Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8X05GZBHV1HBVF4TAPSN90

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Duration:
1m 8s
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$0.077950
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Amazon Bedrock

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You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The pendant burned against Rory's sternum like a coal pressed to skin, and then the world folded. There was no doorway, no arch of light, no dramatic threshold. One moment she stood in the damp grass of Richmond Park with Nyx's shadow-hand gripping her elbow and Isolde's cool fingers laced through hers, and the next the ground buckled beneath her feet and she was fallingnot downward but sideways, through something that felt like bathwater and tasted like static on the back of her tongue. The Veil parted around them with a sound like tearing silk, and then it was done. Rory's knees hit soil. Warm soil. She pressed her palms flat and felt heat radiating up through rich, dark earth that smelled of turned compost and something sweeter underneath—overripe fruit, maybe, or honey left too long in the sun. She blinked, and the world assembled itself around her in pieces. The sky came first. Not a sky, really—a ceiling of light, amber and molten, as though the entire atmosphere had been steeped in whiskey. No sun that she could see, no clouds, just that vast warm glow stretching from horizon to horizon, casting everything beneath it in shades of gold and umber. It made her skin look honeyed. It made her shadow stretch long and soft behind her. "Breathe," came Nyx's voice, close to her ear—that strange whisper-on-wind quality that she'd slowly learned to parse from actual wind. "You need to breathe, Aurora." She sucked in air. It was thick. Not humid exactly, but dense with scent—layers upon layers of it. Roasting meat. Caramelized sugar. The bright green bite of fresh herbs. Something yeasty and warm, like bread just pulled from an oven. Her stomach clenched with sudden, violent hunger, and she pressed the back of her hand to her mouth until it passed. "Don't," Isolde said, already standing, already composed, her silver hair catching that amber light until it looked like spun copper. "The appetite is the first trap. A seed planted in the belly that grows if you feed it." "Brilliant. Love that for us." Rory pushed herself to her feet and brushed the dark soil from her jeans. The Heartstone pendant had quieted against her chest, its frantic pulse settling into a slow, steady throb—the rhythm of a sleeping heart. She cupped it through her shirt and felt the warmth of it, no longer painful but insistent, as if it recognized this place the way a compass recognizes north. They stood at the edge of a vineyard. It sprawled before them in rolling, impossible abundance—row after row of thick, gnarled vines heavy with fruit she didn't recognize. The grapes, if they were grapes, hung in clusters the size of her fist, their skins so dark they looked almost black, with a faint violet blush where the amber light caught them. Between the rows, the soil was dark and meticulously tended, and small channels of liquid ran in carved grooves at the base of each row. Rory crouched to look. The liquid was the color of claret, and it moved with a sluggish, almost syrupy quality. "Is that wine?" she asked. "It was, once," Nyx said. Their form had solidified in this place more than Rory had ever seen on Earth—edges sharper, the darkness of their body deeper, that faint violet glow in their eyes burning brighter against the golden air. They looked almost human here, and that unsettled her more than the alien sky. "Dymas irrigates with the thing it worships." Isolde moved ahead of them without waiting, her bare feet pressing into the soil without leaving a single mark. She paused at the nearest vine and tilted her head, lavender eyes narrowing as though listening to something in the wood. "The roots go deeper than they should," she murmured. "Down through the realm's floor and into something older." She withdrew her hand before touching the vine, fingers curling back to her palm. "We should not linger among growing things here. They are hungrier than they appear." Rory nodded and unshouldered her bag, checking by touch that the Fae blade was still secured in its leather wrap along the side pocket. The moonsilver was cold even through the leather—a biting, persistent chill that grounded her against the cloying warmth of the air. Isolde had pressed the dagger into her hands three days ago in the Grove, and Rory had nearly dropped it from the shock of its temperature alone. Now she found its coldness reassuring. A sliver of another world strapped to her hip, proof that not everything here played by Dymas's rules. They followed a path between the vineyard rows, moving deeper into the landscape. The vines grew taller as they walked—first waist-high, then shoulder-high, then arching overhead to form a canopy that filtered the amber light into dappled, shifting patterns on the ground. The fruit grew larger too, and stranger. Some clusters had split open, revealing flesh that was luminous and wet, veined with threads of gold. The smell intensified until it was almost a physical pressure against her sinuses—sweet and