Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8W64G17KQGR22GN1WEGXAR

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Duration:
1m 32s
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$0.088800
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Amazon Bedrock

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The body lay on the platform edge as if it had been placed there by someone who cared, and that was the first thing that bothered Harlow Quinn. She ducked under the crime scene tape that a uniformed constable had strung between two rusted pillars and stepped onto the abandoned platform. The air down here tasted of chalk dust and something else — something faintly metallic, like the residue left when you struck flint against steel. The station had been sealed off from the Tube network decades ago, according to Transport for London's records, but the fluorescent work lamps her team had set up revealed walls that were too clean, a floor that had been swept recently, and scuff marks from dozens of shoes in patterns that suggested foot traffic, not abandonment. "Who called it in?" she asked. DC Hargreaves looked up from his notebook. He was young, eager, and still at the stage where he wrote down everything. "Anonymous tip on the non-emergency line, ma'am. Forty minutes ago. Caller described the access point precisely — the service door off Hawley Crescent, combination and all." "Someone wanted us to find this." "Looks that way." Quinn pulled on her nitrile gloves and crouched beside the body. Male, mid-thirties, dressed in a dark wool coat that had cost serious money. No visible wounds. His eyes were open, fixed on the vaulted ceiling with an expression she'd seen only once before — three years ago, in a warehouse in Bermondsey, on the face of DS Aaron Morris. Not pain. Not fear. Astonishment. As if death had shown him something magnificent on its way through. She pressed two fingers against the man's throat out of procedure, though his skin was already cooling. Her worn leather watch ticked against her wrist as she counted seconds out of habit. Nothing. She studied his hands — clean, manicured, no defensive wounds, no bruising on the knuckles. His left hand was curled loosely around something small and brass. She leaned closer without touching it. A compass. The casing was coated in verdigris, the kind of patina that took years to develop, and the face was etched with markings she didn't recognize. Not compass points. Not numbers. Symbols of some kind, intricate and deliberate, cut into the brass with a craftsman's precision. The needle was frozen, pointing not north but toward the tunnel mouth at the far end of the platform, into the darkness where the tracks disappeared. "Has anyone photographed this yet?" "Scene of crime's still setting up. Five minutes out for the full team." Quinn straightened and let her gaze travel the length of the platform. The evidence didn't make sense, and she had learned years ago to pay attention to that feeling — the specific cognitive friction of a scene that resisted narrative. There was no sign of a struggle. No indication the man had been dragged or carried. His coat wasn't rumpled. His shoes — expensive brogues, recently polished — showed no scuffing on the heels. He hadn't been moved after death. He'd walked here under his own power and died standing up, then settled onto the platform edge as if lying down to sleep. But that wasn't the real problem. The real problem was the market stalls. They'd been dismantled in haste — she could see the ghost outlines on the concrete where tables had stood, the faint rectangles of dust disruption, a dropped cloth here, a scattering of dried herbs there. Someone had been running a bazaar in an abandoned Tube station, and they'd packed up and vanished sometime between the man's death and the anonymous call. Along the far wall, she counted the marks of at least fifteen separate vendor stations. Wax drippings in pools of indigo and black. A shattered glass vial near one of the pillars that had left a stain on the concrete the color of burnt amber. "Detective Quinn?" The voice came from behind the tape line, and Quinn turned to find a young woman arguing quietly with the uniformed constable. She was short, freckled, with a halo of curly red hair pulled back with a clip that was losing the battle. Round glasses sat slightly crooked on her nose. She had a worn leather satchel slung across her body that sagged with the unmistakable weight of books, and she was clutching a small white card that she held up as if it were a shield. "I'm Eva Kowalski. British Museum, restricted archives. I was told to—" "Who told you?" Quinn cut across the platform toward her with strides that had been calibrated by years of corridor interrogations. "DCI Marsh's office rang my department head. They said you'd found artifacts that needed specialist assessment." Eva tucked a strand of red hair behind her left ear and glanced past Quinn toward the body. Her face went pale beneath the freckles. "They didn't say there was — I thought this was a recovery operation. Stolen goods." Quinn studied her. The woman's surprise at the body looked genuine, but surprise could be manufactured. What couldn't be easily faked was the way Eva Kowalski's eyes had already moved from the corpse to the compass in his hand, and the way her lips had parted with recognition before she'd caught herself. "You know what that is," Quinn said. It wasn't a question. "I know what it looks like." "Then step under the tape, Ms. Kowalski, and tell me what it looks like." Eva hesitated. Quinn could see the calculation happening behind those round glasses — the weighing of cooperation against self-preservation, the silent negotiation that people conducted with themselves when they knew more than they wanted to admit. Then Eva ducked under the