Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8W5H3QFPF2B9NQ76F5MYYV

Run Details

Model:
Aion 2.0
Duration:
1m 23s
Cost:
$0.006838
Provider:
AionLabs

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The air in Richmond Park held the damp chill of a London afternoon, the sky a flat, uniform grey. Rory pulled her jacket tighter, the small crescent scar on her wrist itching beneath her sleeve. Nyx moved beside her, their form a solid silhouette of shadow that seemed to drink the light from the overcast day. Isolde walked ahead, her silver hair a beacon against the dull greens and browns of the winter park. She left no footprints in the mud. “The threshold is not a place, but a moment,” Isolde said, her voice like wind through dry leaves. She stopped before a copse of ancient oaks that looked no different from any other. “A breath held between heartbeats.” Rory scanned the trees. “I don’t see anything.” “You are looking with your eyes.” Isolde raised a hand, and the air before her shimmered, a faint distortion like heat haze off asphalt. The outline of massive, rough-hewn stones resolved within the shimmer, standing in a rough circle amongst the oaks. They were not of any stone Rory knew; they looked like petrified wood, deep grey and striated, crowned with moss and ivy. Nyx’s whisper came from right beside her ear, though they hadn’t moved. “The Veil is thin here. It sings.” Rory felt it then—a subtle pressure in her ears, a low hum just below hearing. The Heartstone Pendant against her chest remained inert, a cool weight. This was not a door to Hel. “Follow closely,” Isolde instructed, and she stepped between two of the monoliths. The world did not tear or twist. It simply changed. One moment, the damp chill of an English park. The next, a warmth that held no source, and a light that came from everywhere and nowhere. The hum escalated into a chorus of whispers, then faded to a background sigh. Rory stumbled forward, Nyx a steadying presence at her elbow. They stood in a clearing, but it was a clearing that defied reason. The sky above was not sky, but a canopy of intertwined branches so vast they blotted out any concept of ceiling, glowing with a soft, bioluminescent moss that cast everything in a perpetual twilight. The air was thick, sweet, and heavy with the scent of blooming things—jasmine, honeysuckle, and stranger, spicier notes. “Where are the standing stones?” Rory’s own voice sounded muffled, absorbed by the dense air. “Behind us,” Nyx murmured. Their violet eyes glowed brighter in the gloom. “They are a frame. The painting is within.” The ground underfoot was springy with moss and fallen petals. Wildflowers bloomed in impossible profusion—velvet blossoms in shades of indigo and silver, bell-shaped flowers that chimed softly when a breeze Rory couldn’t feel passed through them. There was no wind, yet the leaves in the distant canopy rustled with a sound like distant conversation. Isolde had walked ahead, her pale lavender eyes scanning the grove with a familiar, weary affection. “Time here is a river with many currents. Do not wander far.” Rory moved forward, drawn to a cluster of the chiming flowers. She reached out, but hesitated an inch from the silver petals. “Go on,” Isolde said, not turning. “They will not harm you. They remember the touch of curiosity.” Rory’s fingertip brushed the cool, metallic surface. The chime it produced was clear and pure, a single note that hung in the air and seemed to pull an answer from a flower deeper in the grove. A soft, blue light pulsed once within the blossom. “They communicate,” Nyx observed, gliding past her. Their shadowy form seemed more substantial here, the edges less defined, as if the grove’s magic was feeding them. “Light and sound. A simple language.” The discovery sent a thrill through Rory, a scientist’s excitement cutting through the wonder. She looked around with new eyes. The grove wasn’t just beautiful; it was intelligent. The patterns in the moss, the arrangement of the trees, the way the light shifted—it all felt deliberate. They walked deeper. The glowing moss provided enough light to see, but it created pools of illumination and canyons of deep shadow. From those shadows, things moved. Not creatures, precisely. More like suggestions of motion—a swirl of darker air, a flicker at the corner of the eye. Rory’s hand went to the leaf-shaped dagger at her belt, the Fae-Forged Blade Isolde had given her. The moonsilver hilt was cold, a comforting shock against her palm. “They are watchers,” Isolde said, answering the unspoken question. “Echoes of those who have passed through and left a piece of their wonder behind. They are harmless. Mostly.” The ‘mostly’ did nothing for Rory’s nerves. The unease was a cold thread in the warm, scented air. It was the silence between the chimes. The feeling of being studied by the very landscape. They came to a small, still pool. The water was black as obsidian, yet it reflected the glowing canopy above with perfect, mirror clarity. Rory knelt at its edge. Her reflection looked back, but her eyes in the water were not her bright blue. They were pale lavender, like Isolde’s. She jerked back. “The water shows not what is, but what might be,” Isolde said from behind her. “Or what once was. It is seldom clear.” Nyx flowed to the pool’s opposite edge and crouched, their reflection a void of deeper darkness. “I see nothing. This place has no claim on my past… or my future.” “You are a creature of between,” Isolde acknowledged. “The water has no anchor for you.” Rory stood, tearing her gaze from the deceptive pool. “Why are we here, Isolde? You said you had something to show us. A truth.” “I said the grove had truths to tell. I am merely the guide.” The seer pointed a slender finger toward a great tree at the center of the clearing. It was an oak, but of a size that made the ancient trees of Richmond Park look like saplings. Its trunk was gnarled and twisted, and in its bark, faces seemed to form and dissolve—not human faces, but expressions of wood and leaf and time. Roots like great serpents breached the mossy floor, creating arches and tunnels. As they approached, the light changed. The soft glow from above concentrated, beams of luminescence spearing down to illuminate specific spots: a root curled like a bench, a flat stone before the tree, a hollow in the trunk at eye level. “It remembers,” Isolde whispered, and for the first time, her voice held something like awe. “Every visitor, every secret whispered, every tear shed. The memory is