Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8V80CCZK9AVRJ2HBHVD39G

Run Details

Duration:
1m 33s
Cost:
$0.087375
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The Tuesday crowd at The Raven's Nest was thin enough that Rory could hear the ice settling in her glass. She sat at the far end of the bar, jacket still damp from the rain, a stack of delivery receipts fanning out beside her elbow. The green neon from the sign outside bled through the window and pooled on the countertop, giving everything a sickly underwater glow. Behind her, the old maps on the walls curled at their edges like they were recoiling from the cigarette smoke of decades past. Silas polished a pint glass with a cloth that had seen better years. He didn't look up when he spoke. "You going to nurse that all night, or should I put a candle in it?" "I'm savoring." "You're brooding. Different animal." He set the glass down and leaned against the back bar, the wood creaking under his weight. His signet ring caught the light as he folded his arms. "What's the damage?" "Nothing. Long shift. Yu-Fei had me running to Hackney twice." "Hackney." He said it the way other people said root canal. "That woman's going to run you into the ground." The door opened. Rory didn't turn — she'd learned that particular discipline from Silas himself, though he'd never said it outright. You pick up habits from people who've spent lifetimes reading rooms. Cold air knifed in with the sound of Frith Street traffic, then the door swung shut and the bar returned to its amber quiet. Footsteps. A woman's heels, uneven on the warped floorboards, the kind of walk that said she wasn't used to the shoes or the neighborhood. Rory tracked the sound to a spot about four stools down, heard the scrape of someone settling in. "Could I get a gin and tonic? Hendrick's, if you have it." Rory's hand stopped halfway to her glass. The voice had a lift to it, a specific music — vowels that started in the chest and rose, the way people from the valleys spoke when they'd spent years sanding down the accent but couldn't quite kill it. She knew that voice. She'd sat next to it in lecture halls, heard it cracking jokes in library stairwells, listened to it go hoarse at rugby matches in the Arms Park cold. She turned. The woman four stools down had auburn hair cut into a sharp bob that framed a face Rory almost didn't recognize. Not because it had aged — it had, the way all faces do, the softness around the jaw firming into something more deliberate — but because of what sat behind the eyes. Megan Rees had always looked like someone about to laugh. The woman at the bar looked like someone who'd forgotten how. Megan noticed her at the same moment. Her lips parted. Her hand, reaching for the drink Silas was already building, froze in the air. "Rory?" "Meg." A silence opened between them like a crack in a wall. Silas glanced from one to the other, set the gin and tonic on the bar with the precision of a man defusing something, and drifted to the far end without a word. His limp was barely perceptible as he went. Megan's mouth worked through several expressions before settling on one that might have been a smile in better lighting. "I don't — what are you doing here?" "I live upstairs." "You live above a bar in Soho." "It has its charms." Megan looked around at the black-and-white photographs, the maps with their faded trade routes, the ceiling stain shaped vaguely like Portugal. Her gaze came back to Rory with something careful in it. Something measured. "You look different." "It's been four years." "Three and a half. I counted." Megan picked up her drink. The ice rattled. "Your mum told my mum you'd moved to London. That's about all anyone got. Like you'd entered witness protection." Rory took a sip of her own drink, let the burn settle, let the silence do its work. She wasn't going to explain. Not the way Megan wanted her to — neatly, chronologically, with the kind of emotional resolution that made for a good story at someone's kitchen table. "I needed a change." "A change." Megan repeated the word like she was testing it for structural integrity. "You were six months from finishing your degree. Your father had already talked to Hargreaves about a training contract. You had that flat with — " She stopped. A flicker crossed her face, quick as a bird's shadow. "With Evan." "I wasn't going to say it." "You were. It's fine." It wasn't fine. Rory felt the old architecture of it shift inside her chest — not the pain itself but the memory of the shape pain had once occupied, like pressing a tongue to the socket where a tooth used to be. Megan rotated her glass a quarter turn. "I called you. After you left. Must have rung twenty times that first week." "I know." "You never picked up." "I know that too." "I thought you were dead, Rory. I actually — for about three days I genuinely thought something had happened to you. I went round to the flat and Evan said you'd gone. Just gone. Packed a bag and left. He had this look on his face like he was the victim in all of it, and I wanted to — " Her jaw tightened. She took a drink. "I should have pushed harder. Before. When things were — I could see it, you know. Toward the end. The way you flinched when your phone buzzed. How