Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8WYX6B03PD9CZQDT9YD6XJ

Run Details

Duration:
1m 35s
Cost:
$0.086120
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The last dog walker had disappeared over Isabella Plantation's ridge twenty minutes ago, and the park had folded into itself the way only London green spaces could — swallowing every trace of the city beyond the tree line until the world shrank to grass and shadow and the ancient oaks standing black against a moonless sky. Rory killed the torch on her phone. Waited for her eyes to adjust. Richmond Park after hours was technically trespassing, though she doubted the Royal Parks Police would materialise at half eleven on a Tuesday in November. The real concern was the deer. Red stags in rut season could gut a person, and she'd read enough local news to take that seriously. She listened. Wind through bare branches. The distant hum of the A307, thin as a wire. Nothing with hooves. She walked. The Heartstone pendant sat against her sternum beneath two layers of clothing, its usual faint warmth so constant she'd stopped noticing weeks ago. But as she picked her way through the gap between two fallen birches and the ground softened underfoot, the warmth sharpened. Not painful. Specific. Like a fingertip pressing into the notch of her collarbone. This was the right direction. Eva had texted her coordinates earlier that evening — no context, no explanation, just a dropped pin somewhere in the southwest corner of the park and a single message that read: *The grove. Midnight. Come alone.* Which was dramatic even for Eva, but Rory had learned to swallow her skepticism about three supernatural encounters ago. She'd texted back twice. Called once. Eva's phone went straight to voicemail, that automated voice that meant the device was dead or deliberately shut off. So here she was. The oaks appeared gradually, as if they'd been walking toward her while she wasn't looking. Old ones. Massive. Their trunks had a quality she hadn't expected from the descriptions she'd read — they didn't look like trees so much as columns of compressed darkness, their bark so deeply furrowed it seemed to breathe. She counted them as she passed between the first pair. One. Two. Another pair, narrower, and then a third, and the air changed. Temperature dropped. Not dramatically, not the theatrical cold snap of a ghost story, but a few degrees. Enough that her next exhale came out visible, a thin wisp she hadn't produced thirty seconds ago. The Heartstone pulsed. Rory stopped walking. The grove opened before her — a rough circle of cleared ground maybe forty feet across, ringed by those impossible oaks. Wildflowers grew here despite the season, pale things she couldn't name in the dark, their petals catching some ambient light that had no obvious source. No moon tonight. She'd checked. Overcast, new moon, the kind of sky that should have been a uniform black. But the flowers glowed faintly, and the ground between them held a luminous quality, as though frost had fallen in patterns just complex enough to suggest intention. "Eva?" Her voice didn't carry. That was the first wrong thing. Not an echo, not even the flat deadness of an enclosed space — her voice simply stopped, as if the air three feet from her mouth had a different density. A wall she couldn't see. She said it again. Louder. Same result. The word left her lips and went nowhere. The pendant's warmth spiked, then settled. Rory pressed her palm flat against it through her jacket and felt it thrum against her hand like a second heartbeat, faster than her own. She stepped into the grove. The flowers moved. Not from wind — there was no wind now, she realised. The branches above had gone still. Every branch. The oaks that had seemed to sway minutes earlier stood rigid, their canopy a lattice of black capillaries frozen against the grey nothing of the sky. But the flowers turned. Slowly. Dozens of pale heads rotating on their stems to face her, the way sunflowers track the sun except there was no sun and they were tracking her as she walked and each small white face turned with a precision that made her stomach clench. Rory stopped in the centre of the grove. Looked down. Looked around. No Eva. No sign anyone had been here — no footprints in the soft earth, no crushed flowers, no rubbish, nothing. Just the ring of oak and the ring of flowers and the silence that wasn't silence because now she could hear something. Low. Beneath the threshold of proper hearing. A vibration in her molars, in the small bones of her inner ear, the kind of sound that didn't travel through air but through ground, up through the soles of her boots and into the architecture of her skeleton. She pulled out her phone. No signal. Expected that much. But the clock read 23:47, which meant she'd been walking for — she did the maths — far longer than the distance warranted. She'd entered the park at 23:20. The coordinates were a ten-minute walk from the Sheen Gate. Not twenty-seven. The clock ticked to 23:48. Then back to 23:47. She watched it. 23:47. 