Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8VMR7281Q7SJTAGAFEGF1K

Run Details

Duration:
1m 18s
Cost:
$0.081000
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The platform smelled wrong. That was the first thing Harlow Quinn registered as she ducked beneath the crime scene tape and stepped off the rusted escalator into the abandoned station beneath Camden. Not the expected cocktail of damp concrete, old grease, and the particular staleness of air that hadn't circulated in decades. There was something else underneath it — sweet and acrid at once, like burnt lavender mixed with ozone after a lightning strike. She'd smelled it once before, three years ago, in a warehouse in Bermondsey where DS Morris had walked in ahead of her and never walked out. She pressed the memory down with the efficiency of long practice and surveyed the platform. Portable floodlights had been set up at intervals, throwing the tiled walls into harsh relief. The station's original signage had been stripped long ago, but the bones of the place remained — the vaulted ceiling, the geometric tile patterns now cracked and colonized by dark mold, the tracks below the platform edge choked with decades of debris. Uniformed officers moved through the space with the careful choreography of a scene already processed, bagging evidence, photographing, measuring. Sergeant Adebayo spotted her and crossed the platform, his tablet clutched against his chest. "Detective Quinn. Wasn't sure they'd send you down for this one." "They didn't send me. I heard the address on the scanner." She pulled a pair of nitrile gloves from her coat pocket and snapped them on. "What have we got?" "Male victim, mid-thirties, no ID on the body. Found by a TfL maintenance crew doing a structural survey — they nearly had a collective heart attack. Body's at the far end of the platform." He tilted the tablet toward her so she could see the preliminary photographs. "But here's the thing that'll interest you. The scene's been staged." Quinn took the tablet and swiped through the images without expression. The victim lay on his back, arms arranged at his sides, head turned slightly to the left. He wore a dark wool coat, good shoes, no visible wounds in the photographs. His eyes were open. "Staged how?" "No blood, no signs of a struggle, no obvious cause of death. But look at the way he's laid out — it's deliberate. Almost ceremonial. And there's a circle drawn around the body in what we think is chalk dust mixed with something else. Forensics is still working on it." "Witnesses?" "Just the maintenance crew. They swear the access point was sealed when they got here. Had to cut through a padlocked gate. No other entry to the platform that we've found." Quinn handed the tablet back and walked toward the far end of the platform, her boots echoing against the concrete. As she moved past the floodlights and into the transitional dimness, the smell grew stronger. That same impossible sweetness. Her left hand drifted to the worn leather strap of her watch and she pressed her thumb against the underside of the face — a grounding habit, something to keep her rooted in what was measurable, observable, real. The body came into view precisely as the photographs had promised. The chalk circle was roughly eight feet in diameter, its lines unbroken, its geometry too precise to have been drawn freehand in poor light. Inside the circle, smaller symbols had been inscribed — she didn't recognize them, but they had an intentionality to them, a grammar. The victim's expression was peaceful, which was always unsettling. Peaceful dead people meant either poison or something that had killed them so quickly they hadn't had time to register the event. A forensic technician in a white suit knelt outside the circle, collecting samples of the chalk. Quinn crouched beside the body and studied the victim's hands. Clean nails, no defensive wounds, no ligature marks. She leaned closer. There — on the inside of his left wrist, partially hidden by his sleeve — a mark. Not a tattoo. It looked like a brand, raised and smooth, in the shape of something she couldn't immediately place. A sigil of some kind. She was still examining it when a voice came from behind her, high and slightly breathless. "You shouldn't touch the lines." Quinn straightened and turned. A young woman stood at the edge of the floodlit zone, one hand gripping the strap of a battered leather satchel that bulged with the unmistakable shapes of books. Curly red hair caught the harsh light and turned it to copper. Round glasses. Freckled skin that was several shades too pale. She was tucking a strand of hair behind her left ear with the rapid, repetitive motion of someone managing significant anxiety. "And you are?" Quinn kept her voice level, but she was already cataloguing — no lanyard, no forensic suit, no police ID. "Eva Kowalski. I'm a research assistant at the British Museum. Restricted archives." The woman fumbled in her satchel and produced an identification badge, holding it out at arm's length as though offering a peace token to a predator. "Sergeant Adebayo called me. He said — well, he said the symbols were unusual and did I know anyone who could help identify them, and I said I could come myself because I was already in Camden and — I'm rambling. Sorry." Quinn took the badge, examined it, handed it back. "Adebayo called a museum researcher to an active crime scene." "He and I have a — we've