Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8VK1P4XB7VEFH089371ENA

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Duration:
1m 25s
Cost:
$0.087115
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Amazon Bedrock

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The fluorescent work lamps threw harsh white circles against tunnel walls that hadn't seen a scheduled train since 1924. Detective Harlow Quinn ducked under the police tape strung between two rusted stanchions and let her eyes adjust to the contrast — bright pools surrounded by a darkness that seemed to push back. The platform tiles, once cream and green in the old Northern Line style, were cracked and furred with decades of grime. Except in patches. Whole sections of the floor looked scrubbed clean in irregular shapes, as though someone had dragged heavy things across them recently and often. She pulled on nitrile gloves and walked the platform edge. Below, on the track bed, a forensic tech in a white coverall was photographing what the call had described as a body. Male, mid-thirties, no identification. Found by a Transport for London engineer doing a structural survey. "Careful on the lip there, Detective. The concrete's rotten in places." She looked down at the tech, a young man with a face mask bunched under his chin. He pointed to a section where the platform edge had crumbled to reveal corroded rebar like exposed bone. "How long has he been here?" "Hard to say. Pathologist will have a better guess, but the decomp's strange. Skin's almost mummified in places, bloated in others. Like two different environments acted on the same body." Quinn crouched. The dead man lay face up between the rails. He wore a charcoal wool coat — expensive cut, recent manufacture. His shoes were leather brogues, the soles barely worn. Not the wardrobe of someone who wandered into an abandoned station to die. His hands were open at his sides, palms up, and on his left wrist she could see the faint, geometric marks of something that wasn't a tattoo. Scarification. Deliberate. The shapes were too precise, too intentional. She pulled out her phone and photographed the wrist markings from three angles, then stood and swept the platform again. The cleaned patches on the floor. She'd seen crime scenes in squats, in tunnels, under bridges. Places where the homeless or the desperate made camp. This wasn't that. No bedrolls, no blackened fire spots, no litter. Whatever had scraped these tiles clean had been organized. Repeated. The marks followed a rough grid pattern, as if stalls or tables had been set up and broken down many times. Her watch — the worn leather band soft as a second skin against her pulse — read 11:47 PM. She'd been pulled from her flat, from a glass of mediocre Rioja and the cold Morris file she kept returning to like a tongue finds a broken tooth. Three years and she still couldn't let it go. Three years and certain details from that night still appeared in other cases, other bodies. Details that made her superiors uncomfortable when she mentioned them. Geometric scarring. Unexplained decomposition patterns. Locations that shouldn't have foot traffic but clearly did. Footsteps echoed from the entrance tunnel. Quinn turned and saw a short woman navigating the uneven ground with the overcautious steps of someone unused to police tape. Curly red hair caught the lamplight. Round glasses. A leather satchel slung across her body, its flap bristling with loose papers. DI Fogarty, who'd been speaking with the TfL engineer near the far wall, intercepted the woman and gestured toward Quinn. "Detective Quinn, this is Dr. Kowalski. British Museum. I called her in — she consults for us on the, ah, unusual ones." Eva Kowalski tucked a strand of hair behind her left ear and extended her other hand. Her grip was firm, her palm cold. "Doctor." "Detective. Patrick said there were markings on the body you couldn't identify." Quinn glanced at Fogarty. Patrick. First-name basis. She filed that away. "Down on the tracks. Mind your step." They descended a service ladder at the platform's end. Up close, the body's condition was worse than it had appeared from above. The mummified patches ran along the man's right side — the arm, the ribs visible through the shrunken coat fabric, the right half of the face drawn tight over the skull. His left side retained moisture, the flesh swollen and discolored. The dividing line between the two states ran almost perfectly down his midline. Eva stopped two feet from the body and stared. "You've seen something like this before." Quinn didn't frame it as a question. "Not on a person." Eva crouched and opened her satchel, pulling out a Moleskine notebook already dense with handwriting. She flipped pages. "The British Museum received a shipment of Egyptian canopic jars in 2019 that displayed similar bifurcated deterioration. One half perfectly preserved. The other half rotted beyond recovery. The prevailing theory was a storage error — different humidity conditions on different sides of the same shelf." "And the unprevailing theory?" Eva looked at her over the rims of her glasses. Green eyes, steady. "That the jars had been exposed to a localized environmental anomaly. Something that existed in one very specific space and bled different conditions on either side of a boundary." Quinn turned that over. "A boundary." "Like a door left half-open. Different air on each side." Fogarty called down from the platform. "Dr. Kowalski, the wrist markings — can you make anything of them?" Eva moved to the dead man's left hand. She studied the scarification without touching it, tilting her head to catch the light at different angles. Her lips moved slightly — counting, Quinn realized. Counting the lines, the intersections. "These are protective sigils." Eva's voice had changed. Flatter. Professional. "They're not from any mainstream occult tradition I can identify quickly, but the structure is apotropaic. Meant to ward." "Ward against what?" "That I'd need time and my reference materials to answer." Quinn watched the younger woman's face. Something behind the academic composure. A recognition that went deeper than professional expertise. Eva knew this symbology better than she was letting on. Her hand had gone to the satchel strap, fingers white-knuckled. Quinn straightened and walked along the track bed, away from the body, letting her lamp sweep the ground. Ballast stones, filth, the usual archaeology of a tunnel abandoned for a century. Then something caught the light. She crouched and picked it up with gloved fingers. A small brass compass, its casing green with verdigris. The face was etched with markings similar to the ones on the dead man's wrist — the same geometric vocabulary, though arranged differently. The needle under the cracked glass didn't point north. It swiveled in a slow, purposeful arc toward the tunnel wall to her right and held there, quivering. "Dr. Kowalski." Eva came over and stopped dead when she saw the object in Quinn's palm. The color left her freckled cheeks. "You recognize this." "It's —" Eva tucked her hair behind her ear again. Twice in five minutes. "It's a navigational tool. Rare. I've seen them described in texts, never in person." "What does it navigate to?" Eva met her eyes. Calculation there. Risk assessment. How much to say. "Places that are hard to find." Quinn pocketed the compass. "I'm going to need a better answer than that, Doctor." She turned back to the platform and studied the clean patches on the tiles from below, gaining a new angle. From down here, she could see something else. Boot prints. Dozens of them, layered, tracking through the grime in concentrated paths between the clean zones. Not the shuffling, random prints of trespassers. Foot traffic. Organized foot traffic, moving in patterns consistent with a crowd navigating between fixed points. Like shoppers at a market. She climbed back up and walked the grid of clean patches. Rectangular. Uniform spacing. She counted eighteen distinct areas where the floor was worn smooth. Eighteen stalls. This wasn't a crime scene that happened to be in an abandoned station. The station was being used. Regularly. And the body on the tracks was someone who'd come here for a purpose and met an end that didn't match any cause of death she could name. "Fogarty." The DI walked over, coffee in hand, his tie loose at his throat. "Run a check on this station. Every access point, every maintenance log, every reported trespass complaint in the last five years. I want utility records — has anyone been tapping electric down here? These lamps are ours, but those—" She pointed to a row of hooks drilled into the tile wall at regular intervals, each with a residue ring from where a hanging lamp had left soot marks on the glaze. "Those aren't." Fogarty frowned. "You think someone's running an operation down here?" "I think someone's running a bloody shopping center down here. And our dead man was a customer." She looked at Eva, who stood at the platform edge gazing down at the body with an expression that wasn't academic detachment. It was grief. Distant, managed, but present. She knew this man, or she knew what he'd been. One of her kind. Researchers. Seekers. People who chased things that Quinn's training said didn't exist but that eighteen years of increasingly strange case files refused to let her dismiss. "The scarring on his wrist," Quinn said, pitching her voice so only Eva could hear. "It's not just protective. It's an entry requirement. A ticket of some kind." Eva's eyes widened behind her glasses. "What makes you say that?" "Because you ward your home. You ward something you want to keep safe, something static. But he's got those marks on his wrist, where they'd be visible. Easy to show. Meant to be checked." Quinn gestured at the platform. "Eighteen stalls. Lamp hooks. A crowd's worth of boot prints in organized lanes. A navigational tool that doesn't point north but points at that wall." She aimed her finger at the section of tunnel the brass compass had indicated. "And a man whose body looks like it was caught between two different places at the same time." Eva said nothing. "Morris. My partner. Three years ago." Quinn kept her voice level, though something in her chest had begun to hammer. "He died in a basement in Southwark. The pathologist couldn't determine cause of death. His body showed no trauma, no toxicology, nothing — except similar scarification on his left forearm that nobody in the department could explain, and that nobody wanted to talk about." "Detective—" "I have been pulling threads for three years, Doctor. Every one of them leads somewhere that makes my colleagues uncomfortable and my superiors suggest I take leave." Quinn stepped closer. "You walked onto my crime scene and identified rare protective sigils in under thirty seconds. You recognized that compass on sight. And when you looked at the dead man, you weren't confused. You were sad." Eva's hand found her