Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8W3EJM3GFPSA0DMDJNX0DF

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Duration:
1m 18s
Cost:
$0.079685
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The first deadbolt turned with a sound like a knuckle cracking. Then the second. Then the third. Rory pulled the door open expecting the Deliveroo driver Eva had promised to send up before she'd left for the British Library — pad thai, extra chili, cold Singha — and found Lucien Moreau standing on the landing instead, one hand resting on the ivory head of his cane, the other holding a paper bag dark with grease stains. For three full seconds, neither of them spoke. He looked exactly the same. That was the worst part. The platinum hair slicked back from his temples with almost surgical precision. The charcoal suit cut close to his lean frame, not a wrinkle in it despite the fact that the stairwell above the curry house was approximately nine hundred degrees and smelled like cumin and old carpet. His mismatched eyes — amber and black, the mark of what he was on his father's side — studied her with that particular quality of attention she'd spent the last two months trying to forget. As though she were a document in a language he hadn't quite mastered, and he found the challenge more interesting than frustrating. "Before you close the door," he said, his accent curling around the consonants the way it always did, soft Marseille French bleeding into practised London English, "I should tell you that I intercepted your dinner order. The driver was very understanding." Rory gripped the door frame. Ptolemy wound between her ankles, rumbling his broken-engine purr, completely oblivious to the fact that this was a crisis. "You bribed my Deliveroo driver." "I tipped him generously for the inconvenience." "That's the same thing." "It is not remotely the same thing." Lucien lifted the paper bag a fraction of an inch. "I also brought you food. From Golden Empress. Yu-Fei says hello and that you missed your Thursday shift." The mention of Yu-Fei sent a needle of guilt through her ribs. She had missed her shift. She'd been holed up in Eva's flat for three days, combing through scrolls and research notes with curtains drawn, sleeping on the sofa with a tabby cat on her chest, telling herself it had nothing to do with avoidance and everything to do with work. She'd almost believed it. "How did you know I was here?" she asked. Something shifted behind his eyes. The amber one caught the hallway's bare bulb and threw it back like a coin turning in water. "Rory. I'm an information broker. Knowing where people are is quite literally what I do." "Right." She crossed her arms over the oversized Cardiff University hoodie she'd been wearing for two days straight. Her hair was unwashed. She wasn't wearing shoes. There was a smudge of ink on her left hand from where she'd fallen asleep holding one of Eva's fountain pens. She was, in short, a disaster, and he was standing there looking like he'd stepped out of a fitting room at Savile Row, and the fundamental injustice of it made her want to slam the door and lock all three deadbolts and pretend this wasn't happening. Instead she said, "Eva's not here." "I know. I'm not here for Eva." The words landed in the narrow space between them like a dropped glass. Rory felt the impact somewhere behind her sternum, in the place where she kept all the things she'd decided not to feel. Ptolemy, tired of being ignored, meowed once, loudly, and trotted back into the flat. Lucien's gaze followed the cat, then returned to her. Patient. Unbearably patient. He had always been patient with her, even when she hadn't deserved it, even when she'd been sharp-tongued and defensive and halfway out the door. It was the thing she resented most about him — that steadiness, that refusal to match her when she was looking for a fight. Evan had always matched her. Evan had always escalated. She'd learned to read the weather of a man's temper the way sailors read the sky, and Lucien's calm unsettled her more than any storm. "You can't just show up," she said, but the edge in her voice was already dulling. She hated that too. "And yet." He didn't smile. That was the other thing about Lucien — he never smiled when he was being serious, and he was almost always being serious with her. With other people, with clients and contacts and the various creatures that moved through London's underworld, he wore charm like another layer of tailoring. With her, he stripped it away, and what was left underneath was something rawer and more difficult. "You stopped answering your phone." "I was busy." "You were hiding." "I was researching." "Those are not mutually exclusive." She opened her mouth to argue and found she had nothing. He was right. He was usually right, and it was infuriating. She pressed her thumbnail into the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist — an old habit, grounding, the small smooth ridge of tissue a touchstone — and exhaled. "Fine," she said, and stepped back from the door. "But only because you've got my dinner hostage." He didn't gloat. He simply inclined his head and crossed the threshold, navigating the obstacle course of Eva's flat with the ease of a man accustomed to moving through cluttered spaces without disturbing them. Books rose in precarious towers from every horizontal surface — the kitchen counter, the coffee table, the arms of the sofa where Ptolemy had already reclaimed his spot. Scrolls unfurled across the floor like shed snakeskins. Research notes in Eva's cramped handwriting papered the walls, connected by lengths of red string that made the whole flat look like the inside of a conspiracy theorist's mind. Lucien set the paper bag on the one clear corner of the