Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8X5VWYN4Z9TATERN9VH17E

Run Details

Duration:
1m 29s
Cost:
$0.082300
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The rain came down in sheets, turning the pavement into a mirror of fractured neon and brake lights. Harlow Quinn ran. She'd spotted Herrera outside The Raven's Nest twenty minutes ago, standing beneath that sickly green glow of the bar's sign like he was waiting for someone who never showed. He'd clocked her almost immediately — she'd give him that. Most people didn't notice her in a crowd, not until she wanted them to. But he'd turned his head, and even through the rain and the thirty yards between them, she'd seen the recognition hit his face like a slap. Then he ran. Now she was three blocks north and gaining, her boots slapping through puddles that soaked her trousers to the knee. Herrera moved well for someone who wasn't law enforcement — quick lateral cuts through alleys, a vaulted fence she had to go around — but he wasn't trained for this. She was. Eighteen years of chasing people through London's capillary system of side streets and service alleys had mapped the city into her muscle memory. He went left on Chalk Farm Road. She went left on Chalk Farm Road, shaving the corner tight enough to scrape her shoulder against wet brick. There. Fifty yards ahead. Dark jacket, short curly hair plastered to his skull, something glinting at his throat as he passed under a streetlight. That medallion he always wore. Saint Christopher, patron saint of travelers. She'd noted it in her file on him — one of a dozen details she'd collected over the past four months, building a case against the clique piece by patient piece. Tomás Herrera. Twenty-nine. Former NHS paramedic, license revoked. Now running an unlicensed medical practice for people who, according to her informants, weren't entirely people. She didn't know what that meant yet, not really. She'd learned to stop asking certain questions after Morris. Quinn shook the thought loose. Not now. Herrera ducked right, disappearing into the mouth of an alley that ran behind a row of shuttered shops. She followed, drawing her torch from her jacket but keeping it off. The alley was narrow, reeking of bins and standing water, and she slowed her pace, listening. His footsteps had stopped. She pressed her back against the wall and edged forward. Rain streamed down her face, and she wiped it from her eyes with the heel of her hand. Her watch — old leather, the crystal fogged — read twenty past eleven. The alley dead-ended at a brick wall fifteen meters ahead. She could see that much in the ambient light bleeding from the street behind her. No Herrera. Quinn snapped the torch on. The beam cut through the dark, sweeping over wet concrete, a toppled recycling bin, a fire escape ladder that was rusted in its raised position. No one. She moved the light across the base of the wall and found a metal door, half-hidden behind a industrial skip. It was painted the same sooty black as the brick, nearly invisible. A padlock hung from its hasp — open, swinging gently. She listened. Beneath the percussion of rain on metal, she heard footsteps descending. Stairs. He'd gone underground. Quinn pulled the door open. Concrete steps led down into darkness, and a smell rose to meet her — old stone, damp earth, and something else. Something electric, like ozone before a storm, though that made no sense this far below ground. The stairwell was narrow enough that she had to angle her shoulders. Twenty steps down. Thirty. The walls changed from concrete to old Victorian tile, cream and green, cracked and missing in patches. She recognized it. London Underground tile. She was descending into one of the abandoned stations — there were dozens scattered beneath the city, sealed off and forgotten. Her torch beam found the bottom of the stairs and a short corridor that opened into a wider space. She killed the light and waited, letting her eyes adjust. From ahead came the murmur of voices, plural, and a warm amber glow that seeped around the corridor's bend like something alive. This wasn't what she'd expected. Quinn moved to the edge of the corridor and looked. The abandoned station opened before her like the nave of a cathedral, its vaulted ceiling arching high overhead, still bearing the ghostly outlines of old signage and route maps. But the platform had been transformed. Market stalls lined both sides, constructed from salvaged wood and draped fabric, their tables crowded with objects she couldn't identify from this distance. Glass jars filled with luminescent liquids. Bundles of dried plants she didn't recognize. Instruments that might have been surgical tools or might have been something else entirely. Dozens of people moved between the stalls, browsing, haggling, exchanging small packages. Lanterns hung from wires strung between old iron pillars, casting everything in