Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8V4MAEJJGGC6KK67VC4YWT

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Duration:
1m 44s
Cost:
$0.100225
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The Wednesday crowd at The Raven's Nest was thin enough that Rory could hear the ice settle in her glass. She sat at the far end of the bar, her delivery bag crumpled on the stool beside her, a half-eaten plate of chips going cold. Behind the counter, Silas polished the same tumbler he'd been polishing for five minutes, his hazel eyes tracking the football match on the mounted television with the attention of a man who had no money on the game but nothing better to study. Rory dragged a chip through a smear of vinegar and glanced at the old maps on the wall. Casablanca. Prague. Istanbul. She'd asked him once if the pins marked places he'd actually been. He'd smiled and said they marked places he'd rather forget. She never asked again. The door opened. A gust of November air pushed through the bar, stirring the napkins on the counter. Rory didn't look up. People came and went. That was what doors were for. But Silas stopped polishing. That made her look. The woman in the doorway wore a charcoal wool coat that cost more than Rory's rent. Her hair, once a savage tangle of red curls that she'd pin up with whatever was nearby — pencils, chopsticks, once a plastic straw — was blown straight and copper-blonde, falling like liquid over her shoulders. She carried herself the way expensive coats teach people to carry themselves: upright, contained, as though the cold wouldn't dare follow her inside. Rory's chip hovered halfway to her mouth. Niamh Gallagher scanned the bar with quick, assessing eyes — barrister's eyes, the kind that catalogued a room the way an auctioneer priced furniture — and when they landed on Rory, they stopped. Something collapsed behind them. A wall or a dam or whatever it was she'd built in the years between then and now. "Christ," Niamh said. "Niamh?" The name came out wrong, carrying too much of Cardiff in it, too much of the library basement where they'd studied tort law until three in the morning, too much of that awful Thai place on City Road where the pad see ew tasted like cardboard and they'd eaten it anyway because it was cheap and open late and close to Niamh's flat. Niamh crossed the bar in measured steps. She didn't rush. That was new. The Niamh Gallagher Rory had known rushed everywhere — rushed into rooms, into arguments, into friendships, into love with people who didn't deserve the velocity of her affection. "Rory bloody Carter." She stopped a foot away, and up close the changes multiplied. Her cheekbones were sharper. Not thinner so much as whittled. She wore a thin gold chain with no pendant, and her fingers were bare except for a pale stripe on her left ring finger where something used to live. "Sit down," Rory said, moving the delivery bag. Niamh looked at the bag with its grease stain and the Golden Empress logo, the cartoon dragon holding a wok. She sat without comment, though the comment was there, pressed into the slight thinning of her lips. Silas appeared as if summoned, a trick he had. "What can I get you?" "Whiskey. Neat. Whatever's Irish." Niamh set her clutch on the bar. "Old habit." Silas poured without ceremony, slid the glass across, and retreated to his tumbler. But Rory noticed he didn't retreat far. He had an instinct for conversations worth overhearing, and decades of professional eavesdropping had made the instinct structural. Niamh turned the glass but didn't drink. "I thought you were in — I heard you were—" "London. I'm in London. Obviously." Rory gestured at the bar, the green neon bleeding through the window, the map of Casablanca. "Have been for two years." "Two years." Niamh repeated it like a sum she couldn't balance. "Eva knew?" "Eva knew." A silence fell. Not empty — full, the way a held breath is full. "She didn't tell me." "I asked her not to." Niamh's hand tightened around the glass. She drank, a single clean swallow, and set it down with the precision of someone who'd trained themselves out of slamming things. "Right. Well. That's fair, I suppose. You always were good at clean breaks." "That's generous. I'd have said I was good at running." "Same skill, different branding." The joke landed sideways, half-funny and half-sharp, and Rory let it sit between them because contesting it would mean explaining, and explaining would mean Evan, and Evan was a door she'd locked and bricked over and planted a garden in front of. "You look different," Rory said instead. Niamh touched her hair reflexively. "The salon calls it 'champagne copper.' I call it expensive." "Not the hair. All of it. You." Niamh's fingers returned to the glass, circling the rim. The pale stripe on her ring finger caught the bar's amber light. "People change." "Some more than others." Rory turned on her stool to face her fully. Those blue eyes that friends and enemies alike called unnerving in their directness. "When I left Cardiff, you were wearing Doc Martens and fighting the council over tenant rights. Pro bono, sixty hours a week. You told me once that money was a language spoken by people who had nothing worth saying." "I was twenty-two. Twenty-two-year-olds say magnificent, idiotic