consulted before. Historical graffiti cases, mostly. Vandalism in old churches. Things like that." Eva's green eyes moved past Quinn to the chalk circle, and something shifted in her expression — the anxiety didn't leave, but it was joined by a sharp, focused attention. She stepped closer, adjusting her glasses with one finger. "Oh. Oh, that's not what I expected." "What did you expect?" "Honestly? Bored teenagers with a ouija board fixation. This is — may I?" She gestured toward the circle. Quinn studied her for a moment, then stepped aside. Eva crouched at the perimeter, her satchel swinging forward to bump against her knees. She didn't touch anything. Her eyes moved across the symbols with the systematic precision of someone reading a text. "These aren't decorative," Eva said quietly. "They're functional. Or they're meant to be. It's a containment circle — the style is post-medieval, English folk magic tradition, but the interior symbols are much older. Aramaic roots, possibly, though they've been modified. Whoever drew this knew exactly what they were doing." "Containment of what?" Eva looked up at her, and behind those round glasses her expression was carefully neutral in a way that told Quinn everything about what the woman was choosing not to say. "That I'm less sure about." Quinn filed that hesitation away and turned back to the body. She'd been to enough scenes to know when evidence was performing — when a crime scene had been constructed to tell a story rather than simply existing as the aftermath of an event. This one was performing. The unbroken circle, the arranged limbs, the absent cause of death. It wanted to look ritualistic. It wanted to look like the work of someone unhinged, someone playing at dark magic in an abandoned tunnel. But the details didn't support that reading. She knelt again, this time examining the concrete around the circle. The dust distribution was wrong. In an abandoned station, dust settled in predictable patterns — heavier near the walls, thinner where air currents from the tunnels kept the surface relatively clean. The area inside the circle had been swept. Not just drawn on — prepared. And the area outside the circle, in a radius of roughly fifteen feet, showed the faintest evidence of foot traffic. Not the crime scene team's overlapping boot prints, which were easy to distinguish. Older tracks, partially obscured, the marks of multiple people moving in organized patterns. "This wasn't one person," Quinn said. Eva, still crouching by the symbols, glanced up. "What makes you say that?" "The floor. Someone cleaned the interior of the circle before the chalk was laid down — you can see the sweep marks if you look at the dust under raking light. And there are older footprints out here, at least four distinct tread patterns, all outside the circle's perimeter. They were standing around it." She pointed to four roughly equidistant positions. "There. There. There. And there. Cardinal points." Eva's lips parted slightly. She tucked her hair behind her ear again. "That's consistent with the circle's design. It's meant to be activated by four practitioners standing at the quarter points." "Activated." "Symbolically speaking." "Right." Quinn stood and took three slow steps along the platform's edge, following a sight line that most of the forensic team had been walking past for the better part of an hour. Near the base of the wall, half-hidden behind a crumpled section of old advertising hoarding, something caught the floodlight and threw back a dull green gleam. She crouched and used a pen from her pocket to ease the object into view without touching it. It was a compass. Small, brass, its casing covered in a patina of verdigris that spoke of considerable age. The face was etched with markings she didn't recognize — more of those deliberate, systematic symbols — and the needle sat frozen at an angle that pointed toward neither north nor any other cardinal direction she could determine. It pointed, as near as she could judge, directly at the chalk circle. "Kowalski. Come look at this." Eva picked her way carefully along the platform edge and crouched beside Quinn. When she saw the compass, her face went very still. The anxiety, the nervous energy, the academic excitement — all of it vanished behind a mask of absolute, practiced blankness. It lasted less than two seconds before she reconstructed her expression into one of mild curiosity, but Quinn had been reading faces across interview tables for eighteen years, and two seconds was more than enough. "Do you know what this is?" Quinn asked. "It looks old. Could be a navigational instrument. Victorian, maybe?" "That's not what I asked. I asked if you know what it is." Eva's hand drifted toward her ear again, found the curl of hair already tucked behind it, and dropped back to her side. "I'd need to examine it more closely. In a lab setting. With proper lighting." Quinn held her gaze. The compass sat between them on the filthy concrete, its frozen needle aimed at a dead man in a chalk circle inside a station that shouldn't have been accessible, and the smell of burnt lavender and ozone thickened in the stale air like a held breath. "Let me tell you what I see," Quinn said, her voice pitched low enough that it wouldn't carry to the forensic team. "I see a locked-room scenario with evidence of multiple participants. I see a body with no cause of death and a brand on his wrist. I see a circle designed