ripe and cloying, with a faint undercurrent of decay beneath it all, like fruit left too long on the branch. Something moved in the vines to their left. Rory stopped. Nyx stopped. Between them, a shape uncoiled from the dense foliage—not an animal, not a person, but something in between. It had the rough suggestion of a torso and limbs, but its body was a lattice of woven vine and root, and its face was a split fruit, pale flesh glistening, two dark seeds set where eyes should be. It regarded them with no expression, because it had no face capable of one, and then it sank back into the foliage with a wet rustle and was gone. "Keeper of the vine," Nyx said, in answer to the question Rory hadn't asked. "They tend the orchards and the fields. Helbound souls who traded form for purpose." "They chose that?" "Choice is a complicated word in Hel." Rory stared at the place where the thing had vanished. A single fruit hung where its head had been, already swelling with new growth, its skin flushed and taut. She turned away and kept walking. The vineyard ended at a ridge, and beyond it the world opened into a valley so vast and so dense with color that Rory's eyes struggled to take it all in. She stood at the edge and let it wash over her. Orchards filled the valley floor in geometric spirals, each ring a different species of tree—some bearing fruit like lanterns, glowing softly from within; others drooping under the weight of produce she had no name for, bulbous and ridged and furred and translucent. Between the orchards, gardens blazed with vegetation in shades she'd never seen in nature—deep arterial reds, incandescent yellows, blues so vivid they looked painted. Pathways of pale stone wound between them, and along those pathways figures moved: distant shapes carrying baskets, pushing carts, bending to harvest. At the center of the valley, rising from the convergence of all those spiraling rows, stood a structure. It was enormous—a palace or a hall, built from what appeared to be living wood and dark stone, its walls curved and organic, its roof a lattice of interwoven branches bearing a canopy of broad leaves the color of burnished bronze. Smoke rose from dozens of chimneys along its spine, and even at this distance Rory caught fragments of sound drifting up from it: the clatter of metal on metal, the roar of open flame, voices calling out in a language she almost recognized but couldn't quite place. "The Grand Kitchens," Isolde said. She stood beside Rory at the ridge's edge, her expression unreadable. "Where the feasts of Dymas are prepared. Every dish a work of art. Every ingredient grown from soil fed on hunger itself." She paused. "The food is extraordinary. That is the danger. One taste and the body remembers, and it will ache for that taste until the mind breaks trying to forget." "You've been here before," Rory said. It wasn't a question. Isolde's lavender eyes flickered. "A different path brought me here, in a different age. What I saw then still grows in the garden of my memory, and it blooms when I do not wish it to." She turned those pale eyes to Rory. "The answer you seek is in that hall. But the price of entry is always the same in Dymas—you must bring something to the table." "We didn't bring anything." "You brought yourself," Nyx said. They had drifted to the edge of the ridge, their incorporeal lower half trailing into mist where it met the warm updraft from the valley. They looked vast here, their shadow spreading wider than it should, drinking in the amber light. "In Dymas, a mortal body is a delicacy. Not to consume—to employ. Human senses, human creativity, human hunger. The master chefs of the Grand Kitchens were all mortal once. Prince Belphegor collects them the way your world collects fine art." Rory's hand drifted to the pendant. It pulsed once, warm and steady, as though affirming something she hadn't yet said aloud. "So I walk in there and, what, offer to cook?" "You walk in there," Isolde said, "and offer to taste. In Dymas, the truest currency is an honest palate. The chefs have been here so long they have forgotten what food means to the living. A mortal tongue that can still discern pleasure from compulsion—" She let the silence carry the rest. Rory looked down at the valley. At the spiraling orchards and the blazing gardens and the enormous hall with its bronze canopy and its smoking chimneys. She thought about the vine-keeper with its seed eyes and its borrowed body, and she thought about the wine running in channels through the soil, and she thought about the smell—God, the smell, working its way into her hindbrain, lighting up parts of her nervous system she hadn't known existed. She thought about Evan, and the way hunger could wear a person's name. She thought about the flat above Silas's bar, and Yu-Fei's kitchen, and the way a bowl of congee on a bad morning could feel like an anchor to something real. She understood hunger. She understood what it meant to want something so badly your ribs ached with it, and she understood what it meant to walk away from the table anyway. "Right," she said. She pulled the pendant out from beneath her shirt and let it rest against her collarbone, its crimson light pulsing in time with her heartbeat. She shifted the strap of her bag so the cold press of the Fae blade sat firm against her hip. "Then let's go be delicious." Nyx made a sound that might have been a laugh—a whisper of wind folding over itself. Isolde said nothing, but one corner of her mouth lifted, barely, before she began her descent into the valley, her bare feet finding purchase on stone and soil and leaving no trace of their passage. Rory followed her down into the amber dark, the warmth rising to meet her like an open mouth.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"that she'd slowly [slowly]"
