Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8VTDJ2EFT2J6A387TSZ7VT

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Duration:
1m 12s
Cost:
$0.080865
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The pendant burned against Rory's sternum before they even stepped through. Not the pleasant warmth she'd grown accustomed to — this was urgent, a coal pressed to skin through the thin cotton of her shirt. She pulled the silver chain free and the Heartstone swung loose, its crimson facets throwing light that had no source. It pulsed. Once. Twice. A heartbeat that wasn't hers. "That's our invitation." Nyx's voice drifted from somewhere to her left, though their body had already thinned to a ribbon of dark against the shimmering tear in the air. The rift point hung between two bollards on the Southbank like a heat mirage, bending the grey London skyline behind it into something liquid. Isolde stood at the edge, silver hair lifting in a breeze that blew from nowhere on this side. Her bare feet made no impression on the pavement. She tilted her head, lavender eyes fixed on the distortion the way a bird watches a cat. "What waits on the other side of a door depends on how you open it." "That's not helpful." Rory closed her fist around the pendant. The heat spread through her fingers, up her wrist, past the crescent scar. "Is it safe to walk through?" "Safe is a word with very short legs." Nyx rippled back into solidity, their violet gaze the only feature in the dark silhouette of their face. "She means no. But that's why we brought the blade." Rory touched the Fae dagger at her hip. Cold as always, even through the leather wrapping she'd wound around the grip. Moonsilver. She still half-expected to wake up back in her flat above Silas' bar and find the whole thing had been a fever dream brought on by bad takeaway. "Together, then," she said, and stepped forward. The rift swallowed her like water. No — not water. Water was cold, indifferent. This was warm and it *noticed* her. The membrane of the Veil clung to her skin and peeled away with a sound like tearing silk, and the light changed, and the ground changed, and the air changed, and London vanished as though it had never existed at all. Amber sky. That was the first thing. A sky the color of dark honey stretching from horizon to horizon without a single cloud, without a sun, the light diffused and sourceless and warm on the back of her neck. Rory looked up and kept looking. No stars. No moon. Just that deep, golden glow pressing down from everywhere at once. "Breathe." Nyx materialized beside her, their shadow-body denser here, more defined. As though this place gave them more substance, not less. "The first breath is always the hardest." She hadn't realized she'd been holding it. Rory inhaled. Flavor. That was the only word for it. The air tasted of ripe stone fruit and woodsmoke and something underneath, something darker and sweeter that coated the roof of her mouth like honey left too long in the jar. Her lungs expanded with it and a flush crept across her cheeks — the involuntary, physical pleasure of a first bite of something extraordinary. "Christ." She pressed the back of her hand to her lips. "Is the air always—" "Yes." Nyx's whisper carried an edge. "Don't trust it." Isolde arrived without sound. One moment the space beside Rory was empty; the next, the Seer stood there, wildflowers sprouting from the cracks in the reddish earth around her feet. They bloomed and died in the space of a breath. Isolde didn't seem to notice. "Oh," the Seer said, and for the first time since Rory had known her, Isolde's voice held no riddle. Just a single syllable, soft and wounded. "I remember this." Before them, the landscape of Dymas unrolled. Vineyards first. Row after impossible row cascading down hillsides that shouldn't have existed in any geometry Rory understood — slopes that curved upward at the edges, folding back toward themselves like the inner surface of a bowl. The vines were thick as a person's arm, gnarled and black-barked, heavy with fruit that ranged from deep purple to a luminous, fleshy gold. The grapes — if that's what they were — hung in clusters the size of her head, and they moved. A slow, rhythmic swell. Breathing. Beyond the vineyards, orchards. Trees with white bark and leaves that shifted color as Rory watched, cycling through green to copper to a deep arterial red before starting again. Their branches drooped under the weight of fruit she didn't recognize — oblong things with skin like burnished metal, round globes that wept clear juice from their stems, small clustered berries that gave off a faint chiming sound when the sourceless wind stirred them. And beyond the orchards, far in the amber distance, structures. Towers built from something that caught the honeyed light and threw it back in fractured beams. A city, or something that served as one, sprawling across a valley floor that shimmered with heat. "Don't stare at the horizon too long." Nyx moved ahead, their form sliding across the reddish soil. "Distance lies here. What looks far