satchel strap again. Knuckles bloodless. "So here's what I need from you. Not the sanitized museum-consultant version. The real one. What was this place?" A long breath. Eva looked at the platform — the grid of clean spots, the lamp hooks, the boot-worn paths in the grime. "It was a market." Her voice dropped low. "It's called the Veil Market. It moves every full moon. Sells things that don't appear in any legitimate catalogue. And that compass you pocketed is called a Veil Compass. It points toward..." She paused. Chose her words. "Toward openings. Thresholds between places." "Between places," Quinn repeated. "Between here and somewhere else. The wall it pointed at — there would have been an active threshold there, the last time this station was in use. It's gone now. They would have sealed it before they moved." Quinn looked at the indicated wall. Plain tiles. No seam, no door, no marking. But when she crossed to it and ran her gloved fingers across the surface, the grout between two tiles came away as powder, and behind it — just for an instant, before it crumbled further — she saw something that wasn't brick. A darkness that seemed to breathe, contracting and expanding like a living membrane, before the remaining grout sealed over it again. She pulled her hand back. Her pulse thudded in her wrist, against the worn leather of her watch. "The man on the tracks," Quinn said. "The bifurcated decomposition. He was caught in one of these openings when it closed." Eva's silence was confirmation enough. Quinn looked down at the body from the platform edge. Half here, half somewhere else. Sealed in between. She thought of Morris in that Southwark basement — the inexplicable death, the markings nobody would discuss, the file that gathered dust because the answers it demanded were answers the Metropolitan Police didn't have vocabulary for. She reached into her pocket and felt the verdigris-rough casing of the Veil Compass. The needle still trembled through the fabric of her coat, insistent, pointing at the wall. "When's the next full moon, Dr. Kowalski?" Eva tucked her hair behind her ear a third time. "Six days." Quinn turned to look at her. Sharp jaw set. Decision already made. "Then you and I have six days to find out where it moves next."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.245
leniency0.491
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
88.45% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2165
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count2
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
3
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"very"
2"slightly"
3"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
72.29% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2165
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"pulse"
count2
1
word"footsteps"
count1
2
word"echoed"
count1
3
word"navigating"
count2
4
word"structure"
count1
5
word"etched"
count1
6
word"navigate"
count1
7
word"electric"
count1
8
word"silence"
count1
9
word"trembled"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"footsteps"
2"echoed"
3"navigating"
4"structure"
5"etched"
6"navigate"
7"electric"
8"silence"
9"trembled"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences152
matches(empty)
95.86% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences152
filterMatches
0"watch "
1"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"happened to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences192
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen70
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2182
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions61
wordCount1473
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity1.49
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn22
Northern1
Line1
Transport1
London1
Rioja1
Morris2
Fogarty4
TfL1
Kowalski1
Eva17
Moleskine1
Flatter1
Chose1
Southwark1
Metropolitan1
Police1
Veil1
Compass1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Morris"
3"Fogarty"
4"Kowalski"
5"Eva"
6"Compass"
places(empty)
globalScore0.753
windowScore0.5
95.65% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences92
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"darkness that seemed to push back"
1"darkness that seemed to breathe, contracting and expanding like a living membrane, before the remaining grout sealed over it again"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.458
wordCount2182
matches
0"not from any mainstream occult tradition I can identify quickly, but the structure is apotropaic"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences192
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs72
mean30.31
std27.59
cv0.91
sampleLengths
099
147
211
335
46
530
680
787
895
948
1020
1122
1223
131
1412
1511
167
1776
189
1913
2067
214
2242
236
2410
2518
2638
2729
283
2910
3039
3145
3259
332
3420
353
3628
375
3812
396
4014
4173
4274
431
4413
4573
4610
4717
4869
4928
96.03% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences152
matches
0"were cracked"
1"been organized"
2"been pulled"
3"was etched"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs246
matches
0"was photographing"
1"was letting"
2"was being"
8.93% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences192
ratio0.047
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn ducked under the police tape strung between two rusted stanchions and let her eyes adjust to the contrast — bright pools surrounded by a darkness that seemed to push back."
