Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8V0ZYF8XQ67MJDX3RK6FE5

Run Details

Duration:
1m 15s
Cost:
$0.078540
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The Heartstone Pendant burned against Aurora's chest the moment they stepped through. Not a searing burn — more like pressing a mug of tea to bare skin. She gripped the silver chain through her jacket and felt the crimson gem throb in a slow, steady cadence. A heartbeat that wasn't hers. The light hit her first. Everything bathed in warm amber, as if someone had poured honey over the sun and let it drip across the entire sky. No clouds. No visible source. Just that omnipresent golden warmth pressing down from above, thick enough that Aurora could almost taste it on the back of her tongue — sweet, faintly cloying, like overripe fruit left too long in the bowl. "Breathe through your mouth for the first minute." Isolde stepped past her, silver hair catching the amber light and turning the color of old coins. "The air here metabolizes differently. Your lungs need time to adjust." Aurora sucked in a breath. The air sat heavy. Dense. Like breathing through warm velvet. She coughed once and blinked hard, her eyes watering as they strained to make sense of what sprawled before her. Vineyards. Endless vineyards rolling down a hillside that shouldn't have existed behind the tear they'd just walked through. The vines were wrong, though — their leaves too dark, nearly black at the edges, and the grapes hanging in fat clusters gave off a faint phosphorescence, each one glowing a different shade. Violet. Amber. Deep arterial red. They pulsed gently, like the pendant against her sternum, and Aurora had the unsettling thought that the entire landscape was breathing. "Don't touch anything you haven't been told to touch." Isolde's bare feet left no impression in the rust-colored soil beneath them. She moved without sound, which Aurora had grown accustomed to in the Grove but which felt more pronounced here, more deliberate — as if the ground itself refused to acknowledge the half-Fae's presence. A ripple of darkness pooled at Aurora's left, and Nyx materialized beside her. Their form solidified slowly, shadow gathering into the shape of a tall figure, violet eyes blinking open like twin flames in a draft. "The Veil is thin here. Paper-thin." Their voice wound around Aurora's ear — that familiar whisper-on-wind quality stretched taut with something she'd never heard from them before. Caution, maybe. Or recognition. "I can feel every realm pressing against this one. Like walls in a house that's too small." "You've been here before." Nyx didn't answer. Their silhouette flickered at the edges, shadow tendrils curling and uncurling like fingers testing the air. Aurora took that as a yes. They descended the hill along a path of packed earth the color of cinnamon. The soil crunched beneath Aurora's boots with a sound like grinding sugar. On either side, the vineyard rows stretched away in perfect geometric lines that converged at some impossible vanishing point — too far, too precise, as if drawn by a mathematician who'd never seen a real field. Between the rows, wildflowers Aurora couldn't name pushed up through the dirt: blooms with petals like spun glass, stems that twisted in corkscrews, pistils that wept a slow golden nectar onto the ground. She caught herself reaching for one and yanked her hand back. "Smart girl." Isolde hadn't turned around. "What would've happened?" "The flowers remember the shape of whatever touches them. They would have grown to look like your hand. And then they would have wanted more of you." Aurora shoved both hands in her jacket pockets. The path curved and the vineyards gave way to an orchard. If it could be called that. Trees rose in knotted spirals, their bark a deep burgundy, their canopies spread wide with branches that didn't bear leaves so much as membranes — translucent sheets stretched between twigs, catching the amber light and splitting it into prismatic patterns on the ground below. Fruit hung everywhere. Shapes Aurora recognized — apples, pears, something like a fig — alongside others she had no name for. Bulbous things with skin that shifted color when she looked at them from different angles. Elongated pods trailing filaments that swayed without wind. A cluster of small spheres, perfectly white, that chimed softly against each other with a sound like distant bells. The chiming filled the silence between their footsteps and Aurora realized she hadn't heard a single bird. No insects. No rustling of creatures through underbrush. Just that gentle, crystalline ringing from the white fruit, and beneath it, something lower — a vibration more felt than heard, a bass note humming up through the soles of her boots. "What is that sound? The low one." Nyx's form drifted closer to