kitchen counter. His cane he leaned against the wall beside the door, within arm's reach — always within arm's reach, the thin blade hidden inside it a secret Rory was one of very few people to know. He unbuttoned his suit jacket with one hand. His fingers were long, precise, unhurried. "You look tired," he said, not looking at her. "You look like you want to get punched." Now he did look at her —a flicker of something at the corner of his mouth that wasn't quite amusement. "You'd have to reach my face first." "I'm five-six. I could reach your face." "In theory." "In practice. I have excellent aim." The almost-smile faded. He turned to face her fully, and in the yellow kitchen light of Eva's flat, with the muffled thump of music from the curry house below them and the distant wail of a siren filtering in through the window she'd cracked for air, Rory saw what the careful composure was costing him. The set of his jaw was fractionally too tight. The tendons in his neck stood out like cables. His black eye — the demon eye, the one he couldn't disguise without effort — was darker than she remembered, the pupil indistinguishable from the iris, a well with no bottom. He was nervous. In the months she'd known him — the late-night phone calls in French and English and sometimes a demon tongue she couldn't name, the favours exchanged like currency, the slow gravitational pull that had drawn them closer and closer until the night everything had fractured — she had never once seen Lucien Moreau nervous. "I didn't come here to argue with you," he said. "Then why did you come?" "Because you left." Three words. Simple, declarative, devastating. He said them the way he said everything — like language was a blade and he knew exactly where to place the cut. Rory leaned against the kitchen counter and gripped the edge with both hands. The laminate was cold and slightly sticky. "You know why I left." "I know what you told me. I do not think it is the same thing." "Lucien—" "You told me it was too complicated." He took one step closer, just one, and stopped. Careful. Always so careful with her, maintaining that distance she'd demanded, respecting the perimeter she'd drawn even as he pressed against its edge. "You told me that what I am makes it impossible. But you were shaking when you said it, and you would not look at me, and I have spent two months trying to reconcile those two things, and I cannot." Her throat ached. She pressed harder against the counter's edge, the laminate biting into her palms. Ptolemy had climbed onto the back of the sofa and was watching them both with the calm, judgmental gaze of a creature that had never once been uncertain about anything. "It's not about what you are," she said quietly. "Then what?" She looked at the crescent scar on her wrist. She thought about Evan — not the specifics, not the memories she'd boxed and shelved and refused to inventory, but the shape of it, the lesson she'd taken from it: that wanting someone was a kind of vulnerability, and vulnerability was a door you could never fully close once it was open. "I don't know how to do this without it wrecking me," she said. The words came out smaller than she'd intended. Thinner. She'd meant to sound pragmatic and instead she sounded like exactly what she was — a twenty-five-year-old woman standing barefoot in her best friend's flat, terrified of the precise thing she wanted most. Lucien was quiet for a long moment. She could hear him breathing. She could hear the curry house music, bass-heavy and muffled, and the rattle of the old pipes in the wall, and London doing what London always did outside the window — living, churning, indifferent. Then he closed the distance between them. Not all of it. He stopped close enough that she could smell his cologne — something warm and resinous that she'd tried and failed to forget — and see the fine grain of the stubble along his jaw. His mismatched eyes searched her face with an intensity that made something turn over low in her belly. "I don't know how either," he said. His voice had dropped, lost its polish, gone rough at the seams. "I have never done this. Not with the truth. Not with someone who knows what I am and stayed anyway." "I didn't stay. I ran." "And I followed. Perhaps that tells us something." She laughed — a short, wet sound that startled them both. "It tells me you're stubborn." "I am half-demon. Stubbornness is in the blood." She looked up at him. This close, the amber eye was extraordinary — not just gold but layered, honey over copper over something that moved like light through deep water. The black eye beside it should have been frightening. She knew what lived in it, what lineage it signified, what realm had spawned the father he never spoke of. But it wasn't frightening. It was just Lucien. "I'm scared," she said. Not a confession. A fact. "I know." He raised one hand, slowly, giving her time to pull away. His fingertips brushed the line of her jaw. His touch was warm, warmer than a human's — the demon blood running hotter beneath the surface. "I know you are." She didn't pull away. His thumb traced the hinge of her jaw, feather-light, and came to rest just below her ear. She felt her pulse kick against his touch, felt the sharp sweetness of it — being held gently by someone strong enough to be gentle, the deliberateness of it, the choice. "Stay for dinner," she whispered. His mouth curved. A real smile, rare and unguarded and so beautiful it ached. "I brought dinner. It would be rude to leave." "Extremely rude." "I was raised better than that." "Were you?" "My mother was. Close enough." She reached up and curled her fingers into the lapel of his perfect charcoal suit and felt the fabric crease under her grip. He let her ruin it. He let her anchor herself there. His hand slid from her jaw into her hair, fingers threading through the unwashed black strands, and his forehead came to rest against hers. They stood like that in the cluttered kitchen while the food went cold and Ptolemy lost interest and London rumbled on around them, and Rory thought: this is the door opening. This is what it feels like when you stop running and let someone stand in the threshold with you. She didn't lock it.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences52
