Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8TRWKW64YAQ1QXKRSRDJGN

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The body shouldn't have been there. Quinn crouched over the dead man and catalogued what she saw: mid-forties, well-dressed, no wallet, no phone, no identification. His eyes were open. His face wore an expression she'd learned to distrust — not fear, not pain. Surprise. Pure, clean surprise. The abandoned Tube station smelled of damp concrete and something older, something mineral and faintly animal. Torches from the uniformed officers swept the vaulted ceiling in stuttering arcs, throwing long shadows across the original Victorian tilework. Someone had found the body at eleven, called it in anonymously from a payphone on Parkway. There weren't many payphones left in Camden. Quinn had noted that on the drive over. "Cause of death?" she asked without looking up. DC Yusuf Reeves crouched beside her. He was young, sharp-jawed, with the kind of careful optimism that hadn't yet been ground down by the job. "Liu's best guess is cardiac event. No marks, no ligature, no trauma." He paused. "Aside from..." She was already looking. She'd seen it the moment she arrived. Along the man's collar, disappearing beneath his shirt, the skin had darkened. Not bruising — wrong colour for bruising, too symmetrical for a struggle. The edges resolved into a pattern, intricate and deliberate, as if someone had pressed a burning brand against his neck. Or as if something had burned outward from within. "Fire?" she asked. "No accelerant. No ash. Liu's saying chemical reaction, possible contact with industrial solvent." Reeves produced his notebook. "Station's been derelict since '97. Camden Council had a survey scheduled. Our man wandered in, came into contact with something, dropped dead." "His shoes are clean." Reeves looked at the shoes. Italian leather. Buffed to a shine that caught the torchlight. "He didn't wander in. He came here deliberately." She stood, her knees protesting the cold concrete. Her gaze moved across the platform, along the tracks, up into the black throat of the tunnel beyond. "What else?" "CCTV on the street above shows him entering through a maintenance access at nine forty-seven. Alone, as far as we can tell. No other footage of the entrance." "As far as we can tell." She walked the platform's edge. Forty years of abandonment had a specific texture here, and yet the rubbish on the ground was fresh. Food packaging, a crushed paper cup, three cigarette ends clustered together. People had been here recently. Many of them. "Market?" she said, almost to herself. "Could be. Rough sleepers use these stations. The tunnel connects to—" "I know what it connects to." She'd pulled the Camden Underground network months ago, alongside noise complaints, council enforcement reports, two dozen accounts of unusual activity beneath the streets. Always Camden. Always around the full moon, she'd noticed, though she'd kept that observation from her report. She crouched again beside the man's left hand. His fingers were relaxed, not clenched, as Morris's had been. She pressed that thought flat before it could unpack itself. A faint discolouration marked the centre of his palm. She produced a torch and angled the beam. "Have you photographed the hands?" "Scene of crime did a full sweep." "Full sweep," she repeated. A small impression marked the skin, as if he'd gripped something tightly for a long time. The shape was round, roughly the size of a fifty-pence piece, with a faint textured crosshatch pattern along its edge. She'd seen that shape before. Evidence pulled from two separate incidents over the past year — an alleyway in Shoreditch, a riverside path in Limehouse. Both times no body. Both times the same circular mark left on discarded fabric or soft earth, the same faint chemical signature that the lab had failed to classify. "He was holding something," she said. "Nothing on him." "Someone took it." She straightened, scanning the platform again. The shadows at the far end of the tunnel shifted, and she catalogued it: airflow from somewhere deeper in the network. She filed that away. "Yusuf." She used his first name deliberately. "What do you see?" He looked at her for a moment, working out whether this was a test. "Male, middle-aged, unidentified. No obvious cause of death. No signs of confrontation. Possible cardiac event. Possible environmental exposure." He paused. "A dead end." "There's no such thing." She moved toward the far wall. The Victorian cream-and-burgundy tilework there had been breached — a section removed, exposing bare brick behind. Recent work, the mortar edges still pale and unweathered. She pressed two fingers to the wall beside the gap. "This was access." "Rodents. Maintenance." "No." She touched the lower edge. Smooth. Worn smooth by hands, by repeated passage. The brickwork carried a faint sooty residue that wasn't quite soot. It sat thicker than grime, iridescent when