Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8WAZ83WH8QDWZ8557H9GAJ

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Duration:
1m 9s
Cost:
$0.049035
Provider:
Anthropic

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The portal closed behind them with a sound like tearing silk, and then there was nothing but the amber. Rory pressed her hand flat against her sternum, where the Heartstone pendant lay beneath her jacket. It had been pulsing for the last ten minutes — a slow, rhythmic warmth like something alive and breathing — but now it went perfectly still, as though it had gotten what it wanted. She wasn't sure which unsettled her more. "Well," she said. Nyx said nothing. They rarely did when words weren't necessary, and what stretched before them required no narration. The sky above Dymas was the color of cooling embers, a deep amber that ran to orange at the horizon and bruised to something darker overhead, not quite night and not quite dusk but some third thing that existed only here. There were no clouds, or nothing that Rory could identify as clouds — only slow drifts of golden haze that moved against whatever passed for wind in this place. The light it produced was warm and directionless, falling without shadow, turning everything it touched the color of old honey. She had expected heat. The realm of Hel, she'd assumed, would be heat. Instead the air was thick and almost fragrant, heavy with something she couldn't name at first — sweetness, yes, but layered, complex, the way a market smelled when every stall was open at once. Stone fruit and something floral. Fermenting grapes. The ghost of woodsmoke threaded underneath it all. Before them, the land rolled in low and generous hills, and every inch of it was cultivated. Vineyards stretched away to the left in precise dark rows, the vines heavy with fat clusters of deep purple — no, red — no, they seemed to shift, the colour changing as the amber light moved across them. To the right, an orchard climbed a gentle slope, and even from here Rory could see the trees were wrong in a way she couldn't immediately articulate. Too symmetrical. Too laden. Every branch bowed with fruit, none of it fallen, none of it rotting, as though the trees existed in a permanent state of perfect harvest. "The fruit does not decay," Isolde said, beside her. Her voice was always exactly level, like water finding its surface. "Nothing rots here. It only accumulates." Rory looked at her. The half-Fae's silver hair caught the amber light and held it, and her pale lavender eyes moved slowly over the landscape with something that wasn't quite recognition and wasn't quite peace. Isolde left no footprints in the soft reddish earth. Rory's boots sank half an inch. "Is that supposed to be comforting?" Rory asked. "It is supposed to be accurate." Isolde moved forward without seeming to initiate the movement, more like the ground receded beneath her. "Walk close." Nyx drifted at the edge of Rory's peripheral vision, their form loosening slightly at the edges — the shadow that composed them bleeding out a little into the ambient light, tasting the air. Even in the strange warmth of the amber sky they remained dark, a silhouette that absorbed rather than reflected, their faintly violet eyes reading the landscape with an attention that rarely blinked. "There are souls here," they said softly. The sound arrived at Rory's ear like something carried on a draft. "Many. Though I cannot yet see them." Rory reached into her jacket and kept her hand near the hilt of the Fae-forged blade at her hip. The moonsilver dagger was cold as ever against her palm, indifferent to the warmth surrounding it, and she found the temperature grounding. Real. She focused on it. They followed a path that wasn't quite a path — a seam in the land where the reddish earth was packed and pale, worn by passage. It wound between the vineyard rows and Rory found herself looking sideways at the vines as they passed. Up close, the grapes were enormous, each cluster the size of a fist, and the skins had an iridescent quality, shifting between deep burgundy and something almost black under her gaze. She had the strange impulse to reach out and take one. She didn't. The path curved, crested a low rise, and opened onto a valley and Rory stopped walking. Below them, built into a natural hollow in the land, was a city — or something like a city. The structures were low and sprawling, built from a warm pale stone that glowed faintly in the amber light, arched and open-sided in a way that did not look like architecture designed for shelter but for display. Wide terraces descended the valley's sides in tiers, and on each