Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ94MTG5YZQWN0ATC5GV9C1N

Run Details

Duration:
22.5s
Cost:
$0.010428
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The air shimmered, distorting the familiar London parkland like heat haze above asphalt. Rory’s breath hitched. She gripped the silver chain of the Heartstone Pendant, its crimson gem already pulsing with a warmth that felt too eager against her skin. The sensation grew, a low thrum that vibrated through her bones, a counterpoint to the familiar chill radiating from the Fae-Forged Blade strapped discreetly to her thigh. "The Veil thins here, where worlds touch," Isolde's voice was a whisper, as delicate and fragile as the silver strands of her hair. She stood a few feet ahead, her pale lavender eyes fixed on the shimmering distortion. Around them, the ancient oak standing stones of the Fae Grove pulsed with a faint, unseen light. Wildflowers bloomed in impossible abundance, their petals iridescent in the artificial twilight of the pocket realm. Nyx, a silhouette of living shadow, flowed beside Isolde, their faintly glowing violet eyes seeming to absorb the light rather than reflect it. A low, guttural murmur rippled through the shadowed form, a sound like dry leaves skittering across pavement. Rory felt a cold dread trickle down her spine, but beneath it, a current of fierce resolve. She’d faced far worse since London became home, since magic had punched a hole through her carefully constructed ordinary life. This, at least, was a choice. A necessary one. Isolde raised a hand, her slender fingers tracing an unseen sigil in the air. The shimmering distortion before them rippled violently, then tore. Not like fabric, but like a wound opening in the very fabric of existence. Beyond it, a world of deep, bruised amber light spilled forth, thick and warm, instantly assaulting Rory’s senses. The portal widened, a gaping maw of golden-orange energy. Isolde stepped through without hesitation, her silver hair catching the amber light as she vanished. Nyx followed, dissolving into a wisp of shadow that stretched and reformed on the other side. Rory took a deep, shaky breath, her fingers tightening on the hilt of the Fae-Forged Blade. The crescent scar on her left wrist tingled, a phantom echo of forgotten pain. She pushed the memory away. This was now. Cardiff no longer mattered, Evan no longer mattered. Only the mission. She stepped through. The sensation was akin to falling through warm honey, then solidifying with a jarring *thud*. The air rushed into her lungs, thick and sweet, laced with the scent of overripe fruit, exotic spices, and something else… a cloying undertone of fermentation, almost decay. The taste of it coated her tongue, sugary and rich. She stumbled, knees buckling on a surface that felt springy and yielding beneath her worn boots. Not earth, not grass, but a carpet of velvety mosses and impossibly vibrant flora. She pushed herself upright, her bright blue eyes scanning the alien landscape. The sky truly *was* amber. A deep, saturated orange-gold that bled into a bruised, smoky purple at the horizon, casting the entire world in a perpetual, languid sunset. No sun was visible, just a vast, diffuse glow that seemed to emanate from everywhere and nowhere. Towering trees, unlike any she’d ever seen, stretched towards the luminous canopy, their branches heavy with fruits that glowed with an internal incandescence – some emerald green, others sapphire blue, ruby red, all impossibly large, dripping with rich, sticky juices. The air hummed with unseen insects, a low, constant drone that vibrated in her teeth. “Welcome, Rory Carter,” Isolde’s voice. The Seer stood as if she had been born here, unaffected by the sudden shift in reality. Her pale lavender eyes, however, seemed to absorb the amber light, reflecting none of it. “To Dymas. Where indulgence knows no end, and hunger never truly sates.” Nyx materialized beside Isolde, their shadow form seeming to ripple and shift, almost expanding, in the strange light. “The air itself sings of appetite,” they whispered, their voice a dry rustle amidst the buzzing. Rory looked around, a mix of wonder and unease warring within her. This wasn't the barren, twisted Hel of morbid tales; it was a landscape of obscene beauty, of overwhelming abundance. Grapevines, their trunks as thick as ancient oaks, snaked through the air, laden with clusters of grapes the size of her fist, their skins stretching taut, threatening to burst. Fruits lay scattered on the ground, some split open, revealing flesh that pulsed with an inner light, attracting iridescent flies that orbited them like tiny, jeweled moons. She reached out, mesmerized, to touch a fruit hanging low from a gnarled branch. It was spherical, the size of a melon, with a skin of impossible violet, streaked with gold. It felt soft, yielding, like velvet over something liquid. A faint, sweet syrup beaded on its surface where she touched it, smelling intoxicating. She pulled her hand back, a prickle of caution overriding her fascination. Eating anything here felt like a terrible idea. Everything felt *too much*. Too vibrant, too