Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ94H7SA5AM3NJQH7AS44WA7

Run Details

Duration:
28.1s
Cost:
$0.013672
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The biting chill hit Harlow Quinn first, a living thing that clung to the damp air and gnawed at the exposed skin above her collar. It wasn't the usual clammy cold of London’s abandoned subterranean spaces; this was a colder, lonelier kind of chill, a prickle beneath the skin that whispered of unquiet things. She stepped off the temporary wooden ramp, the soles of her regulation boots crunching on something gritty and uneven. Above, the distant thrum of Camden still bled through the reinforced concrete, a muted, constant hum, but down here, it might as well have been another city entirely. The air tasted of ozone and damp earth, faint notes of something metallic and cloying underneath. “Mind your footing, Detective,” a uniformed officer murmured, his breath pluming white. Harlow nodded, her gaze already sweeping the cavernous space. This wasn’t just an abandoned Tube station. Ribbons of crime scene tape, stark yellow against the grimy brickwork, crisscrossed a sprawling, chaotic scene. It looked like an exploded curiosity shop, but one where the curiosities whispered of rituals and dark arts rather than forgotten histories. Stalls, some mere planks on trestles, others more elaborate carved affairs, lay overturned. Glass shards glittered under the harsh glare of tactical lights. She saw glinting metal, strange, dried herbs, vials filled with iridescent liquids, and objects she couldn't begin to identify – jagged bone talismans, intricate clockwork mechanisms that seemed to pulse faintly, masks carved from what looked suspiciously like petrified wood. This was the Veil Market. Her intel had been frustratingly vague, hinting at an ‘unconventional’ scene. That was a woeful understatement. Her sharp jaw tightened. Eighteen years on the force, and Harlow Quinn prided herself on seeing patterns, on the meticulous logic of police work. But three years ago, logic had failed her. DS Morris, gone. A gap in the world that no police report could fill. A ghost in her periphery, forever making her second-guess everything she thought she knew. She pushed the memory down, a familiar, unwelcome guest. Focus. The blue strobes of forensic lights pulsed near the centre of the mess, throwing long, dancing shadows that made the scattered artifacts seem to writhe. A cluster of officers and technicians worked with grim efficiency around a central point, their hushed voices barely carrying above the low drone of portable generators. Harlow moved with military precision, her 5'9" frame cutting a path through the debris. Her salt-and-pepper hair, closely cropped, felt cold against her scalp. She checked the worn leather watch on her left wrist. Just before midnight. “Detective Quinn.” Her head snapped up. Eva Kowalski stood beyond the preliminary tape, not with the forensics team, but off to the side, already examining a chalk diagram scrawled on the concrete floor. Her fiery red curls, usually a vibrant contrast to the urban grey, seemed muted under the harsh lights. Round glasses perched on her freckled nose, and a worn leather satchel full of books was slung over her shoulder. She looked, as always, both entirely out of place and perfectly at ease. “Kowalski,” Harlow acknowledged, her voice clipped. "What the hell is this?" Eva pushed her glasses up her nose, her green eyes wide. “Isn’t it obvious? It’s a market. Or what’s left of one. And,” she gestured vaguely towards the activity, “very possibly, a ritual.” Harlow skirted an overturned table laden with strange, segmented spheres. “A ritual gone wrong, I assume.” Eva considered this, tucking a strand of red hair behind her left ear – a nervous habit Harlow had observed countless times. “Or perhaps, Detective, a ritual gone *right* and then interrupted.” Harlow simply grunted. She walked past Eva, her gaze fixed on the body. He lay splayed on the concrete, a man in his late thirties, dressed in unremarkable jeans and a hooded top. His eyes were wide open, glazed with a terror so profound it seemed etched into the very fibres of his being. Not a scratch on him. No blood. No visible trauma. But the expression… the raw, visceral fear visible on that pale face made Harlow’s stomach clench. It was a look she’d seen too many times. A look burned into her memory from her last case with Morris. “Uniforms reported him, what? Two hours ago?” Harlow asked, kneeling carefully, always a cop, assessing. “A commuter, they think,” Eva