Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8V29FY4FHXDH36T17RSK83

Run Details

Duration:
1m 20s
Cost:
$0.089750
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The pendant burned against Rory's sternum the instant they stepped through. Not the gentle pulse she'd grown accustomed to — the faint metronome tick of warmth whenever they passed a rift point in London. This was a flare, sudden and insistent, as though the crimson gemstone had swallowed a coal. She pressed her palm flat against it through her jacket and felt it throbbing beneath the fabric, alive with a heat that bordered on pain before settling into something almost pleasant. Almost like a heartbeat that wasn't hers. The light hit her next. She'd braced for darkness — for fire and brimstone, for the stench of sulfur, for screaming. Every story she'd ever been told about Hel had prepared her for horror. What she got instead was an amber glow so rich and warm it felt like stepping into the last hour of a summer afternoon, the kind that turned the Severn estuary to hammered gold when she was a girl. "Breathe," Nyx whispered beside her. Rory realized she'd stopped. She pulled air into her lungs and tasted something on it — ripe fruit and woodsmoke and something sweeter underneath, like honey left too long in the sun. The breath she exhaled came out shaking. They stood on the crest of a low hill, and the world of Dymas unfolded beneath them like a painting someone had poured too much color into. Vineyards stretched in every direction, row after row of heavy vines sagging under the weight of fruit she didn't recognize. The grapes — if they were grapes — were the deep purple-black of bruises, each one the size of a plum, their skins so taut they looked ready to split. Between the vineyards, orchards rose in terraced groves, their branches laden with things that caught the amber light and threw it back in facets. Pomegranates, maybe, or something that wanted to be mistaken for pomegranates. "It's beautiful," Rory said, and hated how true it was. "Beauty is a door left open," Isolde murmured from her other side. The seer's silver hair moved in a wind Rory couldn't feel, drifting around her shoulders like something underwater. Her pale lavender eyes swept the landscape with an expression Rory couldn't read — not quite fear, not quite recognition. Something older than both. "And every door leads somewhere." "That's not actually helpful," Rory said. "It was not meant to be helpful. It was meant to be heard." Nyx's form rippled at the edge of Rory's vision. In the mortal world, the Shade could pass for a trick of the light — a shadow that lingered a beat too long, a dark smudge in the corner of a room. Here, under Dymas's amber sky, they were something else entirely. Their silhouette had sharpened, the edges of their form crisp and defined, and for the first time Rory could see fine details in the living shadow — the suggestion of cheekbones, the hollow where eyes should be, lit from within by that faint violet glow. They looked more solid here. More real. "You look different," she said quietly. Nyx turned their head toward her. The violet points of light regarded her with something that might have been amusement. "We are closer to the spaces between here. The air is thinner between planes." Their voice carried the same quality it always did — a whisper on wind that shouldn't exist — but it came clearer now, without the effort she sometimes sensed behind it in London. "I feel more. This is not entirely welcome." They started down the hill together. Rory kept her hand inside her jacket, fingers gripping the Fae-forged blade sheathed against her ribs. The moonsilver hilt bit cold against her palm — always cold, winter-stream cold, regardless of the ambient warmth pressing against her skin. The contrast grounded her. Amber heat and Fae cold. She held onto both. The path, if it was a path, wound between the first rows of vines. Close up, the plants were wrong in ways the distance had concealed. The vines didn't grow from the soil so much as emerge from it, thick as Rory's forearm, their bark a glistening red-brown that reminded her of wet muscle. They twisted around trellises made of a pale bone-colored wood that was too smooth, too uniform. Not wood at all, she realized, and stopped looking at it. The fruit, though. The fruit was extraordinary. Each swollen grape radiated warmth she could feel on her face when she leaned close, and inside the taut skin she could see something shifting — a faint luminescence, like a candle flame glimpsed through dark glass. "Don't touch them," Nyx said. "I wasn't going to." "You were leaning." "Leaning isn't touching." "In Dymas, the distinction may be academic." Isolde had drifted ahead, moving between the rows with her peculiar silent grace. She left no footprints in the dark soil — she never did — but the vines seemed to notice her passage. They swayed gently toward her as she passed, the heavy fruit pendulumming on their stems, and Rory could have sworn she heard the plants exhale. A soft, sighing sound, like the contented noise someone makes settling into a warm bath. They walked for what might have been ten minutes or might have been an hour. Time felt soft here, malleable, slipping through her fingers when she tried to measure it. The vineyards gave way to one of the orchards she'd seen from the hill, and the trees that grew here stopped her in her tracks. They were enormous — each trunk as wide as a London taxi, the bark a deep burgundy that spiraled upward in grooves she could have fit her fist into. The branches spread wide and interlocking overhead, creating a canopy that filtered the amber sky into