23:47. 23:47. The colon between the numbers blinked its steady cadence, seconds passing, the minute refusing to advance. Rory pocketed the phone and turned slowly, scanning the perimeter. The oaks stood like sentinels, and between them the darkness had thickened into something almost physical. She could see the flowers, could see the ground, could see the bark of the nearest trunks. Beyond that, nothing. The park had been swallowed. London had been swallowed. Everything beyond the ring of trees had become a blackness so total it seemed painted on, a matte void that started precisely where the grove ended. "Okay," she whispered. A sound answered her. Not words. Not an echo. A creak — deep, structural, the sound a ship's hull makes under pressure. It came from the oak directly behind her. She turned. The trunk was wider than she remembered. Much wider. Its bark rippled, just once, the furrows deepening and resettling like the flex of a knuckle. The creak came again, from a different tree. Then another. Then all of them simultaneously, a chorus of deep wooden groans that rose and fell in a rhythm that sounded deliberate. Rhythmic. Communicative. Rory backed toward the centre of the grove. Her heel caught a root that hadn't been there before. She stumbled, caught herself, looked down. Roots had broken the surface of the clearing — pale tendrils the width of fingers, lacing across the ground in patterns that mirrored the frost she'd noticed earlier. They grew as she watched. Not fast. But perceptibly. Inching across the dark soil like slow worms, splitting and branching, weaving between the flower stems without disturbing them. The flowers still faced her. Every one. She pulled the pendant out from under her jacket. The crimson gemstone cast its own light now, a deep red glow that turned her fingers the colour of raw meat. It was hot. Not warm. Hot. The silver chain stung the back of her neck. She held the stone between thumb and forefinger and felt it vibrate — a frantic, arrhythmic pulse, nothing like its usual gentle warmth near Hel portals. This was alarm. This was the stone equivalent of a scream. "I hear you," she told it. Ridiculous. Talking to jewellery. But the alternative was silence, and the silence here had weight. It pressed against her eardrums. Movement at the edge of the grove. Her head snapped left. Between the two largest oaks, where the darkness hung like a curtain, something pale shifted. Not a deer. Not a person. A shape that suggested height — seven feet, eight — narrow, the proportions wrong in a way she couldn't immediately articulate. It stood just inside the boundary of the black, visible only as an absence of absence, a slightly lighter void against the total dark. It didn't move. Rory didn't breathe. Seconds passed. Her lungs burned. She inhaled, a shallow sip of air that tasted like iron and sap, and in the space between that breath and the next, the shape was gone. She turned. Found it again — different gap between different trees, closer. Same height. Same wrongness. Standing with its arms at its sides except the arms were too long, the elbows too low, the hands dangling at a height that suggested they would brush the ground if it walked. She could see no face. The head was a smooth oval of that pale non-colour, featureless, angled toward her the way the flowers angled toward her. Watching. Without eyes, watching. The roots beneath her feet pulsed. A single contraction, like a heartbeat transmitted through the earth. The flowers bobbed on their stems. Rory stepped backward. The pendant burned against her fingers. She dropped it and it swung on its chain, casting that red glow in a slow pendulum arc across the ground, and everywhere the light touched, the roots recoiled. Drew back. Just slightly. Just enough to notice. She grabbed the pendant again. Held it out like a lantern. The figure between the trees did not recoil. It tilted its head — a slow, mechanical inclination, as though it had seen something do this gesture once and was reproducing it from imperfect memory. Then it took a step into the grove. No sound. No footfall. It simply occupied space one foot closer than before, the pale contour of its form gaining no further detail in the flower-light. It had no features to resolve. The smoothness of its face was not a trick of darkness. It was its face. An expanse of skin — if it was skin — unbroken by any opening, any ridge, any mark. A second step. The roots near it surged upward, clustering around where it stood, reaching for it with blind vegetable yearning. Rory's phone buzzed in her pocket. She almost screamed. Bit the sound back, tasted copper. She fumbled it free with her left hand, the right still holding the Heartstone forward. The screen showed 23:47. Still 23:47. But a notification sat below the frozen clock. One new message. From Eva. *Don't look at its hands.