Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8TS0VC3Q049W20Y7G3585T

Run Details

Duration:
1m 17s
Cost:
$0.076170
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The last jogger had passed her twenty minutes ago. After that, Richmond Park belonged to the deer and the dark, and Aurora Carter belonged to neither. She kept to the footpath until the lamplight thinned, then cut across the grass toward the tree line. Wet ground sucked at her trainers. The torch on her phone carved a pale disc against the black, illuminating nothing much — frost-stiffened grass, a crimp of fallen bark, the reflective pinpricks of animal eyes that blinked once and vanished. She walked until the path was a memory behind her, the distant hum of the A307 reduced to something she felt more than heard, a vibration in her molars like a held note. The pendant had not stopped pulsing since Hammersmith. She pressed her thumb against it through her jacket. The warmth was steady, metronomic, a second heartbeat nested against her sternum. Whatever frequency it operated on had ratcheted up the closer she got to the park. On the District line it had been a faint suggestion. Walking through Richmond Gate it had become insistent. Now, in the guts of the park where the old oaks knotted together and the canopy sealed out the city-lit sky, the Heartstone throbbed hard enough that she could feel it in her teeth. She checked her phone. 11:47. The signal had died three minutes ago — not faded, died, the bars replaced by a small hollow circle that meant nothing and no one could find her out here. That was fine. She had not told anyone she was coming. Eva would have asked questions. Silas would have locked the flat door from the outside. Yu-Fei would have called her a fool and then followed her anyway, which was worse, because whatever waited at the grove did not need witnesses. The note had said to come alone. She had found it that morning, slipped beneath the restaurant's service entrance, folded into a tight square no larger than a stamp. No signature. No postmark. Just coordinates written in an ink that shimmered when she tilted the paper, and a single line beneath them in handwriting she did not recognize: *The grove answers at midnight. Bring what was given.* Rory was not the kind of person who followed anonymous instructions into a public park after dark. She had survived Evan. She had survived moving to London with four hundred pounds and a gym bag full of clothes. She knew what it meant to walk into situations where the exits were not clearly marked. But the pendant had been driving her half-mad for weeks — warmth flaring at odd hours, that crimson glow leaking through her shirts in the middle of the night, and once, just once, a sound from inside the stone itself, a low chime like a finger tracing the rim of a glass. She needed answers more than she needed safety, and she hated herself a little for that arithmetic. The oaks thickened. Roots buckled the ground. She stumbled, caught herself on a trunk, and her palm came away sticky with something that was not sap. She wiped it on her jeans without looking. Ahead, the trees opened. She stepped into the clearing and the world changed register. Sound dropped. Not gradually — a lid coming down. The ambient noise of the park, the wind through canopy, the far-off bark of a fox, all of it compressed into silence so total that her own breathing became grotesque, wet and labored in her ears like she was listening to it through a stethoscope. The standing stones rose from the ground at the clearing's edge, six of them, ancient oaks petrified into columns that were neither wood nor rock but something between. In the dark they looked like figures with their backs turned. Wildflowers carpeted the clearing floor despite the November cold. She could not see their color in the torchlight but she could smell them — heady, sweet, funereal. The kind of perfume that made her think of hospital rooms and wake houses and her grandmother's bedroom the week before she passed. The pendant flared hot. Rory pulled the chain out from her collar and held it up. The Heartstone cast its own light now, a deep crimson glow that turned her fingers to something strange — too red, the creases black, the nails like dark little shells. In that light the standing stones threw shadows that were too long. The geometry was wrong. The shadows pointed toward the light source rather than away from it. She stood very still and watched the shadows, because the shadows were moving. Not quickly. Not in any way she could have filmed or described to someone after. They moved the way hour hands moved — imperceptible in the moment, obvious when you looked away and then looked back. One of the stone shadows had been pointing north. Now it pointed northeast. The gap between it and the next shadow had narrowed. She turned a slow circle. Six stones. Six shadows. All of them oriented inward, toward her, like the spokes of a wheel with her body at the hub. "Hello?" Her voice came out flat. No echo. The clearing ate the word and gave nothing back. She checked her phone again. 11:51. Then 11:51. Then 11:51. She waited, counting heartbeats — hers and the pendant's, out of sync in a way that made her feel seasick — and checked again. 11:51. Right. The Fae Grove. Time moved differently here. She had read Eva's notes, the folklore Eva collected the way other people collected vinyl, and this was one of the warnings: *Do not trust clocks. Do not trust the length of the dark. An hour inside can be minutes or days outside.