something more intimate, dappled and warm. And from those branches hung fruit unlike anything she'd ever encountered. Some glowed with their own soft light — pale gold, rose pink, a deep arterial red. Others were dark and quiet, absorbing light rather than reflecting it, their surfaces so matte they looked like holes in the air. The smell was overwhelming. Ripe mango and vanilla and caramelized sugar and underneath it all, turning slowly like an undercurrent, something savory and rich — roasted meat, maybe, or the smell of a kitchen after someone has spent all day cooking a feast. Her stomach cramped. Not from nausea. From hunger. A sudden, savage hunger that drove saliva into her mouth and tightened her jaw. She hadn't been hungry a moment ago. She was certain of that. "You feel it," Nyx said. Not a question. "The hunger." Rory swallowed hard. "It came out of nowhere." "It came out of everywhere. This is Dymas. Gluttony is not just permitted here — it is the architecture. The air itself is designed to make you want." She looked at Isolde. The seer had paused beneath one of the vast trees, her head tilted back, her eyes half-closed. A single wildflower had bloomed in the dark soil at her feet — small and white and entirely out of place. "Isolde. Are you all right?" "I am listening." "To what?" "To the trees. They are old." Her eyes opened fully, and for a moment the lavender irises seemed to darken, like clouds moving behind glass. "Not as old as the oaks in my grove, but old. They remember the hands that planted them." "Whose hands?" Isolde turned to face her. "That question has teeth, Aurora Carter. Be certain you wish to be bitten before you ask it again." A sound reached them from deeper in the orchard. Low and rhythmic — the clatter of metal on stone, the hiss of something hitting a hot surface. Voices, too, distant but unmistakable, calling out in a language Rory didn't recognize. Then laughter, sudden and sharp, cut short by the crash of what sounded like breaking crockery. "Someone's cooking," Rory said. "Many someones," Nyx corrected. The Shade had gone still, their edges fraying slightly, shadow tendrils reaching outward like antennae testing the air. "I count at least twenty voices. More beyond. There is a structure ahead — large, open-sided. A kitchen or a hall." "The feasting grounds," Isolde said softly. "Where the helbound prepare their offerings to Prince Belphegor." The name landed heavy. Rory felt the pendant flare again, a sharp kick of warmth against her breastbone, and she closed her hand tighter around the Fae blade's hilt. The cold of the moonsilver raced up her arm and met the heat of the Heartstone somewhere in her chest, two opposing forces balanced on a knife's edge. She breathed through it. "Helbound souls," she said. "Those are people. Contracted from Earth." "They were people," Nyx said carefully. "What they are now depends on the terms of their contracts." "They are still something," Isolde said, and it was the simplest, most direct thing Rory had ever heard her say. They moved deeper into the orchard. The trees grew closer together, their branches weaving a tighter canopy, and the light dimmed from amber to a deep honeyed bronze. Under her boots, the soil softened to something loamy and warm — and it was warm, she realized, as though the ground itself was heated from below. She could feel it through her soles. The air grew thicker, more fragrant, and the hunger prowled through her belly like a living thing. She set her jaw against it and kept walking. A fruit fell from a branch above her and landed with a soft, wet sound at her feet. It was the size of a peach, its skin a deep translucent gold, and through it she could see the flesh within — honeycombed and glistening, pulsing with that faint internal light. It smelled like every perfect thing she'd ever eaten distilled into a single breath. Her grandmother's bara brith. The chips from the shop on Cowbridge Road, drowned in vinegar. The first coffee of the morning, black and bitter and necessary. She wanted it so badly her hands shook. "Walk past it," Nyx said, close now, their shadow falling across the fruit and dimming its light to something bearable. "Do not touch. Do not taste. One bite and Dymas has a claim on you." Rory stepped over the fruit. It took more effort than she would ever admit to anyone. Past the last row of trees, the orchard opened onto a clearing, and she saw it — the feasting grounds of Dymas, spread out before her in a spectacle of controlled chaos. Massive stone kitchens stood open to the amber air, fire pits blazing, great iron spits turning slowly over beds of coals that burned in colors she'd never seen — deep blue, vivid green, a pure and sourceless white. Figures moved between the stations, dozens of them, shapes both human and decidedly not, chopping and stirring and plating and shouting to one another across the fragrant haze. And in the center, a table that seemed to go on forever. A banquet without beginning or end, loaded with dishes that steamed and glistened and shifted color as the firelight played across them. No one sat at it. It was a display, an offering, a monument to appetite itself. Rory stared at it and felt the hunger rise until it pressed against the inside of her skull. "The Veil is thin here," Isolde said, standing at her shoulder. "Thin enough to tear. Do you feel it?" Rory felt the pendant throbbing. She felt the blade's cold singing up her arm. She felt the hunger and the heat and the terrible, seductive beauty of a place built entirely around want. "Yeah," she said. "I feel it." She took one more breath of that dangerous, perfumed air, and stepped forward into Dymas.