that honeyed glow. An underground market. Beneath Camden. She'd heard rumors. Fragments from informants who'd clam up the moment she pushed for specifics. A black market that moved locations, that required some kind of token for entry, that dealt in things that had no business existing. She'd filed it under unsubstantiated, along with a growing collection of reports that stretched the limits of what she was willing to believe. Now here it was, sprawling and real and operating with the casual confidence of an institution. Herrera was down there. She'd watched him descend. But the crowd was dense enough to obscure him, and she was standing at the threshold of a space she didn't understand, with no backup, no warrant, and no weapon beyond a collapsible baton and eighteen years of bad decisions. Quinn pressed her back against the tile wall and breathed. Three years ago, DS Morris had followed a lead into a warehouse in Bermondsey. He'd gone alone because she'd told him to — she was tied up in court, it was supposed to be a simple recon, they'd hit it properly the next morning. He'd called her at eleven-fourteen p.m. She remembered the time because she'd been staring at the microwave clock when the phone rang. He'd said her name once, and then he'd said something she'd never been able to reconcile. Something about the walls. About the walls moving. His voice had been steady when he said it, which was worse than if he'd been screaming. The line went dead. They found his car outside the warehouse. They found his notebook on the ground floor, open to a page of notes in his careful handwriting. They never found Morris. She'd told herself for three years that there was a rational explanation. That the phone had distorted his words. That he'd been taken by people, not by whatever her imagination tried to conjure in the dark hours when she couldn't sleep. But the file stayed open on her desk, and the clique kept surfacing in her peripheral vision — Herrera, Silas and his bar, others she'd identified — all of them connected to cases that bent logic until it snapped. She looked at the market again. A woman at a nearby stall was selling what appeared to be teeth — hundreds of them, sorted by size into wooden trays, each one faintly glowing from within. A man in a long coat was examining a compass that spun in directions a compass shouldn't spin. Two teenagers huddled over something that moved in a glass terrarium, something with too many limbs. Quinn's hand went to the pocket where she kept her warrant card. Reflexive. Meaningless down here. She could turn around. Go up the stairs, back into the rain, file what she'd seen and come back with a team. That was procedure. That was safe. That was what she'd tell any junior officer to do, and she'd mean it, and she'd be right. But Herrera would be gone. The market would move — her informants had told her that much, though they'd never said where or when. The connection to the clique would dissolve like smoke, and she'd be back to fragments and rumors and a dead partner who'd been swallowed by something she couldn't name. She checked her watch again. Eleven twenty-seven. She thought about Morris steadily describing impossible things in the last moments anyone ever heard his voice. Quinn stepped into the market. The noise hit her first — a low, constant hum of commerce, voices in English and languages she didn't recognize, the clink of coins that didn't sound like any currency she carried. She kept to the edges, using the crowd for cover, letting her eyes sweep methodically from stall to stall. She was taller than most of the women here and a fair number of the men, which was a disadvantage; her salt-and-pepper crop was distinctive in a crowd of hoods and hats. She hunched her shoulders, turned up her collar, and moved. The stalls blurred into a fever inventory. Bottles of ink that seemed to write by themselves, tracing slow spirals inside their glass. A rack of knives with blades that shimmered between solid and translucent. A birdcage containing no bird, only a small, persistent darkness that chirped. She cataloged everything with the detached precision of an evidence log, refusing to let any of it slow her down. There would be time to be afraid later. There was always time for that. She spotted Herrera near the far end of the platform, past what had once been the station's ticket hall. He was standing at a stall draped in dark cloth, speaking rapidly to a vendor she couldn't see clearly — a figure seated behind a curtain of hanging beads who handed him a small package wrapped in brown paper. Herrera's free hand went to the scar on his left forearm, rubbing it absently the way he always did when he was nervous. She'd observed the habit through binoculars, through car windows, through the rain-streaked glass of The Raven's Nest. She knew his tells better than he did. He tucked the package inside his jacket and turned. Their eyes