supplied, her voice soft. “Found him when he stumbled through an access tunnel, thought it was a shortcut. Didn’t expect… this.” Harlow ignored the comment, focusing on the basics. She donned latex gloves. His skin was cold, waxy. No pulse. Rigor mortis hadn’t fully set in yet. She checked his hands. No defensive wounds. No signs of struggle. His clothes were clean, uncreased. He hadn’t fought. He hadn’t even fallen gracefully. He looked like he’d been dropped. “Forensics find anything?” “Trace elements, mostly,” Eva replied, moving closer. “Ozone, a faint coppery tang, not blood. And some… very peculiar electromagnetic fluctuations. Not natural. Not man-made, not precisely.” Harlow didn't need Eva to tell her about the cold spots that seemed to drift like unseen currents, or the way the hair on her arms prickled, hinting at an unseen charge in the air. This wasn't a normal crime scene, but she wouldn’t let Eva’s occult lingo distract her from the facts. “Show me the ritual,” Harlow said, rising. Eva pointed to the chalk sigils on the ground. An elaborate circle, intricate lines, symbols that looked both ancient and utterly alien. Within the circle, a small, dark stain, like dried oil, and a scattering of petrified flowers. “A containment circle, perhaps,” Eva theorized. “Or a summoning array. See the resonance? It suggests a strong energetic discharge.” She gestured to the surrounding debris. “The market was clearly active. Then this. Whoever was here… they were prepared for something significant.” Harlow circled the sigils, her gaze sweeping every detail. “The chalk is too clean,” she observed, her brown eyes narrowing. “No smudging. No dust disturbed in the immediate vicinity of the lines.” She knelt again, running a gloved finger along the pristine edge of one symbol. “If there was a struggle, if something was powerful enough to overturn all this,” she gestured to the scattered stalls, “then why are these lines perfect?” Eva paused, her brow furrowed. “Perhaps the incident occurred *within* the circle, or around it, but the chalk was laid afterwards? As a… marking?” “Or,” Harlow countered, her voice low, “the chalk was laid, the ritual performed, and then everything else happened. But the victim isn’t *in* the circle. He’s outside it. And these aren’t *his* marks. No signs he wrote them, or interacted with them.” She pointed to a faint shimmer in the air near the chalk. “This cold is stronger here, but it doesn’t feel like it originated *from* here.” She looked at the victim again. The terror. The absence of wounds. It clicked with something in her memory, a fragment of a conversation she’d overheard years ago, dismissed as urban legend. People could die of fear. Not from a heart attack, but from pure, unadulterated terror, a shock to the system so profound it simply… stopped. Harlow scanned the clutter on the ground. Broken earthenware, desiccated roots, shiny baubles. Her gaze snagged on something partially obscured by an overturned alchemical retort. A small, brass object. It had a strange verdigris patina, almost like ancient rust, and the casing was etched with tiny, precise sigils. It glinted dully under the forensic lights. She picked it up carefully, the metal surprisingly heavy in her hand. It was a compass. But the needle wasn’t pointing north. Instead, it quivered slightly, twitching with an almost magnetic pull, always settling on a specific, dark corner of the tunnel, just beyond one of the chalk sigils, where the light faded into blackness. An untouched section of the old platform, swallowed by shadow. “What’s this?” Harlow asked, holding it out to Eva. Eva’s eyes lit up, a spark of professional interest overriding her earlier theories. “Oh! A Veil Compass. Rare. Crafted by a Shade artisan, I believe. They’re attuned to supernatural energy. Points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal, or significant nexus of such. I’ve only read about them.” Harlow looked from the compass to the dark corner it indicated, then back to the victim. “So it points toward supernatural convergence.” “That’s the theory,” Eva confirmed, adjusting her glasses. “Though I’ve never seen one in action before.” “It’s pointing *there*,” Harlow repeated, gesturing with the compass toward the inky blackness. “Not at the body. Not at these — whatever you called them — containment or summoning sigils. It’s pointing away. Into the dark.” A new interpretation began to form, tightening the loose threads of the scene. The chill. The smell. The lack of struggle. The perfect sigils, seemingly untouched by the chaos. The