* Rory's stomach went tight. She could have been standing here for thirty seconds. She could have been standing here since Tuesday. Something rustled at the far edge of the clearing, beyond the sixth stone. She swung the phone toward it. The torch beam hit the tree line and fractured, scattering through branches in a way that made shapes — a shoulder, a jaw, the ridge of a brow — that dissolved as soon as she tried to focus. No animal. No person. Just the light doing something it shouldn't, giving form to empty spaces. The pendant's pulse quickened. She looked down at it. The glow had deepened. Not brighter but *denser*, the crimson compressing toward something almost black at its core, like blood pooling under a bruise. It was warm enough now that it stung against her palm, a small bright coal suspended on its silver chain. The rustling came again. Closer. Not from the same direction. Rory turned. The sixth stone — the one she had been facing when she entered the clearing — had a shadow that now touched her left shoe. She had not moved. The stone had not moved. But the shadow lay across her trainer like a hand across a threshold, and where it touched the leather it was cold. Not night-cold. Not winter-cold. The kind of cold that came from deep closed places, from cellars and crypts and the still water at the bottom of wells. She stepped back. The shadow did not recede. It stayed where it was, severed from the stone that cast it, a dark strip on the ground that no longer needed a source. Her breath misted. It had not been misting before. She scanned the clearing. The wildflowers nearest the stones had changed. She could see it now in the pendant's glow — the petals were curling inward, not wilting but closing, the way sea anemones contracted when touched. One by one, ring by ring, starting at the perimeter and moving inward. Toward her feet. A slow tide of closure that turned the carpet of blooms into a carpet of fists. Something exhaled behind her. Not wind. Breath. She felt it on the back of her neck, warm and damp and carrying a smell like turned earth and copper. She did not spin around. Every cell in her body screamed for her to spin around, but Rory was a woman who had learned early that the worst things happened when you gave them your full attention, when you opened yourself to them like a door. She closed her hand around the pendant. The heat was fierce now, branding the crescent scar on her left wrist where the chain wound, and the glow between her fingers bled light through skin and bone so that she could see the architecture of her own hand — phalanges, metacarpals, the delicate cage of her grip — rendered in red stained glass. The breath came again. Closer. Against her hair. "I brought what was given," she said. Her voice did not shake. "You sent the note. Here I am." Silence. But a different silence now — not absence but withholding. The silence of something choosing not to speak. The standing stones' shadows had converged. They formed a circle around her feet, a dark ring on the ground no wider than a manhole cover, and the cold that rose from them was absolute. She stood in it as though standing in black water up to the ankles, her legs numb from the shins down, the warmth of the Heartstone the only thing left in the world that pushed back. One of the standing stones creaked. Not wood. Not rock. The sound a throat makes before it speaks — a dry, preparatory click — magnified to the scale of something old and tall and rooted in the ground for centuries. She looked at the nearest column. In the crimson light she could see what she had not seen before. Grain. Texture. Not the grain of wood or the texture of stone. Skin. Bark-dark, riven with deep lines, but unmistakably skin, stretched over something that swelled and contracted in a rhythm she recognized because the pendant echoed it, because her own chest echoed it. The stones were breathing. All six of them. A respiration so slow she had mistaken it for stillness. Expand. Contract. The spaces between them narrowing with each cycle like ribs cinching around a lung. The clearing was smaller than when she had entered it. The tree line was closer. The sky — she looked up and the sky was gone, replaced by a canopy of branches that had not been there, woven so tight not a single star broke through. The pendant screamed. Not sound. Sensation. A spike of heat so acute it felt like a needle driven through her palm into the center of her wrist, and the crimson light flared outward in a ring that swept across the closing flowers and the breathing stones and the wrongful shadows, and for one instant — one stuttering heartbeat — she saw. A figure. Between the third and fourth stones. Taller than either. Thin in a way that was not human, the limbs too segmented, the angles of the joints reversed. It had no face she could discern but it had attention, and that attention was fixed on her with the total, unblinking focus of a cat watching a bird through glass. Then the light collapsed back into the stone and the dark returned and the figure was gone and the silence was the old silence, the dead silence, the silence of a clearing that did not exist in any place she could name. Rory stood with the pendant burning against her scar and her breath coming in short white plumes and the flowers closed tight around her feet like a field of small clenched mouths. She did not run. She wanted to. The animal machinery of her body — the adrenal system, the fast-twitch muscle fibers, every legacy of ten thousand years of ancestors who survived because they ran — demanded it. But the grove had sealed itself around her, and there was nowhere to run to that was not deeper in, and deeper in was where the breathing came from. She opened her hand. The pendant sat in her palm, the crimson glow steady again, a thumbnail-sized coal that cast her lifeline and heart line in sharp relief. It pulsed. Paused. Pulsed again. Behind her, between her shoulder blades and the nape of her neck, the warm breath returned. Patient. Closer than before. And this time, it whispered.