met across forty feet of lantern-lit market. For a moment, neither of them moved. The crowd flowed between them like water around two stones. Herrera's face cycled through surprise, calculation, and something she hadn't expected — concern. Not for himself. He was looking at her the way a paramedic looks at someone who's walked into traffic without seeing the bus. "You shouldn't be here," he said. He didn't shout it. The market was loud enough that it should have been impossible to hear him at this distance, but somehow his voice carried, clear and low and urgent. Quinn started toward him. He didn't run. That surprised her too. He stood his ground, one hand pressed against the package beneath his jacket, the Saint Christopher medallion catching the lamplight at his throat. Up close, she could see the rain still glistening on his skin, the olive tone washed pale, his warm brown eyes tracking past her to the crowd behind. Looking for something. Looking for someone. "Tomás Herrera," she said. She kept her voice even, professional, though her heart was running somewhere north of a hundred and twenty. "I have questions about your involvement with—" "Not here." He cut her off with a shake of his head. "Detective, listen to me. You came in without a token." "A what?" "A bone token. It's required. It marks you as — " He stopped, searching for the right word. "Permitted. Without one, certain people in this market can tell you don't belong. And they've already noticed." She didn't look behind her. She wanted to. Every instinct screamed at her to check her six, to find the threat he was describing, but she held his gaze because looking away now meant losing the only advantage she had, which was the appearance of control. "I'm a police officer," she said. "That's exactly the problem." Herrera's hand came off the package and closed gently around her elbow, trying to steer her back toward the corridor she'd entered from. His grip was careful, practiced. Paramedic's hands. "Please. I will answer your questions. All of them. But not here, and not now. Right now we need to leave before—" Something shifted in the quality of the light. The lanterns dimmed, not flickering, not going out, but pulling inward, as though the flames were retreating from something. The crowd noise dropped by half. Quinn felt the hairs rise on her forearms under her soaked jacket. She looked. At the far end of the platform, figures were moving toward them. Three of them, walking in a formation that Quinn recognized as tactical — spaced, deliberate, covering angles. They wore no uniforms, but they moved like people who didn't need them. The crowd parted ahead of them without being asked. "Too late," Herrera breathed. He released her elbow. His hand went to the medallion at his throat and he gripped it hard, knuckles whitening, as though drawing strength from it. Then he looked at her with those steady, frightened eyes and said the thing she'd been dreading since she set foot on the stairs. "Detective Quinn, what do you know about what's really in this city?" The three figures kept coming. The lanterns kept dimming. And Harlow Quinn, eighteen years decorated, sharp-jawed and soaked to the bone, standing in an impossible market beneath the streets of Camden, realized she was about to find out.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags7
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences13
tagDensity0.538
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
90.97% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2214
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"really"
count2
1
adverb"gently"
count2
highlights
0"really"
1"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
75.16% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2214
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"fractured"
count1
1
word"glinting"
count1
2
word"footsteps"
count2
3
word"crystal"
count1
4
word"electric"
count1
5
word"constructed"
count1
6
word"tracing"
count1
7
word"shimmered"
count1
8
word"cataloged"
count1
9
word"glistening"
count1
highlights
0"fractured"
1"glinting"
2"footsteps"
3"crystal"
4"electric"
5"constructed"
6"tracing"
7"shimmered"
8"cataloged"
9"glistening"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences176
matches
0"was nervous"
94.16% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences176
filterMatches
0"watch "
1"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"appeared to"
2"seemed to"
3"started to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences182
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen40
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2234
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions20
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions54
wordCount2135
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity0.61
worstName"Herrera"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Quinn12