compass. “The victim wasn’t involved in the ritual, Eva,” Harlow stated, her voice taking on a harder edge. “He wasn’t the target, and he wasn’t the one doing the summoning. Look at him. Ordinary. Nothing about him screams ‘occult practitioner’. He’s a civilian. A commuter, you said.” Eva frowned, her earlier confidence wavering. “So, an accident?” “No,” Harlow said, shaking her head. “This wasn’t an accident. This was a consequence. The clean sigils – they *worked*. Whatever they were meant to hold, they held it. For a time.” She looked at the compass, its needle still steadfastly pointing into the darkness. “But whatever was summoned, or whatever ritual was performed… it wasn't here. Not where he died. It was *there*,” she gestured to the shadowy tunnel entrance. “The compass points to a convergence point. A rift. A portal. Or, in this case, a successful summoning.” She walked slowly towards the indicated spot, Eva trailing behind her. The cold intensified with every step. The air grew heavy, like static electricity before a storm. In the gloom, the tunnel wall looked scorched, as if by something that had ripped through it. There was a faint, almost invisible residue clinging to its surface, like powdered charcoal, but it hummed with an unnatural energy. “This is where something *came through*,” Harlow said, her voice barely a whisper. “Or perhaps where it *left*. And the victim…” She turned back, her gaze sweeping the entire scene, piecing it together. “He wandered in. A shortcut. He saw it. He wasn’t involved in the ritual. He was a witness. He saw whatever it was burst out of there, moving quickly. Something profoundly… terrifying.” The overturned stalls, the shattered goods – not from a struggle with the victim, but from the uncontrolled passage of something else. Something large, fast, and powerful. Something that moved and left behind a wake of psychic dread and physical disruption. “The sigils,” Harlow continued, gesturing back to the chalk lines, “they were to *contain* whatever was summoned. But it broke free. Or it was let free. And whatever it was, it didn’t inflict physical wounds. It just… scared him to death.” Her gaze found Eva’s. “He looked into its face, Eva. And his heart simply stopped.” Eva looked from the scorched wall to the compass, then back to the deceased. Her green eyes were wide, suddenly seeing with new understanding. “A spectral assault,” she breathed, but this time with a grim certainty. “Not a failed ritual, but a successful summoning… and an escape. The ghost echo I sensed. It wasn't lingering. It was passing through. Moving too quickly.” Harlow nodded, the grim puzzle clicking into place. The inconsistencies made a new kind of sense, a terrible, supernatural sense. The crime wasn’t just a homicide; it was a consequence, an aftermath. Whatever had been summoned, whatever had caused such terror, was no longer in the market. It was out there in London, and its trail was fresh. Just like Morris and the unexplained three years ago. The familiar chill had nothing to do with the subterranean air.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags31
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"I’ve only [only]"
dialogueSentences47
tagDensity0.66
leniency1
rawRatio0.032
effectiveRatio0.032
67.09% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1975
totalAiIsmAdverbs13
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count3
2
adverb"carefully"
count2
3
adverb"precisely"
count1
4
adverb"utterly"
count1
5
adverb"slightly"
count1
6
adverb"slowly"
count1
7
adverb"quickly"
count2
8
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"very"
2"carefully"
3"precisely"
4"utterly"
5"slightly"
6"slowly"
7"quickly"
8"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
11.39% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1975
totalAiIsms35
found
0
word"chill"
count4
1
word"stark"
count1
2
word"chaotic"
count1
3
word"glinting"
count1
4
word"intricate"
count2
5
word"pulse"
count2
6
word"familiar"
count2
7
word"pulsed"
count1
8
word"dancing"
count1
9
word"profound"
count2
10
word"etched"
count2
11
word"stomach"
count1
12
word"resonance"
count1
13
word"pristine"
count1
14
word"perfect"
count2
15
word"furrowed"
count1
16
word"scanned"
count1
17
word"quivered"
count1
18
word"magnetic"
count1
19
word"wavering"
count1
20
word"gloom"
count1
21
word"whisper"
count1
22
word"shattered"
count1
23
word"spectral"
count1
24
word"echo"
count1
25
word"aftermath"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"stark"
2"chaotic"
3"glinting"
4"intricate"
5"pulse"
6"familiar"
7"pulsed"
8"dancing"
