Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8V30D88SZY2BA1WYE66NHV

Run Details

Model:
Aion 2.0
Duration:
58.3s
Cost:
$0.007030
Provider:
AionLabs

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The third knock was a demand, not a request. Wood shuddered under a fist that knew its own strength. Rory wiped her hands on her jeans, leaving grey streaks from the bike chain grease. Delivery shifts for Yu-Fei ended hours ago, but the grease lingered like a bad memory. She peered through the peephole. Charcoal wool. A sliver of platinum hair. An ivory cane handle. Her breath hitched. The chain rattled as she slid it free, the deadbolt turning with a heavy clunk. Lucien Moreau filled the doorway, the dim hall light carving shadows into the sharp lines of his suit. He looked like a piece of the night had broken off and learned to stand upright. One amber eye, one black, fixed on her with an intensity that made the small crescent scar on her wrist tingle. “Aurora.” His voice was a low rasp, the French accent softened by years in London but still there, curling around the vowels. “You’re supposed to be in Marseille.” She didn’t move to let him in. “Plans change.” He tilted his head, the movement economical. “Aren’t you going to invite me in? It’s rude to leave a man standing in a draft.” “It’s your draft. You brought it with you.” But she stepped back. He crossed the threshold, and the flat seemed to shrink. He brought the scent of cold night air, expensive sandalwood, and something darker, like ozone after a strike. His gaze swept the single room—the unmade bed, the tiny kitchenette littered with noodle pots, the law textbooks stacked like a crumbling fortress on the floor. It lingered on the window, the one with a view of the fire escape. “Charming.” “It’s temporary.” “Everything is.” He rested both hands on the ivory handle of his cane. A pose of patience. She knew it was a lie. “Why are you here, Luc?” “Evan’s looking for you.” The name landed like a physical blow. The air left the room. The greasy smell of old food turned sour in her throat. “He doesn’t know where I am.” “He knows you’re in London. He has friends. Less charming friends than mine.” Lucien’s black eye seemed to drink the light. “He’s asking in certain circles. Offering money. A significant amount.” She wrapped her arms around herself, feeling the chill he’d brought in. “And you’re here to claim it? Turning me in for a bounty?” A muscle ticked in his jaw. The first crack in the marble. “If I wanted the money, *chérie*, you would not have heard the knock.” “Then what? Warning me out of the goodness of your heart?” She let out a short, bitter laugh. “We both know how much of that you have left.” He moved then, not with the limp the cane suggested, but with a predator’s grace. Two steps closed the distance between them. She held her ground, tilting her head up to meet that mismatched stare. Sandalwood and ozone filled her senses. “We left things… poorly. In Cardiff.” “You left. I woke up alone. With a note. ‘It’s safer this way.’” She parroted his clipped phrasing. “Very dramatic. Very *you*.” “It *was* safer. Your ex-fiancé was connected to people who make my associates look like choirboys. My presence in your life was a target on your back.” “You didn’t let me choose. You just decided. Packed up your secrets and your demonic daddy issues and vanished.” The old hurt, nursed for months, sharpened her words. “And you chose to run to London and deliver sweet and sour pork for a living. A brilliant strategic move.” “It pays the rent! Which is more than I can say for your career of brokering secrets for things that go bump in the night.” A slow smile touched his lips, devoid of warmth. “They do more than bump, Rory. You know that.” She did. The memory flashed—a damp alley in Cardiff, Lucien’s hand on her arm, shoving her behind him as something with too many teeth scuttled from the shadows. The flash of the blade from his cane. A wet, choking sound. Him wiping black blood on a handkerchief afterwards, his breathing perfectly even. “I’m not part of that world,” she whispered. “You are the moment you meet me. You were the moment I took that contract to find the barrister’s missing daughter.” His gaze dropped to her lips, then back to her eyes. “You cannot un-know what you know.” The space between them crackled. The old attraction, a live wire they’d never quite cut, hummed in the air. She remembered the weight of him, the surprising warmth of his skin, the way he’d whispered in French against her neck. Things she’d tried to bury under London rain and greasy pavement. “What do you want, Lucien?” “I want you to be safe. Which you are not, here alone.” “So you’ll what? Protect me? Like last time? Until it’s inconvenient?” His free hand came up, hovering near her cheek. He didn’t touch her. The proximity was its own torture. “It was never inconvenient. It was impossible. My world… it consumes pretty things. It would have consumed you.” “I’m not a thing.” “No.” His voice dropped. “You are a woman who reads tort law for fun and out-thinks hungry *krovniks*. You are infuriating. And you are in danger.” “From Evan.” “From Evan. From the people he’s asking. From the attention his search is drawing.” His amber eye glinted. “There is a solution.” “I’m not going back to Cardiff.” “Not Cardiff.” He finally let his fingers brush a strand of black hair from her forehead. The touch sent a jolt through her. “You come with me. Now. I have a place. Warded. Off the maps his friends use.” “Live with you.” It wasn’t a question. “Temporarily.” A ghost of his smile returned. “Until the problem is resolved.” “And how do you resolve a problem like Evan? He’s human. Your… particular skills…” “Are versatile.” The implication hung in the air, cold and sharp. She stared at him. At the man who’d been both her saviour and her heartbreak. The man who dealt in information and blades and demonic favours. The man whose touch still made her skin burn. “This is a terrible idea.” “The worst.” “You’ll keep secrets. You always do.” “Only the ones that would keep you awake at night.” She looked past him, at the sad little flat that represented her escape. Her freedom. It suddenly looked like a cage. A very flimsy, greasy cage. A heavy fist hammered on the door downstairs. The main entrance to the building. Not her door. Not yet. Lucien’s head snapped towards the sound. All casual grace vanished. He was alert, a coil of tension. “Rory. Now.” “That’s not…” “It is.” He grabbed her wrist, his fingers circling the old crescent scar. “They’re early. Or Evan paid for faster service.” Another thunderous knock. A voice, rough and East End. “Carter! Open up! Got a delivery for you!” “They don’t sound like Deliveroo,” she breathed. “They’re not delivering food.” Lucien was already moving, pulling her towards the window. “They’re delivering you. To him.” He released her wrist and flipped the window latch. The cold night air rushed in. The fire escape was a rusted skeleton against the brick wall. “My bag. My things…” “Leave them.” He shoved the window up. “Anything you need, I can replace. Anything you are, I cannot.” The pounding below turned to splintering wood. A shout. They were through the main door, in the stairwell. Lucien looked back at her, his heterochromatic eyes holding hers. “Choose, Aurora. The cage you know. Or the devil you do.” The door to her flat exploded inwards.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags19