created_at"2026-02-24T22:07:11.88Z" 2/24/2026, 10:07:11 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags19
adverbTagCount5
adverbTags
0"she said quietly [quietly]"
1"Rory swallowed hard [hard]"
2"Her eyes opened fully [fully]"
3"Isolde said softly [softly]"
4"Nyx said carefully [carefully]"
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.463
leniency0.927
rawRatio0.263
effectiveRatio0.244
84.55% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1942
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"gently"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count2
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
3
adverb"softly"
count1
4
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"gently"
1"slowly"
2"slightly"
3"softly"
4"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
58.81% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1942
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"pulse"
count1
1
word"warmth"
count4
2
word"weight"
count1
3
word"whisper"
count1
4
word"glistening"
count2
5
word"could feel"
count2
6
word"stomach"
count1
7
word"rhythmic"
count1
8
word"structure"
count1
9
word"raced"
count1
10
word"perfect"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"warmth"
2"weight"
3"whisper"
4"glistening"
5"could feel"
6"stomach"
7"rhythmic"
8"structure"
9"raced"
10"perfect"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences122
matches(empty)
96.02% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences122
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences144
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen45
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1967
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions52
wordCount1701
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity1.12
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory19
London3
Hel1
Severn1
Dymas4
Isolde7
Nyx8
Shade2
Fae-forged1
Fae3
Heartstone1
Cowbridge1
Road1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Hel"
2"Dymas"
3"Isolde"
4"Nyx"
5"Shade"
places
0"London"
1"Severn"
2"Cowbridge"
3"Road"
globalScore0.942
windowScore0.667
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences86
glossingSentenceCount6
matches
0"felt like stepping into the last hour o"
1"not quite fear, not quite recognition"
2"not quite recognition"
3"looked like holes in the air"
4"sounded like breaking crockery"
5"smelled like every perfect thing she'd eve"
6"table that seemed to go on forever"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.508
wordCount1967
matches
0"Not as old as the oaks in my grove, but old"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences144
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs54
mean36.43
std34.43
cv0.945
sampleLengths
011
177
273
35
439
5112
610
759
86
913
10103
116
1275
1357
1481
1544
165
174
183
193
207
2174
2255
23143
2434
258
2610
2728
2842
295
303
312
3243
332
3423
3556
364
3743
3815
3961
4010
4117
4220
4388
4490
458
4635
4716
4898
4968
99.51% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences122
matches
0"been told"
1"been ten"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs269
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount23
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences20
totalSentences144
ratio0.139
matches
0"Not the gentle pulse she'd grown accustomed to — the faint metronome tick of warmth whenever they passed a rift point in London."
1"She'd braced for darkness — for fire and brimstone, for the stench of sulfur, for screaming."
2"She pulled air into her lungs and tasted something on it — ripe fruit and woodsmoke and something sweeter underneath, like honey left too long in the sun."
3"The grapes — if they were grapes — were the deep purple-black of bruises, each one the size of a plum, their skins so taut they looked ready to split."
4"Her pale lavender eyes swept the landscape with an expression Rory couldn't read — not quite fear, not quite recognition."
5"In the mortal world, the Shade could pass for a trick of the light — a shadow that lingered a beat too long, a dark smudge in the corner of a room."
6"Their silhouette had sharpened, the edges of their form crisp and defined, and for the first time Rory could see fine details in the living shadow — the suggestion of cheekbones, the hollow where eyes should be, lit from within by that faint violet glow."
7"\"We are closer to the spaces between here. The air is thinner between planes.\" Their voice carried the same quality it always did — a whisper on wind that shouldn't exist — but it came clearer now, without the effort she sometimes sensed behind it in London."
8"The moonsilver hilt bit cold against her palm — always cold, winter-stream cold, regardless of the ambient warmth pressing against her skin."
9"Each swollen grape radiated warmth she could feel on her face when she leaned close, and inside the taut skin she could see something shifting — a faint luminescence, like a candle flame glimpsed through dark glass."
10"She left no footprints in the dark soil — she never did — but the vines seemed to notice her passage."
11"They were enormous — each trunk as wide as a London taxi, the bark a deep burgundy that spiraled upward in grooves she could have fit her fist into."
