Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8V6MCTP54YZXDH7KYFRZ90

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Model:
Aion 2.0
Duration:
1m 2s
Cost:
$0.007242
Provider:
AionLabs

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The third deadbolt gave a reluctant scrape as Rory turned the key. She hadn't expected anyone at this hour, least of all him. Lucien Moreau filled the doorway of Eva's cramped Brick Lane flat, a slice of tailored charcoal suit and slicked-back platinum hair against the chaotic backdrop of books and scrolls. The amber eye caught the weak hall light, the black one seeming to drink it. He leaned on his ivory-handled cane. "Rory." His voice was a low hum, the single syllable weighted with Marseille and memory. She didn't move. The smell of old paper and turmeric from the curry house below clung to the air between them. "You're lost." "Geographically? Unlikely. Socially? A perpetual state." He didn't smile. "May I?" "No." He stepped inside anyway, the cane tapping a soft rhythm on the floorboards. Ptolemy the tabby, previously draped over a stack of grimoires, lifted his head, yawned, and went back to sleep. Traitor. Rory shut the door, her back against it. Three deadbolts. Not enough. "Eva's not here." "I didn't come for Eva." The flat felt smaller with him in it. He took up the oxygen. She remembered that. How a room seemed to contract around his presence, leaving everyone else gasping for space. "You left," she said. The words hung there, simple and accusatory. "Paris required my attention." "Paris required a lot of things, from what I heard." She crossed her arms over her chest. The small crescent scar on her left wrist itched, a phantom pain from a different life. "You didn't call. You didn't write. You vanished." "Communication seemed... unwise." He moved to Eva's cluttered desk, gloved fingers brushing the edge of a parchment. He didn't look at her. "The situation was complex." "Situations with you always are." That got a reaction. A slight tilt of his head, the amber eye fixing on her. "You knew the world I moved in. The rules." "I knew the promises you made." Her voice stayed cool, level. She'd practiced that. "Broken ones have sharp edges, Lucien." He turned fully then, leaning his weight on the cane. The gesture was deceptively casual. She knew the blade inside. "I am here now. That should tell you the nature of my departure was not a choice, but a necessity." "Necessity." She let the word sour in the air. "You have a gift for making selfishness sound like strategy." A flicker in the black eye. Something like anger, or maybe appreciation. "Your ex, Evan. He's in London." The change of subject was a physical blow. The air left her lungs. "What?" "He arrived yesterday. He's been asking questions. In certain circles." Lucien's gaze was steady, assessing. "Circles that, until recently, you were unaware existed." She pushed off the door. "How do you know that?" "Information is my currency, *ma chère*. I trade in it. I heard your name whispered in a place no one should know it. I followed the whisper." He took a step closer. The scent of him, sandalwood and something colder, like stone after rain, cut through the spice and dust. "He is not the man you left in Cardiff. He has... acquired new interests. Dangerous ones." Her mind raced, the cool-headed logic she prided herself on scrambling. Evan here. Asking questions. "What does he want?" "Reclamation, perhaps. Or revenge. The two are often siblings." Another step. He was close enough now that she could see the fine lines at the corners of his eyes, the perfect cut of his suit. "He has aligned himself with a collector. A man who trades in unique... individuals. Your particular talents have drawn notice." "My talents?" A bitter laugh escaped her. "I deliver noodles for Yu-Fei. I read Eva's weird books. I'm not exactly a supernatural commodity." "You think in straight lines, Rory. It is your charm and your flaw." His gloved hand rose, as if to touch her face, but stopped a breath away. "You see a puzzle and you solve it. You look at a locked door and you find the key. That is a rare thing in any world. And in mine, it is a weapon." She didn't flinch. "So you're here to warn me. Out of the goodness of your demonic heart." "I am here," he said, the words dropping like stones, "because his collector works for my father." Silence, thick and sudden, swallowed the flat. The distant clatter of pans from the kitchen below sounded a world away. Ptolemy stirred again, his green eyes now open and watchful. "Your father." The words felt numb on her tongue. "From Avaros." "A displeased entity. Our last... collaboration... cost him a significant investment. He does not forgive debts. He collects them." Lucien's heterochromatic gaze held hers. "Evan is the hook. You are the prize. And I am the son who must either deliver you or suffer the consequences." The confession hung between them, raw and ugly. The hurt of his abandonment curdled into something colder, sharper. Fear. "So this isn't a rescue. It's a negotiation." "It is an alternative." His voice dropped, the French accent softening the edges of the words. "My father expects me to bring you to him. To hand you over to settle my account. I am proposing a different transaction." "Which is?" "We disappear. Together. Before either of them can find you." She stared at him. The attraction was still there, a live wire under her skin, humming with the memory of his hands, his mouth. But so was the betrayal, fresh as the day she'd waited for a call that never came. "Why? Why would you do that? You said it yourself, you'd suffer the consequences." "Some debts," he said, his gaze dropping to her mouth for a fleeting second, "are worth incurring." It was too much. The past, the present, the future collapsing into this cramped, book-choked room. She turned away, her hand going to her scarred wrist, rubbing the old ridge of skin. "You expect me to trust you. After everything." "I expect you to be pragmatic. You are trapped between a vengeful mortal and a demonic patriarch. I am offering a third path." "A path that leads where? With you?" "For now." The cane tapped once. "It is not a perfect solution. But it is the only one that keeps you breathing, and me... marginally in favour." She faced him again. The cool-headed part of her was already analysing, weighing. The part that still felt the ache of his absence wanted to scream. "What's the catch, Lucien? There's always a catch with you." "The catch," he said, moving so swiftly she didn't have time to react, his free hand closing around her upper arm. Not painful, but firm. Inescapable. "Is that we leave now. They are closer than you think." A heavy thud sounded from the stairwell outside the flat. Then another. Not a knock. An impact. Someone was kicking the door downstairs. Lucien's grip tightened. The amber eye gleamed. "It seems," he said, his voice a blade of quiet steel, "our debate is over."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"The cane tapped once [once]"
