it wasn’t a stranger. It was a young woman, her face flushed, her eyes wide and frantic. She
scanned
the room, her gaze locking onto Silas. She hurried towards the
bar
, leaning in to
whisper
something in his ear. Silas’s expression didn’t change, but his polishing stopped. He looked directly at me, gave a single, sharp jerk of his head towards the back. The hidden room. Owen saw it. He saw the silent command, the immediate
tension
that straightened my spine. “Rory…”
I
stood up, my chair scraping loudly on the floorboards. “
I
have to go.” “Go where? What’s happening?” “It’s not your concern.”
I
threw a tenner on the table for the beer. He stood up too, blocking my path. “Like hell it’s not.
I
’m not leaving you here. Not
with
… whatever this is.” “Owen, move.” “No.” He planted his feet. The earnest, protective friend from Cardiff was back, but he was in over his head. Way over. “
I
’m not letting you walk into some back room
with
some… some spook.
I
’m coming
with
you.” “You’re not.” My voice was ice. “This isn’t a tutorial. This is my life. And you don’t get a say in it. Not anymore.”
I
stepped around him. He grabbed my arm. His grip was firm, insistent. “Aurora, please.” At the use of my full name,
I
turned. Looked at his hand on my jacket sleeve. Then up at his face. “Let go.” Behind the
bar
, Silas was no longer pretending not to watch. His hazel eyes
were fixed
on Owen’s hand, his expression
unreadable
. The woman who’d entered
was gone
, vanished into the back. Owen’s fingers tightened for a second.
Then, seeing something in my
eyes he didn’t recognise, he released me. He took a step back, his hands raised in a gesture of surrender. Or defeat. “
I
just wanted to help,” he whispered. “
I
know.”
I
didn’t look back as
I
walked towards the bookshelf.
I
pressed the hidden catch Silas had shown me months ago. The mechanism released
with
a quiet *
thunk
*.
I
pulled the shelf open just enough to slip through into the darkness beyond. The last thing
I
heard before the door sealed shut was Owen’s voice, choked and desperate. “Rory, wait!”
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native_tokens_completion
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Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
30
adverbTagCount
5
adverbTags
0
"Owen said finally [finally]"
1
"He sat back [back]"
2
"He gestured again [again]"
3
"he said finally [finally]"
4
"He looked around [around]"
dialogueSentences
103
tagDensity
0.291
leniency
0.583
rawRatio
0.167
effectiveRatio
0.097
88.00%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
2084
totalAiIsmAdverbs
5
found
0
adverb
"slightly"
count
1
1
adverb
"really"
count
2
2
adverb
"very"
count
1
3
adverb
"quickly"
count
1
highlights
0
"slightly"
1
"really"
2
"very"
3
"quickly"
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0
"Blackwood"
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
61.61%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
2084
totalAiIsms
16
found
0
word
"familiar"
count
2
1
word
"scanned"
count
2
2
word
"measured"
count
1
3
word
"weight"
count
1
4
word
"silence"
count
3
5
word
"surreal"
count
1
6
word
"stomach"
count
1
7
word
"pulse"
count
1
8
word
"whisper"
count
1
9
word
"tension"
count
1
10
word
"unreadable"
count
1
11
word
"the last thing"
count
1
highlights
0
"familiar"
1
"scanned"
2
"measured"
3
"weight"
4
"silence"
5
"surreal"
6
"stomach"
7
"pulse"
8
"whisper"
9
"tension"
10
"unreadable"
11
"the last thing"
100.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
2
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"eyes widened/narrowed"
count
1
1
label
"weight of words/silence"
count
1
highlights
0
"eyes narrowed"
1
"the weight of the silence"
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
146
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
1
narrationSentences
146
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
215
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
46
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
5
markdownWords
5
totalWords
2084
ratio
0.002
matches
0
"thunk"
1
"with"
2
"I"
3
"bar"
4
"thunk"
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
27
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
27
wordCount
1253
uniqueNames
9
maxNameDensity
0.8
worstName
"Owen"
maxWindowNameDensity
2
worstWindowName
"Silas"
discoveredNames
Raven
1
Nest
1
Ellis
1
Cardiff