* Rory's gaze had already started to drift downward before the meaning of the words registered, and she wrenched her eyes to the canopy above, to the locked branches, to the grey nothing of the sky. Her breath came fast and shallow. The sound of the roots growing filled the silence now — a wet, fibrous crackling, soil shifting, wildflowers bobbing as their stems were jostled by the spreading network below. The figure took a third step. She felt it more than saw it — a displacement of air, a change in the pressure against her skin, as if the grove had compressed by a fraction. She held the Heartstone higher. Its light spilled across the clearing in a wash of deep red. The figure stopped. From somewhere beyond the trees — far away: kilometres, maybe; or inches, maybe — came a sound she recognised. Church bells. The heavy iron clang of midnight ringing, distorted by distance or by whatever membrane separated this place from the London she knew. One toll. Two. She counted, and as she counted, the figure remained frozen in the red light, its head still tilted, its long arms hanging, the roots at its feet climbing its legs with silent devotion. Seven. Eight. Nine. The pendant's heat was unbearable. Her palm blistered. She held on. Ten. Eleven. The shape began to thin. To lose coherence. Its edges softened, bled into the dark behind it, as though something was erasing it stroke by stroke from the bottom up. The roots clutched at nothing. The flowers turned away one by one, returning to their neutral, skyward posture, and the sound beneath the ground — that deep subterranean vibration — faded to a murmur, then to memory. Twelve. The grove was empty. The darkness beyond the oaks had thinned to ordinary nighttime shadow, and through the gaps between the trunks she could see the dim orange stain of London's light pollution smeared across low clouds. Wind returned. Her hair moved. An oak branch creaked the way oak branches creak. Rory opened her hand. The pendant's glow had dimmed to its usual faint ember. A raw, wet blister covered the centre of her palm, perfect and circular, the size of a thumbnail. The shape of the Heartstone pressed into her skin like a brand. Her phone read 00:01. Time moved again. She looked at Eva's message. Read it once more. Then scrolled up and found nothing — no earlier texts, no coordinates, no dropped pin. The entire conversation history was blank except for those five words, and when she tapped the message to reply, the thread vanished. Eva's contact remained, but the message was gone, as if it had only ever existed long enough to be read. The crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist itched. An old, childhood ache, suddenly vivid, suddenly present, as though something in the grove had reached through her years and touched it. Rory walked. Fast. Between the oaks, through the gap in the fallen birches, across the open grassland toward Sheen Gate with her burned hand curled against her chest and the pendant swinging cold and small and ordinary against her sternum. She did not run. Running felt like it would constitute an admission of something she was not ready to admit. Behind her, the wildflowers in the grove bloomed on in their impossible season, their pale faces turned now toward the space the figure had occupied. Waiting, patient, for what might come next.
created_at"2026-02-24T22:40:18.131Z" 2/24/2026, 10:40:18 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags2
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences3
tagDensity0.667
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
82.20% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2247
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"deliberately"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count2
2
adverb"precisely"
count1
3
adverb"slightly"
count2
4
adverb"suddenly"
count2
highlights
0"deliberately"
1"slowly"
2"precisely"
3"slightly"
4"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
42.15% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2247
totalAiIsms26
found
0
word"warmth"
count4
1
word"furrowed"
count1
2
word"pulsed"
count2
3
word"complex"
count1
4
word"echo"
count2
5
word"stomach"
count1
6
word"silence"
count5
7
word"scanning"
count1
8
word"sentinels"
count1
9
word"rhythmic"
count1
10
word"pulse"
count1
11
word"weight"
count1
12
word"mechanical"
count1
13
word"footfall"
count1
14
word"resolve"
count1
15
word"yearning"
count1
16
word"perfect"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"furrowed"
2"pulsed"
3"complex"
4"echo"
5"stomach"
6"silence"
7"scanning"
8"sentinels"
9"rhythmic"
10"pulse"
11"weight"
12"mechanical"
13"footfall"
14"resolve"
15"yearning"
16"perfect"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences238
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences238
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"started to"
2"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences239
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen55
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords10
totalWords2272
ratio0.004
matches
0"The grove. Midnight. Come alone."
