Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8VCS9TZN7V70WTSPY495R4

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1m 17s
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$0.087717
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The third deadbolt always stuck. Rory gave it a hard shove and threw the door open, already halfway through saying Eva's name, a stack of folded invoices tucked under her arm. Lucien Moreau stood in the hallway instead. The ivory handle of his cane caught the weak stairwell light. His platinum hair was slicked back as always, his charcoal suit immaculate despite the three flights of stairs he'd clearly climbed without breaking a sweat. One amber eye, one black. Both fixed on her. She didn't step back. She didn't let herself. "You've got the wrong flat." "Maison d'Eva Bellamy, Brick Lane, arrondissement..." He glanced at the peeling number on the door. "Non. I have precisely the right flat." She blocked the doorway with her shoulder. Behind her, Ptolemy padded across a stack of research notes, knocked a scroll to the floor, and regarded it with supreme indifference. "Eva's not here." "I know." The curry smell from the restaurant below drifted up the stairwell, warm and thick with turmeric and something burning at the edges. She hadn't eaten. She'd been working her way through Eva's notes since noon, piecing together fragments of something that felt like a warning but read like a riddle. "Then you have nothing to do here, Lucien." "I came for you." Four words, no preamble, no apology wrapped around them. That was Lucien. He said things the way other people laid down cards, face up, unhurried, watching you decide how to play. She felt the old pull, low and inconvenient, and folded it away. "We said everything that needed saying." She began to swing the door shut. His cane touched the frame. Not aggressive. Just present. "You said everything," he said. "I stood in a doorway much like this one, Aurora, and listened." She hated the way he used her full name. He was the only one who did. Everyone else said Rory, and it bounced off her harmlessly, familiar as a nickname could be. Aurora in his mouth was something else. It landed differently. She stepped back and let him in, because the alternative was arguing in a hallway that smelled of old carpet and someone else's dinner, and she was too tired for that. He moved through Eva's flat the way he moved everywhere, unhurried, taking inventory without appearing to. His mismatched eyes swept the room: the towers of books threatening to avalanche from every surface, the handwritten notes tacked in overlapping layers across an entire wall, the half-drunk cups of tea marking Eva's research trail like breadcrumbs. Ptolemy leaped onto his shoulder. Lucien blinked. Then, with extraordinary dignity, he lifted the tabby down and set him on a chair. "You haven't slept," he said. "I slept fine." His gaze drifted to the pile of notes at her elbow, the pen still uncapped beside them, the three empty mugs and the half-eaten biscuit she'd forgotten about. He didn't say anything. He didn't need to. "What do you want?" She sat back down at Eva's crowded little table, the chair scraping against the uneven floorboards. "Genuinely, Lucien. Because if Eva sent you—" "She didn't." "If someone sent you—" "No one sends me anywhere." He set the cane against the wall and turned to face her properly. "I am here because three weeks ago you walked out of my office, and I let you go, and I have since been considering whether that was the most sophisticated mistake of my admittedly distinguished career." The lamp on Eva's desk threw warm light across half his face, left the other in shadow. He was frustrating to look at directly. Always had been. "You lied to me." "I withheld information." "Lucien." "They are categorically different things." He pulled out the other chair, Eva's chair, buried under a geology textbook and an empty cashmere scarf, deposited both onto the floor without ceremony and sat. Like he lived here. Like any space he entered became his by some quiet act of possession. "In my world, everything is currency. You knew that when you walked into it." "I wasn't currency to you." It slipped out before she could redirect it. His expression didn't change, but something shifted in the amber eye. The black one remained unreadable as always. "No," he said. "You were not." The flat settled around them. Outside, a moped buzzed past on Brick Lane, and someone below slid a tray into an oven with a metallic clang. Ptolemy, recovered from his eviction from the chair, wound himself once around Lucien's ankles and disappeared under the sofa. "You should have told me about the Lykanthos deal." Her voice came out steadier than she felt. "I walked into that meeting blind. They knew about the Aldgate job, Lucien. They knew my name. Things only you could have—" "I know." "So." He held her gaze. "So." She pressed her palms flat against the table. The crescent scar on her left wrist caught the lamplight, that small curved mark she'd stopped noticing years ago, except when something put her on the edge of a thing she didn't know how to cross. "You put me in a room with people who could have hurt me," she said. "To protect an asset." "To protect an asset and to protect you. The two were not mutually exclusive." "Don't do that. Don't make it sound elegant." "It wasn't." He leaned forward, elbows on knees, and for once there was nothing arranged about him. No performance of composure. "It was a bad call dressed in good logic. I know what it cost. I'm not here to argue otherwise." She wanted to be angrier than she was. That was the problem with Lucien. He never deflected, never ran a defence so flimsy she could dismantle it and feel righteous. He simply handed her the truth and let it sit there, and it turned out that truth was much harder to stay furious at than denial. "Then why are you here?" He reached into his jacket pocket and set something on the table between them. A small, folded piece of paper. Her handwriting. She recognised it immediately, the corner she'd torn from a notebook six months ago in a very different room, and written a name on, and passed to him across a different table entirely. The beginning of all of this. "This is how it started," he said. "You asked me for help finding someone. I found them. Everything after that was consequence, and some of those consequences were mine to own." She stared at the paper. Didn't touch it. "I'm not asking you to