Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8WTM5RWTD8F680WTZPF1HC

Run Details

Duration:
1m 29s
Cost:
$0.086850
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The rain came sideways off the rooftops, slashing across Camden High Street in sheets that turned the streetlights into smeared orange halos. Harlow Quinn kept her eyes locked on the figure thirty meters ahead—dark jacket, short curly hair plastered to his skull, moving fast but not running. Not yet. He was weaving through the late-night crowd outside the food stalls, past a cluster of tourists huddled under a shop awning, and he hadn't looked back once. That bothered her more than if he'd bolted. She matched his pace, her boots slapping through puddles that had gathered in the uneven pavement. Water seeped through the seams of her jacket and ran cold down the back of her neck. She ignored it. Eighteen years on the force had taught her that discomfort was just noise, and noise could be tuned out. What mattered was the man ahead of her—Tomás Herrera, twenty-nine, former NHS paramedic, currently unlicensed and operating well outside the bounds of anything the General Medical Council would recognize. She'd pulled his file two weeks ago after a tip traced back to that bar in Soho, the one with the green neon sign. The Raven's Nest. A name that had surfaced in three separate investigations over the past year, always at the periphery, never close enough to the center to justify a warrant. Until now. Herrera cut left down a side street. Quinn adjusted course, sidestepping a man walking a drenched terrier, and followed. The side street was narrower, darker, the shopfronts shuttered and gated for the night. She could hear his footsteps now, quicker than before. He knew she was there. He'd probably known from the moment she'd spotted him leaving the Nest twenty minutes ago and fallen in behind him. She'd been sitting in her car across from the bar, engine off, watching the green neon bleed across the wet pavement. Routine surveillance. She'd photographed six people entering through the front door in the space of an hour, cross-referencing faces against her growing file. Most of them she couldn't identify. But Herrera she knew. She'd seen his face in connection with an assault case in Hackney—a victim with injuries that didn't match any weapon the forensics team could identify, burns that looked chemical but tested as nothing in their databases. Herrera had been spotted leaving the scene. By the time uniforms arrived, the victim had been treated and refused to file a report. The burns were already healing. Three days later, Quinn had found Herrera's name scratched into the margins of a case file she kept locked in the bottom drawer of her desk. The Morris file. DS Adrian Morris, her partner, dead three years now in a basement in Whitechapel under circumstances that the official report called a structural collapse and that Quinn called a lie. She'd been there. She'd heard what she'd heard. And what she'd heard didn't come from shifting foundations. Herrera turned again, ducking under a construction scaffold and disappearing around a corner. Quinn broke into a jog. The worn leather of her watch band chafed against her wrist as she pumped her arms, and she could feel the weight of her warrant card in her breast pocket, her expandable baton against her hip. No firearm. She was Metropolitan Police, not armed response. She'd called it in before leaving the car—her position, Herrera's description, direction of travel. Backup was ten minutes out. Maybe fifteen in this weather. She rounded the corner and stopped. The street dead-ended at a construction hoarding plastered with faded posters and graffiti. No Herrera. No doors. No alleys. Just a wall of plywood and a chain-link fence sagging under the weight of the rain. Quinn stood there, chest rising and falling, rain hammering against her shoulders. She scanned left, right, up. Nothing. She stepped forward slowly, her eyes adjusting to the deeper darkness where the streetlights didn't reach. The hoarding ran the length of what had once been a building—demolished now, just a pit of rubble and standing water behind the fence. But at the far end, half-hidden behind a skip overflowing with sodden cardboard, she saw it: a gate in the fence, slightly ajar, and beyond it a set of concrete steps descending into the ground. She knew this area. She'd walked this stretch of Camden dozens of times during her years stationed at Kentish Town. Those steps led to an entrance of an old Tube station—one of the abandoned ones, sealed off decades ago when the lines were rerouted. There was no reason for anyone to go down there. No reason for the gate to be open. Quinn pulled out her phone. No signal. The rain or the location or something else had killed it. She tried twice, watched the call fail both times, and put it away. The smart move was to wait. Wait for backup. Secure the perimeter. Do it by the book, the way she'd been trained, the way she'd trained others. She could hear DCI Adeyemi's voice in her head—measured, firm: *You don't go into an unknown space alone, Quinn. That's how we lose people.