Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8X1TZ9WB9RJYXPG14M9GS8

Run Details

Model:
Aion 2.0
Duration:
1m 18s
Cost:
$0.008147
Provider:
AionLabs

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door to The Raven’s Nest swung shut behind her, cutting off the Soho street’s cacophony. Rory’s shoulders ached from the day’s deliveries, the ghost of a dozen cardboard boxes still pressing into her skin. She headed for the bar, her eyes adjusting to the familiar dimness, the smell of old wood and spilled whiskey. Then she saw him. He sat at a corner table, his back to the wall, studying a legal pad under the glow of a small brass lamp. A half-finished pint of ale sat beside a sleek leather briefcase. His hair was shorter, neater than she remembered, and the boyish softness of his face had hardened into clean, professional angles. But the way he tapped his pen against his bottom lip, a rapid, thoughtful beat, was pure Oliver Shaw. Her feet stopped moving. The floorboards seemed to tilt. Silas looked up from polishing a glass behind the bar. His hazel eyes flicked from her to the corner and back. A slight, almost imperceptible shake of his head. *Don’t.* But it was too late. Ollie glanced up, absently, as if sensing a draft. His gaze swept past her, then snapped back. The pen froze. His mouth opened, closed. “Rory?” The sound of her old nickname in his voice, that Cardiff lilt softened by a barrister’s precision, was a physical blow. She forced her legs to carry her forward. “Ollie.” “Bloody hell.” He stood, the chair scraping loudly. He was taller now, or maybe she’d just forgotten. He wore a charcoal suit that cost more than her monthly rent. “Aurora Carter. I don’t believe it.” “Small world.” Her own voice sounded flat, foreign. “What are you… I mean, how are you?” He moved as if to hug her, then stopped, his hands hovering awkwardly. He settled for gesturing to the empty chair opposite. “Please. Sit. Have a drink. My God, it’s been years.” Four years, three months, and approximately sixteen days. Not that she was counting. She slid into the chair, her delivery bag heavy on her lap. A shield. Silas appeared at the table, silent as a shadow. He placed a tumbler of amber liquid in front of her, no ice, then retreated without a word. Ollie watched him go, a faint line between his brows. “Friend of yours?” “The landlord.” She took a sip. Scotch, good stuff. Silas’s version of a lifeline. “Right.” Ollie sat back down, his eyes never leaving her face. They were the same warm brown, but sharper now. Assessorial. “You look… well.” “You look rich.” He barked a laugh, but it died quickly. “Still direct, I see. It’s the job. Corporate law. All show.” He gestured to his suit. “You… you left. Vanished. After third year. No one knew where you went. Professor Griffiths said you’d had a family emergency. Then your number disconnected.” “Something like that.” “I called. For months.” She traced the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist with her thumb. A childhood accident, he knew that story. He’d kissed it once, in the library stacks during finals, a silly, tender gesture. It felt like a memory belonging to another person. “I needed a change,” she said. “A change.” He leaned forward, his voice dropping. “Rory, people don’t just disappear. Not people like you. You were top of the class. You were going to chambers. You were…” He trailed off, his gaze finally taking in her clothes: the practical jeans, the scuffed trainers, the zip-up hoodie smelling faintly of sesame oil and exhaust fumes. “What are you doing now?” “This and that. Delivery work. Pays the bills.” His expression tightened, a mix of pity and confusion she couldn’t stand. “Delivery? For God’s sake, Rory. Your mind… you could argue circles around half the QCs in London.” “Maybe I got tired of arguing.” Silence hung between them, thick and uncomfortable. He took a long pull of his ale. “I’m in town for a merger,” he said, changing tack. “Staying at The Savoy. Fancy a room service bill that could feed a village. It’s absurd.” He was trying to be self-deprecating, to bridge the gap. “Do you ever see anyone? From the old days?” “No.” “Jessica got married. To that bloke from the rugby team, remember? Big wedding in the Vale. Sarah’s a crown prosecutor now in Bristol. She asks about you sometimes.” “Tell her I’m dead. It’s easier.” “Don’t say that.” The professional veneer cracked, revealing a flash of the earnest boy she’d known. “Rory, what happened? Was it Evan?” The name landed between them like a dropped glass. The ambient noise of the bar—the low murmur of other patrons, the clink of bottles—seemed to recede. “Don’t.” “I heard things, after you left. Whispers. That he was… volatile. I should have said something. Done something.” “You didn’t know.” “I suspected.” The admission was quiet, freighted with guilt. “I saw the way he looked at you sometimes. Like you were his. I thought it was just jealousy. Young love, you know? But then you were gone, and he was telling everyone you’d run off with some musician, that you were unstable…” She finished the Scotch, the heat doing nothing to melt the ice in her veins. “It doesn’t matter.” “It matters to me.” He reached across the table, his hand covering hers where it rested near her glass. His skin was warm, soft. A hand that held a gavel, not a delivery route. “Come to dinner. Tonight. We can talk properly. No past, just… catch up.” She looked at their hands. His signet ring, silver and heavy. Her own, bare except for the pale scar. The distance between those two hands was more than four years. It was a chasm of choices, of violence fled and dreams abandoned. The weight of it pressed down on her, a physical regret. “Ollie…” The door to the back room, hidden behind the bookshelf, clicked open. Silas emerged, his limp more pronounced. He didn’t look at her, but his posture was a coiled spring. He gave a single, slight nod towards the street. Trouble. She pulled her hand back. “I can’t.” “Why not?” Frustration edged his voice. “One dinner. For old times’ sake.” “Old times are gone.” She stood, swinging her bag onto her shoulder. “It was good to see you, Ollie. Really. But I have to go.” “Rory, wait.” He stood too, his chair toppling over with a crash that silenced the bar for a moment. All eyes turned to them. “Let me help you. However you need it. A job, a reference, a place to stay… anything.” His offer hung in the air, generous and suffocating. A ladder back to a life that no longer fit. A life that had, in its own way, almost killed her. She looked at his face, so full of a concern she didn’t want and couldn’t accept. She thought of the flat upstairs, of Yu-Fei’s kitchen, of Silas’s quiet lessons in the back room. It was a messy, shadowed life. But it was hers. “I don’t need saving,” she said, her voice low and final. “I just needed to leave.” She turned and walked towards the door. Behind her, she heard Silas’s calm voice. “Let her go, son.” She pushed out into the cool London evening, the green neon sign casting a sickly glow on the pavement. She didn’t look back. But as she rounded the corner, her phone buzzed in her pocket. A message from an unknown number. *He’s here. In London. He’s asking about you.