one of the trees without touching it. "The realm digesting." "Digesting what?" "Everything. Dymas consumes. That's its nature. The soil, the air, the light — all of it breaks down whatever enters and makes it part of itself." The violet glow of their eyes swept toward her. "Including visitors, given enough time." A chill ran the length of Aurora's spine despite the pressing warmth. "How much time?" "More than we need," Isolde said. "The danger is not the realm's hunger. It is the desire it cultivates. Dymas does not take. It convinces you to give." They walked deeper. The orchard thinned and the path widened into a broad avenue paved with stones that were warm to the touch — Aurora could feel the heat even through her boots. She knelt and pressed her palm flat against one. Smooth. Almost soft, like the stone had a layer of give to it, like touching skin stretched over a drum. "Rory." She stood quickly, wiping her hand on her jeans. The avenue led to a structure. Not a building — not exactly. It rose from the landscape as if the earth had exhaled it: a sprawling complex of terraces and open pavilions, all constructed from the same burgundy wood as the orchard trees, reinforced with a dark metal that gleamed like wet obsidian. Massive archways framed entrances tall enough for three people stacked head to toe. Braziers lined the approach, each one burning with a different colored flame — cerulean, emerald, a deep saffron that threw dancing shapes across the carved walls. And the smells hit her. Aurora's knees almost buckled. Roasting meat, rich and caramelized. Bread fresh from an oven, the crust cracking. Something sweet — chocolate, maybe, or burnt caramel — winding through a savory undercurrent of herbs she could identify and dozens she couldn't. Her mouth flooded. Her stomach clenched with a hunger so sudden and fierce that she pressed her fist against her abdomen. "The feasting halls." Isolde stopped walking. Her pale lavender eyes had gone flat, unreadable. "Prince Belphegor's pride." "That smell — " "Is not for you." The half-Fae's voice carried an edge Aurora had only heard once before, in the Grove, when a fox had wandered too close to the standing stones. "Tell yourself that until you believe it. The smell is not for you." Aurora swallowed against the saliva pooling under her tongue and repeated the words in her head like a mantra. The pendant pulsed harder, the warmth climbing from her chest up the sides of her neck. She pressed it flat with her palm and felt the crimson gem vibrate against her skin. Nyx had gone still. Their shadow-form stood rigid, edges sharp and defined in a way that meant they were concentrating, drawing themselves together. A tendril of darkness extended from their shoulder, reaching toward the nearest archway, and then snapped back. "Wardings. Old ones. Layered." Their whisper had thinned to almost nothing. "Not meant to keep us out. Meant to keep something in." "The souls," Aurora said. Nyx inclined their head. Through the nearest arch, Aurora could see movement. Figures — dozens of them — moving between long tables laden with food that gleamed and steamed under the amber light. They wore aprons, carried platters, bent over fires. Some of them looked up as the three of them approached, and Aurora caught their faces in the flickering glow. Human faces. Drawn. Hollowed at the cheeks. Eyes that burned with a fevered intensity she recognized from late nights in the restaurant kitchen when Yu-Fei pushed herself past exhaustion into something mechanical, something that didn't stop because stopping meant thinking. One of them — a woman with dark skin and cropped hair — paused mid-stride, a copper pot balanced on her forearm. She stared at Aurora through the archway. Her lips moved, forming a single word that Aurora couldn't hear through the warding. Then someone behind the woman barked an order and she turned away, her shoulders hunching, her feet carrying her back toward a bank of flames that burned too blue to be natural. Aurora's hand dropped to her hip, where the Fae-forged blade sat sheathed against her belt. The moonsilver was ice-cold through the leather. It always ran cold, but here, in this realm of oppressive warmth and golden light, the chill felt deliberate — a declaration of opposition, the blade rejecting every molecule of the air around it. "How many of them are there?" "In this hall? Perhaps sixty." Isolde's gaze moved across the archway with a precision that suggested she was counting something beyond the visible. "In Dymas entire? Thousands. Tens of thousands. Every master chef, every vintner, every confectioner who ever signed away what they shouldn't have, they end up here. Cooking feasts they're never permitted to eat." The amber sky pulsed once — a slow, deep throb like a massive eye blinking — and the ground hummed its