Herrera13
Raven2
Nest2
London2
Chalk2
Farm2
Road2
Christopher2
Morris4
Victorian1
Underground1
Camden2
Bermondsey1
Silas1
English1
Saint2
Harlow2
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Herrera"
2"Raven"
3"Christopher"
4"Morris"
5"Camden"
6"Silas"
7"Saint"
8"Harlow"
places
0"London"
1"Chalk"
2"Farm"
3"Road"
4"Bermondsey"
5"English"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences115
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"ink that seemed to write by themselves, tracing slow spirals inside their glass"
1"as though drawing strength from it"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.895
wordCount2234
matches
0"not flickering, not going out, but pulling inward, as though the flames were retreating from so"
1"not going out, but pulling inward, as though the flames were retreating from so"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences182
matches
0"see that much"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs51
mean43.8
std34.33
cv0.784
sampleLengths
021
179
23
3101
466
542
67
750
866
92
1074
1117
12102
1351
145
1510
16112
175
1877
1948
2010
21140
2280
2369
2416
2546
2653
2724
285
2993
3080
31106
329
339
3453
3537
364
3764
3829
3922
402
4135
4246
436
4456
4545
462
4751
4854
4912
91.31% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount7
totalSentences176
matches
0"was rusted"
1"was painted"
2"been transformed"
3"was tied"
4"was supposed"
5"been taken"
6"been swallowed"
7"being asked"
0.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount12
totalVerbs366
matches
0"was waiting"
1"was descending"
2"was willing"
3"was standing"
4"was selling"
5"was examining"
6"was standing"
7"was looking"
8"was running"
9"was describing"
10"were retreating"
11"were moving"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount18
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences16
totalSentences182
ratio0.088
matches
0"He'd clocked her almost immediately — she'd give him that."
1"Herrera moved well for someone who wasn't law enforcement — quick lateral cuts through alleys, a vaulted fence she had to go around — but he wasn't trained for this."
2"She'd noted it in her file on him — one of a dozen details she'd collected over the past four months, building a case against the clique piece by patient piece."
3"Her watch — old leather, the crystal fogged — read twenty past eleven."
4"A padlock hung from its hasp — open, swinging gently."
5"Concrete steps led down into darkness, and a smell rose to meet her — old stone, damp earth, and something else."
6"She was descending into one of the abandoned stations — there were dozens scattered beneath the city, sealed off and forgotten."
7"He'd gone alone because she'd told him to — she was tied up in court, it was supposed to be a simple recon, they'd hit it properly the next morning."
8"But the file stayed open on her desk, and the clique kept surfacing in her peripheral vision — Herrera, Silas and his bar, others she'd identified — all of them connected to cases that bent logic until it snapped."
9"A woman at a nearby stall was selling what appeared to be teeth — hundreds of them, sorted by size into wooden trays, each one faintly glowing from within."
10"The market would move — her informants had told her that much, though they'd never said where or when."
11"The noise hit her first — a low, constant hum of commerce, voices in English and languages she didn't recognize, the clink of coins that didn't sound like any currency she carried."
12"She was taller than most of the women here and a fair number of the men, which was a disadvantage; her salt-and-pepper crop was distinctive in a crowd of hoods and hats."
13"He was standing at a stall draped in dark cloth, speaking rapidly to a vendor she couldn't see clearly — a figure seated behind a curtain of hanging beads who handed him a small package wrapped in brown paper."
14"Herrera's face cycled through surprise, calculation, and something she hadn't expected — concern."
15"Three of them, walking in a formation that Quinn recognized as tactical — spaced, deliberate, covering angles."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2127
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"sweeping over wet concrete,"
adverbCount51
adverbRatio0.023977433004231313
lyAdverbCount19
lyAdverbRatio0.008932769158439116
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences182
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences182
mean12.27
std9.13
cv0.744
sampleLengths
018
13
229
310
414
526
63
720
830
92
1023
117
1219
131
143
1520
165
176
1831
192
201
215
2216
239
249
255
262
2718
2812
2916
304
3110
3218
3313
3410
3515
362
375
3825
392
4020
4112
4210
432
4411
451
463
475
4821
4916
49.08% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats19
diversityRatio0.35714285714285715
totalSentences182
uniqueOpeners65
42.46% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences157
matches
0"Then he ran."