she moved the torchlight, like oil on dark water. She pulled a small evidence bag from her coat and scraped a sample. Reeves came to stand beside her, his notebook held against his chest like a shield. "What's on the other side?" "That's what we're going to find out." She turned back toward the body. The marks on the man's neck caught the torchlight again and something snagged at the back of her mind — a sealed file, an internal review into Morris's death, a paragraph about sigil-based combustion she wasn't supposed to have read. Someone three paygrades above her had buried that review. She'd found it anyway. She crouched again, close enough to confirm what she suspected. Not a pattern burned into him. A pattern that had originated in him, as if whatever had been inside his chest had simply ceased, and the cessation had written itself onto his skin. The lines curved inward toward his sternum with the precision of something mechanical. Or something very old. Then the torchlight caught the cord. Half-hidden beneath the man's lapel, strung on a length of thin cord: a small disc, yellowed, flat, worked from something dense and smooth. Two holes bored through its centre. She would have missed it entirely if the beam hadn't found it at exactly that angle. A bone token. She knew the shape. She'd seen a photograph of the same object in Morris's personal effects — logged in the evidence inventory as unknown organic material, flagged, and quietly dropped from the case file six months after his death. "Bag this." She pointed at the man's chest, her voice level in the way that cost something. "Carefully. Don't cut the cord." Reeves leaned in and went still. "Christ," he said. "What is that?" "That's why this isn't a dead end." She stood and faced the dark gap in the wall. Beyond it lay maintenance access, Victorian brick, forty years of official abandonment. She raised her torch and aimed it through the breach. The beam died a few metres in, swallowed by something the darkness didn't usually do. And then she heard it. Beneath the shuffle of Reeves bagging the token, beneath the radio crackle from the platform behind them, beneath the drip of water somewhere far above — a sound that had lived in the back of her skull for three years, the sound she woke from at two in the morning and told herself was pipes, was traffic, was the ordinary percussion of an old city breathing. Footsteps. Not going away. Coming closer.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.486
leniency0.971
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
79.27% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1206
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"deliberately"
count2
1
adverb"tightly"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count1
3
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"deliberately"
1"tightly"
2"very"
3"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
79.27% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1206
totalAiIsms5
found
0
word"resolved"
count1
1
word"intricate"
count1
2
word"scanning"
count1
3
word"mechanical"
count1
4
word"footsteps"
count1
highlights
0"resolved"
1"intricate"
2"scanning"
3"mechanical"
4"footsteps"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences95
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences95
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences113
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen65
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1213
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions23
wordCount1004
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity0.6
worstName"Reeves"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Reeves"
discoveredNames
Tube1
Victorian3
Parkway1
Camden3
Yusuf1
Reeves6
Forty1
Underground1
Morris3
Shoreditch1
Limehouse1
Smooth1
persons
0"Yusuf"
1"Reeves"
2"Morris"
places
0"Camden"
1"Shoreditch"
2"Limehouse"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences63
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"quite soot"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1213
matches(empty)
48.67% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount4
totalSentences113
matches
0"kept that observation"
1"pressed that thought"
2"seen that shape"
3"buried that review"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs55
mean22.05
std19.32
cv0.876
sampleLengths
06
141
267
38
425
516
611
753
83
939
104
1115
1236
1328
1448
156
1611
1746
1828
1917
205
217
2240
2354
246
253
2634
2711
2814
2923
3045
313
322
3341
3413
3515
365
377
3859
3910
4050
416
4245
433
4439
4522
466
476
487
4947
94.18% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences95
matches
0"been ground"
1"were relaxed"
2"been breached "
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs163
matches
0"was already looking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences113
ratio0.062
matches
0"His face wore an expression she'd learned to distrust — not fear, not pain."