tagDensity0.327
leniency0.654
rawRatio0.059
effectiveRatio0.038
85.45% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2062
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"very"
count2
1
adverb"completely"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
4
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"completely"
2"slightly"
3"slowly"
4"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
75.75% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2062
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"unsettled"
count1
1
word"charm"
count1
2
word"navigating"
count1
3
word"flicker"
count1
4
word"fractured"
count1
5
word"churning"
count1
6
word"intensity"
count1
7
word"traced"
count1
8
word"pulse"
count1
9
word"perfect"
count1
highlights
0"unsettled"
1"charm"
2"navigating"
3"flicker"
4"fractured"
5"churning"
6"intensity"
7"traced"
8"pulse"
9"perfect"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences122
matches
0"was nervous"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences122
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences157
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen57
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2086
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions24
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions53
wordCount1735
uniqueNames21
maxNameDensity0.52
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Deliveroo1
Eva6
British1
Library1
Singha1
Lucien9
Moreau2
Marseille1
French2
London5
English2
Rory7
Yu-Fei1
Cardiff1
University1
Savile1
Row1
Ptolemy5
Three1
Careful1
Evan3
persons
0"Eva"
1"Lucien"
2"Moreau"
3"English"
4"Rory"
5"Yu-Fei"
6"Ptolemy"
7"Evan"
places
0"British"
1"Library"
2"Marseille"
3"London"
4"Cardiff"
5"Savile"
globalScore1
windowScore1
21.79% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences78
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"smelled like cumin and old carpet"
1"quite mastered, and he found the challenge more interesting than frustrating"
2"quite amusement"
3"sounded like exactly what she was — a twen"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.959
wordCount2086
matches
0"not the memories she'd boxed and shelved and refused to inventory, but the shape of it, the lesson she'd taken from it"
1"not just gold but layered, honey over copper over something"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences157
matches
0"maintaining that distance"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs74
mean28.19
std29.16
cv1.034
sampleLengths
017
159
28
3115
441
524
65
77
84
935
1062
114
129
1338
1493
156
167
1735
1814
1995
2020
2176
223
233
243
255
2650
2717
2899
2963
309
318
3227
337
342
356
36104
373
3854
3910
405
413
4228
4325
4415
451
4679
4746
489
492
96.64% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences122
matches
0"been holed"
1"being ignored"
2"being held"
16.72% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount8
totalVerbs291
matches
0"wasn't wearing"
1"was standing"
2"wasn't happening"
3"was looking"
4"was already dulling"
5"was being"
6"was costing"
7"was watching"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount25
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences19
totalSentences157
ratio0.121
matches
0"Rory pulled the door open expecting the Deliveroo driver Eva had promised to send up before she'd left for the British Library — pad thai, extra chili, cold Singha — and found Lucien Moreau standing on the landing instead, one hand resting on the ivory head of his cane, the other holding a paper bag dark with grease stains."
1"His mismatched eyes — amber and black, the mark of what he was on his father's side — studied her with that particular quality of attention she'd spent the last two months trying to forget."
2"It was the thing she resented most about him — that steadiness, that refusal to match her when she was looking for a fight."
3"That was the other thing about Lucien — he never smiled when he was being serious, and he was almost always being serious with her."
4"She pressed her thumbnail into the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist — an old habit, grounding, the small smooth ridge of tissue a touchstone — and exhaled."
5"Books rose in precarious towers from every horizontal surface — the kitchen counter, the coffee table, the arms of the sofa where Ptolemy had already reclaimed his spot."
6"His cane he leaned against the wall beside the door, within arm's reach — always within arm's reach, the thin blade hidden inside it a secret Rory was one of very few people to know."
7"Now he did look at her —a flicker of something at the corner of his mouth that wasn't quite amusement."
8"His black eye — the demon eye, the one he couldn't disguise without effort — was darker than she remembered, the pupil indistinguishable from the iris, a well with no bottom."
9"In the months she'd known him — the late-night phone calls in French and English and sometimes a demon tongue she couldn't name, the favours exchanged like currency, the slow gravitational pull that had drawn them closer and closer until the night everything had fractured — she had never once seen Lucien Moreau nervous."
10"He said them the way he said everything — like language was a blade and he knew exactly where to place the cut."