created_at"2026-02-24T22:02:08.121Z" 2/24/2026, 10:02:08 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags1
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences3
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.10% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2039
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
38.70% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2039
totalAiIsms25
found
0
word"warmth"
count3
1
word"throbbed"
count1
2
word"could feel"
count1
3
word"shimmered"
count1
4
word"tracing"
count1
5
word"silence"
count8
6
word"echo"
count1
7
word"stomach"
count1
8
word"fractured"
count1
9
word"pulse"
count1
10
word"quickened"
count1
11
word"scanned"
count1
12
word"echoed"
count2
13
word"pulsed"
count2
highlights
0"warmth"
1"throbbed"
2"could feel"
3"shimmered"
4"tracing"
5"silence"
6"echo"
7"stomach"
8"fractured"
9"pulse"
10"quickened"
11"scanned"
12"echoed"
13"pulsed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences178
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences178
filterMatches
0"think"
1"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences180
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen53
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans3
markdownWords31
totalWords2063
ratio0.015
matches
0"The grove answers at midnight. Bring what was given."
1"Do not trust clocks. Do not trust the length of the dark. An hour inside can be minutes or days outside."
2"denser"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions2
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"And this time, it whispered."
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions32
wordCount2046
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity0.29
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Richmond"
discoveredNames
Richmond2
Park1
Aurora1
Carter1
Hammersmith1
District1
Gate1
Heartstone3
Rory6
Evan1
London1
November1
Fae1
Grove1
Eva3
Tuesday1
One3
Closer3
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Carter"
2"District"
3"Heartstone"
4"Rory"
5"Evan"
6"Eva"
7"One"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Fae"
4"Grove"
globalScore1
windowScore1
44.74% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences95
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"something between"
1"looked like figures with their backs turn"
2"as though standing in black water up to the ankles, her legs numb from the shins down, the warmth of the Heartstone the only thing left in the world that pushed back"
3"felt like a needle driven through her p"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches5
per1kWords2.424
wordCount2063
matches
0"neither wood nor"
1"Not brighter but *denser*, the crimson compressing toward something almost bl"
2"not wilting but closing, the way sea anemones contracted"
3"not absence but withholding"
4"no face she could discern but"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences180
matches
0"total that her"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs56
mean36.84
std29.12
cv0.79
sampleLengths
026
191
28
388
435
551
67
751
89
954
1069
1134
124
1310
1493
1550
164
1770
1813
1959
2028
211
2216
2335
241
2571
2613
2760
284
2949
3010
3185
3232
339
3469
354
3670
3762
388
3919
4019
4170
426
4397
444
4576
463
4758
4860
4942
95.41% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences178
matches
0"was given"
1"was, severed"
2"was gone"
3"was fixed"
4"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs321
matches
0"was coming"
1"was listening"
2"were curling"
3"were breathing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount24
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences17
totalSentences180
ratio0.094
matches
0"The torch on her phone carved a pale disc against the black, illuminating nothing much — frost-stiffened grass, a crimp of fallen bark, the reflective pinpricks of animal eyes that blinked once and vanished."
1"The signal had died three minutes ago — not faded, died, the bars replaced by a small hollow circle that meant nothing and no one could find her out here."
2"But the pendant had been driving her half-mad for weeks — warmth flaring at odd hours, that crimson glow leaking through her shirts in the middle of the night, and once, just once, a sound from inside the stone itself, a low chime like a finger tracing the rim of a glass."
3"Not gradually — a lid coming down."
4"She could not see their color in the torchlight but she could smell them — heady, sweet, funereal."
5"The Heartstone cast its own light now, a deep crimson glow that turned her fingers to something strange — too red, the creases black, the nails like dark little shells."
6"They moved the way hour hands moved — imperceptible in the moment, obvious when you looked away and then looked back."
7"She waited, counting heartbeats — hers and the pendant's, out of sync in a way that made her feel seasick — and checked again."
8"The torch beam hit the tree line and fractured, scattering through branches in a way that made shapes — a shoulder, a jaw, the ridge of a brow — that dissolved as soon as she tried to focus."
9"The sixth stone — the one she had been facing when she entered the clearing — had a shadow that now touched her left shoe."
10"She could see it now in the pendant's glow — the petals were curling inward, not wilting but closing, the way sea anemones contracted when touched."
11"The heat was fierce now, branding the crescent scar on her left wrist where the chain wound, and the glow between her fingers bled light through skin and bone so that she could see the architecture of her own hand — phalanges, metacarpals, the delicate cage of her grip — rendered in red stained glass."
12"But a different silence now — not absence but withholding."
13"The sound a throat makes before it speaks — a dry, preparatory click — magnified to the scale of something old and tall and rooted in the ground for centuries."