you stopped coming out." The words landed in the space between them and stayed there, vibrating faintly. "That wasn't your job, Meg." "No. But it was what friends do, isn't it." Not a question. An indictment — self-directed, worn smooth from years of handling. Rory studied her. The sharp bob. The dark blazer that fit too well to be off the rack. The careful makeup that stopped just short of severe. Megan Rees, who'd once shown up to a Constitutional Law exam in a Stereophonics t-shirt and flip-flops, who'd kept a jar of Nutella in her desk drawer and called it emergency rations. "You look like you're doing well. Professionally." "Hargreaves. Third year associate. Corporate division." Megan's voice flattened out as she said it, the way people's voices do when they're reciting something they've been asked about too many times. "Your father's firm. I took the training contract." "The one he'd arranged for me." "Your name still came up in the interview. Brendan Carter's daughter. They asked me if I knew you. I said we'd studied together. Past tense." She turned on her stool to face Rory fully. Under the bar's low light, the shadows beneath her eyes looked like bruises. "I'm in London for a conference. Three days at a hotel in Mayfair that costs more per night than my first car. I should be at the reception right now. Networking. Shaking hands." "Why aren't you?" "Because I walked past this place and the green light caught my eye and something in my body just said stop." Megan's voice cracked along a fault line Rory hadn't expected. "I'm so tired, Rory. I'm so bloody tired all the time and I don't know when that started." The confession hung in the air like smoke. At the other end of the bar, Silas busied himself with something behind the counter, his back turned, giving them the privacy of a man who understood that some conversations needed room to breathe. Rory looked at her old friend — at the expensive blazer and the careful hair and the dark-ringed eyes — and recognized something she'd seen in her own mirror two years ago. The particular exhaustion of becoming what was expected. Of filling a shape someone else had cut. "When did you last have a day off?" "I don't — I don't remember. March, maybe? I took a Saturday." "A Saturday." "Half a Saturday. I went in after lunch." Rory exhaled through her nose. She reached over and slid the stack of delivery receipts aside, clearing a space on the bar between them. A small gesture, but it mattered — the removal of a barrier, however thin. "You want to hear something ridiculous? I deliver Chinese food. Three nights a week, sometimes four. On a bicycle, in the rain, to people who tip in exact change and complain if the soup's gone cold." Megan blinked. "You're joking." "Golden Empress, Wardour Street. If you've ever ordered the char siu, I might have brought it to your door." A sound escaped Megan's throat — not quite a laugh, not quite a sob, something native to the territory between. "Brendan Carter's daughter delivers Chinese food." "Brendan Carter's daughter does a lot of things Brendan Carter doesn't know about." Rory turned the crescent scar on her left wrist toward the light without thinking about it, an old unconscious habit. "I'm not practicing law. I'm not finishing the degree. I'm not the person you knew, Meg. And I know that's — I know it looks like failure from where you're sitting." "From where I'm sitting, it looks like you can breathe." The words landed differently than Rory expected. She looked at Megan and saw something raw there, something the expensive blazer couldn't cover. Envy, maybe. Or the cousin of envy — the grief of recognizing a freedom you'd traded away before you understood its value. "I miss you," Megan said. "I've missed you this whole time and I've been furious about it. Both things, simultaneously, for three and a half years. Do you know how exhausting that is on top of everything else?" "Yeah. I do." "Because you've felt it too, or because you're being polite?" "When have I ever been polite?" This time the sound Megan made was closer to a laugh. Her shoulders dropped half an inch. She picked up her gin and tonic and took a real drink — not a sip, not a measured taste, but the kind of pull that said the night had shifted into something unplanned. Silas materialized at their end of the bar with the quiet efficiency that had no doubt served him in another life. He set down a small bowl of mixed nuts, refilled Rory's glass without being asked, and paused just long enough to catch Rory's eye. The look he gave her was unreadable to anyone who didn't know him — but Rory did. It said: This one matters. Don't bolt. She gave the barest nod. "I'm sorry I disappeared," Rory said. The words came out without rehearsal, rough-edged, and she let them stand that way. "I couldn't take anyone with me. I could barely take myself." "I know." Megan's voice was quiet. "I know that now. I didn't know it then. Then it just felt like being left." "It was. That's what it was. I left. Everyone." "Including yourself, it sounds like." Rory considered that. The black-and-white photographs on the wall behind Megan showed faces she didn't know — strangers at parties in decades past, mid-laugh, holding drinks, frozen in moments they'd probably forgotten