tape and followed Quinn to the body, her satchel bumping against her hip with each step. She crouched where Quinn had crouched, close enough to see but careful not to touch. Her breath fogged briefly in the underground chill. "It's a Veil Compass," Eva said quietly. "The casing, the sigils on the face — it's a navigational tool. Supposedly, the needle is attuned to — " She stopped, recalibrated. "In folklore, objects like this were said to detect areas of geomantic disruption. Ley lines, that sort of thing. This one's quite old. Eighteenth century, maybe earlier. The sigils are a protective script. I've seen similar markings in manuscripts at the archives." "Folklore," Quinn repeated, keeping her voice neutral. "It's what I study, Detective." "And the stalls?" Quinn gestured to the ghost outlines along the platform. "Is that folklore too?" Eva stood and looked at the cleared spaces, the wax drippings, the amber stain. She pushed her glasses up the bridge of her nose with one finger and took three measured breaths that Quinn counted silently. "I've heard rumors," Eva said carefully. "Academic rumors. There are accounts in certain texts of — call them traveling markets. Peripatetic trade gatherings for collectors of unusual items. They move regularly to avoid detection." "How regularly?" "The accounts reference lunar cycles. Every full moon, supposedly." Quinn pulled out her phone and checked the calendar. The last full moon had been two nights ago. She looked at Hargreaves. "When does the pathologist estimate time of death?" "He's ballparking thirty-six to forty-eight hours based on liver temp, but he's flagged it as unusual. Core temperature is lower than expected for the ambient conditions." Two nights ago. The night of the full moon. The night this market would have been operating. Quinn walked to the far wall and crouched beside the amber stain. It didn't smell like anything she could name — not alcohol, not chemical, not organic decay. It smelled like ozone before a storm, sharp and electric. She'd smelled something like it once before. In a warehouse in Bermondsey. On Morris's clothes when they'd carried him out. She closed her eyes and let the details arrange themselves. The pristine body with no signs of violence. The compass gripped looselynot clutched in rigor but held, suggesting he'd been holding it when he died. The market that had vanished in the window between death and discovery. The anonymous caller who'd provided the access code, who'd wanted this found but hadn't wanted to be there when it was. And the expression on the dead man's face, that terrible open-mouthed wonder, identical to the one she'd spent three years trying to forget. She opened her eyes and looked at the compass needle again. Still pointing toward the tunnel mouth. Not magnetic north. Something else. "Ms. Kowalski." "Eva." "Ms. Kowalski. You said these markets move every full moon. What happens to the location afterward? In your folklore." Eva's hand went to her ear, tucking hair that was already tucked. "The texts describe the market sites as — the term they use translates roughly as 'thinned.' The repeated gathering of these objects in one place supposedly weakens the barrier between — " She caught herself again, her eyes flicking to Hargreaves, who was writing everything down. "Between what was understood as the material world and something adjacent to it." "A rift," Quinn said. Eva looked at her sharply. "That's not a word I used." "No. It's the word I'm using." Quinn stood and brushed concrete dust from her knees. She looked at the compass needle pointing into the darkness, then at the dead man's astonished face, and then at Eva Kowalski, who was watching her with an expression that balanced precariously between relief and dread — the look of someone who'd been carrying a secret and had just realized someone else could see the shape of it. "Hargreaves, get me the full scene workup. Every stall location photographed and measured. I want that vial fragment bagged, and whatever made that stain, I want it analyzed. And I want the compass collected separately — evidence bag, no direct handling, chain of custody on my authority alone." "Ma'am." Quinn turned back to Eva. "Three years ago, my partner died in a case with circumstances that look a lot like this. No visible cause of death. A location that shouldn't have been occupied but was. Evidence that someone cleaned up before we arrived, but not well enough." She held Eva's gaze and watched the younger woman's throat move as she swallowed. "You're going to tell me everything you know about this market. Not the academic version. Not the folklore. The real version." Eva clutched the strap of her satchel with both hands. Behind her glasses, her green eyes were wide and calculating and, Quinn thought, frightened — but not of the detective. Of something else. Something in the tunnel, maybe. Something the compass was pointing toward. "Not here," Eva said finally. "And not on the record." "That's not how this works." "With respect, Detective, the way this works is exactly how you ended up with a dead partner and no answers for three years." The words came out sharp and then Eva flinched at her own bluntness, her hand flying to her ear again. "I'm sorry. That was — I'm sorry. But I'm right." Quinn looked at her for a long time. The fluorescent work lamps buzzed and flickered. Somewhere deep in the tunnel, in the direction the compass pointed, something shifted — a sound like settling earth, or like a breath drawn and held. "Tomorrow," Quinn said. "Noon. There's a café on Parkway, north end. You'll tell me about thinned barriers and traveling markets and everything your restricted archives have to say about compasses that don't point north. And I will decide what goes on the record." Eva nodded once, quickly, and turned to leave. She was almost