might be close. What looks close —" "Might be unreachable. Yeah, I'm getting the picture." They started down a path between the nearest vineyard rows. The soil was the color of rust and soft under Rory's boots, yielding slightly with each step as though it was packed organic matter rather than mineral. Which, she realized with a chill that cut through the warmth of the air, it might well be. She chose not to look too closely. The vines closed overhead as they moved deeper, forming a tunnel of twisted wood and swollen fruit. Light filtered through the leaves in dappled amber pools. Somewhere ahead, Rory heard musicnot instruments exactly, but a rhythmic clanging and hissing punctuated by voices raised in what might have been song or might have been argument. The sounds carried strangely, bouncing between the vine rows, seeming to come from all directions. "Kitchens," Nyx said. "They never stop." A grape dropped from a vine above and split open on the path an inch from Rory's boot. The juice was dark, almost black, and it steamed where it hit the soil. The smell that rose from it made her mouth flood with saliva — roasted meat and caramel and the sharp bite of alcohol all at once. Her stomach clenched with a hunger so sudden and violent it doubled her over. Isolde's hand closed on her elbow. The Seer's grip was surprisingly strong, her skin fever-cool. "Don't eat. Don't drink. The fruit here fills the belly but empties everything else." Rory straightened, wiping her mouth. The hunger faded as quickly as it had come, leaving behind a hollow ache and a thin thread of fear. She'd *wanted* it. Not in an idle way. In the way a drowning person wanted air. "How do people live here?" "They don't live." Nyx paused at a break in the vines where the path forked. Left descended toward the chiming orchards. Right climbed toward a ridge where stone structures crouched — low, heavy buildings with smoke curling from square chimneys. "They're consumed. Dymas feeds them and feeds on them in the same motion." The right path, then. The smoke from the chimneys carried scents Rory couldn't separate — dozens of them layered together in a complex, shifting architecture of aroma. Saffron and char. Butter and blood. Something floral and delicate weaving through something animal and deep. Her body responded before her mind could intervene: skin flushing, pupils dilating, a tightness in her chest that had nothing to do with fear and everything to do with want. She gripped the Fae blade's handle. The cold of the moonsilver cut through the warmth like a slap. Her head cleared. "Useful, that." Nyx watched her, violet eyes unreadable. "Keep holding it." The stone buildings grew larger as they climbed. What Rory had taken for crude huts resolved into something far more elaborate — a compound of interconnected kitchens, each one open on at least one side, each one blazing with fire and motion. Through the nearest opening she saw a figure hunched over a cutting block the size of a dining table, working a cleaver through something that wept purple. The figure was human, or had been. A man, heavy-set, with forearms roped in old burn scars and eyes that held the glazed, ecstatic focus of someone in the grip of a drug. He didn't look up. Other figures moved between the kitchens. Some human. Some decidedly not — taller, with too many joints in their fingers, skin that shifted between colors like the orchard leaves. They carried platters piled with things Rory couldn't identify and didn't want to. The platters steamed. The air shimmered above them. "Helbound souls," Isolde murmured, watching the scarred man. Her expression had gone distant, the way it did when visions pressed behind her eyes. "Contracted from Earth. They cook and they eat and they cook again. The cycle has no end they can see." "Can they see us?" "They see nothing but the next dish." Rory watched the man bring the cleaver down. His technique was flawless — precise, economical, the motion of someone who had performed it ten thousand times. His lips moved as he worked, mouthing words or a recipe or a prayer. A smaller figure scurried past him carrying a bowl of something that writhed, and the man's hand shot out and snatched a piece of it without breaking his rhythm, popping it into his mouth. His eyes rolled back. A tremor ran through his body. The cleaver came down again. "We need to move." Rory pulled her gaze away. The pendant pulsed against her chest — faster now, insistent. "Which way to the lower gates?" Nyx pointed past the kitchen compound, toward the city in the valley. In the amber light, the towers looked less like buildings and more like bones. Tall, curved, tapering to points. "Through the markets. Past the Feast Halls. Down." "Down always means worse in these places, doesn't it." "In Dymas, down means hungrier." Nyx's shadow-form rippled at the edges, a tell Rory had learned to read as discomfort. "The deeper you go, the less the food satisfies. At the bottom, there's a hunger that nothing in any realm can fill." Isolde crouched beside the path and touched one of the wildflowers that had sprung up in her wake. It was already withering, its petals curling inward, the color bleeding out of it into the rust-red soil. She watched it die with an expression Rory couldn't read. "The city has a name it does not speak. The gates swing both directions. What you carry will light the way, and what you hold will cut it open." The Seer looked up, lavender eyes sharp. "But a key that opens a lock becomes the lock's possession. Remember that." Rory looked down at the pendant in one hand, the blade at her hip under the other. Light the way. Cut it open. "Right." She started walking toward the bone-white towers. "Let's go find out what's hungry."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences40
