Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8WVN6NKDAJETWWT4EGBA4Y

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1m 9s
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$0.077340
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Amazon Bedrock

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You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The pendant burned against Rory's sternum the moment the air changed. Not a gradual shift — one step she breathed London's damp November chill, and the next her lungs filled with something thick and sweet, like inhaling warm honey. The shimmer she'd walked through dissolved behind them with a sound like tearing silk, and the grey of Richmond Park vanished as though it had never existed. "Oh," she said. Just that. Because what stretched before her stole every other word she might have summoned. The sky was amber. Not sunset amber, not the muddy orange of city light pollution bouncing off clouds. This was a deep, saturated gold, the color of aged whiskey held up to a candle, and it stretched from horizon to horizon without a single cloud to break it. The light it cast had weight — Rory could feel it pressing against her skin like bathwater. Nyx solidified at her left shoulder, their form pulling tight and dense, the violet glow of their eyes narrowing to pinpricks. "This is wrong." Their whisper-voice carried an edge she hadn't heard before. Not fear, exactly. Recognition. "This is Hel." "The second circle." Isolde moved past them both, her bare feet making no impression on the dark, loamy earth. Her silver hair caught the amber light and turned to molten copper. "Dymas. The glutton's garden." Rory pressed her palm flat against the Heartstone where it lay beneath her jacket. The pulse that had been a gentle nudge for weeks now throbbed with the steady rhythm of a second heartbeat, warm enough to sting. "You could have mentioned it was a door to bloody Hel before we walked through it." Isolde's lavender eyes slid sideways. "A door is only a door. What matters is what you carry through it." "That's not an answer." "It is the answer you were given." Rory bit down on the inside of her cheek and turned her attention forward. Arguing with Isolde was like arm-wrestling smoke — you exhausted yourself while the smoke just drifted. They stood at the edge of a vineyard that rolled down a gentle slope and kept going. The vines were nothing like any grape she'd ever seen. They twisted around trellises of bone-white wood, and their leaves shimmered between deep purple and black depending on how the amber light caught them. The fruit that hung in heavy clusters was translucent, each grape the size of a marble, and inside Rory could see something moving — tiny currents, lazy spirals of luminescence, as though each one contained its own small weather system. The vineyard stretched for what might have been miles. Beyond it, the landscape erupted into terraced orchards, the trees unlike anything terrestrial — some bearing fruit that glowed faintly blue, others dripping with what looked like crystallized sap. And beyond the orchards, rising from a valley basin, she could make out structures. Towers. Domes. Smoke rising from a hundred chimneys, carrying with it the ghost of spices she couldn't name. "Don't touch the fruit." Nyx drifted forward, their shadow-form rippling. Here, in this amber world, they seemed more defined than they ever had on Earth — the edges of their silhouette sharper, the darkness of their body deeper by contrast against the golden light. "You've been here before," Rory said. "No." They paused at the edge of the nearest row of vines. "But I have been close. The spaces between realms border every realm. I have... heard Dymas. Smelled it. Felt it pulling." Their violet eyes dimmed. "It is designed to pull." A breeze rolled up the slope and Rory's stomach clenched. Not with nausea. With hunger. A sudden, visceral, hollow ache that hadn't been there thirty seconds ago. The breeze carried roasting meat and caramelized sugar and something underneath those — something dark and earthy and ancient, like the smell of a forest floor after rain but richer, deeper. Her mouth flooded with saliva. She swallowed hard. "I feel it." "Gluttony is not merely food." Isolde knelt beside one of the vines and studied its trunk without touching it. Up close, Rory could see the bark was etched with fine lines — patterns that might have been natural grain or might have been script. "Gluttony is the want that grows faster than the having. The appetite that sharpens with each bite." "So the whole place is, what, a trap?" "A garden does not trap the deer. The deer walks in because the garden is beautiful." Rory crouched beside her. The Fae-forged blade sat against her hip in the makeshift sheath Nyx had fashioned from a belt, and even through the leather she could feel its perpetual cold — a counterpoint to the pendant's heat. The dagger's moonsilver hadn't reacted to the crossing, hadn't glowed or warmed. It just sat there, patient and chill, like a surgical instrument waiting for