forgive me," he said. "That would be presumptuous, and I've been told I'm already unreasonably presumptuous." "By everyone who's ever met you." "By one particular person I respect." The corner of his mouth moved. Not quite a smile. Nothing so simple. "I came because Eva's intel is hitting a wall that your particular style of thinking could break through. And because—" He stopped. Adjusted. Started again. "And because I was wrong. I wanted you to hear it without a hallway between us." She sat with that. He waited, which was something she'd learned about him: he could be still in a way that had nothing to do with patience. It was precision. The deliberate absence of pressure. She picked up the piece of paper. Unfolded it. Stared at her own handwriting, that name she'd been hunting when this whole thing had begun, before Lykanthos, before the fallout. "This wall Eva's research hit," she said. "What's on the other side of it?" His mismatched eyes held hers across the lamplight. "Something that has been looking for you since before you arrived in London," he said. "And I think it's getting close." She folded the paper again. Set it down. Picked up the uncapped pen. "Then you'd better start from the beginning." Lucien reached for his cane, drew a slim leather notebook from his inner jacket pocket and set it beside the scattered pages on the table. He opened it to a page dense with neat, precise French handwriting. At the bottom of the page, circled twice in red ink, was her name. Not her real one. The other one. Malphora.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
92.67% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1364
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"precisely"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"precisely"
1"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
92.67% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1364
totalAiIsms2
found
0
word"familiar"
count1
1
word"unreadable"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"unreadable"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences99
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences99
filterMatches
0"decide"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences133
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1364
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions18
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions26
wordCount973
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity0.72
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Eva7
Moreau1
Ptolemy3
Lucien6
Rory2
Like2
Brick1
Lane1
Adjusted1
Lykanthos1
French1
persons
0"Eva"
1"Moreau"
2"Ptolemy"
3"Lucien"
4"Rory"
5"French"
places
0"Brick"
1"Lane"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences53
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like a warning but read like a rid"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1364
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences133
matches
0"out that truth"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs69
mean19.77
std17.39
cv0.88
sampleLengths
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126
27
345
48
55
622
729
83
92
1050
118
124
1331
1412
1513
169
1717
1842
1931
2059
2117
225
233
2428
258
2627
272
284
2954
3027
314
323
331
3463
355
3626
376
3845
3939
402
411
425
4344
4419
4514
468
4741
4856
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100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences99
matches
0"was slicked"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs181
matches
0"was arguing"
1"was frustrating"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences133
ratio0
matches(empty)
98.21% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount975
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount41
adverbRatio0.04205128205128205
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.009230769230769232
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences133
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences133
mean10.26
std8.66
cv0.845
sampleLengths
05
126
27
311
425
55
64
74
84
95
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117
127
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143
152
1622
173
1825
198
204
219
223
2319
2412
2513
265
272
282
295
3012
319
327
3316
347
353
3631
3716
3838
395
402
4115
425
433
4428
454
464
4720
487
492
59.15% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.39097744360902253
totalSentences133
uniqueOpeners52
81.30% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences82
matches
0"Then, with extraordinary dignity, he"
1"Always had been."
ratio0.024
10.24% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount43
totalSentences82
matches
0"His platinum hair was slicked"
1"She didn't step back."
2"She didn't let herself."
3"He glanced at the peeling"
4"She blocked the doorway with"
5"She hadn't eaten."
6"She'd been working her way"
7"He said things the way"
8"She felt the old pull,"
9"She began to swing the"
10"His cane touched the frame."
11"She hated the way he"
12"He was the only one"
13"It landed differently."
14"She stepped back and let"
15"He moved through Eva's flat"
16"His mismatched eyes swept the"
17"His gaze drifted to the"
18"He didn't say anything."
19"He didn't need to."
ratio0.524
57.56% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount66
totalSentences82
matches
0"The third deadbolt always stuck."
1"Rory gave it a hard"
2"Lucien Moreau stood in the"
3"The ivory handle of his"
4"His platinum hair was slicked"
5"Both fixed on her."
6"She didn't step back."
7"She didn't let herself."
8"He glanced at the peeling"
9"She blocked the doorway with"
10"The curry smell from the"
11"She hadn't eaten."
12"She'd been working her way"
13"That was Lucien."
14"He said things the way"
15"She felt the old pull,"
16"She began to swing the"
17"His cane touched the frame."
18"She hated the way he"
19"He was the only one"
ratio0.805
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences82
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences29
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"She'd been working her way through Eva's notes since noon, piecing together fragments of something that felt like a warning but read like a riddle."
95.59% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"She sat, the chair scraping against the uneven floorboards"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.157
leniency0.314
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
89.0239%