Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8WABYKWMDVBK6RNRY5WQGW

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The platform tiles were the wrong color. That was the first thing that bothered her. Harlow Quinn stood at the base of the dead escalator and swept her torch beam across the abandoned station, cataloguing details with the same cold efficiency she'd honed over eighteen years of service. The Metropolitan Police had sealed both access points an hour ago, but the forensics team was already down here, their white suits ghostly under the portable halogen lamps. Camden Town hummed with Saturday foot traffic thirty feet above their heads, and none of those people had the faintest idea this place existed. Officially, this station didn't exist either. Not on any current TfL map, not in any municipal database she could access. The borough planning office had looked at her like she'd grown a second head when she'd called. And yet here it was — a full platform, curved ceiling, tile work that might have been Victorian if it weren't for the color. The tiles were a deep, arterial red where they should have been cream or green or the dingy off-white of every other decommissioned station she'd ever cleared. Some of them were cracked. Some of them had symbols cut into the glaze that her torch caught at odd angles, little grooves that seemed to drink the light rather than reflect it. She adjusted the worn leather strap of her watch and descended to the platform level. The body was near the far wall, between what appeared to be two market stalls. The stalls themselves were another problem. They were constructed from mismatched wood and draped in fabrics she couldn't immediately identify — silks that shimmered with an oily iridescence, heavy canvas printed with star charts she didn't recognize. One stall had been selling jars of something viscous and faintly luminescent. Most of the jars were shattered now, their contents pooling across the tile in thin, glowing rivulets that the forensics team was giving a conspicuously wide berth. The other stall was full of books — old ones, hand-bound, their spines cracked and their pages thick as card stock. Detective Sergeant Okafor met her halfway, his notebook already out. He was young, thorough, and visibly unsettled. "Body's a male, late thirties, no ID," he said, falling into step beside her. "Preliminary cause of death looks like blunt force trauma to the posterior skull, but the pathologist flagged some irregularities." "What kind of irregularities?" "She said his core temperature was wrong. Too low by about fifteen degrees for the estimated time of death. And there's some kind of residue on his hands and around his mouth — silver-grey, almost metalite. She's never seen anything like it." Quinn crouched beside the body. The halogen lamp threw hard shadows across the man's face. He was thin, hollow-cheeked, wearing clothes that looked expensive but outdated — a waistcoat with bone buttons, trousers with a high waist, boots that had been resoled more than once. His hands were open at his sides, palms up, and she could see what Okafor meant about the residue. It looked like tarnished mercury had been painted across his fingers in deliberate lines, tracing the creases of his palms. She leaned closer. The residue didn't smear when she pressed a gloved fingertip to the edge of it. It was dry. Hard, almost. Like it had crystallized. "Who called it in?" she asked. "Anonymous tip. Burner phone, routed through three different cell towers in under a minute. Tech's trying to trace it but they're not optimistic." "And how did the caller know this place was here?" Okafor said nothing. That was the right answer, because there wasn't one. Quinn stood and turned in a slow circle, taking in the full scope of the space. The platform extended further than it should have — twice the length of a standard Tube station, at least. The stalls went on into the dark beyond the reach of the halogens, dozens of them, maybe more. Some had been abandoned in haste, their wares left scattered. Others looked like they'd been packed up with care, only bare tables remaining. The air smelled like copper and something older, something botanical and vaguely sweet, like dried flowers left too long in a closed room. "This was a market," she said. "That's the working theory. Black market, probably. The stalls have goods that don't match any known suppliers. Some of the substances in those jars — the guys in hazmat gear are saying they can't even identify the base compounds." Quinn walked the perimeter, her torch sweeping the ground in controlled arcs. The blood spatter was wrong. She'd worked enough blunt-force cases to know what a head wound looked like when it hit the floor, and this wasn't it. The spray pattern radiated outward from the body in a near-perfect circle, equidistant on all sides, as though the impact had come from directly above — from the ceiling, twenty feet up. Or as though the blood had been flung outward from the body by some centrifugal force at the moment of death. She dropped to one knee beside one of the spatter marks and examined it under the torch. The blood had dried in raised lines, almost calligraphic. Not pooled. Not splashed. Drawn. As if it had moved with intention across the tile. The sound of footsteps echoed from the escalator end of the platform, and she looked up sharply. The woman who approached was small and conspicuously out of place. She wore a corduroy jacket over a rumpled blouse, round glasses perched on a freckled nose, and she carried a leather satchel so stuffed with books that the clasp had given up and hung open. Her red curls were barely contained by a clip that was losing its war with gravity. She was flanked by a uniformed constable who looked like he'd rather be anywhere else. "Detective Quinn?" The woman tucked a strand of hair behind her left ear. "I'm Eva Kowalski. I was told you requested