Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8VPQ4KNJNMF8ET9GZ34HPP

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Duration:
1m 10s
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$0.073340
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Amazon Bedrock

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The pendant burned against Rory's collarbone the moment she stepped through. Not a searing pain — more like pressing a mug of fresh tea to bare skin. She clutched it through her jacket and blinked against light that had no business existing underground. Or wherever they were. The Veil had parted like wet tissue paper, and the tunnel of cold displacement that followed had lasted three heartbeats, maybe four, before depositing them on a hillside that smelled of cinnamon and something deeper, something fungal and sweet and utterly wrong. "Breathe through your mouth." Nyx materialized beside her, their form flickering between solid shadow and a shape that was almost human. Almost. Violet eyes swept across the landscape with a recognition Rory didn't share. She breathed through her mouth. The air tasted like warm honey. "This is Dymas," Nyx said, and the name left them like a confession. Below, the land unrolled in a quilt of impossible color. Vineyards cascaded down terraced slopes, their leaves a bruised purple that shimmered copper at the edges. Between the rows, orchards sprawled — trees Rory couldn't name, heavy with fruit that glowed faintly from within, soft amber and rose-gold, as though each one held a trapped ember. The sky above was the color of whisky held to a candle flame, perpetually warm, perpetually bright, with no visible sun to account for it. Just light, sourceless and even, pouring from an amber vault that stretched to every horizon. "It's beautiful." The words left Rory before she could stop them. "That is rather the point." Isolde stood to her left, silver hair lifting in a breeze Rory couldn't feel. The Seer's bare feet had left no impression in the soft dark soil. Her lavender eyes were half-closed, reading something in the air itself. "Beauty here is architecture. They built it to make you forget." "Forget what?" Isolde's mouth curved. "That you would like to leave." Rory pulled the Fae blade from the sheath at her hip and held it loosely, reassured by its cold bite against her palm. The moonsilver caught no light here — stayed dull as tarnished pewter under Dymas's amber sky. She noted that. Filed it. They descended. The path was paved in flat stones the color of dark chocolate, worn smooth by millennia of traffic. Each footfall produced a faint musical note, a different pitch per stone, so their passage down the hillside created an accidental, wandering melody. Rory stopped. Stepped back. Stepped forward. The notes repeated — consistent, deliberate. Someone had tuned the road. "Don't linger on it." Nyx's whisper-voice carried an edge she hadn't heard before. Their shadow-form drifted ahead, not walking so much as flowing, a column of living dark that the amber light refused to touch. "The path wants your attention. Give it nothing." Rory kept moving. The vineyards rose on either side as they reached the valley floor. Up close, the vines were thick as her forearm and twisted into shapes that suggested intention — spirals, knots, what might have been letters in a language she didn't speak. The grapes hung in clusters the size of her fist, each berry a deep translucent red that revealed tiny threads of gold suspended inside, like veins, like circuitry. Isolde extended one pale finger toward a cluster, then stopped. Her hand trembled. "When was the last time something frightened you?" Rory kept her voice low. "1782. A cellist in Vienna." Isolde withdrew her hand. "These are memory-fruit. They are grown from the recollections of helbound souls. Each one contains a moment of someone's life — a taste, a sensation, a feeling." Her nostrils flared. "The vintners here press them into wine. They serve it at feasts. Demons drink the distilled experiences of humans and call it culture." Something cold settled behind Rory's ribs. She looked at the nearest cluster again. The golden threads inside pulsed — faintly, arrhythmically, like a heartbeat winding down. "Christ." "He has no jurisdiction here," Nyx said without humor. They pressed deeper. Past the vineyards, the orchards thickened into groves of such density that the amber light fractured into latticed patterns on the ground. The trees bore fruit Rory's brain refused to categorize — shapes that were almost pears but with skin like polished opal, things that resembled peaches but wept a slow golden sap from their stems, clusters of small round berries that chimed against each other when the unfelt breeze stirred them. And