Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8TVMRGAY860WYBJYF8P09P

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Duration:
1m 19s
Cost:
$0.078475
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The rain came down in sheets, turning the Soho pavement into a river of reflected neon. Harlow Quinn's boots hammered through a puddle as she rounded the corner onto Frith Street, her eyes locked on the figure thirty meters ahead—dark jacket, short curly hair plastered to his skull, moving fast but not quite running. Not yet. He was still pretending he didn't know she was there. Tomás Herrera. Twenty-nine. Former paramedic. Current person of extreme bloody interest. She'd been watching the Raven's Nest for six nights straight, parked in a borrowed Vauxhall with a thermos of burnt coffee and a camera with a telephoto lens. Six nights of photographing faces that came and went through the door beneath that sickly green neon sign. Faces that matched open case files. Faces that matched closed ones too—cases that had been shut down from above with the kind of quiet authority that made her teeth ache. She'd run the plates, cross-referenced the names, built a web on the corkboard in her flat that her cat kept trying to knock down. And tonight, Herrera had walked out the front door of that bar at twenty past eleven carrying a leather satchel he hadn't had when he'd gone in, and every instinct she'd honed in eighteen years of service told her that bag contained something she needed to see. She'd called out to him. Showed her warrant card. And instead of stopping, instead of smiling and asking how he could help like an innocent man would, he'd looked at her with those warm brown eyes gone wide with fear, and he'd bolted. Now she was chasing him through the rain, her lungs starting to burn, the worn leather watch on her left wrist slapping against the bone of her wrist with every stride. She was forty-one, and she felt every year of it in her knees. He was twelve years younger and he moved like someone who'd spent his life on his feet—which, she supposed, a paramedic would have. Herrera cut left onto Old Compton Street. A group of smokers huddled under an awning scattered as he blew past them. Quinn followed, badge out, shouting "Police!" more for the benefit of witnesses than for him. He wasn't going to stop. She could see it in the rigid set of his shoulders, the way his left arm clutched the satchel against his body. Whatever was in that bag scared him more than she did. That might have offended her, once. Now it just made her more curious. He crossed Charing Cross Road against the light, earning a blare of horns from a black cab that fishtailed on the wet tarmac. Quinn followed, feeling the heat of the cab's headlights on her hip as it missed her by inches. The driver's curses dissolved in the rain behind her. Herrera was pulling away, gaining ground, and she felt the chase slipping through her fingers like wet rope. She keyed her radio. "This is DI Quinn, I'm in foot pursuit of a suspect heading east on—" She checked the street sign as she ran. "Heading north on Cambridge Circus toward Shaftesbury Avenue. Male, five-ten, olive skin, dark jacket, carrying a brown leather satchel. Requesting backup." The radio crackled. Static. Then a voice, distant with interference: "Copy, DI Quinn. Units en route. ETA twelve minutes." Twelve minutes. She'd lose him in two. Herrera ducked into the mouth of an alley between a Thai restaurant and a shuttered bookmaker's. Quinn followed without hesitation, pulling up short at the entrance to scan for threats the way she'd been trained. Wheelie bins. A fire escape. No ambush. Just Herrera's silhouette at the far end, slipping through a gap in a chain-link fence. She went after him. On the other side of the fence, the alley opened onto a back street she didn't recognize, which bothered her. She knew Soho. She'd worked these streets for the better part of a decade. But Herrera seemed to know them better, because he moved without hesitation, cutting through passages and service corridors that shouldn't have connected the way they did, leading her further from the main roads, further from the light. The rain intensified. Her shirt was soaked through beneath her jacket, the cold seeping into her skin like a slow poison. She could taste the city in the water—exhaust, grease, something metallic she couldn't name. The buildings on either side grew older, the brickwork Victorian, the windows dark and shuttered. She was losing her bearings, and she hated it. Harlow Quinn did not get lost. She maintained situational awareness with the same military precision she brought to everything else—her case files, her morning runs, the sharp angles of her jawline that colleagues joked could cut glass. Herrera turned a final corner and stopped. Quinn pressed herself flat against a wall, peering around the edge. He stood at the top of a staircase that descended below street level—an old entrance, by the look of it, tiled in white ceramic that had yellowed with age. A Tube station. But not an active one. The signage had been stripped away and the entrance was barred by a wrought-iron gate that should have been locked. It wasn't. Herrera pulled it open, hinges groaning, and disappeared down the stairs. Quinn stood in the rain and did not move. She'd been here before. Not this specific place—she'd never seen this entrance in her life—but this moment. The threshold. The point where the known bled into something else. Three years ago, she'd followed her partner, DS Morris, through a door very much like this one. A warehouse in Deptford that shouldn't have been empty but was, that shouldn't have been cold but was freezing, that shouldn't have had