things." "You meant it." The silence again. Niamh traced the absent ring with her thumb, a gesture so habitual she probably didn't know she did it. "I got the pupillage at Thornfield Chambers," she said. "The one we both applied for, remember? Three hundred applicants, four spots. I called your mum's house to tell you, and Jennifer said you'd gone. Just — gone. No forwarding address. No number." The guilt of that landed the way it always did: dull and low, a stone dropped in deep water. Rory looked at her chips. They'd gone grey. "I'm sorry." "Don't. I'm not fishing." Niamh flagged Silas for another whiskey. He poured, and this time he lingered, wiping down a perfectly clean section of counter. "Thornfield's commercial division. Mergers. Acquisitions. Last year I billed more hours than anyone in chambers. My supervising tenant said I had the instincts of a surgeon and the hours of a junior doctor, and he meant it as a compliment." "But." Niamh looked at her. "But." She didn't elaborate. She didn't need to. Rory could see it in the careful architecture of her — the pressed coat, the trained hair, the deleted ring — the way you can see the bones of a demolished house in the foundation that remains. Niamh had built herself into something polished and lucrative and completely foreign to the person she'd been, and the construction had cost her things she hadn't budgeted for. "Marcus?" Rory asked softly. "Fourteen months ago. Gone. Amicable, if you're curious, which is the word solicitors use when they mean bloodless." Niamh drank. "He said I'd become someone he didn't recognize, which is a spectacular thing to hear from a man you've shared a bed with for four years. Like being told you've been haunting your own house." "Niamh." "I'm not — I don't need the face, Rory. The sympathetic face. You left. You don't get to look at me like that." The words hit the bar top and rang. Two stools down, a man in a flat cap looked over. Silas interceded with the silent grace of an old professional, refilling the man's pint unasked. The man looked at the pint, forgot what he'd been eavesdropping on, and drank. Rory turned the crescent-shaped scar on her wrist toward herself, pressing her thumb into it the way she did when she needed to think before speaking. "You're right." "I know I'm right." "I should have called." "Yes." "I should have told you I was going. You deserved that." Niamh set both hands flat on the bar, fingers spread, a gesture Rory recognized from a thousand study sessions: Niamh organizing her thoughts. "Do you know what the worst part was? It wasn't that you disappeared. People disappear. We're not children; I understand that people leave. The worst part was that I knew why. I knew about Evan. I saw the bruise on your collarbone at Sioned's wedding, and you told me you'd fallen against the bathroom doorframe, and I let you tell me that. I let you lie to me because the truth would have required me to do something, and I was terrified — terrified — of doing the wrong thing. And then you were gone, and doing anything became impossible." The bar hummed. Someone had put money in the jukebox, and Tom Waits was singing about rain dogs with his gorgeous ruined voice. Rory exhaled. The sound felt like it had been sitting inside her ribcage for three years. "It wasn't yours to fix." "No. But it was mine to witness. I could have at least stood in the room with you and said, I see this. I see what's happening. And I didn't." The confession settled between them like a card placed face-up on a table. Rory stared at the bar's scarred wood, at the rings left by a thousand sweating glasses. Silas had told her once that every stain on the bar was someone's story, and she'd thought that was sentimental for a man who'd spent thirty years lying for a living. Now she thought he might have been right. "You're here," Rory said. "I'm here because I walked into a random bar in Soho because my train home was cancelled and my phone was dead and I wanted a drink. I'm not here through moral courage. I'm here through signal failure on the Great Western Railway." "And yet." Niamh's mouth twitched. The ghost of something Rory recognized — a smile that started in the left corner and spread like a crack in ice. She'd thought that smile was gone. She'd thought a lot of things were gone. "You deliver Chinese food," Niamh said. "Cantonese. Yu-Fei would murder me if she heard you say Chinese. She's from Hong Kong." "You deliver Cantonese food. You live above a bar in Soho. You, Aurora Carter, daughter of Brendan Carter QC, the most terrifyingly articulate man I have ever met." "He still is. I got a letter last month. Three pages, single-spaced. He made a structured argument for why I should retake the bar examinations, complete with footnotes." "And?" "I wrote back and told him I was happy." "Are you?" Rory looked around The Raven's Nest. The maps. The photographs. Silas, who'd stopped pretending not to listen and was leaning against the back counter with his arms crossed, his silver signet ring catching the light. The green neon that bled through the window and painted everything the color of deep water. "I'm not unhappy," she said. "Which is more than I could say for the last two years in Cardiff." Niamh considered this. She'd always had a way