Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8VNA5N6061QTF4ZA9N52YS

Run Details

Model:
Aion 2.0
Duration:
1m 25s
Cost:
$0.006972
Provider:
AionLabs

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The air in Richmond Park held the damp chill of a London evening, but the moment Rory stepped between the two largest oak standing stones, the temperature shifted. It wasn't warmer or colder, but different—a still, breathless quality that made the hairs on her arms rise. Nyx flowed beside her, their form a solid silhouette of deepening twilight against the ordinary green of the park. Their faintly glowing violet eyes scanned the space ahead. “The boundary is thin here. Can you feel it?” “I feel like I’ve walked into a photograph.” Rory’s voice came out softer than she intended. The light here was wrong. The sun had been a half-hour from setting, but here a perpetual golden-hour glow suffused the clearing, coming from no discernible source. It cast long, sharp shadows that didn’t move. The grass under her trainers was a vibrant, unreal green, threaded with wildflowers in violent bloom—foxgloves, bluebells, and poppies side-by-side, despite the season. The scent was overwhelming; honey, crushed herbs, and the dark, rich smell of wet earth. “Time moves differently,” Nyx whispered, the sound like dry leaves rustling. “An hour inside could be minutes outside. Or days. There is no telling.” “Helpful.” Rory took another step forward. The ground was spongy, silent. She looked back. The standing stones framed a perfect rectangle of ordinary, greying evening parkland, but it looked distant, like a painting viewed through the wrong end of a telescope. The sounds of distant traffic had vanished, replaced by a low, resonant hum she felt in her teeth. “So we find the Seer and we leave. Quickly.” Nyx’s form shimmered, becoming momentarily transparent at the edges. “Quickly is a relative concept here.” They moved deeper into the grove. The trees here were ancient oaks, but their trunks were twisted into shapes that spoke of centuries of strange, slow pressure. Their branches wove together high above, forming a cathedral vault dripping with moss and pale, bioluminescent lichen that shed a soft blue light. Rory reached out, her fingers hovering an inch from the bark of the nearest tree. It pulsed with a slow, warm rhythm, like a heartbeat. “Don’t.” Nyx’s whisper was urgent. “This is a living place. Your touch is a question. It may answer.” Rory pulled her hand back, curling her fingers into a fist. The small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist itched. “Noted.” A path of silvery, crushed stone appeared before them, winding between the trees. It hadn’t been there a moment ago. “It seems we are expected,” Nyx observed. The path led them to a small, still pool. The water was black and perfectly reflective, showing the impossible sky above—a tapestry of deep indigo and swirling, star-like motes of light that drifted like embers. Around the pool, flowers glowed with their own inner radiance, pulsing gently in time with the hum in the air. Rory knelt, drawn to the water’s edge. Her own reflection stared back, but her eyes looked older, tired in a way her twenty-five years shouldn’t account for. The deep crimson Heartstone Pendant at her throat gave a single, distinct throb of warmth against her skin. She frowned, touching it. It had never done that outside of a Hel portal. “This is not Hel,” Nyx said, as if reading her thought. “But all boundaries are cousins. The Veil is stretched thin here, in a different way.” A breeze stirred, though the air had been utterly still. It carried the scent of ozone and frost, and a single, silver leaf that spiraled down to land on the black water. The leaf did not float. It sank without a ripple, descending into the impossible depth. “This way unsettles me,” Nyx admitted, their solid form flickering. “My nature is between, but this is a between that has rules. Ancient ones. I am… an interloper.” It was the first time Rory had heard anything akin to uncertainty in the Shade’s whispery voice. It sparked a fresh thread of unease in her own gut. If a being made of shadow was nervous, what did that mean for her? They left the pool behind. The grove seemed to deepen, the light growing more concentrated in patches, leaving pools of velvety darkness between the trees. In one such dark patch, Rory saw movement. A shape flitted between two trunks, too fast to define—a suggestion of slender limbs and eyes that caught the light like an animal’s. “Did you see that?” “I see many things,” Nyx replied. “Most are not for your eyes. Keep walking. Do not