Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8W2889GHFNW48BMS9QQ62G

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1m 22s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Silas rarely froze. In the months Rory had lived above The Raven's Nest, she'd watched him handle drunken brawlers, bad debts, and once a man who'd arrived with what she later learned was a severed finger in a takeaway bag, all without so much as a raised eyebrow. But the glass in his hand simply stopped moving now, half-polished, suspended mid-air. She tracked his gaze toward the door. The man who entered looked like he'd been sleeping in his good suit for three days. Not shabby, exactly. More like worn through. Expensively worn through. Charcoal wool, good cut, the elbows slightly shiny. He was around Silas's age, maybe a few years younger, with close-cropped silver hair and the kind of weathered jaw that spoke of a life spent squinting at horizons. He scanned the bar the way Silas did when he thought no one was watching, a swift military sweep, tallying exits. Then he saw Silas, and something crossed his face. Not quite a smile. "Christ," Rory said before she could swallow it. Silas set the glass down with a deliberateness that made her stomach tighten. He came around the bar, and she noticed the slight drag in his left leg was worse than usual tonight. He stopped two paces from the man. These two old men stared at each other like dogs who'd grown up in the same house and spent a decade on opposite sides of a fence. "Martin." "Si." That was all for a moment. The jazz record Silas kept on low during the quieter weeknights filled the silence, something languid and bruised. Rory turned back to her drink. "Same as before?" Silas said. "I don't drink anymore." "Sparkling water, then." She heard the bar stools scrape as they settled somewhere nearby. She didn't look. She studied the grain of the mahogany bar, the faint rings left by years of glasses, the old black-and-white photographs gathering dust along the walls. She'd got good at becoming wallpaper in this place. "Found me, then," Silas said. "Wasn't hard. You told me once you'd open a bar in London if you ever got out. Took me forty-five minutes and a phone book." "Phone book." A pause. "Three years." "Four." Martin's voice was flat. Not accusatory. That made it worse. "Four years, two months." Silas's silver signet ring clicked against his glass. A habit. A tell. "I heard about Jana," he said. "Everyone heard about Jana." Martin moved something on the bar. "Didn't stop them sending me back out six weeks later." There were things in the air between them that Rory couldn't name. Not quite grief, not quite blame. Something older, the kind that had been turned over so many times it had gone smooth, like sea glass. "You look tired," Silas said. "I am tired." "So you came here." "So I came here." Rory traced her thumbnail along the edge of the crescent scar on her left wrist. Kept her eyes on her glass. "They let you leave?" Silas said. "Medical discharge. October." "October." A beat. "You should have called." Martin let out a short breath. Not a laugh, not quite. "You're still carrying that old Nokia you never switch on properly." "It works fine." "The voicemail's full, Si. Been full since 2018." Silas had nothing to say to that. Rory glanced sideways. Martin had both hands flat on the bar, studying them. Old scars crossed his knuckles, the kind that came from repeated damage. His face in profile was composed, but his jaw worked faintly, like he was chewing something unpleasant. "They gave me a flat in Vauxhall," Martin said. "Nice enough. River view. I spent the first two weeks staring at it." "At the river?" "At the window. Wondering what would happen if I opened it." The jazz record crackled between tracks. Rory put her glass down. She'd told herself she was just having a quiet drink after her Golden Empress shift, feet aching, smelling faintly of sesame oil. She'd told herself whatever happened in the corners of this bar was none of her business. She'd told herself a lot of things, most of which she had no intention of honouring. She turned on her stool. "I'm Rory. I live upstairs." Martin looked at her for the first time. His eyes were clear grey and tired in a way that had nothing to do with sleep. Crow's feet deepened as he assessed her with the same practiced efficiency as his entrance sweep. "She knows?" he asked Silas. "Some." "Do you?" Martin said to her. "Enough to know that window comment wasn't small talk." Martin blinked. Something shifted behind his eyes, not offence. More like the particular wariness of someone who had spent too long around people who weaponised honesty. "She's direct," he told Silas. "It's a problem." "It's refreshing." Martin picked up his sparkling water, took a careful sip. "They don't make them direct anymore. The new ones they've got now." He shook his head. "Algorithms and clean hands. Nobody spends time being wrong in the field." "You were wrong plenty in the field," Silas said. "Yes." He set the glass down. "Yes, I was." Again that silence, but a degree or two warmer. "Prague," Rory said. Both men looked at her. "Not prying. Just that whenever Silas doesn't want to talk about something, he calls it a knee injury." Silas's jaw tightened fractionally. Martin almost smiled, except it didn't reach his eyes. "Prague was mine," Martin said. "I gave the order. Si took the shrapnel." "That's not," Silas started. "My call. We both know it." The silence that followed had weight. The old kind, the kind that had been carried a long way. Rory thought about Cardiff, about all the things she'd said that couldn't be unsaid, and all the apologies that had come too late and landed wrong. She thought about what it cost a person to come through a door four years too late and say nothing except the plain truth of how they'd passed the time. "Right," she said, and climbed off her stool. "I'm getting another round. You," she said to Martin, "tell me what you eat, because Silas hasn't had a meal since noon and I've got leftovers from the Empress." Martin regarded her with those grey, tired eyes. "You're not going to let this be a sad reunion, are you." "Not if I can help it." He looked at Silas, a long look, full of everything they'd left unsaid across four years and one botched operation and a Vauxhall flat with a window overlooking the Thames. "Noodles," Martin said finally. "If that's on offer." Silas cleared his throat. A small sound, barely anything. Rory caught the way his hand moved, setting his silver signet ring flat against the bar, turning it once, then stilling. She'd learnt the full catalogue of that ring's movements. What each one meant. This one she hadn't seen before. She was still trying to place it when the back door swung open, the one that led through to the hidden room behind the bookshelf, and a woman stepped out who should not, by any geography Rory understood, have been there at all.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags21