symbols drawn on the walls in something that looked like blood but smelled like ozone. Morris had gone in first. Morris had always gone in first. And Morris had never come out. The official report said structural collapse. The official report was a lie, and everyone who'd signed off on it knew it, and everyone who'd signed off on it had been promoted since. Her hand went to the scar tissue on her memory, the wound that had never properly healed. She could still hear Morris's voice on the radio, calm and professional until it wasn't—until it cracked into something raw and bewildered and then just stopped, mid-syllable, like someone had cut the tape. She'd torn through that warehouse for forty minutes before backup arrived and pulled her out. They never found a body. Harlow Quinn stood at the top of a staircase in the rain and understood, with the cold clarity that had made her the youngest DI in her division's history, that this was the same kind of door. The kind you weren't supposed to open. The kind that opened onto the part of the world that had swallowed her partner whole. She should wait for backup. She should radio in coordinates, set up a perimeter, do this properly. That was the smart play. The professional play. The play that kept you alive long enough to collect your pension and bore your grandchildren with war stories. She checked her radio. Dead. Not static—dead. The screen had gone dark, and when she thumbed the power button, nothing happened. The rain shouldn't have killed it. These units were rated for weather. She tapped it against her palm, tried again. Nothing. Right. She looked down the staircase. The lights were on—a faint amber glow, like gaslight, wavering against the tile walls. She could hear something from below, barely audible under the hiss of rain. Voices. Not just a few. A crowd. The murmur of commerce, of transaction, of a market doing business. She thought about Morris. She thought about the way cases kept shutting down around her, files sealed, witnesses relocated, evidence vanishing from lockup. She thought about sixteen months of dead ends and brick walls and polite suggestions from her superintendent that she focus on cases that could actually be closed. She thought about the corkboard in her flat, the web of photographs and red string that her cat kept destroying, and how every thread led to places like this. Places that shouldn't exist. Places that the people above her didn't want found. She thought about the fear in Tomás Herrera's eyes when he'd seen her badge. Not guilt. Fear. The look of a man who believed something terrible would happen if he was caught, and not to him. Quinn pulled her jacket tighter, checked the extendable baton on her belt and the small canister of CS spray in her pocket. She didn't carry a firearm—few Met detectives did. What she carried was eighteen years of knowing when someone was lying and a stubbornness that three therapists had tried and failed to call pathological. She descended the stairs. The temperature dropped with each step. The amber light grew brighter and the sound resolved into something unmistakable—the dense, layered noise of a marketplace in full swing. Haggling. Laughter. The clink of glass and the rustle of paper. Music from somewhere, tinny and strange, a melody she almost recognized but couldn't place. At the bottom of the stairs, a short corridor opened into what had clearly once been a Tube platform. The tracks were still there, rusted and dead, but the platform itself had been transformed. Stalls lined both sides, draped in fabric and lit by lanterns that cast a warm, unsteady glow. The vaulted ceiling arched overhead, covered in a mosaic of old advertising tiles—Bovril, Pears Soap, destinations that no longer existed—now partially obscured by hanging banners and strings of small lights. The air smelled of incense, copper, and something vegetal and sharp, like crushed herbs. The Veil Market. She'd heard the name whispered in interrogation rooms, always by people who immediately wished they hadn't said it. An underground market that moved locations every full moon, she'd been told. Enchanted goods, banned substances, information. She'd never been able to confirm it existed. Looking at it now, she understood why. You had to see it to believe it, and nobody was meant to see it. There had to be a hundred people down here, maybe more, moving between stalls with the focused energy of regulars. Some looked entirely ordinary—market traders, students, city workers in rumpled suits. Others did not look ordinary at all. A woman with pupils like a cat's examined a collection of glass phials. A man whose shadow moved independently of his body haggled over a stack of yellowed parchment. Two children who couldn't have been older than twelve carried a birdcage between them containing something that glowed. Quinn pressed her back against the corridor wall and forced herself to breathe. Her pulse hammered in her ears. None of this was possible. All of it was real. She'd spent three years chasing the edges of this world and now she was standing inside it, alone, without backup, without a working radio, without any legal authority that would mean a damn thing to anyone down here. She spotted Herrera. He'd stopped at a stall near the far end of the platform, speaking urgently to a vendor—an older woman in a headscarf who was examining something Herrera had pulled from the satchel. Even from this distance, Quinn could see his hands shaking. She had a choice. Step out onto that platform, badge or no badge, and confront him in a place where she had no jurisdiction and no understanding of the rules. Or retreat up the stairs, mark the location, and try to build a case the proper way, knowing