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"But she stepped back [back]"
dialogueSentences62
tagDensity0.306
leniency0.613
rawRatio0.053
effectiveRatio0.032
80.44% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1278
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"very"
count3
1
adverb"perfectly"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"perfectly"
2"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
53.05% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1278
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"intensity"
count1
1
word"chill"
count1
2
word"marble"
count1
3
word"predator"
count1
4
word"warmth"
count2
5
word"weight"
count1
6
word"resolved"
count1
7
word"resolve"
count1
8
word"implication"
count1
9
word"tension"
count1
10
word"pounding"
count1
highlights
0"intensity"
1"chill"
2"marble"
3"predator"
4"warmth"
5"weight"
6"resolved"
7"resolve"
8"implication"
9"tension"
10"pounding"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
1
label"sent a shiver through"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
1"sent a jolt through"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences89
matches(empty)
94.70% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences89
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences130
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans4
markdownWords4
totalWords1276
ratio0.003
matches
0"chérie"
1"you"
2"was"
3"krovniks"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions15
wordCount768
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity0.78
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Yu-Fei1
Moreau1
French2
London2
Cardiff1
Lucien6
East1
End1
persons
0"Yu-Fei"
1"Moreau"
2"Lucien"
places
0"French"
1"London"
2"Cardiff"
3"East"
4"End"
globalScore1
windowScore1
69.35% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences62
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"looked like a piece of the night had brok"
1"looked like a cage"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.784
wordCount1276
matches
0"not with the limp the cane suggested, but with a predator’s grace"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences130
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs67
mean19.04
std13.28
cv0.697
sampleLengths
019
135
211
318
455
522
613
726
840
940
101
112
1223
135
144
1523
166
1731
1824
1925
2028
2141
226
2322
2427
2528
2620
2725
2818
2952
308
3138
3251
335
3412
3511
3637
374
3826
392
4022
416
4239
437
4412
4514
4611
4735
485
492
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences89
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs118
matches
0"was already moving"
98.90% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences130
ratio0.015
matches
0"His gaze swept the single room—the unmade bed, the tiny kitchenette littered with noodle pots, the law textbooks stacked like a crumbling fortress on the floor."
1"The memory flashed—a damp alley in Cardiff, Lucien’s hand on her arm, shoving her behind him as something with too many teeth scuttled from the shadows."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount771
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount23
adverbRatio0.029831387808041506
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.0038910505836575876
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences130
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences130
mean9.82
std6.37
cv0.649
sampleLengths
09
110
215
315
45
52
65
74
83
915
1018
1116
1221
1322
1413
159
1617
1712
1810
1918
2026
2114
221
232
2413
254
266
275
284
297
305
3111
326
3321
3410
3512
3612
376
386
3913
4018
4110
4215
437
4413
456
466
4718
484
4927
57.69% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats15
diversityRatio0.4153846153846154
totalSentences130
uniqueOpeners54
40.65% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences82
matches
0"All casual grace vanished."
ratio0.012
54.15% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount34
totalSentences82
matches
0"She peered through the peephole."
1"Her breath hitched."
2"He looked like a piece"
3"His voice was a low"
4"She didn’t move to let"
5"He tilted his head, the"
6"He crossed the threshold, and"
7"He brought the scent of"
8"His gaze swept the single"
9"It lingered on the window,"
10"He rested both hands on"
11"She knew it was a"
12"She wrapped her arms around"
13"She let out a short,"
14"He moved then, not with"
15"She held her ground, tilting"
16"She parroted his clipped phrasing"
17"Him wiping black blood on"
18"His gaze dropped to her"
19"She remembered the weight of"
ratio0.415
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount76
totalSentences82
matches
0"The third knock was a"
1"Wood shuddered under a fist"
2"Rory wiped her hands on"
3"Delivery shifts for Yu-Fei ended"
4"She peered through the peephole."
5"A sliver of platinum hair."
6"An ivory cane handle."
7"Her breath hitched."
8"The chain rattled as she"
9"Lucien Moreau filled the doorway,"
10"He looked like a piece"
11"His voice was a low"
12"She didn’t move to let"
13"He tilted his head, the"
14"He crossed the threshold, and"
15"He brought the scent of"
16"His gaze swept the single"
17"It lingered on the window,"
18"He rested both hands on"
19"A pose of patience."
ratio0.927
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences82
matches(empty)
ratio0
85.71% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences25
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"One amber eye, one black, fixed on her with an intensity that made the small crescent scar on her wrist tingle."
1"At the man who’d been both her saviour and her heartbreak."
98.68% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags19
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"He grabbed, his fingers circling the old crescent scar"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
1"she breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences62
tagDensity0.032
leniency0.065
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.065
83.3334%