* That's how we lost Morris. She stared at the steps. Water cascaded down them in a thin, dirty waterfall, pooling at the bottom where dim light—warm, amber, wrong for a place that should have been pitch black—leaked from somewhere deeper inside. She could smell something too, cutting through the rain and the city grime. Something sharp and herbal, like burning sage laced with something metallic she couldn't name. She thought about Herrera's file. The revoked medical license. The unauthorized treatments administered to patients whose conditions didn't appear in any textbook. The Hackney victim with the impossible burns. She thought about the Raven's Nest and its hidden back room that she'd never been able to get eyes on—intelligence suggested a bookshelf that moved, a space behind it where the bar's real business was conducted. She thought about every thread she'd been pulling for three years, all of them fraying in her hands, all of them leading to places that didn't make sense, that couldn't be real, that she'd refused to name because naming them would mean accepting something about the world that a decorated officer of the Metropolitan Police could not accept and still function. She went down the steps. The concrete was slick and crumbling at the edges. She kept one hand on the tiled wall, fingers tracing over the remnants of the old station signage—fragments of dark red and cream ceramic, the kind you saw in heritage photos of the Underground. The stairwell curved, and the light grew stronger, and the sound of the rain above faded, replaced by something else: voices. Dozens of them, layered over each other in a low, constant murmur, punctuated by the clink of glass and the scrape of things being moved across stone. She reached the bottom of the stairs and stepped through an archway where a turnstile had once stood. The rusted stumps of its posts were still embedded in the floor. The Veil Market opened before her like a wound in the city's belly. The old platform stretched in both directions, wider than she remembered abandoned stations being, as though the space had been... encouraged to expand. Stalls lined both sides, constructed from salvaged wood, corrugated metal, draped fabrics in deep reds and purples. Lanterns hung from the vaulted ceiling on chains of varying length, casting overlapping circles of amber light that swayed gently despite the absence of any breeze. The air was thick—warm and close, saturated with competing scents: the herbal burning she'd detected above, mixed with old paper, wet stone, rendered fat, and something sweet and cloying that clung to the back of her throat. People moved between the stalls. Dozens of them, maybe more, flowing along the platform in a current that had its own logic. Some looked ordinary—jeans, jackets, the usual London uniform. Others didn't. A woman with skin that seemed to shift color under the lantern light, cycling from deep brown to a blue-black sheen and back again. A man whose shadow didn't match his body, trailing behind him at the wrong angle, too long, with too many limbs. A child—no, not a child, the proportions were wrong, the eyes too large and too knowing—crouched beside a stall selling jars of something luminescent and green. Quinn's hand found her baton and stayed there. She pressed her back against the tiled wall of the archway and forced herself to breathe. To observe. To catalogue. That was her training. That was what kept you alive when the world stopped making sense: you watched, you noted, you filed it for later. You did not panic. You did not freeze. Her eyes swept the market systematically, left to right, near to far. She spotted Herrera almost immediately. He was forty meters down the platform on the right side, standing at a stall draped in dark cloth. The stall's proprietor was obscured behind a curtain, but a pale hand extended from the fabric, passing Herrera a small wrapped package. He took it, tucked it inside his jacket. His other hand went to his chest—a habitual gesture, she'd noted it before—fingers touching something beneath his shirt. A medallion of some kind, she thought. He exchanged words with the hand's owner, nodded once, and turned. He saw her. Even across the length of the platform, through the shifting crowd and the swaying lantern light, Quinn saw the moment recognition hit him. His warm brown eyes widened. His hand froze at his chest. He went very still—the way a man goes still when he's calculating whether to run or talk. Quinn didn't move. She held his gaze and let him make the choice. Around them, the market continued its business. A vendor to her left called out in a language she didn't recognize. Something skittered across the ceiling—she didn't look up. Her peripheral vision caught too much already: the glint of blades on a table, the pulse of light inside a stoppered