of considering things — fully, with her whole face — that made you feel whatever you'd said deserved the weight she was giving it. "I'm not unhappy either," Niamh said. "I'm just not sure I'm anything at all. I'm very good at my job. I'm exceptional, actually. I close deals that make grown men cry with gratitude. And I walk home to an empty flat in Clifton and I eat something that comes in a cardboard sleeve and I think: this is it. This is what I traded the Doc Martens for." "Come back for them." Niamh looked at her. "Not the boots. The rest of it. The part of you that fought for things that didn't bill by the hour." "That's easy to say when you've already jumped." "Jumping was the most terrifying thing I've ever done. The landing hasn't been graceful. My knees are still ringing." Rory pushed the plate of cold chips between them. "But the ground's solid." Niamh stared at the chips. Pale, vinegar-soggy, utterly unrefined. She picked one up and ate it, and something in her face opened — a window in a room that had been sealed too long. "God, those are terrible." "Silas makes them himself. Don't tell him." "I heard that," Silas said without moving. Niamh laughed. The sound was rusty, as though it had been stored in a place that didn't get much use, but it was real, and it filled the space between them in a way that two whiskeys and three years of silence hadn't managed. She reached for another chip.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Rory said instead [instead]"
1"Rory asked softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences68
tagDensity0.265
leniency0.529
rawRatio0.111
effectiveRatio0.059
87.91% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2068
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
1
adverb"completely"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count1
3
adverb"very"
count1
4
adverb"utterly"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"completely"
2"softly"
3"very"
4"utterly"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found
0"Marcus"
80.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Thornfield"
80.66% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2068
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"scanned"
count1
1
word"measured"
count1
2
word"affection"
count1
3
word"silence"
count3
4
word"traced"
count1
5
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"scanned"
1"measured"
2"affection"
3"silence"
4"traced"
5"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences109
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences109
filterMatches
0"look"
1"see"
2"feel"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences159
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen98
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2085
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions36
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions79
wordCount1319
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity1.97
worstName"Niamh"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Wednesday1
Raven2
Nest2
Rory24
Silas9
November1
Gallagher2
Cardiff1
Thai1
City1
Road1
Niamh26
Golden1
Empress1
Casablanca2
Evan2
Tom1
Waits1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Rory"
2"Silas"
3"Gallagher"
4"Niamh"
5"Casablanca"
6"Evan"
7"Tom"
8"Waits"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"Thai"
2"City"
3"Road"
globalScore0.514
windowScore0.5
75.37% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences67
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"tasted like cardboard and they'd eaten it"
1"felt like it had been sitting inside he"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.48
wordCount2085
matches
0"no money on the game but"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences159
matches
0"thought that smile"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs84
mean24.82
std24.25
cv0.977
sampleLengths
088
147
232
34
44
575
67
755
83
91
1063
1141
1253
138
1437
1514
1613
1738
1817
1926
2013
212
2214
234
245
2541
2610
274
2842
296
3015
317
3223
3365
348
353
3622
3742
3829
3965
401
415
4272
434
4455
451
4623
4748
4828
494
89.17% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences109
matches
0"was blown"
1"was gone"
2"were gone"
3"been sealed"
4"been stored"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs238
matches
0"was singing"
1"was giving"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences159
ratio0.057
matches
0"Her hair, once a savage tangle of red curls that she'd pin up with whatever was nearby — pencils, chopsticks, once a plastic straw — was blown straight and copper-blonde, falling like liquid over her shoulders."
1"Niamh Gallagher scanned the bar with quick, assessing eyes — barrister's eyes, the kind that catalogued a room the way an auctioneer priced furniture — and when they landed on Rory, they stopped."
2"The Niamh Gallagher Rory had known rushed everywhere — rushed into rooms, into arguments, into friendships, into love with people who didn't deserve the velocity of her affection."
3"Not empty — full, the way a held breath is full."
4"Rory could see it in the careful architecture of her — the pressed coat, the trained hair, the deleted ring — the way you can see the bones of a demolished house in the foundation that remains."