by someone with expertise, not a hobbyist. And I see an antique compass that you recognized on sight and are now trying very hard to pretend you didn't." She straightened slowly, her knees protesting the concrete. "I also see a research assistant from the British Museum's restricted archives who arrived at an active crime scene within thirty minutes of the call, already in Camden, on a Tuesday night at eleven o'clock. That's a lot of coincidence, Ms. Kowalski." Eva stood as well, her satchel clutched against her chest like a shield. The freckles stood out sharply against the pallor of her skin. For a long moment, the only sound was the distant drip of water somewhere deep in the tunnel and the murmur of the forensic team at their work. "Detective Quinn," Eva said finally. "There are things about this scene that your forensic team is not going to be able to explain. Not because they're incompetent. Because the explanations don't exist within the framework they're using." She swallowed hard. "I wasn't here by coincidence. I was here because I was trying to stop this from happening, and I was too late." Quinn felt the hairs rise along her forearms. Not from fear — from recognition. The same words, almost exactly, that she'd repeated to herself in the sleepless months after Bermondsey. The same helpless, furious admission of arriving one step behind something she couldn't name. She looked down at the compass on the concrete. Its needle hadn't moved. It pointed at the dead man with the patience of something that had been pointing at things for a very long time. "Then you'd better start explaining," Quinn said, "what framework I should be using instead."
created_at"2026-02-24T22:17:16.78Z" 2/24/2026, 10:17:16 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
9.52% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount4
adverbTags
0"Eva said quietly [quietly]"
1"She straightened slowly [slowly]"
2"Eva said finally [finally]"
3"She swallowed hard [hard]"
dialogueSentences42
tagDensity0.381
leniency0.762
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.19
71.26% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2088
totalAiIsmAdverbs12
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count3
1
adverb"precisely"
count1
2
adverb"quickly"
count1
3
adverb"carefully"
count2
4
adverb"very"
count3
5
adverb"slowly"
count1
6
adverb"sharply"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"precisely"
2"quickly"
3"carefully"
4"very"
5"slowly"
6"sharply"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
73.66% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2088
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"processed"
count1
1
word"echoing"
count1
2
word"predator"
count1
3
word"systematic"
count2
4
word"constructed"
count1
5
word"aftermath"
count1
6
word"predictable"
count1
7
word"etched"
count1
8
word"framework"
count2
highlights
0"processed"
1"echoing"
2"predator"
3"systematic"
4"constructed"
5"aftermath"
6"predictable"
7"etched"
8"framework"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences102
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences102
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"try to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences128
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen68
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2111
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions36
wordCount1470
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity1.36
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn20
Camden1
Bermondsey2
Morris1
Adebayo1
Eva10
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Morris"
3"Adebayo"
4"Eva"
places
0"Bermondsey"
globalScore0.82
windowScore0.667
86.71% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences79
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"looked like a brand, raised and smooth, i"
1"as though offering a peace token to a predator"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.474
wordCount2111
matches
0"neither north nor"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences128
matches
0"filed that hesitation"
1"support that reading"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs50
mean42.22
std33.19
cv0.786
sampleLengths
0100
115
290
311
430
558
646
72
850
91
1031
1177
1288
1379
1416
155
1676
1722
1880
1919
2066
214
2260
2349
243
2536
2683
277
28102
296
3013
3168
3231
331
342
3577
3670
375
3878
398
4010
4113
4236
4350
44130
4552
4662
4744
4835
4914
81.18% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount7
totalSentences102
matches
0"been stripped"
1"been drawn"
2"been inscribed "
3"was joined"
4"been constructed"
5"been swept"
6"was etched"
0.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount7
totalVerbs231
matches
0"was always unsettling"
1"was still examining"
2"was tucking"
3"was already cataloguing "
4"was choosing"
5"was performing "
6"was performing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount15
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences13
totalSentences128
ratio0.102
matches
0"There was something else underneath it — sweet and acrid at once, like burnt lavender mixed with ozone after a lightning strike."
1"The station's original signage had been stripped long ago, but the bones of the place remained — the vaulted ceiling, the geometric tile patterns now cracked and colonized by dark mold, the tracks below the platform edge choked with decades of debris."