1"Don't look at its hands."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions4
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions47
wordCount2267
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity0.57
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Isabella1
Plantation1
London4
Park1
Royal1
Parks1
Police1
Tuesday1
November1
Heartstone5
Which1
Eva7
Rory13
Sheen2
Gate2
Hel1
Ridiculous1
One3
persons
0"Police"
1"Heartstone"
2"Which"
3"Eva"
4"Rory"
5"One"
places
0"Isabella"
1"Plantation"
2"London"
3"Park"
4"Royal"
5"November"
6"Sheen"
7"Hel"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences113
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"tasted like iron and sap, and in the spac"
1"felt like it would constitute an admiss"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.88
wordCount2272
matches
0"Not dramatically, not the theatrical cold snap of a ghost story, but a few degrees"
1"not the theatrical cold snap of a ghost story, but a few degrees"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences239
matches
0"Expected that much."
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs66
mean34.42
std29.99
cv0.871
sampleLengths
056
113
268
32
457
55
680
74
876
934
103
1195
121
1345
145
1510
1631
175
1897
1912
2089
2151
225
234
2422
2581
263
2757
2833
2980
307
3182
3226
3377
343
353
3632
3775
384
3922
4046
4111
4242
4365
4421
4544
465
475
4870
4935
97.89% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences238
matches
0"been swallowed"
1"been swallowed"
2"was gone"
3"were jostled"
4"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs354
matches
0"was technically trespassing"
1"wasn't looking"
2"were tracking"
3"was reproducing"
4"was erasing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount25
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences20
totalSentences239
ratio0.084
matches
0"The last dog walker had disappeared over Isabella Plantation's ridge twenty minutes ago, and the park had folded into itself the way only London green spaces could — swallowing every trace of the city beyond the tree line until the world shrank to grass and shadow and the ancient oaks standing black against a moonless sky."
1"Eva had texted her coordinates earlier that evening — no context, no explanation, just a dropped pin somewhere in the southwest corner of the park and a single message that read: *The grove."
2"Their trunks had a quality she hadn't expected from the descriptions she'd read — they didn't look like trees so much as columns of compressed darkness, their bark so deeply furrowed it seemed to breathe."
3"The grove opened before her — a rough circle of cleared ground maybe forty feet across, ringed by those impossible oaks."
4"Not an echo, not even the flat deadness of an enclosed space — her voice simply stopped, as if the air three feet from her mouth had a different density."
5"Not from wind — there was no wind now, she realised."
6"No sign anyone had been here — no footprints in the soft earth, no crushed flowers, no rubbish, nothing."
7"But the clock read 23:47, which meant she'd been walking for — she did the maths — far longer than the distance warranted."
8"A creak — deep, structural, the sound a ship's hull makes under pressure."
9"Roots had broken the surface of the clearing — pale tendrils the width of fingers, lacing across the ground in patterns that mirrored the frost she'd noticed earlier."
10"She held the stone between thumb and forefinger and felt it vibrate — a frantic, arrhythmic pulse, nothing like its usual gentle warmth near Hel portals."
11"A shape that suggested height — seven feet, eight — narrow, the proportions wrong in a way she couldn't immediately articulate."
12"Found it again — different gap between different trees, closer."
13"It tilted its head — a slow, mechanical inclination, as though it had seen something do this gesture once and was reproducing it from imperfect memory."
14"An expanse of skin — if it was skin — unbroken by any opening, any ridge, any mark."
15"The sound of the roots growing filled the silence now — a wet, fibrous crackling, soil shifting, wildflowers bobbing as their stems were jostled by the spreading network below."
16"She felt it more than saw it — a displacement of air, a change in the pressure against her skin, as if the grove had compressed by a fraction."