acknowledge them.” The silver path began to slope downward, leading into a shallow dell. Here, the wildflowers grew taller, some as high as Rory’s waist, their blossoms wide and fleshy, turning slowly to follow their progress. The humming grew louder, resolving into something almost melodic—a single, held note sung by a chorus of unseen voices. Then they saw the stones. A circle of nine, taller than a person, carved from wood so petrified it might as well be stone. They were covered in intricate, spiraling sigils that seemed to shift when looked at from the corner of the eye. In the center of the circle, a figure stood. She was smaller than Rory expected. Her hair was a waterfall of silver that reached her waist, moving in a breeze that didn’t touch the rest of the grove. She wore simple robes of grey and green, and her feet were bare on the moss. She left no imprint. Isolde turned. Her eyes were the pale lavender of twilight, and they held no pupils. They looked through Rory, around her, as if viewing multiple layers of reality at once. “You have walked the shifting path,” the Seer said. Her voice was clear and musical, yet each word felt heavy, deliberate. “The shadow that walks beside you tastes of old magic and regret. A curious pairing.” Nyx inclined their head, a gesture of respect or caution. “We seek knowledge, Seer.” “All who come here seek. Few understand the price of the finding.” Isolde’s gaze settled on Rory’s throat, on the pendant. “You carry a stone that beats for a door. But you stand at a window. Why have you come to my grove, daughter of Cardiff?” Rory found her voice. “I need to understand what’s happening to me. The doors, the… the things coming through. I was told you could see.” “I see.” Isolde took a step forward. She made no sound. “I see a thread tangled in a web not of its making. I see a choice, written in blood and starlight. I see a blade that has not yet been given.” Her head tilted. “The answers you seek are not answers. They are directions. And directions require a map you do not possess.” “Can you give me the map?” Rory asked, her practical nature wrestling with the surreal poetry of the Seer’s speech. Isolde smiled, a faint, sorrowful curve of her lips. “A map is a fixed thing. This place is not fixed. Your time here is a riverstone, smooth and temporary.” She gestured to the pool they had passed. “You looked into the water and saw age. That was the grove looking back. It measures time in heartbeats, not hours. Yours beats quick and frightened.” A wave of dizziness passed over Rory. She blinked, and for a second, the grove doubled—she saw the twisted trees as young saplings, bursting from the soil in a rapid, silent explosion of growth, then crumbling to dust in the same instant. She saw Nyx as a man, solid and human, his face contorted in a silent scream, before he dissolved into swirling shadow. She gasped, staggering back a step. Nyx’s hand, solid and surprisingly cool, steadied her elbow. “The time-sickness. Do not fight it. Let the vision pass.” Isolde watched, unblinking. “The shadow understands. This place peels layers. It shows what was, what might be, what is. It is uncomfortable for those who prefer a single, solid reality.” “What do you want in return?” Rory managed, her head clearing though the world still seemed to vibrate at a slightly wrong frequency. “For your help.” “The Fae do not trade in want,” Isolde said. “We trade in balance. A truth for a truth. A question for a question. A gift for a gift.” Her lavender eyes flickered to Nyx. “Your companion is a truth shaped like a question. They may pay a price simply by being here.” Nyx’s form solidified, the violet glow of their eyes intensifying. “I am aware of the toll, Exile. My debt is my own.” Isolde considered them, then nodded once. She turned and walked to the base of the largest petrified tree. From a hollow in its roots, she drew forth a long, narrow bundle wrapped in grey cloth. She unwrapped it with reverence. The blade within was slender and leaf-shaped, forged from a metal that looked like liquid moonlight captured and frozen. It gave off a faint, pearlescent glow, and the air around it grew several degrees colder. Rory felt the chill from three paces away. “This is moonsilver,” Isolde said. “Forged in a court I can no longer name, for a war that is not yet forgotten. It can cut through lies, through wards, through things that are and are not.” She held it out, hilt first, toward Rory. “A gift. For the journey you are already on.” Rory stared at the weapon. “I don’t know how to use something like that.” “It will know how to be used,” Isolde replied, her tone leaving no room