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Martin said finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences55
tagDensity0.382
leniency0.764
rawRatio0.048
effectiveRatio0.036
95.82% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1196
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
66.56% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1196
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"eyebrow"
count1
1
word"scanned"
count1
2
word"stomach"
count1
3
word"silence"
count3
4
word"traced"
count1
5
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"eyebrow"
1"scanned"
2"stomach"
3"silence"
4"traced"
5"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences94
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences94
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences125
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen45
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1196
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions25
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
44.21% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions51
wordCount898
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity2.12
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Rory11
Raven1
Nest1
Silas19
Martin14
Golden1
Empress1
Cardiff1
Vauxhall1
Thames1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Raven"
2"Silas"
3"Martin"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"Vauxhall"
2"Thames"
globalScore0.442
windowScore0.5
57.41% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences54
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"looked like he'd been sleeping in his goo"
1"Not quite grief, not quite blame"
2"not quite blame"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1196
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences125
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs75
mean15.95
std16.75
cv1.05
sampleLengths
061
17
284
313
48
540
627
71
81
924
106
115
124
133
1448
155
1625
176
1815
1912
206
2120
2237
235
243
254
264
2721
286
293
307
3122
323
338
347
3542
3622
373
3811
396
405
4154
425
435
4441
455
461
476
489
4926
94.06% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences94
matches
0"been turned"
1"was composed"
2"been carried"
79.52% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs166
matches
0"was watching"
1"was just having"
2"was still trying"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences125
ratio0
matches(empty)
93.15% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount903
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"close-cropped silver hair"
adverbCount37
adverbRatio0.04097452934662237
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.01107419712070875
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences125
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences125
mean9.57
std8.16
cv0.853
sampleLengths
03
145
213
37
416
53
64
73
88
929
1021
119
124
138
1413
1520
167
1727
181
191
206
2118
226
235
244
253
2611
273
2825
299
305
3125
324
332
345
352
364
374
388
392
402
416
4210
4310
4412
456
4619
475
483
494
63.47% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.448
totalSentences125
uniqueOpeners56
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences78
matches
0"More like worn through."
1"Expensively worn through."
2"Then he saw Silas, and"
3"More like the particular wariness"
4"Again that silence, but a"
ratio0.064
91.79% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences78
matches
0"She tracked his gaze toward"
1"He was around Silas's age,"
2"He scanned the bar the"
3"He came around the bar,"
4"He stopped two paces from"
5"She heard the bar stools"
6"She didn't look."
7"She studied the grain of"
8"She'd got good at becoming"
9"His face in profile was"
10"She'd told herself she was"
11"She'd told herself whatever happened"
12"She'd told herself a lot"
13"She turned on her stool."
14"His eyes were clear grey"
15"he asked Silas"
16"he told Silas"
17"He shook his head"
18"He set the glass down"
19"She thought about what it"
ratio0.321
56.15% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount63
totalSentences78
matches
0"Silas rarely froze."
1"She tracked his gaze toward"
2"The man who entered looked"
3"Charcoal wool, good cut, the"
4"He was around Silas's age,"
5"He scanned the bar the"
6"Rory said before she could"
7"Silas set the glass down"
8"He came around the bar,"
9"He stopped two paces from"
10"These two old men stared"
11"That was all for a"
12"The jazz record Silas kept"
13"Rory turned back to her"
14"She heard the bar stools"
15"She didn't look."
16"She studied the grain of"
17"She'd got good at becoming"
18"Martin's voice was flat"
19"That made it worse."
ratio0.808
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences78
matches(empty)
ratio0
19.70% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences29
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"In the months Rory had lived above The Raven's Nest, she'd watched him handle drunken brawlers, bad debts, and once a man who'd arrived with what she later lear…"
1"He was around Silas's age, maybe a few years younger, with close-cropped silver hair and the kind of weathered jaw that spoke of a life spent squinting at horiz…"
2"These two old men stared at each other like dogs who'd grown up in the same house and spent a decade on opposite sides of a fence."
3"Something older, the kind that had been turned over so many times it had gone smooth, like sea glass."
4"More like the particular wariness of someone who had spent too long around people who weaponised honesty."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags21
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags16
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences55
tagDensity0.291
leniency0.582
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
85.3947%