that by the next full moon this market would have moved and she'd have nothing but a story no one would believe. She thought about Morris. About the mid-syllable silence. About three years of nothing. Harlow Quinn straightened her jacket, set her jaw, and walked onto the platform. The crowd didn't part for her. She shouldered through, keeping her eyes on Herrera, moving with the deliberate stride of a woman who belonged wherever she chose to stand. A few heads turned. A few conversations paused. Someone hissed something in a language she didn't recognize. She ignored all of it. She was ten meters from Herrera when he looked up and saw her. The color drained from his olive skin. His hand went to the Saint Christopher medallion at his throat—an instinctive, desperate gesture, the kind of thing a man did when he was praying. "Herrera," she said, and her voice was steady, and the marketplace noise seemed to dim around her, and she did not look away. "We need to talk about what's in that bag."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags3
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences6
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
97.65% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2127
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
88.25% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2127
totalAiIsms5
found
0
word"wavering"
count1
1
word"resolved"
count1
2
word"mosaic"
count1
3
word"pulse"
count1
4
word"silence"
count1
highlights
0"wavering"
1"resolved"
2"mosaic"
3"pulse"
4"silence"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences168
matches
0"e with fear"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences168
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"try to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences170
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen47
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2109
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions66
wordCount2054
uniqueNames29
maxNameDensity0.68
worstName"Herrera"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Morris"
discoveredNames
Soho2
Quinn12
Frith1
Street2
Herrera14
Raven1
Nest1
Vauxhall1
Old1
Compton1
Charing1
Cross1
Road1
Twelve1
Thai1
Victorian1
Tube2
Morris7
Deptford1
Tomás2
Met1
Bovril1
Pears1
Soap1
Veil1
Market1
Saint1
Christopher1
Harlow4
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Herrera"
2"Raven"
3"Twelve"
4"Morris"
5"Tomás"
6"Market"
7"Saint"
8"Christopher"
9"Harlow"
places
0"Soho"
1"Frith"
2"Street"
3"Vauxhall"
4"Old"
5"Compton"
6"Charing"
7"Cross"
8"Road"
9"Deptford"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences112
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"not quite running"
1"looked like blood but smelled like ozone"
2"smelled like ozone"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2109
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences170
matches
0"flat that her"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs42
mean50.21
std31.74
cv0.632
sampleLengths
066
111
2147
343
467
574
613
768
847
919
107
1157
124
1371
1496
1575
1613
179
18100
1932
2070
2160
2244
2342
241
2550
2692
2736
2855
294
3052
3195
3268
3385
3467
3545
3670
3713
3813
3951
4045
4132
88.55% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount8
totalSentences168
matches
0"been trained"
1"been stripped"
2"was barred"
3"been locked"
4"been promoted"
5"were rated"
6"was caught"
7"been transformed"
8"been told"
9"was meant"
26.59% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount9
totalVerbs346
matches
0"was still pretending"
1"was chasing"
2"was pulling"
3"was losing"
4"was freezing"
5"was lying"
6"was standing"
7"was examining"
8"was praying"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount18
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences16
totalSentences170
ratio0.094
matches
0"Harlow Quinn's boots hammered through a puddle as she rounded the corner onto Frith Street, her eyes locked on the figure thirty meters ahead—dark jacket, short curly hair plastered to his skull, moving fast but not quite running."
1"Faces that matched closed ones too—cases that had been shut down from above with the kind of quiet authority that made her teeth ache."
2"He was twelve years younger and he moved like someone who'd spent his life on his feet—which, she supposed, a paramedic would have."
3"She could taste the city in the water—exhaust, grease, something metallic she couldn't name."
4"She maintained situational awareness with the same military precision she brought to everything else—her case files, her morning runs, the sharp angles of her jawline that colleagues joked could cut glass."
5"He stood at the top of a staircase that descended below street level—an old entrance, by the look of it, tiled in white ceramic that had yellowed with age."
6"Not this specific place—she'd never seen this entrance in her life—but this moment."
7"She could still hear Morris's voice on the radio, calm and professional until it wasn't—until it cracked into something raw and bewildered and then just stopped, mid-syllable, like someone had cut the tape."
8"Not static—dead."
9"The lights were on—a faint amber glow, like gaslight, wavering against the tile walls."
10"She didn't carry a firearm—few Met detectives did."
11"The amber light grew brighter and the sound resolved into something unmistakable—the dense, layered noise of a marketplace in full swing."
12"The vaulted ceiling arched overhead, covered in a mosaic of old advertising tiles—Bovril, Pears Soap, destinations that no longer existed—now partially obscured by hanging banners and strings of small lights."
13"Some looked entirely ordinary—market traders, students, city workers in rumpled suits."