at the tape line when Quinn called after her. "Ms. Kowalski. One more thing." She waited until Eva turned. "You got here fast. Marsh's office called your department head, your department head called you, and you made it to Camden in — what — forty minutes? That's impressive, for someone who was supposedly surprised to find a crime scene." Eva said nothing. Her fingers were white around the satchel strap. "You already knew this place existed," Quinn said. "You've been here before. Probably as a customer." The silence stretched. Eva tucked a curl behind her left ear, turned, and ducked under the tape without answering. Quinn watched her disappear up the service corridor, then turned back to the body on the platform. She crouched beside him one more time and studied the Veil Compass in his cooling hand. The needle trembled faintly, straining toward the tunnel mouth, toward whatever invisible threshold the market had worn thin with its gatherings and its strange merchandise and its patrons who carried brass instruments etched with symbols that predated the language of every textbook she'd ever studied. She thought about Morris. The warehouse. The look on his face. "What did you see?" she murmured to the dead man. The compass needle shivered. The fluorescent lamps hummed. And somewhere far beneath Camden, in the dark places where the trains no longer ran, something waited at the edge of a world that Detective Harlow Quinn was only beginning to suspect was not the only one.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
82.35% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"Eva said quietly [quietly]"
1"Eva said carefully [carefully]"
2"Eva said finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.353
leniency0.706
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.118
83.79% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2159
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"precisely"
count1
1
adverb"loosely"
count2
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
3
adverb"carefully"
count1
4
adverb"sharply"
count1
5
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"precisely"
1"loosely"
2"slightly"
3"carefully"
4"sharply"
5"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
60.63% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2159
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"etched"
count2
1
word"intricate"
count1
2
word"shattered"
count1
3
word"weight"
count1
4
word"calibrated"
count1
5
word"chill"
count1
6
word"measured"
count2
7
word"electric"
count1
8
word"pristine"
count1
9
word"magnetic"
count1
10
word"analyzed"
count1
11
word"calculating"
count1
12
word"flickered"
count1
13
word"silence"
count1
14
word"trembled"
count1
highlights
0"etched"
1"intricate"
2"shattered"
3"weight"
4"calibrated"
5"chill"
6"measured"
7"electric"
8"pristine"
9"magnetic"
10"analyzed"
11"calculating"
12"flickered"
13"silence"
14"trembled"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences125
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences125
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences157
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen57
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2185
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions29
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
16.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions66
wordCount1558
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity1.67
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow2
Quinn26
Tube2
Transport1
London1
Hargreaves3
Bermondsey2
Aaron1
Morris3
Eva19
Kowalski2
Veil1
Compass1
Camden1
Detective1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Aaron"
3"Morris"
4"Eva"
5"Kowalski"
places
0"Tube"
1"Transport"
2"London"
3"Hargreaves"
4"Bermondsey"
5"Compass"
globalScore0.666
windowScore0.167
63.79% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences87
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"as if lying down to sleep"
1"smelled like ozone before a storm, sharp a"
2"something like it once before"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.915
wordCount2185
matches
0"not north but toward the tunnel mouth at the far end of the platform, into"
1"not clutched in rigor but held, suggesting he'd been holding it"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences157
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs65
mean33.62
std30.13
cv0.896
sampleLengths
028
1104
26
347
46
53
677
765
873
95
1013
11103
126
137
14106
152
1687
1711
1821
1956
2052
2111
226
2314
2457
2523
2672
277
285
2916
3036
3134
322
339
3430
3526
3617
3758
3893
3922
402
411
4219
4371
444
4511
4673
4748
481
4983
82.81% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount8
totalSentences125
matches
0"been placed"
1"been sealed"
2"been swept"
3"was curled"
4"was coated"
5"was etched"
6"been dragged"
7"been moved"
8"been dismantled"
9"been calibrated"
22.56% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount7
totalVerbs263
matches
0"was already cooling"
1"was losing"
2"was clutching"
3"was writing"
4"was watching"
5"was pointing"
6"was only beginning"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount13
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences157
ratio0.076
matches
0"The air down here tasted of chalk dust and something else — something faintly metallic, like the residue left when you struck flint against steel."
1"His eyes were open, fixed on the vaulted ceiling with an expression she'd seen only once before — three years ago, in a warehouse in Bermondsey, on the face of DS Aaron Morris."
2"She studied his hands — clean, manicured, no defensive wounds, no bruising on the knuckles."
3"The evidence didn't make sense, and she had learned years ago to pay attention to that feeling — the specific cognitive friction of a scene that resisted narrative."