a consultant from the British Museum." Quinn hadn't requested anyone. She looked at Okafor, who shook his head slightly. "I didn't." Eva Kowalski blinked, then recovered with the particular stubbornness of someone used to being turned away at doors. "Then someone in your department did. I received a call forty minutes ago asking me to come to this location and bring my research on Camden's — " she paused, choosing her words, " — historical subterranean spaces." "And you had research on this specific location?" "I had research adjacent to it." Eva clutched the strap of her satchel. "Can I see the scene?" Quinn studied her for a long moment. The woman was nervous — the hair-tucking, the white-knuckle grip on the bag — but not the kind of nervous that meant guilt. This was academic anxiety, the fear of being sent away before you got to see the interesting thing. Quinn had seen it in every expert witness she'd ever worked with. "Stay behind the tape. Touch nothing." Eva nodded rapidly and ducked under the cordon with more eagerness than Quinn was strictly comfortable with. She watched the researcher move between the stalls, her eyes wide behind those round lenses, her lips parting slightly as she took in the scattered wares. When she reached the body, she stopped. Her face went pale beneath the freckles, and she pressed the back of her hand to her mouth. "First body?" Quinn asked. "In person." Eva swallowed. Then her gaze moved past the dead man to the stall behind him — the one with the books — and something shifted in her expression. Recognition. "These are grimoires," she said quietly. "Seventeenth century, maybe older. This binding technique — this is shadow-pressed vellum. I've only ever seen it in the restricted archives." She was reaching for one before she caught herself and pulled her hand back. "Detective, do you know what this place is?" "I know what it looks like." "It's called the Veil Market." Eva said it without hesitation, as though naming it cost her something but she'd decided to pay it. "It's a — it moves. Every full moon. It requires a specific token to enter, a bone token, usually carved, usually obtained through contacts within certain communities." She glanced at the body. "This man was a vendor. Or a buyer. Either way, he was part of this world." "What world?" Eva met her eyes. "The one your evidence isn't going to explain." Quinn let the silence hold for three beats. Then she pointed to the blood spatter pattern. "Tell me what you see." Eva crouched — carefully, well behind the tape — and studied the dried blood. Her brow furrowed. "It's geometric. Almost ritualistic. That's not natural spatter, is it?" "No. It's not." "Could someone have arranged it post-mortem?" "The blood dried in position. Forensics says the coagulation pattern is consistent with live bleeding, not repositioning. So either this man's blood moved on its own after leaving his body, or something moved it." Eva was quiet for a moment. Then she reached into her satchel and pulled out a leather-bound notebook, flipping through pages dense with handwriting and sketched diagrams. She stopped on a page that showed a circular pattern of lines radiating from a central point — almost identical, Quinn noted with a crawling sensation at the back of her neck, to the spatter pattern on the floor. "This is a dispersal seal," Eva said. "It's used to — well, the historical texts describe it as a way to scatter the essence of something. To break it apart and spread it thin so it can't re-form. It's old. Pre-medieval. And it's not the kind of thing someone does to a person." She looked up. "It's the kind of thing someone does to a spirit." Quinn processed that and filed it in the part of her mind that didn't flinch. Three years ago, she would have dismissed it. Three years ago, DS Morris had still been alive, and the world had still made sense, and she hadn't spent fourteen months trying to explain how her partner's body had been found in a locked room with no entry point, no weapon, and frost patterns on the walls in the middle of July. She turned her attention back to the body's hands. The silver-grey residue. The deliberate lines. She looked at them again, and this time she didn't see contamination or an unknown substance. She saw writing. Tiny, precise characters traced along the fate line, the heart line, the head line — markings in a script she didn't recognize but that Eva Kowalski almost certainly would. "Kowalski. Look at his hands. Don't touch, just look." Eva moved closer, adjusting her glasses. Her breath caught. "Those are ward marks. Someone inscribed protective sigils directly onto his skin. This man was afraid of something. Something specific." She leaned in further, her face inches from the dead man's open palm. "Detective — there's something in his left hand. Under the fingers. Something small." Quinn pulled a fresh pair of gloves from her coat pocket and snapped them on. Carefully, with steady fingers, she lifted the dead man's curled pinky and ring finger away from his palm. Rigor had half-set, but the fingers gave with gentle pressure. Nestled in the hollow of his hand was a small brass compass. The casing was green with verdigris, the face etched with symbols that matched the ones cut into the platform tiles. The needle was still moving — a slow, deliberate rotation that had nothing to do with magnetic north. It swung east, paused, swung east again, then locked in position and held, trembling faintly, pointing toward the dark end of the platform where the stalls disappeared into shadow. "Forensics missed this?" Quinn said, her voice flat. Okafor stepped forward, frowning. "That's not possible. Patel checked the hands first thing. He logged them as empty." "Then either Patel needs his eyes checked, or this wasn't here when he looked." Quinn lifted the compass free. It was lighter than it should have been, warm in her gloved hand, and the needle swung again — east, always east, toward the dark. Eva had gone very still. "That's a Veil Compass," she whispered. "It's Shade-crafted. It doesn't point north. It points toward rifts. Doorways. Tears in the boundary between here and — " She stopped herself. "It's pointing at something, Detective. Something down there, past the stalls. Something that's open right now." Quinn straightened. She looked at the body, at the impossible blood, at the market that shouldn't exist in a station that wasn't on any map. She looked at the compass needle, locked and trembling, aimed at the dark. In eighteen years, she had learned one rule that had never failed her: evidence didn't lie. Evidence simply was. The trouble started when you decided in advance what evidence was allowed to be. "Okafor, extend the cordon another fifty meters down the platform. Get additional lighting. And get me a full background on every substance, object, and piece of paper in these stalls." She turned to Eva. "You said this market moves every full moon. When was the last one?" "Three days ago." "Then someone set up after the move and was killed before the market opened. Which means our killer knew the new location. Knew the schedule. Had a bone token of their own." She held up the compass. The needle hadn't moved. "And whatever they came here to open, it's still open." Eva tucked her hair behind her left ear again. Her hand was shaking. "What do you want to do?" she asked. Quinn slipped the compass into an evidence bag, sealed it, and slid it into her coat pocket. She could feel the needle through the plastic, still pulling east, still trembling against her ribs like a second heartbeat. "I want to see where it points," she said, and started walking toward the dark.
created_at"2026-02-24T22:29:05.12Z" 2/24/2026, 10:29:05 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags22
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences52
tagDensity0.423
leniency0.846
rawRatio0.045
effectiveRatio0.038
86.93% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2295
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count2
2
adverb"carefully"
count2
3
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"sharply"
1"slightly"
2"carefully"
3"very"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Patel"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
58.61% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2295
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"database"
count1
1
word"constructed"
count1
2
word"shimmered"
count1
3
word"shattered"
count1
4
word"unsettled"
count1
5
word"tracing"
count1
6
word"crystallized"
count1
7
word"standard"
count1
8
word"perfect"
count1
9
word"footsteps"
count1
10
word"echoed"
count1
11
word"comfortable"
count1
12
word"silence"
count1
13
word"furrowed"
count1
14
word"processed"
count1
15
word"traced"
count1
16
word"etched"
count1
17
word"magnetic"
count1
18
word"could feel"
count1
highlights
0"database"
1"constructed"
2"shimmered"
3"shattered"
4"unsettled"
5"tracing"
6"crystallized"
7"standard"
8"perfect"
9"footsteps"
10"echoed"
11"comfortable"
12"silence"
13"furrowed"
14"processed"
15"traced"
16"etched"
17"magnetic"
18"could feel"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences131
matches
0"was nervous"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences131
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"appeared to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences161
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen53
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2323
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions24
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions48
wordCount1661
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity1.02
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Quinn17
Metropolitan1
Police1
Town1
Saturday1
TfL1
Victorian1
Sergeant1
Okafor5
Tube1
Kowalski2
Eva14
Morris1
July1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Police"
2"Sergeant"
3"Okafor"
4"Kowalski"
5"Eva"
6"Morris"
places
0"Town"
globalScore0.988
windowScore0.667
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences90
glossingSentenceCount8
matches
0"grooves that seemed to drink the light rather than reflect it"
1"thorough, and visibly unsettled"
2"looked like tarnished mercury had been pa"
3"looked like they'd been packed up with ca"
4"smelled like copper and something older, s"
5"looked like when it hit the floor, and th"
6"looked like he'd rather be anywhere else"
7"as though naming it cost her something but she'd decided to pay it"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2323
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences161
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs67
mean34.67
std29.67
cv0.856
sampleLengths
015
185
2121
315
4112
517
633
74
842
984
1027
116
1223
1310
1412
1599
166
1739
1892
1941
2017
2177
2227
2313
242
2556
268
2718
2860
296
3068
314
3231
3349
346
3571
362
3712
3821
3927
403
416
4234
4366
4466
4576
4663
479
489
4946
73.12% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount12
totalSentences131
matches
0"were constructed"
1"were shattered"
2"been resoled"
3"been painted"
4"been abandoned"
5"been packed"
6"been flung"
7"was flanked"
8"being turned"
9"being sent"
10"been found"
11"was allowed"
85.84% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs292
matches
0"was giving"
1"was losing"
2"was reaching"
3"was still moving "
4"was shaking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount16
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences13
totalSentences161
ratio0.081
matches
0"And yet here it was — a full platform, curved ceiling, tile work that might have been Victorian if it weren't for the color."
1"They were constructed from mismatched wood and draped in fabrics she couldn't immediately identify — silks that shimmered with an oily iridescence, heavy canvas printed with star charts she didn't recognize."