bottle, the wet gleam of something in a tank that pressed itself against the glass as she passed. Herrera moved first. Not away. Toward her. He walked with his hands visible, palms slightly out, the universal body language of a man who wanted to demonstrate he wasn't a threat. The scar along his left forearm was visible below his pushed-up sleeve, a pale ridge against olive skin, and Quinn noted it automatically—knife wound, old, consistent with a defensive injury. He stopped three meters away. Close enough to talk. Far enough to run. "You shouldn't be here," he said. His accent was faint—Spanish roots softened by years in London—but his voice was steady. "You don't have a bone token. Someone let you through because you followed me in, but that courtesy won't last." "I'm a police officer," Quinn said. The words felt absurd down here, like claiming jurisdiction on the moon. "I have questions about—" "I know who you are, Detective Quinn." He said it quietly, with something that might have been sympathy. "I know what you've been looking into. And I'm telling you that this place, these people—your badge means nothing here. Less than nothing. It makes you a target." Quinn's jaw tightened. She could feel the sharp lines of her own face reflected in his expression—he was reading her the way she read suspects, watching for the tells, the fracture points. "A man with a revoked medical license running an unlicensed practice doesn't get to lecture me about vulnerability." "Fair." Herrera almost smiled. "But I know what's down here. You don't. And the things you've been chasing for the past three years—your partner, what happened in Whitechapel—you won't find those answers with a baton and a warrant card." The mention of Morris landed like a fist below her ribs. Quinn's breath caught, and she hated herself for it—for the tell, for the half-second of exposed grief that she knew he'd seen. She straightened, squaring her shoulders with the kind of military precision that had been drilled into her long before she'd ever pinned on a badge. "Then tell me," she said, "where I will find them." Herrera glanced over his shoulder. The market shifted around them, its rhythm unbroken but somehow watchful, as if the crowd had developed a collective awareness of the outsider in their midst. When he looked back at her, his hand was at his medallion again, and his expression had darkened into something she recognized from her own mirror: the look of a person who'd seen too much and regretted most of it. "Not here," he said. "Not now. Meet me tomorrow at the Nest. Come alone. Use the back entrance—knock twice, wait, knock three more times. Someone will let you in." "And if I decide to bring you in tonight?" He held her gaze. "Then neither of us gets what we need. And the people who killed your partner stay comfortable." The rain was still falling when Quinn climbed back up the steps, alone, her clothes heavy with water and her mind heavier with everything she'd just seen. She stood in the street and looked up at the sky, letting the rain hit her face, and tried to reconcile the city she thought she knew with the one that had been breathing beneath it all along. She checked her phone. Signal again, two bars. Three missed calls from dispatch. She pocketed the phone without returning them and walked back toward the high street, committing every detail to memory: the steps, the archway, the amber light, the stalls. The way Herrera's hand had gone to his medallion. The look in his eyes when he'd said Morris's name. Tomorrow. The Raven's Nest. The back room behind the bookshelf. She'd go. Of course she'd go. She'd known she would from the moment she'd descended those stairs, crossed the threshold into whatever that place was, and felt the ground shift beneath every assumption she'd built her career on. Some doors, once opened, didn't close.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags5
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences14
tagDensity0.357
leniency0.714
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
89.42% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2362
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count2
2
adverb"gently"
count1
3
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"slightly"
2"gently"
3"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
70.36% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2362
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"traced"
count1
1
word"footsteps"
count1
2
word"could feel"
count2
3
word"weight"
count2
4
word"scanned"
count1
5
word"measured"
count1
6
word"tracing"
count1
7
word"constructed"
count1
8
word"calculating"
count1
9
word"glint"
count1
10
word"pulse"
count1
11
word"comfortable"
count1
highlights
0"traced"
1"footsteps"
2"could feel"
3"weight"
4"scanned"
5"measured"
6"tracing"
7"constructed"
8"calculating"
9"glint"
10"pulse"
11"comfortable"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences168
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences168