* The words glowed on the screen. Evan. A different kind of cold seeped into her bones. She leaned against the brick wall, the rough texture scraping through her hoodie. The past wasn’t just regret. It was a hunter. And it had just found her scent.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"He stood too [too]"
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.34
leniency0.68
rawRatio0.059
effectiveRatio0.04
92.28% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1296
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
1"really"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found
0"Sarah"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
72.99% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1296
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"cacophony"
count1
1
word"familiar"
count1
2
word"flicked"
count1
3
word"lilt"
count1
4
word"traced"
count1
5
word"silence"
count1
6
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"cacophony"
1"familiar"
2"flicked"
3"lilt"
4"traced"
5"silence"
6"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences101
matches
0"d with guilt"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences101
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences133
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen50
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords9
totalWords1294
ratio0.007
matches
0"Don’t."
1"He’s here. In London. He’s asking about you."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions20
wordCount923
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity0.65
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Soho1
Oliver1
Shaw1
Cardiff1
Scotch2
Yu-Fei1
Silas6
London2
Ollie3
persons
0"Nest"
1"Oliver"
2"Shaw"
3"Yu-Fei"
4"Silas"
5"Ollie"
places
0"Raven"
1"Soho"
2"Cardiff"
3"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
81.51% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences73
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"as if sensing a draft"
1"felt like a memory belonging to another"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1294
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences133
matches
0"knew that story"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs55
mean23.53
std18.5
cv0.787
sampleLengths
055
14
274
39
435
525
629
71
835
98
1040
1127
1237
133
1414
1524
163
1749
183
194
2042
216
2262
238
2429
256
2615
2745
281
2928
306
3122
3226
331
3418
353
3652
3718
3847
3953
401
4139
421
437
4412
4525
4641
4730
4843
4916
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences101
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs151
matches
0"was counting"
1"was trying"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences133
ratio0.008
matches
0"The ambient noise of the bar—the low murmur of other patrons, the clink of bottles—seemed to recede."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount930
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount30
adverbRatio0.03225806451612903
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.010752688172043012
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences133
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences133
mean9.73
std7.37
cv0.757
sampleLengths
016
119
220
34
423
511
621
719
84
95
1010
1111
128
136
149
158
163
174
181
1921
208
211
228
239
2412
256
268
2721
289
2910
308
315
3212
332
349
3518
3610
373
386
393
405
4111
429
431
443
453
468
4716
4825
493
53.88% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.3684210526315789
totalSentences133
uniqueOpeners49
35.46% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences94
matches
0"Then she saw him."
ratio0.011
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount52
totalSentences94
matches
0"She headed for the bar,"
1"He sat at a corner"
2"His hair was shorter, neater"
3"Her feet stopped moving."
4"His hazel eyes flicked from"
5"His gaze swept past her,"
6"His mouth opened, closed."
7"She forced her legs to"
8"He stood, the chair scraping"
9"He was taller now, or"
10"He wore a charcoal suit"
11"Her own voice sounded flat,"
12"He moved as if to"
13"He settled for gesturing to"
14"She slid into the chair,"
15"He placed a tumbler of"
16"She took a sip"
17"They were the same warm"
18"He barked a laugh, but"
19"He gestured to his suit"
ratio0.553
13.19% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount84
totalSentences94
matches
0"The door to The Raven’s"
1"Rory’s shoulders ached from the"
2"She headed for the bar,"
3"He sat at a corner"
4"A half-finished pint of ale"
5"His hair was shorter, neater"
6"Her feet stopped moving."
7"The floorboards seemed to tilt."
8"Silas looked up from polishing"
9"His hazel eyes flicked from"
10"A slight, almost imperceptible shake"
11"Ollie glanced up, absently, as"
12"His gaze swept past her,"
13"The pen froze."
14"His mouth opened, closed."
15"The sound of her old"
16"She forced her legs to"
17"He stood, the chair scraping"
18"He was taller now, or"
19"He wore a charcoal suit"
ratio0.894
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences94
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences32
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
7.35% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"He stood, the chair scraping loudly"
1"own voice sounded flat, foreign"
2"He leaned, his voice dropping"
3"she said, her voice low and final"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.06
leniency0.12
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
81.2225%