in the wood, in the light, in the air.” Rory reached the hollow in the trunk. Inside, resting on a bed of fresh, green moss, was a simple circlet of woven willow. It was old, dry, but intact. Without thinking, she reached for it. The moment her fingers touched the withered wood, the grove vanished. She stood in the same clearing, but the light was different—golden, dappled, like a summer afternoon. The tree behind her was younger, less burdened. A woman sat on the root-bench, her head bowed, weeping silently. She wore a dress of simple linen, and the willow circlet was fresh and green upon her brow. A man, his features blurred as if seen through fog, stood before her, speaking words Rory could not hear. He placed something in the woman’s hand—a small, rough gem that flashed crimson. Then he turned and walked away, dissolving into the trees. The woman clenched the gem in her fist, her weeping turning to something harder, colder. She removed the circlet and placed it gently in the hollow of the tree. The vision snapped away. Rory gasped, stumbling back from the tree, the ancient circlet crumbling to dust between her fingers. The grove was once again the twilight place of soft glows and whispering shadows. “What did you see?” Nyx was at her side instantly, their cool, shadowy hand on her arm. “A woman. A gift. A heartbreak.” Rory’s voice was shaky. The Heartstone Pendant now felt warm against her skin, a deep, rhythmic pulse. She looked down at it, the crimson gem glowing with an inner light that matched the flash in her vision. “She was given a stone. Like this one.” Isolde’s lavender eyes were wide. “The grove does not often share such clear memories. You touched a thread of its history. A moment of binding.” “Binding to what?” Before Isolde could answer, a deep, resonant chime echoed through the grove, not from the flowers, but from the great tree itself. The beams of light shifted, sliding away from them, pointing like accusing fingers toward the way they had come. “The current shifts,” Isolde said, her ageless face tightening. “Our time here is ending. The grove reminds us we are guests.” The sense of unease crystallized into urgency. The welcoming, wondrous atmosphere hadn’t vanished, but it had grown watchful, impatient. The shadows between the trees seemed deeper, the chiming of the flowers more insistent. “We must leave the same way we entered,” Isolde said, already moving back toward the direction of the standing stones. “Now.” Rory cast one last look at the monumental tree, the faces in its bark now still and solemn. She turned, the pulsing warmth of the Heartstone a constant beat against her chest, and followed Isolde into the dappled, deceptive twilight, Nyx flowing silently in her wake.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.412
leniency0.824
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
87.29% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1573
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"precisely"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count1
3
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"precisely"
2"very"
3"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
14.18% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1573
totalAiIsms27
found
0
word"chill"
count2
1
word"beacon"
count1
2
word"scanned"
count1
3
word"shimmered"
count1
4
word"resolved"
count1
5
word"whisper"
count1
6
word"weight"
count1
7
word"warmth"
count2
8
word"gloom"
count1
9
word"velvet"
count1
10
word"scanning"
count1
11
word"familiar"
count1
12
word"affection"
count1
13
word"pulsed"
count1
14
word"flicker"
count1
15
word"comforting"
count1
16
word"unspoken"
count1
17
word"echoes"
count1
18
word"silence"
count1
19
word"perfect"
count1
20
word"rhythmic"
count1
21
word"pulse"
count1
22
word"echoed"
count1
23
word"sense of"
count1
24
word"crystallized"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"beacon"
2"scanned"
3"shimmered"
4"resolved"
5"whisper"
6"weight"
7"warmth"
8"gloom"
9"velvet"
10"scanning"
11"familiar"
12"affection"
13"pulsed"
14"flicker"
15"comforting"
16"unspoken"
17"echoes"
18"silence"
19"perfect"
20"rhythmic"
21"pulse"
22"echoed"
23"sense of"
24"crystallized"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences104
matches
0"The sense of unease"
87.91% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences104
filterMatches
0"look"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences122
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1565
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
80.56% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions57
wordCount1296
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity1.39
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond2
Park2
London1
Rory18
Heartstone3
Pendant2
Hel1
English1
Nyx8
Fae-Forged1
Blade1
Isolde17
persons
0"Rory"
1"Nyx"
2"Isolde"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Hel"
4"English"
globalScore0.806
windowScore0.833
7.95% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences88
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"shadow that seemed to drink the light from the overcast day"
1"looked like petrified wood, deep grey and"
2"seemed more substantial here, the edges less defined, as if the grove’s magic was feeding them"
3"something like awe"
4"seemed deeper the chiming of the flowers more insistent"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches5
per1kWords3.195
wordCount1565
matches
0"not a place, but a moment,” Isolde said, her voice like wind through dry leav"
1"not sky, but a canopy of intertwined branches so vast they blotted out an"
2"not what is, but what might be,” Isolde said from behind her"
3"not human faces, but expressions of wood"
4"not from the flowers, but from the great tree itself"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences122
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs42
mean37.26
std23.86
cv0.64
sampleLengths
081
138
28
364
419
533
612
750
875
915
1020
1154
1228
1322
1417
1545
1632
1746
1875
1928
2034
2153
2223
2330
2415
2524
2686
2741
2835
2935
3011
31124
3234
3317
3451
3525
363
3741
3821
3933
4021
4146
98.52% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences104
matches
0"being studied"
1"was gnarled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs197
matches
0"was feeding"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences10
totalSentences122
ratio0.082
matches
0"They were not of any stone Rory knew; they looked like petrified wood, deep grey and striated, crowned with moss and ivy."