terrace there were tables. Long tables covered in white cloth, loaded with food, set for dozens. And at them, figures were seated, or moving, or circling. They were too far away to make out clearly, but something in their movement was off — too slow in places, too frenetic in others, like a crowd playing at dinner in a dream. "The feasts," Isolde said simply. "They run without interruption. The chefs work in shifts of decades. The diners—" She paused in the way that she did when she was selecting which true thing to say. "The diners have forgotten what hunger feels like, and so they have no mechanism for stopping." "Those are people," Rory said. "Some of them." She watched the distant figures for a moment. A faint sound reached them on the amber-thick air — not music exactly, but something rhythmic, drums perhaps, or the beat of many forks against many plates, or both. "We're not here to intervene," Nyx said, not unkindly. Their gaze had moved from the city to the near edge of the valley, where a series of low stone archways were half-buried in the hillside, dark against the pale rock. "We need the vault, not the feast hall." "I know," Rory said. She pulled her hand away from the blade and flexed her fingers. The crescent scar on her left wrist caught the amber light, pale against pale skin. Isolde had already begun descending the far side of the rise, not toward the city but veering along the valley's rim, stepping through the tall grass that grew there — gold-tipped grass that bent in her direction as she passed without touching her. She moved as though she already knew the route, which she very possibly did. Rory followed, because following was what you did when the alternative was standing on a hillside in Hel staring at a cursed feast. The grass was strange. It didn't whisper when she moved through it; it sighed — an exhale, almost contented, from the land itself. It pressed lightly against her jeans like something curious, and she told herself it was wind and moved faster. Nyx flowed beside her, keeping close, and she was grateful for it, for the way their presence occupied the air at her left shoulder, steady and familiar in a place where nothing else was. The archways were older than the city by some order of magnitude that felt impossible to estimate. The stone was not the same pale rock as the buildings below; it was something darker, almost black at the core, threaded through with veins of deep red that pulsed — faintly, slowly, like the Heartstone had before the portal closed. Rory noticed that without deciding to and stopped herself from saying anything about it. Isolde passed beneath the first arch and paused on the other side, turning back. "The way becomes narrow," she said. "The walls will press. They are learning what you are." "Reassuring," Rory said. The word came out dryer than she felt. She stepped under the arch. The temperature shifted immediately, dropping to something closer to cold, and the amber light thinned behind her as though the archway reflected it away. The space beyond was a passage — low-ceilinged, stone-walled, lit by those same red veins that traced patterns through the rock she could almost resolve into something ordered. Symbols, maybe. Script. The kind of thing that meant something once and might still. The walls were, as Isolde had said, close. Rory's shoulders came near to grazing both sides at once, and the stone radiated a faint warmth that contradicted the cool air — the warmth of something containing something else, sealed away and patient. Nyx compressed inward, their silhouette pulling tighter, edges sharpening. Without the ambient space to diffuse into, they looked almost solid, more human than Rory had seen them. Their violet eyes glowed a little brighter from the contained dark. "The veins in the stone," Nyx said quietly, as they moved deeper. "They've been mapped." "What do you mean?" Rory glanced at the walls as she walked. Now that her eyes were adjusting, she could see it — the pulsing channels of red didn't run at random. They joined. Branched. Connected at nodes and split again and rejoined in configurations that had a logic to them even if she didn't have the grammar to read it. "A diagram," Nyx said. "Of what the realm holds. Or held." "Or what it hungers for," Isolde said, ahead of them, and then said nothing further. Rory pressed her hand to the cold hilt of the Fae blade again. The passage turned and the red light grew fractionally brighter and somewhere deep below — or perhaps far ahead, distance was hard to trust here — something that might have been music and might have been the sound of eating echoed up through the stone. They walked deeper.