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences176
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen61
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords14
totalWords2334
ratio0.006
matches
0"You don't go into an unknown space alone, Quinn. That's how we lose people."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions70
wordCount2152
uniqueNames27
maxNameDensity0.74
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Camden2
High1
Street1
Quinn16
Tomás1
Herrera15
General1
Medical1
Council1
Soho1
Raven3
Nest4
Hackney2
Morris5
Adrian1
Whitechapel1
Metropolitan2
Police2
Kentish1
Town1
Tube1
Adeyemi1
Underground1
Veil1
Market1
London2
Spanish1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Tomás"
2"Herrera"
3"Council"
4"Raven"
5"Morris"
6"Adrian"
7"Police"
8"Adeyemi"
9"Market"
10"Spanish"
places
0"Camden"
1"High"
2"Street"
3"Soho"
4"Hackney"
5"Whitechapel"
6"Kentish"
7"Town"
8"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences104
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"skin that seemed to shift color under the lantern light, cycling from deep brown to a blue-black sheen and back again"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2334
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences176
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs48
mean48.63
std36.29
cv0.746
sampleLengths
076
18
2138
32
467
5118
676
787
86
935
1093
1162
1231
1351
145
1563
16126
175
1891
1930
2013
21103
22103
238
2453
25102
263
2751
2813
2967
3074
3140
3222
3346
3450
3539
3658
3710
3871
3929
409
4121
4265
4313
4447
4510
4638
476
88.55% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount8
totalSentences168
matches
0"been spotted"
1"been treated"
2"were rerouted"
3"been trained"
4"was conducted"
5"being moved"
6"was obscured"
7"been drilled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs369
matches
0"was weaving"
1"were already healing"
2"was reading"
3"was still falling"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount24
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences20
totalSentences176
ratio0.114
matches
0"Harlow Quinn kept her eyes locked on the figure thirty meters ahead—dark jacket, short curly hair plastered to his skull, moving fast but not running."
1"What mattered was the man ahead of her—Tomás Herrera, twenty-nine, former NHS paramedic, currently unlicensed and operating well outside the bounds of anything the General Medical Council would recognize."
2"She'd seen his face in connection with an assault case in Hackney—a victim with injuries that didn't match any weapon the forensics team could identify, burns that looked chemical but tested as nothing in their databases."
3"She'd called it in before leaving the car—her position, Herrera's description, direction of travel."
4"The hoarding ran the length of what had once been a building—demolished now, just a pit of rubble and standing water behind the fence."
5"Those steps led to an entrance of an old Tube station—one of the abandoned ones, sealed off decades ago when the lines were rerouted."
6"She could hear DCI Adeyemi's voice in her head—measured, firm: *You don't go into an unknown space alone, Quinn."
7"Water cascaded down them in a thin, dirty waterfall, pooling at the bottom where dim light—warm, amber, wrong for a place that should have been pitch black—leaked from somewhere deeper inside."
8"She thought about the Raven's Nest and its hidden back room that she'd never been able to get eyes on—intelligence suggested a bookshelf that moved, a space behind it where the bar's real business was conducted."
9"She kept one hand on the tiled wall, fingers tracing over the remnants of the old station signage—fragments of dark red and cream ceramic, the kind you saw in heritage photos of the Underground."
10"The air was thick—warm and close, saturated with competing scents: the herbal burning she'd detected above, mixed with old paper, wet stone, rendered fat, and something sweet and cloying that clung to the back of her throat."
11"Some looked ordinary—jeans, jackets, the usual London uniform."
12"A child—no, not a child, the proportions were wrong, the eyes too large and too knowing—crouched beside a stall selling jars of something luminescent and green."
13"His other hand went to his chest—a habitual gesture, she'd noted it before—fingers touching something beneath his shirt."
14"He went very still—the way a man goes still when he's calculating whether to run or talk."
15"Something skittered across the ceiling—she didn't look up."
16"The scar along his left forearm was visible below his pushed-up sleeve, a pale ridge against olive skin, and Quinn noted it automatically—knife wound, old, consistent with a defensive injury."
17"His accent was faint—Spanish roots softened by years in London—but his voice was steady."
18"She could feel the sharp lines of her own face reflected in his expression—he was reading her the way she read suspects, watching for the tells, the fracture points."