low, hungry note, and Aurora stood at the threshold of Prince Belphegor's domain with the Heartstone burning at her chest and the Fae blade freezing at her hip and the distant sound of white fruit chiming behind her like bells tolling for something already lost. "We keep moving," she said. Isolde studied her with that ageless, unreadable expression. "The path forward winds through the hall. Not around it." A pause. "You will be offered something. You must refuse." "What if I can't?" "Then the realm keeps you. And I will not be able to retrieve what it takes." Aurora pulled the Heartstone Pendant free of her jacket. The crimson gem sat in her palm, thumbnail-sized, pulsing with that stolen heartbeat rhythm. Its inner glow had intensified since crossing the Veil — deeper now, the red of wine held up to candlelight. She closed her fist around it and felt the warmth spread through her fingers, up her wrist, past the small crescent-shaped scar that had been part of her skin for as long as she could remember. "Then I won't eat." She walked through the archway. The smells crashed over her like a wave. The wardings parted around the blade at her hip with a sound like tearing silk, and the helbound souls in the feasting hall turned their hollow, burning eyes toward her, and the amber light of Dymas pressed down on her shoulders with the full weight of a realm that had been waiting — patiently, hungrily — for exactly this.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.343
leniency0.686
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
83.54% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1823
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"gently"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
2
adverb"perfectly"
count1
3
adverb"softly"
count1
4
adverb"quickly"
count1
5
adverb"hungrily"
count1
highlights
0"gently"
1"slowly"
2"perfectly"
3"softly"
4"quickly"
5"hungrily"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1823
totalAiIsms37
found
0
word"searing"
count1
1
word"throb"
count2
2
word"warmth"
count5
3
word"velvet"
count1
4
word"sense of"
count1
5
word"pulsed"
count3
6
word"familiar"
count1
7
word"whisper"
count2
8
word"flickered"
count1
9
word"perfect"
count1
10
word"silence"
count1
11
word"footsteps"
count1
12
word"crystalline"
count1
13
word"chill"
count2
14
word"desire"
count1
15
word"could feel"
count1
16
word"structure"
count1
17
word"complex"
count1
18
word"constructed"
count1
19
word"dancing"
count1
20
word"stomach"
count1
21
word"unreadable"
count2
22
word"intensity"
count1
23
word"mechanical"
count1
24
word"oppressive"
count1
25
word"silk"
count1
26
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"searing"
1"throb"
2"warmth"
3"velvet"
4"sense of"
5"pulsed"
6"familiar"
7"whisper"
8"flickered"
9"perfect"
10"silence"
11"footsteps"
12"crystalline"
13"chill"
14"desire"
15"could feel"
16"structure"
17"complex"
18"constructed"
19"dancing"
20"stomach"
21"unreadable"
22"intensity"
23"mechanical"
24"oppressive"
25"silk"
26"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences112
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences112
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences134
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen64
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1851
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.56% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions56
wordCount1558
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity1.67
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Heartstone3
Pendant2
Aurora26
Grove2
Nyx5
Caution1
Yu-Fei1
Fae-forged1
Prince1
Belphegor1
Fae4
Isolde7
Veil1
Dymas1
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Pendant"
2"Aurora"
3"Nyx"
4"Yu-Fei"
5"Prince"
6"Belphegor"
7"Fae"
8"Isolde"
9"Dymas"
places
0"Grove"
globalScore0.666
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences77
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"something like a fig — alongside others she"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1851
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences134
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs58
mean31.91
std27.7
cv0.868
sampleLengths
012
139
268
336
435
577
654
736
848
94
1019
116
1295
1311
146
153
1627
178
18124
1957
207
2115
222
2340
2412
253
2628
2762
281
299
3092
315
3261
3317
344
3543
3651
3740
3822
394
404
4157
4240
4343
4432
4556
466
4756
4866
495
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences112
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs239
matches
0"was breathing"
1"were concentrating"
2"was counting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount25
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences19
totalSentences134
ratio0.142
matches
0"Not a searing burn — more like pressing a mug of tea to bare skin."