tagDensity0.4
leniency0.8
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.85% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1840
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"slightly"
2"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
45.65% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1840
totalAiIsms20
found
0
word"warmth"
count3
1
word"pulsed"
count2
2
word"silk"
count1
3
word"whisper"
count1
4
word"cascading"
count1
5
word"rhythmic"
count2
6
word"weight"
count1
7
word"fractured"
count1
8
word"shimmered"
count2
9
word"chill"
count1
10
word"stomach"
count1
11
word"complex"
count1
12
word"unreadable"
count1
13
word"resolved"
count1
14
word"flawless"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"pulsed"
2"silk"
3"whisper"
4"cascading"
5"rhythmic"
6"weight"
7"fractured"
8"shimmered"
9"chill"
10"stomach"
11"complex"
12"unreadable"
13"resolved"
14"flawless"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences130
matches
0"o with fear"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences130
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seem to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences154
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen43
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords2
totalWords1855
ratio0.001
matches
0"noticed"
1"wanted"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
82.78% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions51
wordCount1562
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity1.34
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory21
Heartstone1
Southbank1
London2
Fae2
Veil1
Nyx10
Isolde7
Seer4
Dymas1
Left1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Heartstone"
2"Southbank"
3"Veil"
4"Nyx"
5"Isolde"
6"Seer"
7"Dymas"
8"Left"
places
0"London"
globalScore0.828
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences91
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.539
wordCount1855
matches
0"not instruments exactly, but a rhythmic clanging"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences154
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs54
mean34.35
std25.74
cv0.749
sampleLengths
011
153
253
344
415
529
68
728
850
97
106
1156
122
1358
1428
159
1663
1715
189
1945
2029
217
2286
2373
2443
2530
268
2762
2871
296
3072
3115
3214
3341
345
3553
3673
3721
3811
39106
4050
4143
424
437
4489
4525
4631
478
489
4942
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences130
matches
0"were — hung"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs255
matches
0"was already withering"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount15
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences15
totalSentences154
ratio0.097
matches
0"Not the pleasant warmth she'd grown accustomed to — this was urgent, a coal pressed to skin through the thin cotton of her shirt."
1"No — not water."
2"Her lungs expanded with it and a flush crept across her cheeks — the involuntary, physical pleasure of a first bite of something extraordinary."
3"One moment the space beside Rory was empty; the next, the Seer stood there, wildflowers sprouting from the cracks in the reddish earth around her feet."
4"Row after impossible row cascading down hillsides that shouldn't have existed in any geometry Rory understood — slopes that curved upward at the edges, folding back toward themselves like the inner surface of a bowl."
5"The grapes — if that's what they were — hung in clusters the size of her head, and they moved."
6"Their branches drooped under the weight of fruit she didn't recognize — oblong things with skin like burnished metal, round globes that wept clear juice from their stems, small clustered berries that gave off a faint chiming sound when the sourceless wind stirred them."
7"Somewhere ahead, Rory heard music — not instruments exactly, but a rhythmic clanging and hissing punctuated by voices raised in what might have been song or might have been argument."
8"The smell that rose from it made her mouth flood with saliva — roasted meat and caramel and the sharp bite of alcohol all at once."
9"Right climbed toward a ridge where stone structures crouched — low, heavy buildings with smoke curling from square chimneys."
10"The smoke from the chimneys carried scents Rory couldn't separate — dozens of them layered together in a complex, shifting architecture of aroma."