the operation to begin. "These markings." She pointed at the vine's trunk. "Language?" "Recipes." Isolde's mouth curled at one corner. "Instructions for preparing the fruit. Written in Dymasian script. This is a cultivated place — every vine, every orchard, planted with intent." "Recipes for who?" "Whom." "Isolde." The half-Fae straightened. "Souls come here, Aurora. Not all damned — some contracted. Chefs, vintners, bakers. Mortals who traded a span of earthly years for the chance to work with ingredients that do not exist on the human plane." She gestured at the glowing fruit, the impossible orchards, the spice-laden air. "Belphegor collects them. Prizes them. This realm is his larder and his stage." The name landed like a stone in still water. Rory filed it for later. They moved down through the vineyard in single file — Nyx leading, their incorporeal edges brushing the vine leaves aside without disturbing them, Rory in the middle, Isolde trailing with her silent, footprintless steps. The deeper they went, the more the air changed. Layers of scent accumulated like geological strata — fruit and fermentation at the surface, then roasted grain, then butter and saffron and black cardamom, then deeper still something almost mineral, almost metallic, that Rory associated with blood. The hunger sharpened. She caught herself staring at a cluster of the translucent grapes and leaning toward it, her hand halfway extended, before she snapped her arm back and shoved her fist into her jacket pocket. "It's getting worse." "It will." Nyx didn't turn around. "Focus on something that repulses you. Counterweight." She thought about Evan's smile. The charming one. The one that preceded the worst nights. The hunger dimmed like someone had turned down a dial. They cleared the vineyard and stepped onto a path of packed earth that wound between two orchards. The trees here were massive — trunks wider than cars, bark the color of dried blood, branches heavy with fruit she had no frame of reference for. Some of the fruit pulsed. Some hummed at a frequency she felt in her molars rather than heard. One tree bore what looked like peaches made of glass, and inside each one she could see a tiny, perfect scene playing out — a dinner table, a feast, figures eating and laughing in endless loop. "Memory fruit." Isolde plucked a leaf from the tree — just a leaf — and held it up. It was warm green shot through with veins of gold. "Each one contains a mortal's memory of their greatest meal. The taste recreates the experience perfectly. Belphegor trades in them. Collectors' items among the demonic aristocracy." "That's..." Rory watched the tiny figures inside the nearest peach. A family, she realized. A woman serving something from a steaming pot while children grabbed at bread rolls. Sunday dinner. Someone's perfect Sunday dinner, bottled and hung from a tree in Hel. "That's obscene." "Desire always is, when viewed from outside." Nyx had stopped ahead of them. Their form had gone rigid — fully solid, which Rory had learned meant they were alarmed. The violet of their eyes blazed bright enough to cast faint purple light on the path. "Someone is coming." Rory heard it a second later. Footsteps. Not cautious ones — confident, measured, accompanied by the clink of metal on metal. She drew the Fae blade and the cold of it flooded up her arm and across her shoulders like jumping into a winter sea. In the amber light, the moonsilver didn't glow as it did under Earth's moon, but it caught the gold and threw it back sharper, whiter, a defiant sliver of something that did not belong here. Three figures emerged around a bend in the path. The first was tall and broad-shouldered, dressed in a long apron stained with things that might have been sauces or might have been worse, a heavy cleaver hanging from a chain at his hip. His skin had a faintly reddish tint, and his eyes — when they locked onto the group — were solid black from corner to corner. Behind him walked two others in similar garb, one carrying a basket overflowing with the luminous blue fruit from the orchards, the other holding a long hooked pole used for reaching high branches. They stopped. The lead figure's black eyes moved from Nyx to Rory to Isolde and lingered there. His nostrils flared. "Fae blood," he said. His voice was deep and smooth, the voice of someone accustomed to calling out orders over the roar of open flame. "Half, by the dilution. And a Shade." His gaze shifted to Rory and his head tilted. "And something else. Something with a heartbeat." The pendant pulsed hot against her chest, and the demon's black eyes dropped to the spot where it lay hidden beneath her jacket. His expression didn't change — he had the still, appraising look of a butcher evaluating a cut of meat — but something in his posture shifted. A new attentiveness. A sharpening. "You carry a Heartstone." Not a question. "Into Dymas." His lips parted, showing teeth that were just slightly too numerous for his mouth. "Prince Belphegor will want to know about this." Rory adjusted her grip on the Fae blade. The cold had spread through her whole body now, pushing back both the ambient heat and the ravenous hunger, leaving her thoughts clear and sharp. "Take us to him, then." Nyx's head snapped toward her. Isolde, behind her, made a sound that might have been a laugh or might have been a sigh. The demon studied her for a long moment. Then he smiled — wide, too wide, the excess teeth catching the amber light. "Follow me," he said, and turned down the path toward the smoking towers in the valley below.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences45