1"Just that omnipresent golden warmth pressing down from above, thick enough that Aurora could almost taste it on the back of her tongue — sweet, faintly cloying, like overripe fruit left too long in the bowl."
2"The vines were wrong, though — their leaves too dark, nearly black at the edges, and the grapes hanging in fat clusters gave off a faint phosphorescence, each one glowing a different shade."
3"She moved without sound, which Aurora had grown accustomed to in the Grove but which felt more pronounced here, more deliberate — as if the ground itself refused to acknowledge the half-Fae's presence."
4"\"The Veil is thin here. Paper-thin.\" Their voice wound around Aurora's ear — that familiar whisper-on-wind quality stretched taut with something she'd never heard from them before."
5"On either side, the vineyard rows stretched away in perfect geometric lines that converged at some impossible vanishing point — too far, too precise, as if drawn by a mathematician who'd never seen a real field."
6"Trees rose in knotted spirals, their bark a deep burgundy, their canopies spread wide with branches that didn't bear leaves so much as membranes — translucent sheets stretched between twigs, catching the amber light and splitting it into prismatic patterns on the ground below."
7"Shapes Aurora recognized — apples, pears, something like a fig — alongside others she had no name for."
8"Just that gentle, crystalline ringing from the white fruit, and beneath it, something lower — a vibration more felt than heard, a bass note humming up through the soles of her boots."
9"The orchard thinned and the path widened into a broad avenue paved with stones that were warm to the touch — Aurora could feel the heat even through her boots."
10"Not a building — not exactly."
11"Braziers lined the approach, each one burning with a different colored flame — cerulean, emerald, a deep saffron that threw dancing shapes across the carved walls."
12"Something sweet — chocolate, maybe, or burnt caramel — winding through a savory undercurrent of herbs she could identify and dozens she couldn't."
13"Figures — dozens of them — moving between long tables laden with food that gleamed and steamed under the amber light."
14"One of them — a woman with dark skin and cropped hair — paused mid-stride, a copper pot balanced on her forearm."
15"It always ran cold, but here, in this realm of oppressive warmth and golden light, the chill felt deliberate — a declaration of opposition, the blade rejecting every molecule of the air around it."
16"The amber sky pulsed once — a slow, deep throb like a massive eye blinking — and the ground hummed its low, hungry note, and Aurora stood at the threshold of Prince Belphegor's domain with the Heartstone burning at her chest and the Fae blade freezing at her hip and the distant sound of white fruit chiming behind her like bells tolling for something already lost."
17"Its inner glow had intensified since crossing the Veil — deeper now, the red of wine held up to candlelight."