11"She thought about Evan — not the specifics, not the memories she'd boxed and shelved and refused to inventory, but the shape of it, the lesson she'd taken from it: that wanting someone was a kind of vulnerability, and vulnerability was a door you could never fully close once it was open."
12"She'd meant to sound pragmatic and instead she sounded like exactly what she was — a twenty-five-year-old woman standing barefoot in her best friend's flat, terrified of the precise thing she wanted most."
13"She could hear the curry house music, bass-heavy and muffled, and the rattle of the old pipes in the wall, and London doing what London always did outside the window — living, churning, indifferent."
14"He stopped close enough that she could smell his cologne — something warm and resinous that she'd tried and failed to forget — and see the fine grain of the stubble along his jaw."
15"She laughed — a short, wet sound that startled them both."
16"This close, the amber eye was extraordinary — not just gold but layered, honey over copper over something that moved like light through deep water."
17"His touch was warm, warmer than a human's — the demon blood running hotter beneath the surface."
18"She felt her pulse kick against his touch, felt the sharp sweetness of it — being held gently by someone strong enough to be gentle, the deliberateness of it, the choice."
97.91% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1722
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount73
adverbRatio0.042392566782810684
lyAdverbCount17
lyAdverbRatio0.009872241579558653
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences157
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences157
mean13.29
std12.22
cv0.92
sampleLengths
011
13
23
359
48
55
65
712
836
935
1022
1141
125
1319
145
157
164
1717
1818
1912
205
2145
224
239
245
2518
2615
2718
284
294
3021
3146
326
337
3413
3522
3614
379
381
392
4025
4124
425
434
4425
4516
464
475
4825
4924
40.76% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats16
diversityRatio0.3057324840764331
totalSentences157
uniqueOpeners48
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences110
matches
0"Then the second."
1"Then the third."
2"Instead she said,"
3"Always so careful with her,"
4"Then he closed the distance"
ratio0.045
1.82% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount60
totalSentences110
matches
0"He looked exactly the same."
1"His mismatched eyes — amber"
2"he said, his accent curling"
3"She had missed her shift."
4"She'd been holed up in"
5"She'd almost believed it."
6"She crossed her arms over"
7"Her hair was unwashed."
8"She wasn't wearing shoes."
9"She was, in short, a"
10"He had always been patient"
11"It was the thing she"
12"She'd learned to read the"
13"she said, but the edge"
14"She hated that too."
15"He didn't smile"
16"She opened her mouth to"
17"He was right."
18"He was usually right, and"
19"She pressed her thumbnail into"
ratio0.545
37.27% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount93
totalSentences110
matches
0"The first deadbolt turned with"
1"Rory pulled the door open"
2"He looked exactly the same."
3"That was the worst part."
4"The platinum hair slicked back"
5"The charcoal suit cut close"
6"His mismatched eyes — amber"
7"he said, his accent curling"
8"Rory gripped the door frame."
9"Ptolemy wound between her ankles,"
10"Lucien lifted the paper bag"
11"The mention of Yu-Fei sent"
12"She had missed her shift."
13"She'd been holed up in"
14"She'd almost believed it."
15"Something shifted behind his eyes."
16"The amber one caught the"
17"She crossed her arms over"
18"Her hair was unwashed."
19"She wasn't wearing shoes."
ratio0.845
90.91% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences110
matches
0"As though she were a"
1"Now he did look at"
ratio0.018
23.81% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences54
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"As though she were a document in a language he hadn't quite mastered, and he found the challenge more interesting than frustrating."
1"She'd been holed up in Eva's flat for three days, combing through scrolls and research notes with curtains drawn, sleeping on the sofa with a tabby cat on her c…"
2"With other people, with clients and contacts and the various creatures that moved through London's underworld, he wore charm like another layer of tailoring."
3"Research notes in Eva's cramped handwriting papered the walls, connected by lengths of red string that made the whole flat look like the inside of a conspiracy …"
4"Now he did look at her —a flicker of something at the corner of his mouth that wasn't quite amusement."
5"In the months she'd known him — the late-night phone calls in French and English and sometimes a demon tongue she couldn't name, the favours exchanged like curr…"
6"Ptolemy had climbed onto the back of the sofa and was watching them both with the calm, judgmental gaze of a creature that had never once been uncertain about a…"
7"His mismatched eyes searched her face with an intensity that made something turn over low in her belly."
8"This close, the amber eye was extraordinary — not just gold but layered, honey over copper over something that moved like light through deep water."
95.59% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"he said, not looking at her"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences52
tagDensity0.231
leniency0.462
rawRatio0.083
effectiveRatio0.038
79.4808%