tagDensity0.378
leniency0.756
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
94.27% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1745
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
39.83% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1745
totalAiIsms21
found
0
word"chill"
count2
1
word"silk"
count1
2
word"weight"
count1
3
word"could feel"
count2
4
word"whisper"
count1
5
word"pulse"
count1
6
word"throbbed"
count1
7
word"shimmered"
count1
8
word"marble"
count1
9
word"crystallized"
count1
10
word"stomach"
count1
11
word"etched"
count1
12
word"pulsed"
count2
13
word"perfect"
count2
14
word"desire"
count1
15
word"footsteps"
count1
16
word"measured"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"silk"
2"weight"
3"could feel"
4"whisper"
5"pulse"
6"throbbed"
7"shimmered"
8"marble"
9"crystallized"
10"stomach"
11"etched"
12"pulsed"
13"perfect"
14"desire"
15"footsteps"
16"measured"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences108
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences108
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences135
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen48
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1769
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
88.36% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions51
wordCount1460
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity1.23
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory18
London1
November1
Richmond1
Park1
Heartstone1
Isolde9
Earth2
Fae-forged1
Nyx8
Evan1
Sunday2
Hel1
Fae4
persons
0"Rory"
1"November"
2"Isolde"
3"Earth"
4"Nyx"
5"Evan"
6"Fae"
places
0"London"
1"Richmond"
2"Park"
3"Hel"
globalScore0.884
windowScore1
51.32% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences76
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"looked like crystallized sap"
1"seemed more defined than they ever had on Earth — the edges of their silhouette sharper, the darkness of their body deeper by contrast against the golden light"
2"looked like peaches made of glass, and in"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1769
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences135
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs54
mean32.76
std26.99
cv0.824
sampleLengths
011
155
218
365
421
519
635
738
816
919
104
117
1230
1391
1470
154
1640
176
1842
1963
206
2161
228
2316
2468
259
2629
273
281
291
3064
3114
3280
3336
343
3513
3625
3798
3854
3944
407
4138
423
4380
44101
4520
4648
4754
4831
4933
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences108
matches
0"was etched"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs230
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount22
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences19
totalSentences135
ratio0.141
matches
0"Not a gradual shift — one step she breathed London's damp November chill, and the next her lungs filled with something thick and sweet, like inhaling warm honey."
1"The light it cast had weight — Rory could feel it pressing against her skin like bathwater."
2"Arguing with Isolde was like arm-wrestling smoke — you exhausted yourself while the smoke just drifted."
3"The fruit that hung in heavy clusters was translucent, each grape the size of a marble, and inside Rory could see something moving — tiny currents, lazy spirals of luminescence, as though each one contained its own small weather system."
4"Beyond it, the landscape erupted into terraced orchards, the trees unlike anything terrestrial — some bearing fruit that glowed faintly blue, others dripping with what looked like crystallized sap."
5"Here, in this amber world, they seemed more defined than they ever had on Earth — the edges of their silhouette sharper, the darkness of their body deeper by contrast against the golden light."
6"The breeze carried roasting meat and caramelized sugar and something underneath those — something dark and earthy and ancient, like the smell of a forest floor after rain but richer, deeper."
7"Up close, Rory could see the bark was etched with fine lines — patterns that might have been natural grain or might have been script."
8"The Fae-forged blade sat against her hip in the makeshift sheath Nyx had fashioned from a belt, and even through the leather she could feel its perpetual cold — a counterpoint to the pendant's heat."
9"They moved down through the vineyard in single file — Nyx leading, their incorporeal edges brushing the vine leaves aside without disturbing them, Rory in the middle, Isolde trailing with her silent, footprintless steps."