9"profound"
10"etched"
11"stomach"
12"resonance"
13"pristine"
14"perfect"
15"furrowed"
16"scanned"
17"quivered"
18"magnetic"
19"wavering"
20"gloom"
21"whisper"
22"shattered"
23"spectral"
24"echo"
25"aftermath"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences123
matches(empty)
84.79% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences123
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"begin to"
2"seem to"
3"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences129
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen101
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans11
markdownWords12
totalWords1981
ratio0.006
matches
0"right"
1"within"
2"in"
3"his"
4"from"
5"there"
6"worked"
7"there"
8"came through"
9"left"
10"contain"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions20
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions59
wordCount1625
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity1.42
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Harlow23
Quinn2
London2
Camden1
Tube1
Veil2
Market1
Morris3
Kowalski1
Eva18
Didn1
See1
Compass1
Shade1
Look1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Camden"
3"Morris"
4"Kowalski"
5"Eva"
6"Look"
places
0"London"
1"Market"
2"Compass"
globalScore0.792
windowScore0.667
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences63
glossingSentenceCount7
matches
0"looked like an exploded curiosity shop, b"
1"mechanisms that seemed to pulse faintly, masks carved from what looked suspiciously like petrified wood"
2"seemed muted under the harsh lights"
3"seemed etched into the very fibres of his being"
4"looked like he’d been dropped"
5"spots that seemed to drift like unseen currents, or the way the hair on her arms prickled, hinting at an unseen charge in the air"
6"erfect sigils, seemingly untouched by the ch"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords2.019
wordCount1981
matches
0"not with the forensics team, but off to the side, already examining a chalk diagram scrawled"
1"Not from a heart attack, but from pure, unadulterated terror, a shock to the system so pr"
2"not from a struggle with the victim, but from the uncontrolled passage of something else"
3"Not a failed ritual, but a successful summoning…"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences129
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs46
mean43.07
std26.87
cv0.624
sampleLengths
054
163
212
3117
421
560
610
751
837
92
1082
1111
1233
1316
1432
15101
1615
1726
1856
193
2026
2153
227
2338
2441
2572
2624
2768
2857
2955
3065
319
3248
3322
3416
3536
3631
3746
389
3989
4065
4165
4241
4356
4462
4578
85.29% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount7
totalSentences123
matches
0"been dropped"
1"were prepared"
2"was etched"
3"attuned"
4"were meant"
5"was summoned"
6"was performed…"
7"been summoned"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs271
matches
0"wasn’t pointing"
1"wasn't lingering"
2"was passing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount6
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences129
ratio0.054
matches
0"It wasn't the usual clammy cold of London’s abandoned subterranean spaces; this was a colder, lonelier kind of chill, a prickle beneath the skin that whispered of unquiet things."
1"She saw glinting metal, strange, dried herbs, vials filled with iridescent liquids, and objects she couldn't begin to identify – jagged bone talismans, intricate clockwork mechanisms that seemed to pulse faintly, masks carved from what looked suspiciously like petrified wood."
2"Eva considered this, tucking a strand of red hair behind her left ear – a nervous habit Harlow had observed countless times. “Or perhaps, Detective, a ritual gone *right* and then interrupted.”"
3"Not at these — whatever you called them — containment or summoning sigils."
4"The clean sigils – they *worked*."
5"The overturned stalls, the shattered goods – not from a struggle with the victim, but from the uncontrolled passage of something else. Something large, fast, and powerful. Something that moved and left behind a wake of psychic dread and physical disruption."
6"Harlow nodded, the grim puzzle clicking into place. The inconsistencies made a new kind of sense, a terrible, supernatural sense. The crime wasn’t just a homicide; it was a consequence, an aftermath. Whatever had been summoned, whatever had caused such terror, was no longer in the market. It was out there in London, and its trail was fresh. Just like Morris and the unexplained three years ago. The familiar chill had nothing to do with the subterranean air."