dialogueSentences28
tagDensity0.536
leniency1
rawRatio0.067
effectiveRatio0.067
92.03% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1883
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"really"
1"slowly"
2"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
49.55% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1883
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"silk"
count1
1
word"whisper"
count2
2
word"stomach"
count1
3
word"pulse"
count1
4
word"throb"
count1
5
word"warmth"
count3
6
word"unsettled"
count1
7
word"chill"
count1
8
word"glistening"
count1
9
word"weight"
count1
10
word"structure"
count1
11
word"unreadable"
count1
12
word"flickered"
count1
13
word"pulsed"
count1
14
word"silence"
count1
15
word"could feel"
count1
highlights
0"silk"
1"whisper"
2"stomach"
3"pulse"
4"throb"
5"warmth"
6"unsettled"
7"chill"
8"glistening"
9"weight"
10"structure"
11"unreadable"
12"flickered"
13"pulsed"
14"silence"
15"could feel"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences94
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences94
filterMatches
0"look"
hedgeMatches
0"appeared to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences107
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen58
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1864
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions46
wordCount1543
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity1.17
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory18
Richmond1
Park1
Nyx7
Isolde8
Veil1
Heartstone1
Earth1
Fae2
Grove1
Dymas1
God1
Evan1
Silas1
Yu-Fei1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Nyx"
2"Isolde"
3"Veil"
4"Earth"
5"Dymas"
6"Evan"
7"Silas"
8"Yu-Fei"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Grove"
globalScore0.917
windowScore0.667
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences73
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"felt like bathwater and tasted like sta"
1"tasted like static on the back of her ton"
2"looked like spun copper"
3"as though listening to something in the wood"
4"quite place"
5"as though affirming something she hadn't yet said aloud"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches5
per1kWords2.682
wordCount1864
matches
0"not downward but sideways, through something"
1"Not humid exactly, but dense with scent"
2"no longer painful but"
3"not an animal, not a person, but something in between"
4"not a person, but something in between"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences107
matches
0"catching that amber"
1"touch that the"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs36
mean51.78
std32.45
cv0.627
sampleLengths
017
183
250
368
425
561
638
770
88
998
105
1161
1286
1396
14100
1598
1628
173
187
1935
2042
2188
22106
2368
2410
2568
264
2786
2821
2910
3052
3176
3274
3353
3451
3518
97.80% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences94
matches
0"been steeped"
1"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs245
matches
0"was falling"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount17
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences17
totalSentences107
ratio0.159
matches
0"One moment she stood in the damp grass of Richmond Park with Nyx's shadow-hand gripping her elbow and Isolde's cool fingers laced through hers, and the next the ground buckled beneath her feet and she was falling—not downward but sideways, through something that felt like bathwater and tasted like static on the back of her tongue."
1"She pressed her palms flat and felt heat radiating up through rich, dark earth that smelled of turned compost and something sweeter underneath—overripe fruit, maybe, or honey left too long in the sun."
2"Not a sky, really—a ceiling of light, amber and molten, as though the entire atmosphere had been steeped in whiskey."
3"\"Breathe,\" came Nyx's voice, close to her ear—that strange whisper-on-wind quality that she'd slowly learned to parse from actual wind."
4"Not humid exactly, but dense with scent—layers upon layers of it."
5"The Heartstone pendant had quieted against her chest, its frantic pulse settling into a slow, steady throb—the rhythm of a sleeping heart."
6"It sprawled before them in rolling, impossible abundance—row after row of thick, gnarled vines heavy with fruit she didn't recognize."
7"Their form had solidified in this place more than Rory had ever seen on Earth—edges sharper, the darkness of their body deeper, that faint violet glow in their eyes burning brighter against the golden air."
8"The moonsilver was cold even through the leather—a biting, persistent chill that grounded her against the cloying warmth of the air."
9"The vines grew taller as they walked—first waist-high, then shoulder-high, then arching overhead to form a canopy that filtered the amber light into dappled, shifting patterns on the ground."