4"His shoes — expensive brogues, recently polished — showed no scuffing on the heels."
5"They'd been dismantled in haste — she could see the ghost outlines on the concrete where tables had stood, the faint rectangles of dust disruption, a dropped cloth here, a scattering of dried herbs there."
6"Quinn could see the calculation happening behind those round glasses — the weighing of cooperation against self-preservation, the silent negotiation that people conducted with themselves when they knew more than they wanted to admit."
7"It didn't smell like anything she could name — not alcohol, not chemical, not organic decay."
8"The compass gripped loosely — not clutched in rigor but held, suggesting he'd been holding it when he died."
9"She looked at the compass needle pointing into the darkness, then at the dead man's astonished face, and then at Eva Kowalski, who was watching her with an expression that balanced precariously between relief and dread — the look of someone who'd been carrying a secret and had just realized someone else could see the shape of it."
10"Behind her glasses, her green eyes were wide and calculating and, Quinn thought, frightened — but not of the detective."
11"Somewhere deep in the tunnel, in the direction the compass pointed, something shifted — a sound like settling earth, or like a breath drawn and held."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1548
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"terrible open-mouthed wonder,"
adverbCount57
adverbRatio0.03682170542635659
lyAdverbCount21
lyAdverbRatio0.013565891472868217
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences157
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences157
mean13.92
std12.36
cv0.888
sampleLengths
028
123
225
356
46
57
614
726
86
93
1011
1113
123
1333
142
152
161
1712
1817
1915
201
2115
2211
236
242
2525
263
272
2815
2926
305
3113
3212
3328
347
359
364
3714
386
3923
406
417
4235
4326
4415
458
4622
472
4822
4921
52.65% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.36942675159235666
totalSentences157
uniqueOpeners58
90.09% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences111
matches
0"Then Eva ducked under the"
1"Still pointing toward the tunnel"
2"Somewhere deep in the tunnel,"
ratio0.027
90.27% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount36
totalSentences111
matches
0"She ducked under the crime"
1"He was young, eager, and"
2"His eyes were open, fixed"
3"She pressed two fingers against"
4"Her worn leather watch ticked"
5"She studied his hands —"
6"His left hand was curled"
7"She leaned closer without touching"
8"His coat wasn't rumpled."
9"His shoes — expensive brogues,"
10"He hadn't been moved after"
11"He'd walked here under his"
12"They'd been dismantled in haste"
13"She was short, freckled, with"
14"She had a worn leather"
15"Her face went pale beneath"
16"It wasn't a question."
17"She crouched where Quinn had"
18"Her breath fogged briefly in"
19"She stopped, recalibrated"
ratio0.324
59.10% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount89
totalSentences111
matches
0"The body lay on the"
1"She ducked under the crime"
2"The air down here tasted"
3"The station had been sealed"
4"DC Hargreaves looked up from"
5"He was young, eager, and"
6"Quinn pulled on her nitrile"
7"His eyes were open, fixed"
8"She pressed two fingers against"
9"Her worn leather watch ticked"
10"She studied his hands —"
11"His left hand was curled"
12"She leaned closer without touching"
13"The casing was coated in"
14"Symbols of some kind, intricate"
15"The needle was frozen, pointing"
16"Quinn straightened and let her"
17"The evidence didn't make sense,"
18"His coat wasn't rumpled."
19"His shoes — expensive brogues,"
ratio0.802
45.05% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences111
matches
0"As if death had shown"
ratio0.009
23.81% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences54
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"The station had been sealed off from the Tube network decades ago, according to Transport for London's records, but the fluorescent work lamps her team had set …"
1"Male, mid-thirties, dressed in a dark wool coat that had cost serious money."
2"The evidence didn't make sense, and she had learned years ago to pay attention to that feeling — the specific cognitive friction of a scene that resisted narrat…"
3"He'd walked here under his own power and died standing up, then settled onto the platform edge as if lying down to sleep."
4"She was short, freckled, with a halo of curly red hair pulled back with a clip that was losing the battle."
5"She had a worn leather satchel slung across her body that sagged with the unmistakable weight of books, and she was clutching a small white card that she held u…"
6"Quinn could see the calculation happening behind those round glasses — the weighing of cooperation against self-preservation, the silent negotiation that people…"
7"She looked at the compass needle pointing into the darkness, then at the dead man's astonished face, and then at Eva Kowalski, who was watching her with an expr…"
8"The needle trembled faintly, straining toward the tunnel mouth, toward whatever invisible threshold the market had worn thin with its gatherings and its strange…"
97.22% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"The words came out, her hand flying to her ear again"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Quinn repeated (repeat)"
1"she murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.196
leniency0.392
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.078
78.8263%