10"Layers of scent accumulated like geological strata — fruit and fermentation at the surface, then roasted grain, then butter and saffron and black cardamom, then deeper still something almost mineral, almost metallic, that Rory associated with blood."
11"The trees here were massive — trunks wider than cars, bark the color of dried blood, branches heavy with fruit she had no frame of reference for."
12"One tree bore what looked like peaches made of glass, and inside each one she could see a tiny, perfect scene playing out — a dinner table, a feast, figures eating and laughing in endless loop."
13"\"Memory fruit.\" Isolde plucked a leaf from the tree — just a leaf — and held it up."
14"Their form had gone rigid — fully solid, which Rory had learned meant they were alarmed."
15"Not cautious ones — confident, measured, accompanied by the clink of metal on metal."
16"His skin had a faintly reddish tint, and his eyes — when they locked onto the group — were solid black from corner to corner."
17"His expression didn't change — he had the still, appraising look of a butcher evaluating a cut of meat — but something in his posture shifted."
18"Then he smiled — wide, too wide, the excess teeth catching the amber light."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1446
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"sudden, visceral, hollow ache"
adverbCount42
adverbRatio0.029045643153526972
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.004149377593360996
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences135
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences135
mean13.1
std10.36
cv0.79
sampleLengths
011
128
227
33
42
513
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714
830
917
1021
1112
123
131
143
1519
1612
174
1814
1924
2016
215
2214
234
247
2514
2616
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2924
3040
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3314
341
351
3616
374
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3934
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4112
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4410
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4712
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70.62% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.45925925925925926
totalSentences135
uniqueOpeners62
34.72% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences96
matches
0"Then he smiled — wide,"
ratio0.01
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences96
matches
0"Their whisper-voice carried an edge"
1"Her silver hair caught the"
2"They stood at the edge"
3"They twisted around trellises of"
4"They paused at the edge"
5"Their violet eyes dimmed"
6"Her mouth flooded with saliva."
7"She swallowed hard."
8"It just sat there, patient"
9"She pointed at the vine's"
10"She gestured at the glowing"
11"They moved down through the"
12"She caught herself staring at"
13"She thought about Evan's smile."
14"They cleared the vineyard and"
15"It was warm green shot"
16"Their form had gone rigid"
17"She drew the Fae blade"
18"His skin had a faintly"
19"His nostrils flared."
ratio0.26
48.54% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount79
totalSentences96
matches
0"The pendant burned against Rory's"
1"The shimmer she'd walked through"
2"The sky was amber."
3"This was a deep, saturated"
4"The light it cast had"
5"Nyx solidified at her left"
6"Their whisper-voice carried an edge"
7"Isolde moved past them both,"
8"Her silver hair caught the"
9"Rory pressed her palm flat"
10"The pulse that had been"
11"Isolde's lavender eyes slid sideways."
12"Rory bit down on the"
13"They stood at the edge"
14"The vines were nothing like"
15"They twisted around trellises of"
16"The fruit that hung in"
17"The vineyard stretched for what"
18"Nyx drifted forward, their shadow-form"
19"Here, in this amber world,"
ratio0.823
52.08% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences96
matches
0"Because what stretched before her"
ratio0.01
50.26% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences54
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"The shimmer she'd walked through dissolved behind them with a sound like tearing silk, and the grey of Richmond Park vanished as though it had never existed."
1"Nyx solidified at her left shoulder, their form pulling tight and dense, the violet glow of their eyes narrowing to pinpricks."
2"The pulse that had been a gentle nudge for weeks now throbbed with the steady rhythm of a second heartbeat, warm enough to sting."
3"The fruit that hung in heavy clusters was translucent, each grape the size of a marble, and inside Rory could see something moving — tiny currents, lazy spirals…"
4"Beyond it, the landscape erupted into terraced orchards, the trees unlike anything terrestrial — some bearing fruit that glowed faintly blue, others dripping wi…"
5"In the amber light, the moonsilver didn't glow as it did under Earth's moon, but it caught the gold and threw it back sharper, whiter, a defiant sliver of somet…"
6"The first was tall and broad-shouldered, dressed in a long apron stained with things that might have been sauces or might have been worse, a heavy cleaver hangi…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences45
tagDensity0.089
leniency0.178
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
84.1333%