1"Not bruising — wrong colour for bruising, too symmetrical for a struggle."
2"Evidence pulled from two separate incidents over the past year — an alleyway in Shoreditch, a riverside path in Limehouse."
3"The Victorian cream-and-burgundy tilework there had been breached — a section removed, exposing bare brick behind."
4"The marks on the man's neck caught the torchlight again and something snagged at the back of her mind — a sealed file, an internal review into Morris's death, a paragraph about sigil-based combustion she wasn't supposed to have read."
5"She'd seen a photograph of the same object in Morris's personal effects — logged in the evidence inventory as unknown organic material, flagged, and quietly dropped from the case file six months after his death."
6"Beneath the shuffle of Reeves bagging the token, beneath the radio crackle from the platform behind them, beneath the drip of water somewhere far above — a sound that had lived in the back of her skull for three years, the sound she woke from at two in the morning and told herself was pipes, was traffic, was the ordinary percussion of an old city breathing."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1005
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"same faint chemical signature"
adverbCount32
adverbRatio0.031840796019900496
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.010945273631840797
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences113
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences113
mean10.73
std9.14
cv0.851
sampleLengths
06
119
24
314
41
53
616
720
816
97
108
118
126
1319
1414
152
164
177
1812
1912
2020
219
223
2317
2422
254
265
272
288
2916
3018
312
3228
3311
3418
3511
365
373
386
3911
4029
412
4215
438
4410
4510
469
478
485
497
86.14% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.5486725663716814
totalSentences113
uniqueOpeners62
80.32% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences83
matches
0"Always around the full moon,"
1"Then the torchlight caught the"
ratio0.024
56.14% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount34
totalSentences83
matches
0"His eyes were open."
1"His face wore an expression"
2"she asked without looking up"
3"He was young, sharp-jawed, with"
4"She was already looking."
5"She'd seen it the moment"
6"She stood, her knees protesting"
7"Her gaze moved across the"
8"She walked the platform's edge"
9"she said, almost to herself"
10"She'd pulled the Camden Underground"
11"She crouched again beside the"
12"His fingers were relaxed, not"
13"She pressed that thought flat"
14"She produced a torch and"
15"She'd seen that shape before."
16"She straightened, scanning the platform"
17"She filed that away."
18"She used his first name"
19"He looked at her for"
ratio0.41
74.46% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount64
totalSentences83
matches
0"The body shouldn't have been"
1"Quinn crouched over the dead"
2"His eyes were open."
3"His face wore an expression"
4"The abandoned Tube station smelled"
5"Torches from the uniformed officers"
6"Someone had found the body"
7"Quinn had noted that on"
8"she asked without looking up"
9"DC Yusuf Reeves crouched beside"
10"He was young, sharp-jawed, with"
11"She was already looking."
12"She'd seen it the moment"
13"The edges resolved into a"
14"Reeves produced his notebook"
15"Reeves looked at the shoes."
16"She stood, her knees protesting"
17"Her gaze moved across the"
18"She walked the platform's edge"
19"Food packaging, a crushed paper"
ratio0.771
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences83
matches(empty)
ratio0
69.60% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences39
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"He was young, sharp-jawed, with the kind of careful optimism that hadn't yet been ground down by the job."
1"The edges resolved into a pattern, intricate and deliberate, as if someone had pressed a burning brand against his neck."
2"A small impression marked the skin, as if he'd gripped something tightly for a long time."
3"Beneath the shuffle of Reeves bagging the token, beneath the radio crackle from the platform behind them, beneath the drip of water somewhere far above — a soun…"
66.18% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"She stood, her knees protesting the cold concrete"
1"she said, almost to herself"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.171
leniency0.343
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.057
84.2743%