1"He wore a charcoal wool coat — expensive cut, recent manufacture."
2"Her watch — the worn leather band soft as a second skin against her pulse — read 11:47 PM."
3"The mummified patches ran along the man's right side — the arm, the ribs visible through the shrunken coat fabric, the right half of the face drawn tight over the skull."
4"Her lips moved slightly — counting, Quinn realized."
5"The face was etched with markings similar to the ones on the dead man's wrist — the same geometric vocabulary, though arranged differently."
6"Eva looked at the platform — the grid of clean spots, the lamp hooks, the boot-worn paths in the grime."
7"But when she crossed to it and ran her gloved fingers across the surface, the grout between two tiles came away as powder, and behind it — just for an instant, before it crumbled further — she saw something that wasn't brick."
8"She thought of Morris in that Southwark basement — the inexplicable death, the markings nobody would discuss, the file that gathered dust because the answers it demanded were answers the Metropolitan Police didn't have vocabulary for."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1276
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.018808777429467086
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.0054858934169279
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences192
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences192
mean11.36
std10.48
cv0.923
sampleLengths
019
133
221
33
423
510
622
74
811
911
1017
1118
126
1330
142
159
1611
179
1813
1927
201
211
227
2320
246
2510
269
273
288
299
301
3121
3219
3328
349
3515
3610
372
383
399
406
4121
426
432
4413
4520
4622
4716
487
491
76.74% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.4791666666666667
totalSentences192
uniqueOpeners92
52.91% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences126
matches
0"Then something caught the light."
1"Twice in five minutes."
ratio0.016
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount33
totalSentences126
matches
0"She pulled on nitrile gloves"
1"She looked down at the"
2"He pointed to a section"
3"He wore a charcoal wool"
4"His shoes were leather brogues,"
5"His hands were open at"
6"She pulled out her phone"
7"She'd seen crime scenes in"
8"Her watch — the worn"
9"She'd been pulled from her"
10"Her grip was firm, her"
11"She filed that away."
12"They descended a service ladder"
13"His left side retained moisture,"
14"She flipped pages."
15"She studied the scarification without"
16"Her lips moved slightly —"
17"Her hand had gone to"
18"She crouched and picked it"
19"It swiveled in a slow,"
ratio0.262
83.02% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount95
totalSentences126
matches
0"The fluorescent work lamps threw"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn ducked under"
2"The platform tiles, once cream"
3"She pulled on nitrile gloves"
4"She looked down at the"
5"He pointed to a section"
6"The dead man lay face"
7"He wore a charcoal wool"
8"His shoes were leather brogues,"
9"His hands were open at"
10"The shapes were too precise,"
11"She pulled out her phone"
12"The cleaned patches on the"
13"She'd seen crime scenes in"
14"Places where the homeless or"
15"This wasn't that."
16"Whatever had scraped these tiles"
17"The marks followed a rough"
18"Her watch — the worn"
19"She'd been pulled from her"
ratio0.754
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences126
matches(empty)
ratio0
28.06% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences56
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"The fluorescent work lamps threw harsh white circles against tunnel walls that hadn't seen a scheduled train since 1924."
1"Detective Harlow Quinn ducked under the police tape strung between two rusted stanchions and let her eyes adjust to the contrast — bright pools surrounded by a …"
2"Whole sections of the floor looked scrubbed clean in irregular shapes, as though someone had dragged heavy things across them recently and often."
3"His hands were open at his sides, palms up, and on his left wrist she could see the faint, geometric marks of something that wasn't a tattoo."
4"Details that made her superiors uncomfortable when she mentioned them."
5"DI Fogarty, who'd been speaking with the TfL engineer near the far wall, intercepted the woman and gestured toward Quinn."
6"She looked at Eva, who stood at the platform edge gazing down at the body with an expression that wasn't academic detachment."
7"A darkness that seemed to breathe, contracting and expanding like a living membrane, before the remaining grout sealed over it again."
8"She thought of Morris in that Southwark basement — the inexplicable death, the markings nobody would discuss, the file that gathered dust because the answers it…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Quinn repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.057
leniency0.113
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.038
84.9312%