14"He'd stopped at a stall near the far end of the platform, speaking urgently to a vendor—an older woman in a headscarf who was examining something Herrera had pulled from the satchel."
15"His hand went to the Saint Christopher medallion at his throat—an instinctive, desperate gesture, the kind of thing a man did when he was praying."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2079
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount50
adverbRatio0.02405002405002405
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.005772005772005772
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences170
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences170
mean12.41
std9.91
cv0.799
sampleLengths
016
138
22
310
42
51
62
76
828
918
106
1124
1224
1347
145
154
1634
1731
1813
1923
207
2114
2215
235
2422
2511
266
277
2823
2918
309
3118
324
3322
3421
353
361
3715
382
395
4016
4119
422
433
442
4515
464
4720
483
4911
49.80% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats22
diversityRatio0.3764705882352941
totalSentences170
uniqueOpeners64
45.05% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences148
matches
0"Then a voice, distant with"
1"Just Herrera's silhouette at the"
ratio0.014
79.46% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount52
totalSentences148
matches
0"He was still pretending he"
1"She'd been watching the Raven's"
2"She'd run the plates, cross-referenced"
3"She'd called out to him."
4"She was forty-one, and she"
5"He was twelve years younger"
6"He wasn't going to stop."
7"She could see it in"
8"He crossed Charing Cross Road"
9"She keyed her radio."
10"She checked the street sign"
11"She'd lose him in two."
12"She went after him."
13"She knew Soho."
14"She'd worked these streets for"
15"Her shirt was soaked through"
16"She could taste the city"
17"She was losing her bearings,"
18"She maintained situational awareness with"
19"He stood at the top"
ratio0.351
57.97% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount119
totalSentences148
matches
0"The rain came down in"
1"Harlow Quinn's boots hammered through"
2"He was still pretending he"
3"She'd been watching the Raven's"
4"Faces that matched open case"
5"Faces that matched closed ones"
6"She'd run the plates, cross-referenced"
7"She'd called out to him."
8"She was forty-one, and she"
9"He was twelve years younger"
10"Herrera cut left onto Old"
11"A group of smokers huddled"
12"Quinn followed, badge out, shouting"
13"He wasn't going to stop."
14"She could see it in"
15"Whatever was in that bag"
16"That might have offended her,"
17"He crossed Charing Cross Road"
18"Quinn followed, feeling the heat"
19"The driver's curses dissolved in"
ratio0.804
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences148
matches
0"Now she was chasing him"
1"Now it just made her"
2"Even from this distance, Quinn"
ratio0.02
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences79
technicalSentenceCount16
matches
0"Six nights of photographing faces that came and went through the door beneath that sickly green neon sign."
1"Faces that matched closed ones too—cases that had been shut down from above with the kind of quiet authority that made her teeth ache."
2"Now she was chasing him through the rain, her lungs starting to burn, the worn leather watch on her left wrist slapping against the bone of her wrist with every…"
3"He crossed Charing Cross Road against the light, earning a blare of horns from a black cab that fishtailed on the wet tarmac."
4"But Herrera seemed to know them better, because he moved without hesitation, cutting through passages and service corridors that shouldn't have connected the wa…"
5"She maintained situational awareness with the same military precision she brought to everything else—her case files, her morning runs, the sharp angles of her j…"
6"He stood at the top of a staircase that descended below street level—an old entrance, by the look of it, tiled in white ceramic that had yellowed with age."
7"A warehouse in Deptford that shouldn't have been empty but was, that shouldn't have been cold but was freezing, that shouldn't have had symbols drawn on the wal…"
8"Harlow Quinn stood at the top of a staircase in the rain and understood, with the cold clarity that had made her the youngest DI in her division's history, that…"
9"The play that kept you alive long enough to collect your pension and bore your grandchildren with war stories."
10"She thought about sixteen months of dead ends and brick walls and polite suggestions from her superintendent that she focus on cases that could actually be clos…"
11"An underground market that moved locations every full moon, she'd been told."
12"Two children who couldn't have been older than twelve carried a birdcage between them containing something that glowed."
13"She'd spent three years chasing the edges of this world and now she was standing inside it, alone, without backup, without a working radio, without any legal au…"
14"He'd stopped at a stall near the far end of the platform, speaking urgently to a vendor—an older woman in a headscarf who was examining something Herrera had pu…"
15"She shouldered through, keeping her eyes on Herrera, moving with the deliberate stride of a woman who belonged wherever she chose to stand."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags3
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she said, and her voice was steady, and the marketplace noise seemed to dim around her, and she did not look away"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences6
tagDensity0.167
leniency0.333
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
80.5552%