14"The sky — she looked up and the sky was gone, replaced by a canopy of branches that had not been there, woven so tight not a single star broke through."
15"A spike of heat so acute it felt like a needle driven through her palm into the center of her wrist, and the crimson light flared outward in a ring that swept across the closing flowers and the breathing stones and the wrongful shadows, and for one instant — one stuttering heartbeat — she saw."
16"The animal machinery of her body — the adrenal system, the fast-twitch muscle fibers, every legacy of ten thousand years of ancestors who survived because they ran — demanded it."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1470
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount42
adverbRatio0.02857142857142857
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.003401360544217687
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences180
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences180
mean11.46
std11.62
cv1.014
sampleLengths
09
117
218
36
434
533
68
79
812
915
1010
118
1234
134
141
1530
163
178
185
1910
2025
217
2222
232
242
2525
265
274
2817
294
3017
3116
3252
3317
343
354
3619
378
384
3910
402
417
4245
4328
4411
459
4618
4723
484
4912
43.50% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats23
diversityRatio0.3389830508474576
totalSentences177
uniqueOpeners60
71.94% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences139
matches
0"Just coordinates written in an"
1"Just the light doing something"
2"Then the light collapsed back"
ratio0.022
93.38% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount44
totalSentences139
matches
0"She kept to the footpath"
1"She walked until the path"
2"She pressed her thumb against"
3"She checked her phone."
4"She had not told anyone"
5"She had found it that"
6"She had survived Evan."
7"She had survived moving to"
8"She knew what it meant"
9"She needed answers more than"
10"She stumbled, caught herself on"
11"She wiped it on her"
12"She stepped into the clearing"
13"She could not see their"
14"She stood very still and"
15"They moved the way hour"
16"She turned a slow circle."
17"Her voice came out flat."
18"She checked her phone again."
19"She waited, counting heartbeats —"
ratio0.317
96.69% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount101
totalSentences139
matches
0"The last jogger had passed"
1"She kept to the footpath"
2"The torch on her phone"
3"She walked until the path"
4"The pendant had not stopped"
5"She pressed her thumb against"
6"The warmth was steady, metronomic,"
7"Whatever frequency it operated on"
8"She checked her phone."
9"The signal had died three"
10"That was fine."
11"She had not told anyone"
12"Eva would have asked questions."
13"Silas would have locked the"
14"Yu-Fei would have called her"
15"The note had said to"
16"She had found it that"
17"*The grove answers at midnight."
18"Rory was not the kind"
19"She had survived Evan."
ratio0.727
71.94% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences139
matches
0"Now, in the guts of"
1"Now it pointed northeast."
ratio0.014
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences71
technicalSentenceCount15
matches
0"The torch on her phone carved a pale disc against the black, illuminating nothing much — frost-stiffened grass, a crimp of fallen bark, the reflective pinpricks…"
1"Just coordinates written in an ink that shimmered when she tilted the paper, and a single line beneath them in handwriting she did not recognize:"
2"Rory was not the kind of person who followed anonymous instructions into a public park after dark."
3"The standing stones rose from the ground at the clearing's edge, six of them, ancient oaks petrified into columns that were neither wood nor rock but something …"
4"The kind of perfume that made her think of hospital rooms and wake houses and her grandmother's bedroom the week before she passed."
5"The Heartstone cast its own light now, a deep crimson glow that turned her fingers to something strange — too red, the creases black, the nails like dark little…"
6"The torch beam hit the tree line and fractured, scattering through branches in a way that made shapes — a shoulder, a jaw, the ridge of a brow — that dissolved …"
7"A slow tide of closure that turned the carpet of blooms into a carpet of fists."
8"Every cell in her body screamed for her to spin around, but Rory was a woman who had learned early that the worst things happened when you gave them your full a…"
9"She stood in it as though standing in black water up to the ankles, her legs numb from the shins down, the warmth of the Heartstone the only thing left in the w…"
10"Bark-dark, riven with deep lines, but unmistakably skin, stretched over something that swelled and contracted in a rhythm she recognized because the pendant ech…"
11"A spike of heat so acute it felt like a needle driven through her palm into the center of her wrist, and the crimson light flared outward in a ring that swept a…"
12"Rory stood with the pendant burning against her scar and her breath coming in short white plumes and the flowers closed tight around her feet like a field of sm…"
13"The animal machinery of her body — the adrenal system, the fast-twitch muscle fibers, every legacy of ten thousand years of ancestors who survived because they …"
14"The pendant sat in her palm, the crimson glow steady again, a thumbnail-sized coal that cast her lifeline and heart line in sharp relief."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
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100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
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81.7132%