11"What Rory had taken for crude huts resolved into something far more elaborate — a compound of interconnected kitchens, each one open on at least one side, each one blazing with fire and motion."
12"Some decidedly not — taller, with too many joints in their fingers, skin that shifted between colors like the orchard leaves."
13"His technique was flawless — precise, economical, the motion of someone who had performed it ten thousand times."
14"The pendant pulsed against her chest — faster now, insistent."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1062
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount41
adverbRatio0.038606403013182675
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.007532956685499058
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences154
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences154
mean12.05
std9.22
cv0.766
sampleLengths
011
124
220
32
41
51
65
729
824
918
109
1117
1215
1310
1413
156
168
1718
1810
198
2013
211
2228
237
246
254
264
277
2841
292
305
3132
326
332
342
3511
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3710
387
397
402
411
427
4331
4424
4511
464
476
483
494
72.29% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.461038961038961
totalSentences154
uniqueOpeners71
85.47% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences117
matches
0"Just that deep, golden glow"
1"Just a single syllable, soft"
2"Somewhere ahead, Rory heard music"
ratio0.026
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences117
matches
0"She pulled the silver chain"
1"Her bare feet made no"
2"She tilted her head, lavender"
3"She still half-expected to wake"
4"she said, and stepped forward"
5"She hadn't realized she'd been"
6"Her lungs expanded with it"
7"She pressed the back of"
8"They bloomed and died in"
9"Their branches drooped under the"
10"They started down a path"
11"She chose not to look"
12"Her stomach clenched with a"
13"She'd *wanted* it."
14"Her body responded before her"
15"She gripped the Fae blade's"
16"Her head cleared."
17"He didn't look up."
18"They carried platters piled with"
19"Her expression had gone distant,"
ratio0.222
58.29% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount94
totalSentences117
matches
0"The pendant burned against Rory's"
1"She pulled the silver chain"
2"A heartbeat that wasn't hers."
3"Nyx's voice drifted from somewhere"
4"The rift point hung between"
5"Isolde stood at the edge,"
6"Her bare feet made no"
7"She tilted her head, lavender"
8"Rory closed her fist around"
9"The heat spread through her"
10"Nyx rippled back into solidity,"
11"Rory touched the Fae dagger"
12"She still half-expected to wake"
13"she said, and stepped forward"
14"The rift swallowed her like"
15"Water was cold, indifferent."
16"This was warm and it"
17"The membrane of the Veil"
18"That was the first thing."
19"A sky the color of"
ratio0.803
85.47% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences117
matches
0"As though this place gave"
1"Before them, the landscape of"
ratio0.017
17.54% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences57
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"She pulled the silver chain free and the Heartstone swung loose, its crimson facets throwing light that had no source."
1"Row after impossible row cascading down hillsides that shouldn't have existed in any geometry Rory understood — slopes that curved upward at the edges, folding …"
2"The vines were thick as a person's arm, gnarled and black-barked, heavy with fruit that ranged from deep purple to a luminous, fleshy gold."
3"Their branches drooped under the weight of fruit she didn't recognize — oblong things with skin like burnished metal, round globes that wept clear juice from th…"
4"A city, or something that served as one, sprawling across a valley floor that shimmered with heat."
5"The soil was the color of rust and soft under Rory's boots, yielding slightly with each step as though it was packed organic matter rather than mineral."
6"Her body responded before her mind could intervene: skin flushing, pupils dilating, a tightness in her chest that had nothing to do with fear and everything to …"
7"Through the nearest opening she saw a figure hunched over a cutting block the size of a dining table, working a cleaver through something that wept purple."
8"His technique was flawless — precise, economical, the motion of someone who had performed it ten thousand times."
9"A smaller figure scurried past him carrying a bowl of something that writhed, and the man's hand shot out and snatched a piece of it without breaking his rhythm…"
31.25% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Nyx's voice drifted, though their body had already thinned to a ribbon of dark against the shimmering tear in the air"
1"Nyx materialized, their shadow-body denser here, more defined"
2"Nyx moved, their form sliding across the reddish soil"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"She pressed (press)"
1"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences40
tagDensity0.125
leniency0.25
rawRatio0.4
effectiveRatio0.1
85.6866%