5"\"Do you know what the worst part was? It wasn't that you disappeared. People disappear. We're not children; I understand that people leave. The worst part was that I knew why. I knew about Evan. I saw the bruise on your collarbone at Sioned's wedding, and you told me you'd fallen against the bathroom doorframe, and I let you tell me that. I let you lie to me because the truth would have required me to do something, and I was terrified — terrified — of doing the wrong thing. And then you were gone, and doing anything became impossible.\""
6"The ghost of something Rory recognized — a smile that started in the left corner and spread like a crack in ice."
7"She'd always had a way of considering things — fully, with her whole face — that made you feel whatever you'd said deserved the weight she was giving it."
8"She picked one up and ate it, and something in her face opened — a window in a room that had been sealed too long."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1314
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount41
adverbRatio0.03120243531202435
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.00684931506849315
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences159
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences159
mean13.11
std13.89
cv1.059
sampleLengths
020
125
243
318
41
51
61
712
810
94
103
1115
124
134
146
154
164
1716
1836
1923
207
2133
224
2318
243
251
2663
277
283
293
3028
3114
324
336
3429
358
3620
3717
389
395
4011
412
4213
437
4418
457
4610
4721
485
4911
50.10% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.3270440251572327
totalSentences159
uniqueOpeners52
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences95
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount22
totalSentences95
matches
0"She sat at the far"
1"She'd asked him once if"
2"He'd smiled and said they"
3"She never asked again."
4"Her hair, once a savage"
5"She carried herself the way"
6"She didn't rush."
7"She stopped a foot away,"
8"Her cheekbones were sharper."
9"She wore a thin gold"
10"She sat without comment, though"
11"He had an instinct for"
12"She drank, a single clean"
13"They'd gone grey."
14"He poured, and this time"
15"She didn't elaborate."
16"She didn't need to."
17"She'd thought that smile was"
18"She'd thought a lot of"
19"She'd always had a way"
ratio0.232
2.11% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount87
totalSentences95
matches
0"The Wednesday crowd at The"
1"She sat at the far"
2"Rory dragged a chip through"
3"She'd asked him once if"
4"He'd smiled and said they"
5"She never asked again."
6"The door opened."
7"A gust of November air"
8"Rory didn't look up."
9"People came and went."
10"That was what doors were"
11"That made her look."
12"The woman in the doorway"
13"Her hair, once a savage"
14"She carried herself the way"
15"Rory's chip hovered halfway to"
16"Niamh Gallagher scanned the bar"
17"Something collapsed behind them."
18"A wall or a dam"
19"The name came out wrong,"
ratio0.916
52.63% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences95
matches
0"Now she thought he might"
ratio0.011
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences45
technicalSentenceCount13
matches
0"Behind the counter, Silas polished the same tumbler he'd been polishing for five minutes, his hazel eyes tracking the football match on the mounted television w…"
1"The woman in the doorway wore a charcoal wool coat that cost more than Rory's rent."
2"She carried herself the way expensive coats teach people to carry themselves: upright, contained, as though the cold wouldn't dare follow her inside."
3"Niamh Gallagher scanned the bar with quick, assessing eyes — barrister's eyes, the kind that catalogued a room the way an auctioneer priced furniture — and when…"
4"The Niamh Gallagher Rory had known rushed everywhere — rushed into rooms, into arguments, into friendships, into love with people who didn't deserve the velocit…"
5"She drank, a single clean swallow, and set it down with the precision of someone who'd trained themselves out of slamming things."
6"Those blue eyes that friends and enemies alike called unnerving in their directness."
7"Rory could see it in the careful architecture of her — the pressed coat, the trained hair, the deleted ring — the way you can see the bones of a demolished hous…"
8"Silas had told her once that every stain on the bar was someone's story, and she'd thought that was sentimental for a man who'd spent thirty years lying for a l…"
9"Silas, who'd stopped pretending not to listen and was leaning against the back counter with his arms crossed, his silver signet ring catching the light."
10"The green neon that bled through the window and painted everything the color of deep water."
11"She'd always had a way of considering things — fully, with her whole face — that made you feel whatever you'd said deserved the weight she was giving it."
12"The sound was rusty, as though it had been stored in a place that didn't get much use, but it was real, and it filled the space between them in a way that two w…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Niamh repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences68
tagDensity0.162
leniency0.324
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.029
78.2650%