created_at"2026-02-24T22:29:24.879Z" 2/24/2026, 10:29:24 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
12.50% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"they said softly [softly]"
1"Isolde said simply [simply]"
2"Nyx said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences25
tagDensity0.64
leniency1
rawRatio0.188
effectiveRatio0.188
77.78% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1575
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count2
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
3
adverb"softly"
count1
4
adverb"very"
count1
5
adverb"lightly"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"slowly"
2"slightly"
3"softly"
4"very"
5"lightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
42.86% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1575
totalAiIsms18
found
0
word"silk"
count1
1
word"rhythmic"
count2
2
word"warmth"
count5
3
word"unsettled"
count1
4
word"complex"
count1
5
word"perfect"
count1
6
word"comforting"
count1
7
word"whisper"
count1
8
word"familiar"
count1
9
word"pulsed"
count1
10
word"traced"
count1
11
word"resolve"
count1
12
word"echoed"
count1
highlights
0"silk"
1"rhythmic"
2"warmth"
3"unsettled"
4"complex"
5"perfect"
6"comforting"
7"whisper"
8"familiar"
9"pulsed"
10"traced"
11"resolve"
12"echoed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences96
matches
0"was grateful"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences96
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences105
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen43
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1594
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions44
wordCount1464
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.37
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Heartstone2
Nyx7
Dymas1
Rory20
Hel2
Isolde8
Fae-forged1
Fae3
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Nyx"
2"Rory"
3"Isolde"
4"Fae"
places(empty)
globalScore0.817
windowScore0.667
2.94% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences68
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"not quite night and not quite dusk but some third thing that existed only here"
1"not quite dusk but some third thing that existed only here"
2"quite recognition and wasn't quite peace"
3"quite peace"
4"quite a path — a seam in the land where the reddish earth was packed and pale, worn by passage"
5"something like a city"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches5
per1kWords3.137
wordCount1594
matches
0"not quite night and not quite dusk but some third thing"
1"not quite dusk but some third thing"
2"not look like architecture designed for shelter but for display"
3"not music exactly, but something rhythmic, drums perhaps"
4"not toward the city but veering along the valley's rim, stepping through the tall gr"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences105
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs41
mean38.88
std30.72
cv0.79
sampleLengths
019
157
23
318
490
562
6111
726
850
98
1024
1165
1226
1346
1486
152
1616
17127
1851
195
203
2137
2248
2331
2457
2523
2676
2772
2814
2916
3011
315
3266
3342
3438
3515
3661
3711
3815
3958
403
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences96
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs253
matches
0"was selecting"
1"was standing"
2"were adjusting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount19
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences16
totalSentences105
ratio0.152
matches
0"It had been pulsing for the last ten minutes — a slow, rhythmic warmth like something alive and breathing — but now it went perfectly still, as though it had gotten what it wanted."
1"There were no clouds, or nothing that Rory could identify as clouds — only slow drifts of golden haze that moved against whatever passed for wind in this place."
2"Instead the air was thick and almost fragrant, heavy with something she couldn't name at first — sweetness, yes, but layered, complex, the way a market smelled when every stall was open at once."
3"Vineyards stretched away to the left in precise dark rows, the vines heavy with fat clusters of deep purple — no, red — no, they seemed to shift, the colour changing as the amber light moved across them."
4"Nyx drifted at the edge of Rory's peripheral vision, their form loosening slightly at the edges — the shadow that composed them bleeding out a little into the ambient light, tasting the air."
5"They followed a path that wasn't quite a path — a seam in the land where the reddish earth was packed and pale, worn by passage."
6"Below them, built into a natural hollow in the land, was a city — or something like a city."
7"They were too far away to make out clearly, but something in their movement was off — too slow in places, too frenetic in others, like a crowd playing at dinner in a dream."
8"A faint sound reached them on the amber-thick air — not music exactly, but something rhythmic, drums perhaps, or the beat of many forks against many plates, or both."
9"Isolde had already begun descending the far side of the rise, not toward the city but veering along the valley's rim, stepping through the tall grass that grew there — gold-tipped grass that bent in her direction as she passed without touching her."
10"It didn't whisper when she moved through it; it sighed — an exhale, almost contented, from the land itself."
11"The stone was not the same pale rock as the buildings below; it was something darker, almost black at the core, threaded through with veins of deep red that pulsed — faintly, slowly, like the Heartstone had before the portal closed."
12"The space beyond was a passage — low-ceilinged, stone-walled, lit by those same red veins that traced patterns through the rock she could almost resolve into something ordered."
13"Rory's shoulders came near to grazing both sides at once, and the stone radiated a faint warmth that contradicted the cool air — the warmth of something containing something else, sealed away and patient."
14"Now that her eyes were adjusting, she could see it — the pulsing channels of red didn't run at random."