93.97% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1301
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount61
adverbRatio0.04688700999231361
lyAdverbCount25
lyAdverbRatio0.01921598770176787
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences129
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences129
mean15.36
std18.16
cv1.182
sampleLengths
025
129
219
328
416
512
69
77
816
922
1013
1110
1240
135
1411
155
164
1720
188
193
2011
2114
229
231
2425
2526
2637
272
2882
2911
3014
313
325
3311
3416
3532
36101
374
3811
3923
402
411
4256
433
4414
452
464
472
484
4953
62.27% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.4108527131782946
totalSentences129
uniqueOpeners53
31.75% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences105
matches
0"very peculiar electromagnetic fluctuations."
ratio0.01
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences105
matches
0"It wasn't the usual clammy"
1"She stepped off the temporary"
2"It looked like an exploded"
3"She saw glinting metal, strange,"
4"Her intel had been frustratingly"
5"Her sharp jaw tightened."
6"She pushed the memory down,"
7"Her head snapped up. Eva"
8"It’s a market."
9"It suggests a strong energetic"
10"they were prepared for something"
11"He’s outside it."
12"She looked at the victim"
13"She picked it up carefully,"
14"They’re attuned to supernatural energy."
15"I’ve only read about"
16"It’s pointing away."
17"He’s a civilian."
18"it wasn't here."
19"It was compass points to"
ratio0.257
83.81% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount79
totalSentences105
matches
0"The biting chill hit Harlow"
1"It wasn't the usual clammy"
2"She stepped off the temporary"
3"The air tasted of ozone"
4"a uniformed officer murmured, his"
5"Harlow nodded, her gaze already"
6"This wasn’t just an abandoned"
7"Ribbons of crime scene tape,"
8"It looked like an exploded"
9"Glass shards glittered under the"
10"She saw glinting metal, strange,"
11"This was the Veil Market."
12"Her intel had been frustratingly"
13"That was a woeful understatement."
14"Her sharp jaw tightened."
15"DS Morris, gone."
16"A gap in the world"
17"A ghost in her periphery,"
18"She pushed the memory down,"
19"The blue strobes of forensic"
ratio0.752
95.24% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences105
matches
0"Whoever was here…"
1"Or, in this case, a"
ratio0.019
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences30
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"The biting chill hit Harlow Quinn first, a living thing that clung to the damp air and gnawed at the exposed skin above her collar."
1"It wasn't the usual clammy cold of London’s abandoned subterranean spaces; this was a colder, lonelier kind of chill, a prickle beneath the skin that whispered …"
2"She saw glinting metal, strange, dried herbs, vials filled with iridescent liquids, and objects she couldn't begin to identify – jagged bone talismans, intricat…"
3"The blue strobes of forensic lights pulsed near the centre of the mess, throwing long, dancing shadows that made the scattered artifacts seem to writhe."
4"Harlow didn't need Eva to tell her about the cold spots that seemed to drift like unseen currents, or the way the hair on her arms prickled, hinting at an unsee…"
5"Eva pointed to the chalk sigils on the ground. An elaborate circle, intricate lines, symbols that looked both ancient and utterly alien. Within the circle, a sm…"
6"She walked slowly towards the indicated spot, Eva trailing behind her. The cold intensified with every step. The air grew heavy, like static electricity before …"
7"The overturned stalls, the shattered goods – not from a struggle with the victim, but from the uncontrolled passage of something else. Something large, fast, an…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags24
uselessAdditionCount7
matches
0"officer murmured, his breath pluming white"
1"Harlow acknowledged, her voice clipped"
2"Eva supplied, her voice soft"
3"she observed, her brown eyes narrowing"
4"Harlow countered, her voice low,"
5"Harlow stated, her voice taking on a harder edge"
6"Harlow said, her voice barely a whisper"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags14
fancyCount9
fancyTags
0"officer murmured (murmur)"
1"Harlow acknowledged (acknowledge)"
2"It suggests (suggest)"
3"Eva confirmed (confirm)"
4"Harlow repeated (repeat)"
5"Harlow stated (state)"
6"him screams (scream)"
7"For a whatever was summoned (be summon)"
8"Harlow continued (continue)"
dialogueSentences47
tagDensity0.298
leniency0.596
rawRatio0.643
effectiveRatio0.383
69.4090%