2
Valleys
1
Neutral
1
Silas
9
Owen
10
Soho
1
persons
0
"Nest"
1
"Ellis"
2
"Silas"
3
"Owen"
places
0
"Raven"
1
"Cardiff"
2
"Soho"
globalScore
1
windowScore
1
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
91
glossingSentenceCount
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
1
per1kWords
0.48
wordCount
2084
matches
0
"not a rational feeling, but it’s a real one"
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
215
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
96
mean
21.71
std
17.9
cv
0.824
sampleLengths
0
29
1
69
2
57
3
15
4
1
5
51
6
10
7
23
8
3
9
9
10
31
11
8
12
3
13
2
14
14
15
48
16
3
17
30
18
2
19
33
20
3
21
29
22
24
23
3
24
25
25
2
26
22
27
26
28
25
29
15
30
4
31
4
32
15
33
12
34
4
35
23
36
60
37
6
38
42
39
2
40
44
41
4
42
55
43
7
44
2
45
27
46
12
47
11
48
33
49
4
93.25%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
5
totalSentences
146
matches
0
"was practised"
1
"was tempered"
2
"was gone"
3
"were fixed"
4
"was gone"
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
1
totalVerbs
220
matches
0
"were darting"
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
0
semicolonCount
0
flaggedSentences
0
totalSentences
215
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1255
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
40
adverbRatio
0.03187250996015936
lyAdverbCount
9
lyAdverbRatio
0.007171314741035857
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
215
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
215
mean
9.69
std
7.48
cv
0.772
sampleLengths
0
29
1
12
2
17
3
2
4
16
5
3
6
19
7
6
8
23
9
14
10
4
11
3
12
7
13
5
14
10
15
1
16
4
17
17
18
8
19
15
20
2
21
5
22
6
23
1
24
3
25
17
26
6
27
3
28
9
29
5
30
10
31
5
32
8
33
3
34
8
35
3
36
2
37
9
38
4
39
1
40
12
41
5
42
28
43
3
44
3
45
8
46
22
47
2
48
21
49
9
43.88%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
14
diversityRatio
0.3023255813953488
totalSentences
215
uniqueOpeners
65
72.46%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
3
totalSentences
138
matches
0
"Then he was gone, melting"
1
"Then up at his face."
2
"Then, seeing something in my"
ratio
0.022
0.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
83
totalSentences
138
matches
0
"My hand froze halfway to"
1
"He looked older."
2
"He didn't see me at"
3
"He scanned the dim room,"
4
"His gaze swept past my"
5
"His eyebrows lifted."
6
"I put the pint down."
7
"His voice hadn’t changed."
8
"He weaved through the mismatched"
9
"He wore a navy wool"
10
"He’d come from somewhere important."
11
"My own voice sounded flat"
12
"He stopped a few feet"
13
"He gestured to the empty"
14
"I gave a slight nod."
15
"He slid into it, draping"
16
"His movements were precise, economical."
17
"He’d always been neat, but"
18
"I took a sip of"
19
"It tasted like nothing."
ratio
0.601
0.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
127
totalSentences
138
matches
0
"The door to The Raven's"
1
"My hand froze halfway to"
2
"The familiar slope of his"
3
"He looked older."
4
"The boyish softness had hardened"
5
"He didn't see me at"
6
"He scanned the dim room,"
7
"His gaze swept past my"
8
"Recognition, sharp and sudden."
9
"His eyebrows lifted."
10
"A slow, uncertain smile touched"
11
"I put the pint down."
12
"The glass made a solid"
13
"His voice hadn’t changed."
14
"He weaved through the mismatched"
15
"He wore a navy wool"
16
"He’d come from somewhere important."
17
"My own voice sounded flat"
18
"A delivery confirmation."
19
"He stopped a few feet"
ratio
0.92
36.23%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
1
totalSentences
138
matches
0
"Before I could answer, the"
ratio
0.007
100.00%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
49
technicalSentenceCount
2
matches
0
"He scanned the dim room, his eyes adjusting, passing over the regulars hunched at the bar, the couple whispering in a corner booth."
1
"He saw the silent command, the immediate tension that straightened my spine."
91.67%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
30
uselessAdditionCount
2
matches
0
"Owen said, his voice dropping"
1
"His gesture took, my clothes, the whole of my present life"
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
8
fancyCount
2
fancyTags
0
"He repeated (repeat)"
1
"he whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences
103
tagDensity
0.078
leniency
0.155
rawRatio
0.25
effectiveRatio
0.039
86.2367%