sounds. Everywhere, sounds. A low continuous hum rose from the earth itself, vibrating through the soles of Rory's boots, up through her ankles, into her shins. Beneath it, voices — or the ghosts of voices — murmured in overlapping waves, too distant to parse into words but close enough to feel. Laughter. Arguments. The rising pitch of someone telling a story. All of it layered and folded into the ambient noise of the place like seasoning into a broth. "Souls?" Rory asked. "Kitchens." Nyx solidified enough to point. Between the trunks, light spilled from low structures built into the hillside — stone and iron buildings with wide chimney stacks that emitted plumes of fragrant smoke. Each plume was a different color: saffron yellow, blood red, a green so vivid it left afterimages. "The contracted chefs work here. Preparing for the feasts." "Contracted chefs. You mean people." "I mean people who made deals they didn't understand." Nyx's form rippled, a distortion that Rory had learned to read as discomfort. "The kitchens run constantly. Prince Belphegor's appetite is not a metaphor." They skirted the kitchen structures, keeping to the tree line. Through a gap in the foliage, Rory caught a glimpse of the interior of the nearest one — a cavernous space lit by hanging braziers, long iron counters, and figures in stained aprons moving with mechanical precision. Their hands worked cleavers and whisks and implements Rory couldn't name against ingredients that shifted color on the cutting board. One chef — a woman with cropped hair and hollow eyes — looked up. Her gaze passed through the gap, through the leaves, and found Rory's face. Held it. Her mouth opened. Nyx pulled Rory sideways into shadow. Cold. A moment of absolute black. Then light again, amber and warm, and they stood fifty yards further along the path, the kitchen behind them. "Don't meet their eyes." Nyx's form was distorted, stretched thin from the effort of shadow-stepping with a passenger. "They'll ask you to take a message. And if you hear the message, you're bound to deliver it, and delivery requires a name, and a name here—" "Is currency. I remember." Rory's heart hammered against the pendant. The crimson gemstone pulsed hot — hotter than before, a rhythm that matched her pulse. Isolde caught up without apparent hurry, moving through the grove like water around stones. She stopped and tilted her head. "We're being watched." "Since we arrived," Nyx confirmed. "No. Since now. Something specific." Isolde knelt and pressed her palm flat to the dark soil. When she lifted it, her skin was stained with a residue that sparkled like crushed garnet. "The earth here has a memory too. We left a signature when we crossed. They know a Fae-touched and a Shade and—" She looked at Rory with something that lived in the neighborhood of pity. "And someone carrying a Heartstone." The pendant throbbed. "How long before someone comes?" "The question that matters is who." Isolde straightened and wiped her hand on her dress, leaving a streak of dark glitter across the white fabric. "This is a realm of appetites. We are, at present, the most interesting new dish." Rory tightened her grip on the Fae blade. Its cold radiated up her wrist, past the crescent scar, into her forearm. She scanned the groves ahead — more fruit-laden trees, more winding paths of musical stone, and in the far distance, something that broke the skyline. A structure. Massive. Pillared in dark stone with banners the color of raw meat hanging from its parapets. Smoke and music poured from its open gates in equal measure. "Is that where we're headed?" "The Grand Table. Belphegor's palace." Nyx drew themselves taller, shadow coalescing into something sharper, more defined. "If the answers exist in Dymas, they're in there." "Lovely." "You wanted to find who sent the pendant." "I wanted a lot of things. Didn't expect most of them to involve walking into a demon prince's dining room." Rory exhaled through her teeth. The warm air filled her lungs with cinnamon and char and the ghost of something that reminded her, painfully, of her mother's Christmas pudding. She shut that down. Memory was currency here. Nostalgia was a trap. She could almost feel the soil beneath her feet reaching for her recollections, hungry, patient, extracting what it could from the pressure of her weight. She lifted her foot. A faint golden residue clung to the sole of her boot. "Walk lighter," Isolde murmured. "Walk faster," Nyx corrected. They moved toward the palace. Above them, the amber sky darkened by a single shade — the only indication of time passing in a place that seemed designed to make time irrelevant. The musical stones sang beneath their feet, and the melody they created, by pure accident, sounded like a lullaby Rory hadn't heard since she was four years old. She didn't stop walking. She set her jaw, pressed the cold blade against the hot pendant, and let the dissonance between Fae-forged steel and Hel-born stone anchor her to the only thing that mattered. Forward. Answers. Out.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags20