10"The smell intensified until it was almost a physical pressure against her sinuses—sweet and ripe and cloying, with a faint undercurrent of decay beneath it all, like fruit left too long on the branch."
11"Between them, a shape uncoiled from the dense foliage—not an animal, not a person, but something in between."
12"Orchards filled the valley floor in geometric spirals, each ring a different species of tree—some bearing fruit like lanterns, glowing softly from within; others drooping under the weight of produce she had no name for, bulbous and ridged and furred and translucent."
13"Between the orchards, gardens blazed with vegetation in shades she'd never seen in nature—deep arterial reds, incandescent yellows, blues so vivid they looked painted."
14"It was enormous—a palace or a hall, built from what appeared to be living wood and dark stone, its walls curved and organic, its roof a lattice of interwoven branches bearing a canopy of broad leaves the color of burnished bronze."
15"She thought about the vine-keeper with its seed eyes and its borrowed body, and she thought about the wine running in channels through the soil, and she thought about the smell—God, the smell, working its way into her hindbrain, lighting up parts of her nervous system she hadn't known existed."
16"Nyx made a sound that might have been a laugh—a whisper of wind folding over itself."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1567
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"sweeter underneath—overripe fruit,"
adverbCount57
adverbRatio0.036375239310784936
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.005105296745373325
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences107
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences107
mean17.42
std12.41
cv0.712
sampleLengths
017
111
256
316
44
52
633
711
84
920
1028
116
1210
1320
145
154
163
1711
182
192
207
2111
2221
2320
2418
2519
2622
2729
288
2920
3033
3125
324
3316
345
355
3635
3714
387
3919
4021
419
4223
4314
4424
4521
4627
476
4818
4913
52.02% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.37383177570093457
totalSentences107
uniqueOpeners40
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences81
matches(empty)
ratio0
57.04% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount33
totalSentences81
matches
0"She pressed her palms flat"
1"She blinked, and the world"
2"It made her skin look"
3"It made her shadow stretch"
4"She sucked in air."
5"It was thick."
6"Her stomach clenched with sudden,"
7"She cupped it through her"
8"They stood at the edge"
9"It sprawled before them in"
10"Their form had solidified in"
11"They looked almost human here,"
12"She paused at the nearest"
13"She withdrew her hand before"
14"They followed a path between"
15"It had the rough suggestion"
16"It regarded them with no"
17"She turned away and kept"
18"She stood at the edge"
19"It was enormous—a palace or"
ratio0.407
34.07% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount69
totalSentences81
matches
0"The pendant burned against Rory's"
1"The Veil parted around them"
2"Rory's knees hit soil."
3"She pressed her palms flat"
4"She blinked, and the world"
5"The sky came first."
6"It made her skin look"
7"It made her shadow stretch"
8"She sucked in air."
9"It was thick."
10"The bright green bite of"
11"Something yeasty and warm, like"
12"Her stomach clenched with sudden,"
13"Isolde said, already standing, already"
14"Rory pushed herself to her"
15"The Heartstone pendant had quieted"
16"She cupped it through her"
17"They stood at the edge"
18"It sprawled before them in"
19"The grapes, if they were"
ratio0.852
61.73% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences81
matches
0"Now she found its coldness"
ratio0.012
30.08% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences57
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"One moment she stood in the damp grass of Richmond Park with Nyx's shadow-hand gripping her elbow and Isolde's cool fingers laced through hers, and the next the…"
1"She pressed her palms flat and felt heat radiating up through rich, dark earth that smelled of turned compost and something sweeter underneath—overripe fruit, m…"
2"She cupped it through her shirt and felt the warmth of it, no longer painful but insistent, as if it recognized this place the way a compass recognizes north."
3"She paused at the nearest vine and tilted her head, lavender eyes narrowing as though listening to something in the wood."
4"The vines grew taller as they walked—first waist-high, then shoulder-high, then arching overhead to form a canopy that filtered the amber light into dappled, sh…"
5"Some clusters had split open, revealing flesh that was luminous and wet, veined with threads of gold."
6"They looked vast here, their shadow spreading wider than it should, drinking in the amber light."
7"It pulsed once, warm and steady, as though affirming something she hadn't yet said aloud."
8"She thought about the vine-keeper with its seed eyes and its borrowed body, and she thought about the wine running in channels through the soil, and she thought…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences28
tagDensity0.357
leniency0.714
rawRatio0.1
effectiveRatio0.071
74.4996%