19"Quinn's breath caught, and she hated herself for it—for the tell, for the half-second of exposed grief that she knew he'd seen."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2185
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount64
adverbRatio0.029290617848970253
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.005491990846681922
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences176
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences176
mean13.26
std10.73
cv0.809
sampleLengths
022
125
22
327
48
516
617
73
819
929
1024
113
1227
132
147
1512
1614
179
185
1920
2021
212
2221
236
244
2536
267
2716
285
2926
303
3130
323
335
349
3513
365
3736
382
397
4014
415
425
436
4413
452
462
472
4816
4912
36.36% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats26
diversityRatio0.3068181818181818
totalSentences176
uniqueOpeners54
67.57% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences148
matches
0"Maybe fifteen in this weather."
1"Just a wall of plywood"
2"Of course she'd go."
ratio0.02
71.35% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount55
totalSentences148
matches
0"He was weaving through the"
1"She matched his pace, her"
2"She ignored it."
3"She'd pulled his file two"
4"She could hear his footsteps"
5"He knew she was there."
6"He'd probably known from the"
7"She'd been sitting in her"
8"She'd photographed six people entering"
9"She'd seen his face in"
10"She'd been there."
11"She'd heard what she'd heard."
12"She was Metropolitan Police, not"
13"She'd called it in before"
14"She rounded the corner and"
15"She scanned left, right, up."
16"She stepped forward slowly, her"
17"She knew this area."
18"She'd walked this stretch of"
19"She tried twice, watched the"
ratio0.372
41.08% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount124
totalSentences148
matches
0"The rain came sideways off"
1"Harlow Quinn kept her eyes"
2"He was weaving through the"
3"That bothered her more than"
4"She matched his pace, her"
5"Water seeped through the seams"
6"She ignored it."
7"She'd pulled his file two"
8"The Raven's Nest."
9"A name that had surfaced"
10"Herrera cut left down a"
11"Quinn adjusted course, sidestepping a"
12"The side street was narrower,"
13"She could hear his footsteps"
14"He knew she was there."
15"He'd probably known from the"
16"She'd been sitting in her"
17"She'd photographed six people entering"
18"She'd seen his face in"
19"Herrera had been spotted leaving"
ratio0.838
67.57% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences148
matches
0"By the time uniforms arrived,"
1"Even across the length of"
ratio0.014
28.22% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences81
technicalSentenceCount13
matches
0"She matched his pace, her boots slapping through puddles that had gathered in the uneven pavement."
1"A name that had surfaced in three separate investigations over the past year, always at the periphery, never close enough to the center to justify a warrant."
2"She'd seen his face in connection with an assault case in Hackney—a victim with injuries that didn't match any weapon the forensics team could identify, burns t…"
3"Water cascaded down them in a thin, dirty waterfall, pooling at the bottom where dim light—warm, amber, wrong for a place that should have been pitch black—leak…"
4"She thought about the Raven's Nest and its hidden back room that she'd never been able to get eyes on—intelligence suggested a bookshelf that moved, a space beh…"
5"She thought about every thread she'd been pulling for three years, all of them fraying in her hands, all of them leading to places that didn't make sense, that …"
6"The old platform stretched in both directions, wider than she remembered abandoned stations being, as though the space had been..."
7"Lanterns hung from the vaulted ceiling on chains of varying length, casting overlapping circles of amber light that swayed gently despite the absence of any bre…"
8"A woman with skin that seemed to shift color under the lantern light, cycling from deep brown to a blue-black sheen and back again."
9"He walked with his hands visible, palms slightly out, the universal body language of a man who wanted to demonstrate he wasn't a threat."
10"She straightened, squaring her shoulders with the kind of military precision that had been drilled into her long before she'd ever pinned on a badge."
11"The market shifted around them, its rhythm unbroken but somehow watchful, as if the crowd had developed a collective awareness of the outsider in their midst."
12"When he looked back at her, his hand was at his medallion again, and his expression had darkened into something she recognized from her own mirror: the look of …"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags5
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences14
tagDensity0.357
leniency0.714
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
85.3495%