by the next morning. Time did that. Turned everything sepia. Softened the edges until you couldn't remember whether you'd been happy or just young. "I'm building something new," she said. "It's small. It's not impressive. Nobody at Hargreaves would understand it. But it's mine." Megan set her glass down. She looked at Rory with an expression that held the full weight of every unanswered phone call, every birthday message sent into the void, every Friday night at the pub with an empty chair where someone used to sit. Then she reached across the cleared space on the bar and laid her hand palm-up. An offering. A bridge made of five fingers and a history. Rory looked at it. The nails were bitten — chewed ragged, the cuticles torn. The hands of a third-year associate at a prestigious firm. The hands of someone drowning at a respectable pace. She put her hand in Megan's. The touch was cool, brief. Enough. "I'm here until Thursday," Megan said. "I know where to find good Chinese food." The green neon pulsed against the window. Somewhere in the back of the bar, ice shifted in a bucket. Silas had moved off again, a ghost with a limp and a cloth over his shoulder, leaving them to the fragile, terrifying work of two people deciding whether the bridge between who they were and who they'd become could hold any weight at all.
created_at"2026-02-24T22:10:19.157Z" 2/24/2026, 10:10:19 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences67
tagDensity0.209
leniency0.418
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2073
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
73.47% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2073
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"weight"
count3
1
word"footsteps"
count1
2
word"silence"
count2
3
word"measured"
count2
4
word"flicker"
count1
5
word"unreadable"
count1
6
word"pulsed"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"footsteps"
2"silence"
3"measured"
4"flicker"
5"unreadable"
6"pulsed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences110
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences110
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences161
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen61
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2098
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions23
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions65
wordCount1405
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity1.57
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Tuesday1
Raven1
Nest1
Rory22
Silas7
Frith1
Street1
Arms1
Park1
Rees2
Portugal1
Megan21
Constitutional1
Law1
Stereophonics1
Nutella1
Friday1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Silas"
2"Rees"
3"Megan"
places
0"Raven"
1"Frith"
2"Street"
3"Arms"
4"Park"
5"Portugal"
6"Constitutional"
7"Stereophonics"
globalScore0.717
windowScore0.5
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences75
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"quite kill it"
1"looked like someone about to laugh"
2"looked like someone who'd forgotten how"
3"looked like bruises"
4"not quite a laugh, not quite a sob, something native to the territory between"
5"not quite a sob, something native to the territory between"
57.01% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords1.43
wordCount2098
matches
0"not the pain itself but the memory of the shape pain had once occupied, like pressin"
1"not a sip, not a measured taste, but the kind of pull"
2"not a measured taste, but the kind of pull"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences161
matches
0"knew that voice"
1"understood that some"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs82
mean25.59
std24.32
cv0.95
sampleLengths
090
120
215
32
435
510
620
756
842
912
1078
112
1274
1324
141
151
1651
1719
188
193
207
214
2234
233
244
2533
2649
274
2852
292
306
314
3242
3321
342
354
364
37100
3813
395
4022
4159
427
4338
446
4580
463
4749
4842
4948
95.69% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences110
matches
0"been asked"
1"being asked"
2"were bitten "
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs220
matches
0"were recoiling"
1"was already building"
2"was testing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount16
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences14
totalSentences161
ratio0.087
matches
0"Rory didn't turn — she'd learned that particular discipline from Silas himself, though he'd never said it outright."
1"The voice had a lift to it, a specific music — vowels that started in the chest and rose, the way people from the valleys spoke when they'd spent years sanding down the accent but couldn't quite kill it."
2"Not because it had aged — it had, the way all faces do, the softness around the jaw firming into something more deliberate — but because of what sat behind the eyes."
3"Not the way Megan wanted her to — neatly, chronologically, with the kind of emotional resolution that made for a good story at someone's kitchen table."
4"Rory felt the old architecture of it shift inside her chest — not the pain itself but the memory of the shape pain had once occupied, like pressing a tongue to the socket where a tooth used to be."
5"An indictment — self-directed, worn smooth from years of handling."