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences40
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
93.63% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1569
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"utterly"
count1
1
adverb"loosely"
count1
highlights
0"utterly"
1"loosely"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
55.39% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1569
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"searing"
count1
1
word"shimmered"
count1
2
word"footfall"
count1
3
word"whisper"
count1
4
word"trembled"
count1
5
word"pulsed"
count2
6
word"fractured"
count1
7
word"mechanical"
count1
8
word"pulse"
count1
9
word"throbbed"
count1
10
word"scanned"
count1
11
word"structure"
count1
12
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"searing"
1"shimmered"
2"footfall"
3"whisper"
4"trembled"
5"pulsed"
6"fractured"
7"mechanical"
8"pulse"
9"throbbed"
10"scanned"
11"structure"
12"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences112
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences112
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences131
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen49
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1586
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
60.51% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions51
wordCount1285
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity1.79
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory23
Veil1
Isolde8
Seer1
Fae3
Dymas1
Nyx11
Christmas1
Fae-forged1
Hel-born1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Veil"
2"Isolde"
3"Seer"
4"Dymas"
5"Nyx"
places(empty)
globalScore0.605
windowScore0.667
39.71% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences68
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"tasted like warm honey"
1"seemed designed to make time irrelevant"
2"sounded like a lullaby Rory hadn't heard s"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1586
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences131
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs52
mean30.5
std29.17
cv0.956
sampleLengths
011
178
24
330
411
513
696
711
854
92
109
1144
122
1358
1443
153
1670
1713
1813
1962
2026
211
229
2375
2480
253
2659
275
2833
2999
306
3125
3245
3325
3423
355
3672
373
385
3940
4075
415
4225
431
448
4586
4615
474
484
4960
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences112
matches
0"was paved"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs216
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount16
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences14
totalSentences131
ratio0.107
matches
0"Not a searing pain — more like pressing a mug of fresh tea to bare skin."
1"Between the rows, orchards sprawled — trees Rory couldn't name, heavy with fruit that glowed faintly from within, soft amber and rose-gold, as though each one held a trapped ember."
2"The moonsilver caught no light here — stayed dull as tarnished pewter under Dymas's amber sky."
3"The notes repeated — consistent, deliberate."
4"Up close, the vines were thick as her forearm and twisted into shapes that suggested intention — spirals, knots, what might have been letters in a language she didn't speak."
5"The golden threads inside pulsed — faintly, arrhythmically, like a heartbeat winding down."
6"The trees bore fruit Rory's brain refused to categorize — shapes that were almost pears but with skin like polished opal, things that resembled peaches but wept a slow golden sap from their stems, clusters of small round berries that chimed against each other when the unfelt breeze stirred them."
7"Beneath it, voices — or the ghosts of voices — murmured in overlapping waves, too distant to parse into words but close enough to feel."
8"Between the trunks, light spilled from low structures built into the hillside — stone and iron buildings with wide chimney stacks that emitted plumes of fragrant smoke."
9"Through a gap in the foliage, Rory caught a glimpse of the interior of the nearest one — a cavernous space lit by hanging braziers, long iron counters, and figures in stained aprons moving with mechanical precision."
10"One chef — a woman with cropped hair and hollow eyes — looked up."
11"The crimson gemstone pulsed hot — hotter than before, a rhythm that matched her pulse."
12"She scanned the groves ahead — more fruit-laden trees, more winding paths of musical stone, and in the far distance, something that broke the skyline."