17"From somewhere beyond the trees — far away: kilometres, maybe; or inches, maybe — came a sound she recognised."
18"The flowers turned away one by one, returning to their neutral, skyward posture, and the sound beneath the ground — that deep subterranean vibration — faded to a murmur, then to memory."
19"Then scrolled up and found nothing — no earlier texts, no coordinates, no dropped pin."
98.40% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2247
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount94
adverbRatio0.04183355585224744
lyAdverbCount24
lyAdverbRatio0.010680907877169559
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences239
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences239
mean9.51
std9.91
cv1.042
sampleLengths
056
17
26
324
46
519
62
74
810
93
102
1123
1221
132
141
1510
165
1733
181
1921
204
212
2219
234
2415
252
261
2735
2810
291
301
3111
322
3315
3417
353
363
3721
3825
393
402
4114
4227
431
444
456
4630
475
484
491
54.24% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats17
diversityRatio0.3686440677966102
totalSentences236
uniqueOpeners87
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount6
totalSentences177
matches
0"Just the ring of oak"
1"Then back to 23:47."
2"Then all of them simultaneously,"
3"Just enough to notice."
4"Then it took a step"
5"Then scrolled up and found"
ratio0.034
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount46
totalSentences177
matches
0"She'd texted back twice."
1"Their trunks had a quality"
2"She counted them as she"
3"Her voice didn't carry."
4"She said it again."
5"She stepped into the grove."
6"She pulled out her phone."
7"She'd entered the park at"
8"She watched it."
9"She could see the flowers,"
10"It came from the oak"
11"Its bark rippled, just once,"
12"Her heel caught a root"
13"She stumbled, caught herself, looked"
14"They grew as she watched."
15"She pulled the pendant out"
16"It was hot."
17"She held the stone between"
18"she told it"
19"It pressed against her eardrums."
ratio0.26
92.77% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount130
totalSentences177
matches
0"The last dog walker had"
1"Rory killed the torch on"
2"Richmond Park after hours was"
3"The real concern was the"
4"The distant hum of the"
5"Nothing with hooves."
6"The Heartstone pendant sat against"
7"This was the right direction."
8"Eva had texted her coordinates"
9"She'd texted back twice."
10"Eva's phone went straight to"
11"The oaks appeared gradually, as"
12"Their trunks had a quality"
13"She counted them as she"
14"Another pair, narrower, and then"
15"The Heartstone pulsed."
16"Rory stopped walking."
17"The grove opened before her"
18"Wildflowers grew here despite the"
19"Her voice didn't carry."
ratio0.734
28.25% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences177
matches
0"To lose coherence."
ratio0.006
42.12% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences78
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"Eva's phone went straight to voicemail, that automated voice that meant the device was dead or deliberately shut off."
1"Wildflowers grew here despite the season, pale things she couldn't name in the dark, their petals catching some ambient light that had no obvious source."
2"The oaks that had seemed to sway minutes earlier stood rigid, their canopy a lattice of black capillaries frozen against the grey nothing of the sky."
3"Dozens of pale heads rotating on their stems to face her, the way sunflowers track the sun except there was no sun and they were tracking her as she walked and …"
4"Just the ring of oak and the ring of flowers and the silence that wasn't silence because now she could hear something."
5"A vibration in her molars, in the small bones of her inner ear, the kind of sound that didn't travel through air but through ground, up through the soles of her…"
6"Everything beyond the ring of trees had become a blackness so total it seemed painted on, a matte void that started precisely where the grove ended."
7"Then all of them simultaneously, a chorus of deep wooden groans that rose and fell in a rhythm that sounded deliberate."
8"The crimson gemstone cast its own light now, a deep red glow that turned her fingers the colour of raw meat."
9"It tilted its head — a slow, mechanical inclination, as though it had seen something do this gesture once and was reproducing it from imperfect memory."
10"An old, childhood ache, suddenly vivid, suddenly present, as though something in the grove had reached through her years and touched it."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags2
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences3
tagDensity0.667
leniency1
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.5
84.6003%