6"Rory looked at her old friend — at the expensive blazer and the careful hair and the dark-ringed eyes — and recognized something she'd seen in her own mirror two years ago."
7"A small gesture, but it mattered — the removal of a barrier, however thin."
8"A sound escaped Megan's throat — not quite a laugh, not quite a sob, something native to the territory between."
9"Or the cousin of envy — the grief of recognizing a freedom you'd traded away before you understood its value."
10"She picked up her gin and tonic and took a real drink — not a sip, not a measured taste, but the kind of pull that said the night had shifted into something unplanned."
11"The look he gave her was unreadable to anyone who didn't know him — but Rory did."
12"The black-and-white photographs on the wall behind Megan showed faces she didn't know — strangers at parties in decades past, mid-laugh, holding drinks, frozen in moments they'd probably forgotten by the next morning."
13"The nails were bitten — chewed ragged, the cuticles torn."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1400
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount41
adverbRatio0.029285714285714286
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.0064285714285714285
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences161
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences161
mean13.03
std11.02
cv0.846
sampleLengths
020
125
222
323
413
57
615
72
821
911
103
1110
1211
139
143
1518
1611
1724
181
1923
2018
2112
227
2339
244
2528
262
2721
2832
2910
3011
317
323
3314
341
351
3611
3732
388
3919
408
413
427
434
4421
4511
462
473
484
4911
43.48% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats15
diversityRatio0.3167701863354037
totalSentences161
uniqueOpeners51
68.73% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences97
matches
0"Then she reached across the"
1"Somewhere in the back of"
ratio0.021
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences97
matches
0"She sat at the far"
1"He didn't look up when"
2"He set the glass down"
3"His signet ring caught the"
4"He said it the way"
5"You pick up habits from"
6"She knew that voice."
7"She'd sat next to it"
8"Her lips parted."
9"Her hand, reaching for the"
10"His limp was barely perceptible"
11"Her gaze came back to"
12"She wasn't going to explain."
13"It wasn't fine."
14"Her jaw tightened"
15"She took a drink."
16"She turned on her stool"
17"She reached over and slid"
18"She looked at Megan and"
19"Her shoulders dropped half an"
ratio0.268
27.01% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount84
totalSentences97
matches
0"The Tuesday crowd at The"
1"She sat at the far"
2"The green neon from the"
3"Silas polished a pint glass"
4"He didn't look up when"
5"He set the glass down"
6"His signet ring caught the"
7"He said it the way"
8"The door opened."
9"Rory didn't turn — she'd"
10"You pick up habits from"
11"A woman's heels, uneven on"
12"Rory tracked the sound to"
13"Rory's hand stopped halfway to"
14"The voice had a lift"
15"She knew that voice."
16"She'd sat next to it"
17"The woman four stools down"
18"Megan Rees had always looked"
19"The woman at the bar"
ratio0.866
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences97
matches(empty)
ratio0
5.49% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences52
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"You pick up habits from people who've spent lifetimes reading rooms."
1"A woman's heels, uneven on the warped floorboards, the kind of walk that said she wasn't used to the shoes or the neighborhood."
2"Her hand, reaching for the drink Silas was already building, froze in the air."
3"Not the way Megan wanted her to — neatly, chronologically, with the kind of emotional resolution that made for a good story at someone's kitchen table."
4"Megan Rees, who'd once shown up to a Constitutional Law exam in a Stereophonics t-shirt and flip-flops, who'd kept a jar of Nutella in her desk drawer and calle…"
5"At the other end of the bar, Silas busied himself with something behind the counter, his back turned, giving them the privacy of a man who understood that some …"
6"She picked up her gin and tonic and took a real drink — not a sip, not a measured taste, but the kind of pull that said the night had shifted into something unp…"
7"The look he gave her was unreadable to anyone who didn't know him — but Rory did."
8"She looked at Rory with an expression that held the full weight of every unanswered phone call, every birthday message sent into the void, every Friday night at…"
9"Silas had moved off again, a ghost with a limp and a cloth over his shoulder, leaving them to the fragile, terrifying work of two people deciding whether the br…"
89.29% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"He set, the wood creaking under his weight"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Megan repeated (repeat)"
1"Megan's voice flattened (flatten)"
dialogueSentences67
tagDensity0.104
leniency0.209
rawRatio0.286
effectiveRatio0.06
77.0055%