13"Above them, the amber sky darkened by a single shade — the only indication of time passing in a place that seemed designed to make time irrelevant."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1277
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"cold settled behind Rory's"
adverbCount35
adverbRatio0.0274079874706343
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.007830853563038372
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences131
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences131
mean12.11
std9.87
cv0.815
sampleLengths
011
116
216
34
442
54
617
71
812
95
106
1113
1210
1316
1430
1525
1615
1711
1819
1913
2011
2111
222
233
246
2523
2616
273
282
292
3018
3123
322
332
342
356
365
3713
3822
398
403
4112
4230
4328
4410
453
4613
479
4830
4923
84.73% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.5267175572519084
totalSentences131
uniqueOpeners69
73.26% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences91
matches
0"Just light, sourceless and even,"
1"Then light again, amber and"
ratio0.022
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount23
totalSentences91
matches
0"She clutched it through her"
1"She breathed through her mouth."
2"Her lavender eyes were half-closed,"
3"She noted that."
4"Their shadow-form drifted ahead, not"
5"Her hand trembled."
6"Her nostrils flared"
7"She looked at the nearest"
8"They pressed deeper."
9"They skirted the kitchen structures,"
10"Their hands worked cleavers and"
11"Her gaze passed through the"
12"Her mouth opened."
13"She stopped and tilted her"
14"She looked at Rory with"
15"Its cold radiated up her"
16"She scanned the groves ahead"
17"She shut that down."
18"She could almost feel the"
19"She lifted her foot."
ratio0.253
47.91% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount75
totalSentences91
matches
0"The pendant burned against Rory's"
1"She clutched it through her"
2"The Veil had parted like"
3"Nyx materialized beside her, their"
4"Violet eyes swept across the"
5"She breathed through her mouth."
6"The air tasted like warm"
7"Nyx said, and the name"
8"Vineyards cascaded down terraced slopes,"
9"The sky above was the"
10"The words left Rory before"
11"Isolde stood to her left,"
12"The Seer's bare feet had"
13"Her lavender eyes were half-closed,"
14"Isolde's mouth curved."
15"Rory pulled the Fae blade"
16"The moonsilver caught no light"
17"She noted that."
18"The path was paved in"
19"Each footfall produced a faint"
ratio0.824
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences91
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences49
technicalSentenceCount13
matches
0"She clutched it through her jacket and blinked against light that had no business existing underground."
1"The Veil had parted like wet tissue paper, and the tunnel of cold displacement that followed had lasted three heartbeats, maybe four, before depositing them on …"
2"Nyx materialized beside her, their form flickering between solid shadow and a shape that was almost human."
3"Between the rows, orchards sprawled — trees Rory couldn't name, heavy with fruit that glowed faintly from within, soft amber and rose-gold, as though each one h…"
4"Just light, sourceless and even, pouring from an amber vault that stretched to every horizon."
5"The trees bore fruit Rory's brain refused to categorize — shapes that were almost pears but with skin like polished opal, things that resembled peaches but wept…"
6"Their hands worked cleavers and whisks and implements Rory couldn't name against ingredients that shifted color on the cutting board."
7"The crimson gemstone pulsed hot — hotter than before, a rhythm that matched her pulse."
8"She scanned the groves ahead — more fruit-laden trees, more winding paths of musical stone, and in the far distance, something that broke the skyline."
9"The warm air filled her lungs with cinnamon and char and the ghost of something that reminded her, painfully, of her mother's Christmas pudding."
10"She could almost feel the soil beneath her feet reaching for her recollections, hungry, patient, extracting what it could from the pressure of her weight."
11"Above them, the amber sky darkened by a single shade — the only indication of time passing in a place that seemed designed to make time irrelevant."
12"She set her jaw, pressed the cold blade against the hot pendant, and let the dissonance between Fae-forged steel and Hel-born stone anchor her to the only thing…"
50.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags20
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Nyx said, and the name left them like a confession"
1"Nyx's form rippled, a distortion that Rory had learned to read as discomfort"
2"Nyx drew, shadow coalescing into something sharper, more defined"
75.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Nyx confirmed (confirm)"
1"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
2"Nyx corrected (correct)"
dialogueSentences40
tagDensity0.15
leniency0.3
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.15
79.1376%