for argument. “Take it. The giving is the first part of the balance.” Hesitantly, Rory reached out. Her fingers closed around the hilt. It was colder than anything she had ever touched, a deep, penetrating cold that seared her skin without burning. The faint glow brightened for a moment, then settled into a soft, steady luminescence. It felt both impossibly light and terribly significant in her hand. “A blade for a stone,” Isolde murmured, her eyes on the Heartstone Pendant again. “A weapon for a key. The balance begins.” Above them, the impossible sky began to darken, the swirling motes of light blinking out one by one. The melodic hum in the air faded, replaced by a growing silence that felt like pressure. “Your stone is leaving,” Nyx whispered urgently. “The way back will not stay open.” Isolde took a step back, blending into the deepening shadows of the stone circle. “Remember, daughter of Cardiff. The grove has seen you. It will remember your heartbeat. When you stand before the door your stone beats for, you may hear its echo.” The path of silver stones began to gleam more brightly, a guiding line back through the now-hostile dark of the towering flowers and watching trees.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags21
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Nyx whispered urgently [urgently]"
dialogueSentences49
tagDensity0.429
leniency0.857
rawRatio0.048
effectiveRatio0.041
77.80% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1802
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count2
1
adverb"perfectly"
count1
2
adverb"gently"
count1
3
adverb"utterly"
count1
4
adverb"slowly"
count1
5
adverb"slightly"
count1
6
adverb"hesitantly"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
1"perfectly"
2"gently"
3"utterly"
4"slowly"
5"slightly"
6"hesitantly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
55.60% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1802
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"chill"
count2
1
word"scanned"
count1
2
word"perfect"
count1
3
word"shimmered"
count1
4
word"pulsed"
count1
5
word"whisper"
count1
6
word"tapestry"
count1
7
word"throb"
count1
8
word"warmth"
count1
9
word"resolving"
count1
10
word"intricate"
count1
11
word"surreal"
count1
12
word"flickered"
count1
13
word"silence"
count1
14
word"echo"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"scanned"
2"perfect"
3"shimmered"
4"pulsed"
5"whisper"
6"tapestry"
7"throb"
8"warmth"
9"resolving"
10"intricate"
11"surreal"
12"flickered"
13"silence"
14"echo"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences107
matches
0"was nervous"
1"felt the chill"
62.75% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount6
narrationSentences107
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences134
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1796
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions57
wordCount1254
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity1.59
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
London1
Rory20
Heartstone2
Pendant2
Hel1
Shade1
Seer2
Isolde11
Nyx14
Hesitantly1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Seer"
2"Isolde"
3"Nyx"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Shade"
globalScore0.703
windowScore0.667
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences82
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"as if reading her thought"
1"sigils that seemed to shift when looked at from the corner of the eye"
2"as if viewing multiple layers of reality at once"
3"looked like liquid moonlight captured and"
4"felt like pressure"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1796
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences134
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs47
mean38.21
std22.12
cv0.579
sampleLengths
046
137
289
324
468
515
675
718
821
920
107
11114
1226
1347
1428
1542
1656
174
1818
1953
2053
2149
2230
2336
2414
2546
2625
2764
2820
2963
3070
3119
3230
3326
3452
3522
3640
3743
3853
3914
4027
4154
4222
4334
4414
4543
4625
95.43% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences107
matches
0"were twisted"
1"being made"
2"were covered"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs214
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount6
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences134
ratio0.052
matches
0"It wasn't warmer or colder, but different—a still, breathless quality that made the hairs on her arms rise."
1"The grass under her trainers was a vibrant, unreal green, threaded with wildflowers in violent bloom—foxgloves, bluebells, and poppies side-by-side, despite the season."