1"Rory felt it then—a subtle pressure in her ears, a low hum just below hearing."
2"The air was thick, sweet, and heavy with the scent of blooming things—jasmine, honeysuckle, and stranger, spicier notes."
3"Wildflowers bloomed in impossible profusion—velvet blossoms in shades of indigo and silver, bell-shaped flowers that chimed softly when a breeze Rory couldn’t feel passed through them."
4"The grove wasn’t just beautiful; it was intelligent."
5"The patterns in the moss, the arrangement of the trees, the way the light shifted—it all felt deliberate."
6"More like suggestions of motion—a swirl of darker air, a flicker at the corner of the eye."
7"Its trunk was gnarled and twisted, and in its bark, faces seemed to form and dissolve—not human faces, but expressions of wood and leaf and time."
8"She stood in the same clearing, but the light was different—golden, dappled, like a summer afternoon."
9"He placed something in the woman’s hand—a small, rough gem that flashed crimson."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount794
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"silver, bell-shaped flowers"
adverbCount22
adverbRatio0.027707808564231738
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.005037783375314861
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences122
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences122
mean12.83
std6.72
cv0.524
sampleLengths
019
116
221
318
47
518
615
75
84
94
1024
1118
1222
1312
147
1515
1611
177
1812
197
203
219
2217
2314
2410
2513
2634
2718
2815
294
308
318
3210
3326
3418
3516
3612
3711
3811
396
4011
417
4229
439
447
4519
466
4714
486
498
50.82% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.3442622950819672
totalSentences122
uniqueOpeners42
66.01% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences101
matches
0"More like suggestions of motion—a"
1"Then he turned and walked"
ratio0.02
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences101
matches
0"She left no footprints in"
1"She stopped before a copse"
2"They were not of any"
3"It simply changed."
4"They stood in a clearing,"
5"Their violet eyes glowed brighter"
6"She reached out, but hesitated"
7"Their shadowy form seemed more"
8"She looked around with new"
9"They walked deeper."
10"It was the silence between"
11"They came to a small,"
12"Her reflection looked back, but"
13"They were pale lavender, like"
14"She jerked back."
15"It was an oak, but"
16"Its trunk was gnarled and"
17"It was old, dry, but"
18"She stood in the same"
19"She wore a dress of"
ratio0.238
9.50% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount91
totalSentences101
matches
0"The air in Richmond Park"
1"Rory pulled her jacket tighter,"
2"Nyx moved beside her, their"
3"Isolde walked ahead, her silver"
4"She left no footprints in"
5"Isolde said, her voice like"
6"She stopped before a copse"
7"Rory scanned the trees."
8"Isolde raised a hand, and"
9"The outline of massive, rough-hewn"
10"They were not of any"
11"Nyx’s whisper came from right"
12"Rory felt it then—a subtle"
13"The Heartstone Pendant against her"
14"This was not a door"
15"Isolde instructed, and she stepped"
16"The world did not tear"
17"It simply changed."
18"The next, a warmth that"
19"The hum escalated into a"
ratio0.901
49.50% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences101
matches
0"Before Isolde could answer, a"
ratio0.01
68.97% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences58
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"Nyx moved beside her, their form a solid silhouette of shadow that seemed to drink the light from the overcast day."
1"Wildflowers bloomed in impossible profusion—velvet blossoms in shades of indigo and silver, bell-shaped flowers that chimed softly when a breeze Rory couldn’t f…"
2"The chime it produced was clear and pure, a single note that hung in the air and seemed to pull an answer from a flower deeper in the grove."
3"Their shadowy form seemed more substantial here, the edges less defined, as if the grove’s magic was feeding them."
4"It was an oak, but of a size that made the ancient trees of Richmond Park look like saplings."
5"He placed something in the woman’s hand—a small, rough gem that flashed crimson."
53.57% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Isolde said, not turning"
1"Isolde said, her ageless face tightening"
32.35% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
1"Nyx observed (observe)"
2"Isolde acknowledged (acknowledge)"
3"Isolde whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.294
leniency0.588
rawRatio0.4
effectiveRatio0.235
73.3709%