18"The wardings parted around the blade at her hip with a sound like tearing silk, and the helbound souls in the feasting hall turned their hollow, burning eyes toward her, and the amber light of Dymas pressed down on her shoulders with the full weight of a realm that had been waiting — patiently, hungrily — for exactly this."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1545
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount54
adverbRatio0.03495145631067961
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.007766990291262136
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences134
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences134
mean13.81
std12
cv0.869
sampleLengths
012
115
219
35
45
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62
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925
1011
115
124
131
145
1520
161
1717
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201
213
2221
2321
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2513
2623
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292
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3316
346
3514
3612
3736
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3911
406
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438
4411
456
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473
4818
4915
79.60% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.5
totalSentences134
uniqueOpeners67
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences97
matches
0"Just that omnipresent golden warmth"
1"Just that gentle, crystalline ringing"
2"Almost soft, like the stone"
3"Then someone behind the woman"
ratio0.041
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences97
matches
0"She gripped the silver chain"
1"She coughed once and blinked"
2"They pulsed gently, like the"
3"She moved without sound, which"
4"Their form solidified slowly, shadow"
5"Their voice wound around Aurora's"
6"Their silhouette flickered at the"
7"They descended the hill along"
8"She caught herself reaching for"
9"They walked deeper."
10"She knelt and pressed her"
11"She stood quickly, wiping her"
12"It rose from the landscape"
13"Her mouth flooded."
14"Her stomach clenched with a"
15"Her pale lavender eyes had"
16"She pressed it flat with"
17"Their shadow-form stood rigid, edges"
18"Their whisper had thinned to"
19"They wore aprons, carried platters,"
ratio0.268
73.40% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount75
totalSentences97
matches
0"The Heartstone Pendant burned against"
1"She gripped the silver chain"
2"A heartbeat that wasn't hers."
3"The light hit her first."
4"Everything bathed in warm amber,"
5"Isolde stepped past her, silver"
6"Aurora sucked in a breath."
7"The air sat heavy."
8"She coughed once and blinked"
9"The vines were wrong, though"
10"They pulsed gently, like the"
11"Isolde's bare feet left no"
12"She moved without sound, which"
13"A ripple of darkness pooled"
14"Their form solidified slowly, shadow"
15"Their voice wound around Aurora's"
16"Nyx didn't answer."
17"Their silhouette flickered at the"
18"Aurora took that as a"
19"They descended the hill along"
ratio0.773
51.55% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences97
matches
0"If it could be called"
ratio0.01
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences52
technicalSentenceCount14
matches
0"Everything bathed in warm amber, as if someone had poured honey over the sun and let it drip across the entire sky."
1"Endless vineyards rolling down a hillside that shouldn't have existed behind the tear they'd just walked through."
2"She moved without sound, which Aurora had grown accustomed to in the Grove but which felt more pronounced here, more deliberate — as if the ground itself refuse…"
3"On either side, the vineyard rows stretched away in perfect geometric lines that converged at some impossible vanishing point — too far, too precise, as if draw…"
4"Between the rows, wildflowers Aurora couldn't name pushed up through the dirt: blooms with petals like spun glass, stems that twisted in corkscrews, pistils tha…"
5"Trees rose in knotted spirals, their bark a deep burgundy, their canopies spread wide with branches that didn't bear leaves so much as membranes — translucent s…"
6"It rose from the landscape as if the earth had exhaled it: a sprawling complex of terraces and open pavilions, all constructed from the same burgundy wood as th…"
7"Braziers lined the approach, each one burning with a different colored flame — cerulean, emerald, a deep saffron that threw dancing shapes across the carved wal…"
8"Their shadow-form stood rigid, edges sharp and defined in a way that meant they were concentrating, drawing themselves together."
9"Figures — dozens of them — moving between long tables laden with food that gleamed and steamed under the amber light."
10"Eyes that burned with a fevered intensity she recognized from late nights in the restaurant kitchen when Yu-Fei pushed herself past exhaustion into something me…"
11"Then someone behind the woman barked an order and she turned away, her shoulders hunching, her feet carrying her back toward a bank of flames that burned too bl…"
12"She closed her fist around it and felt the warmth spread through her fingers, up her wrist, past the small crescent-shaped scar that had been part of her skin f…"
13"The wardings parted around the blade at her hip with a sound like tearing silk, and the helbound souls in the feasting hall turned their hollow, burning eyes to…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.086
leniency0.171
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
84.9551%