15"The passage turned and the red light grew fractionally brighter and somewhere deep below — or perhaps far ahead, distance was hard to trust here — something that might have been music and might have been the sound of eating echoed up through the stone."
84.44% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1453
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"pale against pale skin."
adverbCount74
adverbRatio0.05092911218169305
lyAdverbCount23
lyAdverbRatio0.015829318651066758
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences105
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences105
mean15.18
std11.47
cv0.755
sampleLengths
019
116
234
37
43
53
615
741
829
920
104
119
1234
135
142
158
1617
1738
1827
192
202
2125
229
2311
246
254
2631
279
286
298
3022
312
3233
3332
347
3512
367
3719
3822
391
404
4126
4218
4331
4411
452
4616
4719
4837
4915
64.76% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.42857142857142855
totalSentences105
uniqueOpeners45
41.67% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences80
matches
0"Instead the air was thick"
ratio0.013
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount21
totalSentences80
matches
0"It had been pulsing for"
1"She wasn't sure which unsettled"
2"They rarely did when words"
3"She had expected heat."
4"Her voice was always exactly"
5"they said softly"
6"She focused on it."
7"They followed a path that"
8"It wound between the vineyard"
9"She had the strange impulse"
10"They were too far away"
11"She paused in the way"
12"She watched the distant figures"
13"Their gaze had moved from"
14"She pulled her hand away"
15"She moved as though she"
16"It didn't whisper when she"
17"It pressed lightly against her"
18"She stepped under the arch."
19"Their violet eyes glowed a"
ratio0.263
41.25% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount67
totalSentences80
matches
0"The portal closed behind them"
1"Rory pressed her hand flat"
2"It had been pulsing for"
3"She wasn't sure which unsettled"
4"Nyx said nothing."
5"They rarely did when words"
6"The sky above Dymas was"
7"The light it produced was"
8"She had expected heat."
9"The realm of Hel, she'd"
10"Stone fruit and something floral."
11"The ghost of woodsmoke threaded"
12"Vineyards stretched away to the"
13"Every branch bowed with fruit,"
14"Isolde said, beside her"
15"Her voice was always exactly"
16"Rory looked at her."
17"The half-Fae's silver hair caught"
18"Isolde left no footprints in"
19"Rory's boots sank half an"
ratio0.838
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount4
totalSentences80
matches
0"Before them, the land rolled"
1"To the right, an orchard"
2"Even in the strange warmth"
3"Now that her eyes were"
ratio0.05
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences54
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"It had been pulsing for the last ten minutes — a slow, rhythmic warmth like something alive and breathing — but now it went perfectly still, as though it had go…"
1"The sky above Dymas was the color of cooling embers, a deep amber that ran to orange at the horizon and bruised to something darker overhead, not quite night an…"
2"Every branch bowed with fruit, none of it fallen, none of it rotting, as though the trees existed in a permanent state of perfect harvest."
3"The half-Fae's silver hair caught the amber light and held it, and her pale lavender eyes moved slowly over the landscape with something that wasn't quite recog…"
4"Nyx drifted at the edge of Rory's peripheral vision, their form loosening slightly at the edges — the shadow that composed them bleeding out a little into the a…"
5"The structures were low and sprawling, built from a warm pale stone that glowed faintly in the amber light, arched and open-sided in a way that did not look lik…"
6"Isolde had already begun descending the far side of the rise, not toward the city but veering along the valley's rim, stepping through the tall grass that grew …"
7"The archways were older than the city by some order of magnitude that felt impossible to estimate."
8"The temperature shifted immediately, dropping to something closer to cold, and the amber light thinned behind her as though the archway reflected it away."
9"The space beyond was a passage — low-ceilinged, stone-walled, lit by those same red veins that traced patterns through the rock she could almost resolve into so…"
10"Rory's shoulders came near to grazing both sides at once, and the stone radiated a faint warmth that contradicted the cool air — the warmth of something contain…"
11"The passage turned and the red light grew fractionally brighter and somewhere deep below — or perhaps far ahead, distance was hard to trust here — something tha…"
93.75% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Nyx said, not unkindly"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags13
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences25
tagDensity0.52
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
74.2869%