2"The scent was overwhelming; honey, crushed herbs, and the dark, rich smell of wet earth."
3"The water was black and perfectly reflective, showing the impossible sky above—a tapestry of deep indigo and swirling, star-like motes of light that drifted like embers."
4"A shape flitted between two trunks, too fast to define—a suggestion of slender limbs and eyes that caught the light like an animal’s."
5"The humming grew louder, resolving into something almost melodic—a single, held note sung by a chorus of unseen voices."
6"She blinked, and for a second, the grove doubled—she saw the twisted trees as young saplings, bursting from the soil in a rapid, silent explosion of growth, then crumbling to dust in the same instant."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1268
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"together high above, forming"
1"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount40
adverbRatio0.031545741324921134
lyAdverbCount13
lyAdverbRatio0.01025236593059937
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences134
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences134
mean13.4
std7.7
cv0.574
sampleLengths
028
118
219
39
49
516
65
722
88
923
1015
1111
1213
136
145
153
1627
1718
189
199
206
216
2221
2323
2415
2510
265
2713
2811
299
301
3113
327
337
349
3526
3620
377
3820
3918
404
4110
4211
4315
4410
4522
465
4710
4810
4918
42.79% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.30597014925373134
totalSentences134
uniqueOpeners41
65.36% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences102
matches
0"Then they saw the stones."
1"Hesitantly, Rory reached out."
ratio0.02
70.98% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount38
totalSentences102
matches
0"It wasn't warmer or colder,"
1"Their faintly glowing violet eyes"
2"It cast long, sharp shadows"
3"She looked back."
4"They moved deeper into the"
5"Their branches wove together high"
6"It pulsed with a slow,"
7"It hadn’t been there a"
8"Her own reflection stared back,"
9"She frowned, touching it."
10"It had never done that"
11"It carried the scent of"
12"It sank without a ripple,"
13"It was the first time"
14"It sparked a fresh thread"
15"They left the pool behind."
16"They were covered in intricate,"
17"She was smaller than Rory"
18"Her hair was a waterfall"
19"She wore simple robes of"
ratio0.373
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount94
totalSentences102
matches
0"The air in Richmond Park"
1"It wasn't warmer or colder,"
2"Nyx flowed beside her, their"
3"Their faintly glowing violet eyes"
4"Rory’s voice came out softer"
5"The light here was wrong."
6"The sun had been a"
7"It cast long, sharp shadows"
8"The grass under her trainers"
9"The scent was overwhelming; honey,"
10"Nyx whispered, the sound like"
11"Rory took another step forward"
12"The ground was spongy, silent."
13"She looked back."
14"The standing stones framed a"
15"The sounds of distant traffic"
16"Nyx’s form shimmered, becoming momentarily"
17"They moved deeper into the"
18"The trees here were ancient"
19"Their branches wove together high"
ratio0.922
49.02% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences102
matches
0"If a being made of"
ratio0.01
88.95% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences53
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"It wasn't warmer or colder, but different—a still, breathless quality that made the hairs on her arms rise."
1"The trees here were ancient oaks, but their trunks were twisted into shapes that spoke of centuries of strange, slow pressure."
2"The water was black and perfectly reflective, showing the impossible sky above—a tapestry of deep indigo and swirling, star-like motes of light that drifted lik…"
3"The blade within was slender and leaf-shaped, forged from a metal that looked like liquid moonlight captured and frozen."
29.76% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags21
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"Nyx whispered, the sound like dry leaves rustling"
1"Nyx said, as if reading her thought"
2"Nyx admitted, their solid form flickering"
3"Isolde replied, her tone leaving no room for argument"
47.96% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
1"Nyx observed (observe)"
2"Nyx admitted (admit)"
3"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
4"Nyx whispered urgently (whisper)"
dialogueSentences49
tagDensity0.245
leniency0.49
rawRatio0.417
effectiveRatio0.204
74.7022%