12"Some glowed with their own soft light — pale gold, rose pink, a deep arterial red."
13"Ripe mango and vanilla and caramelized sugar and underneath it all, turning slowly like an undercurrent, something savory and rich — roasted meat, maybe, or the smell of a kitchen after someone has spent all day cooking a feast."
14"A single wildflower had bloomed in the dark soil at her feet — small and white and entirely out of place."
15"Low and rhythmic — the clatter of metal on stone, the hiss of something hitting a hot surface."
16"Under her boots, the soil softened to something loamy and warm — and it was warm, she realized, as though the ground itself was heated from below."
17"It was the size of a peach, its skin a deep translucent gold, and through it she could see the flesh within — honeycombed and glistening, pulsing with that faint internal light."
18"Past the last row of trees, the orchard opened onto a clearing, and she saw it — the feasting grounds of Dymas, spread out before her in a spectacle of controlled chaos."
19"Massive stone kitchens stood open to the amber air, fire pits blazing, great iron spits turning slowly over beds of coals that burned in colors she'd never seen — deep blue, vivid green, a pure and sourceless white."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1684
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"pale bone-colored wood"
adverbCount66
adverbRatio0.039192399049881234
lyAdverbCount14
lyAdverbRatio0.00831353919239905
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences144
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences144
mean13.66
std9.97
cv0.73
sampleLengths
011
123
216
331
47
55
616
713
839
95
104
1128
127
1327
1420
1530
1624
1711
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1912
2018
2120
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235
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2810
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305
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336
3414
3547
368
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3816
3922
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415
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4314
4412
4528
4616
4711
483
494
60.88% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.4027777777777778
totalSentences144
uniqueOpeners58
59.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences113
matches
0"Almost like a heartbeat that"
1"Then laughter, sudden and sharp,"
ratio0.018
99.65% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount34
totalSentences113
matches
0"She pressed her palm flat"
1"She'd braced for darkness —"
2"She pulled air into her"
3"They stood on the crest"
4"Her pale lavender eyes swept"
5"Their silhouette had sharpened, the"
6"They looked more solid here."
7"she said quietly"
8"Their voice carried the same"
9"They started down the hill"
10"She held onto both."
11"They twisted around trellises made"
12"She left no footprints in"
13"They swayed gently toward her"
14"They walked for what might"
15"They were enormous — each"
16"Her stomach cramped."
17"She hadn't been hungry a"
18"She was certain of that."
19"She looked at Isolde."
ratio0.301
48.50% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount93
totalSentences113
matches
0"The pendant burned against Rory's"
1"This was a flare, sudden"
2"She pressed her palm flat"
3"The light hit her next."
4"She'd braced for darkness —"
5"Every story she'd ever been"
6"Nyx whispered beside her"
7"Rory realized she'd stopped."
8"She pulled air into her"
9"The breath she exhaled came"
10"They stood on the crest"
11"Vineyards stretched in every direction,"
12"The grapes — if they"
13"Rory said, and hated how"
14"Isolde murmured from her other"
15"The seer's silver hair moved"
16"Her pale lavender eyes swept"
17"Something older than both."
18"Nyx's form rippled at the"
19"Here, under Dymas's amber sky,"
ratio0.823
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences113
matches(empty)
ratio0
36.25% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences67
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"This was a flare, sudden and insistent, as though the crimson gemstone had swallowed a coal."
1"She pressed her palm flat against it through her jacket and felt it throbbing beneath the fabric, alive with a heat that bordered on pain before settling into s…"
2"What she got instead was an amber glow so rich and warm it felt like stepping into the last hour of a summer afternoon, the kind that turned the Severn estuary …"
3"Between the vineyards, orchards rose in terraced groves, their branches laden with things that caught the amber light and threw it back in facets."
4"They twisted around trellises made of a pale bone-colored wood that was too smooth, too uniform."
5"The branches spread wide and interlocking overhead, creating a canopy that filtered the amber sky into something more intimate, dappled and warm."
6"A sudden, savage hunger that drove saliva into her mouth and tightened her jaw."
7"The Shade had gone still, their edges fraying slightly, shadow tendrils reaching outward like antennae testing the air."
8"Under her boots, the soil softened to something loamy and warm — and it was warm, she realized, as though the ground itself was heated from below."
9"A banquet without beginning or end, loaded with dishes that steamed and glistened and shifted color as the firelight played across them."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags19
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
76.83% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags16
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
1"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
2"Nyx corrected (correct)"
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.39
leniency0.78
rawRatio0.188
effectiveRatio0.146
76.0216%