1"Then he looked at her"
ratio0.013
72.23% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount58
totalSentences157
matches
0"She'd spotted Herrera outside The"
1"He'd clocked her almost immediately"
2"He went left on Chalk"
3"She went left on Chalk"
4"She'd noted it in her"
5"She didn't know what that"
6"She'd learned to stop asking"
7"She followed, drawing her torch"
8"His footsteps had stopped."
9"She pressed her back against"
10"Her watch — old leather,"
11"She could see that much"
12"She moved the light across"
13"It was painted the same"
14"He'd gone underground."
15"She recognized it."
16"She was descending into one"
17"Her torch beam found the"
18"She killed the light and"
19"She'd heard rumors."
ratio0.369
74.65% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount121
totalSentences157
matches
0"The rain came down in"
1"Harlow Quinn ran."
2"She'd spotted Herrera outside The"
3"He'd clocked her almost immediately"
4"Herrera moved well for someone"
5"He went left on Chalk"
6"She went left on Chalk"
7"That medallion he always wore."
8"Saint Christopher, patron saint of"
9"She'd noted it in her"
10"She didn't know what that"
11"She'd learned to stop asking"
12"Quinn shook the thought loose."
13"Herrera ducked right, disappearing into"
14"She followed, drawing her torch"
15"The alley was narrow, reeking"
16"His footsteps had stopped."
17"She pressed her back against"
18"Rain streamed down her face,"
19"Her watch — old leather,"
ratio0.771
95.54% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences157
matches
0"Now she was three blocks"
1"Now running an unlicensed medical"
2"Now here it was, sprawling"
ratio0.019
7.94% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences90
technicalSentenceCount17
matches
0"Now running an unlicensed medical practice for people who, according to her informants, weren't entirely people."
1"The alley was narrow, reeking of bins and standing water, and she slowed her pace, listening."
2"The beam cut through the dark, sweeping over wet concrete, a toppled recycling bin, a fire escape ladder that was rusted in its raised position."
3"From ahead came the murmur of voices, plural, and a warm amber glow that seeped around the corridor's bend like something alive."
4"She'd filed it under unsubstantiated, along with a growing collection of reports that stretched the limits of what she was willing to believe."
5"His voice had been steady when he said it, which was worse than if he'd been screaming."
6"A man in a long coat was examining a compass that spun in directions a compass shouldn't spin."
7"Two teenagers huddled over something that moved in a glass terrarium, something with too many limbs."
8"The connection to the clique would dissolve like smoke, and she'd be back to fragments and rumors and a dead partner who'd been swallowed by something she could…"
9"The noise hit her first — a low, constant hum of commerce, voices in English and languages she didn't recognize, the clink of coins that didn't sound like any c…"
10"She was taller than most of the women here and a fair number of the men, which was a disadvantage; her salt-and-pepper crop was distinctive in a crowd of hoods …"
11"A rack of knives with blades that shimmered between solid and translucent."
12"A birdcage containing no bird, only a small, persistent darkness that chirped."
13"He was standing at a stall draped in dark cloth, speaking rapidly to a vendor she couldn't see clearly — a figure seated behind a curtain of hanging beads who h…"
14"He was looking at her the way a paramedic looks at someone who's walked into traffic without seeing the bus."
15"The lanterns dimmed, not flickering, not going out, but pulling inward, as though the flames were retreating from something."
16"His hand went to the medallion at his throat and he gripped it hard, knuckles whitening, as though drawing strength from it."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags7
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
73.08% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Herrera breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences13
tagDensity0.308
leniency0.615
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.154
82.0190%