dialogueSentences56
tagDensity0.304
leniency0.607
rawRatio0.059
effectiveRatio0.036
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1174
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
48.89% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1174
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"chaotic"
count1
1
word"complex"
count1
2
word"weight"
count1
3
word"flicker"
count1
4
word"whisper"
count1
5
word"raced"
count1
6
word"perfect"
count2
7
word"aligned"
count1
8
word"charm"
count1
9
word"silence"
count1
10
word"fleeting"
count1
highlights
0"chaotic"
1"complex"
2"weight"
3"flicker"
4"whisper"
5"raced"
6"perfect"
7"aligned"
8"charm"
9"silence"
10"fleeting"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences81
matches
0"felt the ache"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences81
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences117
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords2
totalWords1174
ratio0.002
matches
0"ma chère"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions14
wordCount670
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity0.6
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory2
Moreau1
Eva2
Brick1
Lane1
Marseille1
Silence1
Lucien4
French1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Moreau"
2"Eva"
3"Lucien"
places
0"Brick"
1"Lane"
2"Marseille"
globalScore1
windowScore1
94.44% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences45
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"Something like anger, or maybe appreciation"
29.64% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.704
wordCount1174
matches
0"not a choice, but a necessity"
1"Not painful, but firm"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences117
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs48
mean24.46
std15.83
cv0.647
sampleLengths
023
150
215
323
411
51
633
715
85
931
1011
114
1241
1326
145
1525
1620
1740
1819
1918
2014
2123
2210
2366
2419
2555
2623
2762
2817
2917
3030
3111
3246
3327
3439
352
3610
3755
3817
3940
4023
417
4227
4336
4437
4517
466
4722
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences81
matches(empty)
83.04% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs114
matches
0"was already analysing"
1"was kicking"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences117
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount675
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"cramped, book-choked room."
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.035555555555555556
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.007407407407407408
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences117
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences117
mean10.03
std7.25
cv0.723
sampleLengths
012
111
229
315
46
515
63
718
82
99
102
111
1213
1319
141
158
162
172
183
195
208
215
223
2315
244
257
264
2717
2816
298
3017
315
324
335
344
3512
369
3711
383
396
4010
415
425
4320
449
4510
466
476
486
498
64.67% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.4188034188034188
totalSentences117
uniqueOpeners49
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences70
matches(empty)
ratio0
42.86% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount31
totalSentences70
matches
0"She hadn't expected anyone at"
1"He leaned on his ivory-handled"
2"His voice was a low"
3"She didn't move."
4"He didn't smile"
5"He stepped inside anyway, the"
6"He took up the oxygen."
7"She remembered that."
8"She crossed her arms over"
9"He moved to Eva's cluttered"
10"He didn't look at her."
11"Her voice stayed cool, level"
12"She'd practiced that."
13"He turned fully then, leaning"
14"She knew the blade inside."
15"She let the word sour"
16"She pushed off the door."
17"He took a step closer"
18"Her mind raced, the cool-headed"
19"He was close enough now"
ratio0.443
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount65
totalSentences70
matches
0"The third deadbolt gave a"
1"She hadn't expected anyone at"
2"Lucien Moreau filled the doorway"
3"The amber eye caught the"
4"He leaned on his ivory-handled"
5"His voice was a low"
6"She didn't move."
7"The smell of old paper"
8"He didn't smile"
9"He stepped inside anyway, the"
10"Ptolemy the tabby, previously draped"
11"Rory shut the door, her"
12"The flat felt smaller with"
13"He took up the oxygen."
14"She remembered that."
15"The words hung there, simple"
16"She crossed her arms over"
17"The small crescent scar on"
18"He moved to Eva's cluttered"
19"He didn't look at her."
ratio0.929
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences70
matches(empty)
ratio0
83.33% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences24
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"How a room seemed to contract around his presence, leaving everyone else gasping for space."
1"She turned away, her hand going to her scarred wrist, rubbing the old ridge of skin."
7.35% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"he said, the words dropping like stones,"
1"His voice dropped, the French accent softening the edges of the words"
2"he said, his gaze dropping to her mouth for a fleeting second,"
3"he said, his voice a blade of quiet steel,"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences56
tagDensity0.089
leniency0.179
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
78.2745%