2"Her left hand drifted to the worn leather strap of her watch and she pressed her thumb against the underside of the face — a grounding habit, something to keep her rooted in what was measurable, observable, real."
3"Inside the circle, smaller symbols had been inscribed — she didn't recognize them, but they had an intentionality to them, a grammar."
4"There — on the inside of his left wrist, partially hidden by his sleeve — a mark."
5"\"And you are?\" Quinn kept her voice level, but she was already cataloguing — no lanyard, no forensic suit, no police ID."
6"\"He and I have a — we've consulted before. Historical graffiti cases, mostly. Vandalism in old churches. Things like that.\" Eva's green eyes moved past Quinn to the chalk circle, and something shifted in her expression — the anxiety didn't leave, but it was joined by a sharp, focused attention."
7"She'd been to enough scenes to know when evidence was performing — when a crime scene had been constructed to tell a story rather than simply existing as the aftermath of an event."
8"In an abandoned station, dust settled in predictable patterns — heavier near the walls, thinner where air currents from the tunnels kept the surface relatively clean."
9"Not just drawn on — prepared."
10"The face was etched with markings she didn't recognize — more of those deliberate, systematic symbols — and the needle sat frozen at an angle that pointed toward neither north nor any other cardinal direction she could determine."
11"The anxiety, the nervous energy, the academic excitement — all of it vanished behind a mask of absolute, practiced blankness."
12"Not from fear — from recognition."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1456
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"same helpless, furious admission"
adverbCount53
adverbRatio0.036401098901098904
lyAdverbCount23
lyAdverbRatio0.015796703296703296
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences128
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences128
mean16.49
std13.1
cv0.795
sampleLengths
04
128
220
322
426
515
615
742
819
914
1011
1126
124
1347
1411
1511
1617
1714
184
192
2050
211
2231
2320
2415
254
2638
2711
2824
2922
309
3122
3216
3310
348
353
3617
373
3817
395
4016
415
424
4329
4412
452
468
4721
4822
4938
66.41% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.421875
totalSentences128
uniqueOpeners54
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences98
matches(empty)
ratio0
97.55% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount30
totalSentences98
matches
0"She'd smelled it once before,"
1"She pressed the memory down"
2"She pulled a pair of"
3"He tilted the tablet toward"
4"He wore a dark wool"
5"His eyes were open."
6"Her left hand drifted to"
7"She leaned closer."
8"It looked like a brand,"
9"She was still examining it"
10"She was tucking a strand"
11"She stepped closer, adjusting her"
12"She gestured toward the circle"
13"She didn't touch anything."
14"Her eyes moved across the"
15"She'd been to enough scenes"
16"It wanted to look ritualistic."
17"It wanted to look like"
18"She knelt again, this time"
19"She pointed to four roughly"
ratio0.306
72.24% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount76
totalSentences98
matches
0"The platform smelled wrong."
1"That was the first thing"
2"She'd smelled it once before,"
3"She pressed the memory down"
4"The station's original signage had"
5"Sergeant Adebayo spotted her and"
6"She pulled a pair of"
7"He tilted the tablet toward"
8"Quinn took the tablet and"
9"The victim lay on his"
10"He wore a dark wool"
11"His eyes were open."
12"Quinn handed the tablet back"
13"That same impossible sweetness."
14"Her left hand drifted to"
15"The body came into view"
16"The chalk circle was roughly"
17"The victim's expression was peaceful,"
18"A forensic technician in a"
19"Quinn crouched beside the body"
ratio0.776
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences98
matches(empty)
ratio0
53.57% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences56
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"Not the expected cocktail of damp concrete, old grease, and the particular staleness of air that hadn't circulated in decades."
1"A young woman stood at the edge of the floodlit zone, one hand gripping the strap of a battered leather satchel that bulged with the unmistakable shapes of book…"
2"Eva looked up at her, and behind those round glasses her expression was carefully neutral in a way that told Quinn everything about what the woman was choosing …"
3"Not the crime scene team's overlapping boot prints, which were easy to distinguish."
4"Small, brass, its casing covered in a patina of verdigris that spoke of considerable age."
5"The compass sat between them on the filthy concrete, its frozen needle aimed at a dead man in a chalk circle inside a station that shouldn't have been accessibl…"
6"It pointed at the dead man with the patience of something that had been pointing at things for a very long time."
93.75% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"She straightened slowly, her knees protesting the concrete"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences42
tagDensity0.143
leniency0.286
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
75.5510%