2"The other stall was full of books — old ones, hand-bound, their spines cracked and their pages thick as card stock."
3"He was thin, hollow-cheeked, wearing clothes that looked expensive but outdated — a waistcoat with bone buttons, trousers with a high waist, boots that had been resoled more than once."
4"The platform extended further than it should have — twice the length of a standard Tube station, at least."
5"The spray pattern radiated outward from the body in a near-perfect circle, equidistant on all sides, as though the impact had come from directly above — from the ceiling, twenty feet up."
6"The woman was nervous — the hair-tucking, the white-knuckle grip on the bag — but not the kind of nervous that meant guilt."
7"Then her gaze moved past the dead man to the stall behind him — the one with the books — and something shifted in her expression."
8"Eva crouched — carefully, well behind the tape — and studied the dried blood."
9"She stopped on a page that showed a circular pattern of lines radiating from a central point — almost identical, Quinn noted with a crawling sensation at the back of her neck, to the spatter pattern on the floor."
10"Tiny, precise characters traced along the fate line, the heart line, the head line — markings in a script she didn't recognize but that Eva Kowalski almost certainly would."
11"The needle was still moving — a slow, deliberate rotation that had nothing to do with magnetic north."
12"It was lighter than it should have been, warm in her gloved hand, and the needle swung again — east, always east, toward the dark."
97.46% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1655
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount71
adverbRatio0.042900302114803626
lyAdverbCount24
lyAdverbRatio0.014501510574018127
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences161
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences161
mean14.43
std10.54
cv0.731
sampleLengths
07
18
233
328
424
56
614
717
824
927
105
1128
1215
1315
146
1531
1612
1727
1821
1910
207
2114
2219
234
2442
255
2610
2730
2819
2920
303
3115
323
332
344
356
3623
3710
383
399
4016
4119
4218
4310
4413
4523
466
4739
4812
495
48.86% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats13
diversityRatio0.3416149068322981
totalSentences161
uniqueOpeners55
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences118
matches
0"Officially, this station didn't exist"
1"Then her gaze moved past"
2"Then she pointed to the"
3"Then she reached into her"
4"Carefully, with steady fingers, she"
ratio0.042
87.80% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount39
totalSentences118
matches
0"She adjusted the worn leather"
1"They were constructed from mismatched"
2"He was young, thorough, and"
3"he said, falling into step"
4"He was thin, hollow-cheeked, wearing"
5"His hands were open at"
6"It looked like tarnished mercury"
7"She leaned closer."
8"It was dry."
9"She'd worked enough blunt-force cases"
10"She dropped to one knee"
11"She wore a corduroy jacket"
12"Her red curls were barely"
13"She was flanked by a"
14"She looked at Okafor, who"
15"she paused, choosing her"
16"She watched the researcher move"
17"Her face went pale beneath"
18"she said quietly"
19"She was reaching for one"
ratio0.331
36.27% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount100
totalSentences118
matches
0"The platform tiles were the"
1"That was the first thing"
2"Harlow Quinn stood at the"
3"The Metropolitan Police had sealed"
4"Camden Town hummed with Saturday"
5"The borough planning office had"
6"The tiles were a deep,"
7"Some of them were cracked."
8"Some of them had symbols"
9"She adjusted the worn leather"
10"The body was near the"
11"The stalls themselves were another"
12"They were constructed from mismatched"
13"The other stall was full"
14"Detective Sergeant Okafor met her"
15"He was young, thorough, and"
16"he said, falling into step"
17"Quinn crouched beside the body."
18"The halogen lamp threw hard"
19"He was thin, hollow-cheeked, wearing"
ratio0.847
42.37% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences118
matches
0"As if it had moved"
ratio0.008
77.92% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences66
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"They were constructed from mismatched wood and draped in fabrics she couldn't immediately identify — silks that shimmered with an oily iridescence, heavy canvas…"
1"Most of the jars were shattered now, their contents pooling across the tile in thin, glowing rivulets that the forensics team was giving a conspicuously wide be…"
2"He was thin, hollow-cheeked, wearing clothes that looked expensive but outdated — a waistcoat with bone buttons, trousers with a high waist, boots that had been…"
3"The spray pattern radiated outward from the body in a near-perfect circle, equidistant on all sides, as though the impact had come from directly above — from th…"
4"She stopped on a page that showed a circular pattern of lines radiating from a central point — almost identical, Quinn noted with a crawling sensation at the ba…"
5"The needle was still moving — a slow, deliberate rotation that had nothing to do with magnetic north."
79.55% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags22
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Eva said, as though naming it cost her something but she'd decided to pay it"
1"Quinn said, her voice flat"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences52
tagDensity0.212
leniency0.423
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.038
80.7133%