sweet, too rich. It was beauty pushed past its zenith, teetering on the edge of gluttony, exactly as the codex had described. She could almost taste the sin in the air, a physical presence. The Heartstone Pendant continued its steady thrum, a constant, reassuring warmth against her sternum, telling her she was indeed in Hel. They began to move, pushing through foliage that felt strangely resistant, yet soft. The ground beneath their feet was a springy mattress of exotic flora, cushioned and silent. Isolde left no footprints, her ethereal form gliding over the vibrant ground. Nyx, meanwhile, moved like a shadow across a wall, sometimes coalescing into solid form, sometimes dissolving into ripples of darkness that flowed around obstacles. Rory, the only true mortal among them, found herself increasingly reliant on her senses. The constant hum in the air grew louder, the distant sounds of revelry and strange, mournful music becoming clearer. It was coming from deeper within the groves, a cacophony of laughter, shouts, and the clinking of what she imagined were enormous goblets. They passed through orchards where trees bore not one kind of fruit, but dozens, each branch a different species, all growing in grotesque symbiosis. A tree with pears the color of rubies also bore peaches of sapphire blue. Their leaves, too, were a riot of color – scarlet, emerald, gold, purple – constantly shifting, rustling like silk in a breeze that never seemed to quite materialize. "The bounty here is endless," Isolde said, her voice lilting, "yet an endless hunger persists." Rory’s brow furrowed. “So, these things… they just grow like this naturally?” Nyx’s form shifted, a subtle ripple in the amber light. "Naturally for Dymas. A place woven from aspiration and… desire. Prince Belphegor's court savors every imaginable sensation. This realm delivers." Rory shivered despite the thick, sweet air. The Fae-Forged Blade on her hip felt exceptionally cold, a stark contrast to the cloying warmth around her. Its moonsilver pommel pulsed with a faint, almost imperceptible luminescence in the perpetual dusk. It was a weapon of precision, of clean, sharp truth. This realm was neither clean nor true. Suddenly, a sound cut through the drone and the distant revelry – a wet, tearing noise, followed by a muffled squeal. Rory froze, instincts screaming. She strained her ears, eyes darting through the vibrant foliage. Isolde paused, her pale lavender eyes fixed on a spot ahead. “A taste of life, quickly forgotten.” Nyx, already a blur, had shifted into a more concentrated form, their violet eyes narrowed into incandescent slits. They pointed a clawed hand, shimmering with shadow, towards a cluster of enormous, blood-red berries, each the size of a human head, nestled amidst thorny vines. There, half-hidden, a small creature lay, not unlike a badger but with iridescent scales and multiple sets of tiny, twitching antennae. Its body was contorted, ripped open, and its viscera spilled onto the gleaming moss. Its lifeblood, a sickly blue, seeped into the ground, quickly absorbed by the ravenous flora. One of the huge berries, ruptured, lay beside it, its pulp glistening. Rory’s stomach lurched. The beautiful excess was also brutal. This was a place where life fed on life, endlessly, voraciously. Gluttony wasn't just about food for consumption, but consumption in its purest, most ruthless form. “The cycle here is rapid,” Nyx whispered, their voice chillingly calm. “Life springs forth, ripens, and is devoured. A constant renewal through consumption.” Rory swallowed, the cloying sweetness in her mouth now tasting like something else. Decay. Greed. She clenched her jaw. Her quick mind worked overtime, trying to reconcile the beauty with the inherent horror. This place was a trap, a lure. It promised endless satisfaction, but delivered only endless hunger. They continued their walk, more cautiously now. Rory kept her hand near the Fae blade, her senses heightened. The ground began to slope gently downwards, and the vegetation thinned slightly, making way for what looked like broad, winding paths paved with polished stone – not unlike flagstones, but glowing with an internal, amber light. The distant sounds of revelry grew into a roar, a wave of noise that washed over them. Laughter, music, the clang of feasting. Rory could make out individual voices now, some deep and resonant, others high-pitched and maniacal. This wasn't just a party; it was a maddening frenzy. Through a break in the trees, she saw it: the silhouette of structures. Grand, impossibly ornate buildings, their spires reaching into the amber sky, their facades carved with intricate patterns that seemed to writhe and flow. Gardens of unbelievable splendor spread around them, filled with exotic, glowing plants and fountains of shimmering, viscous liquids. This was the heart of Dymas. Prince Belphegor’s domain. Isolde turned her head, her silver hair catching the strange light, her lavender eyes seeming to pierce through the illusions of the realm. “The table is set,” she murmured, her voice a low, resonant hum. “And the guests await.” A sudden, sharp movement in the periphery caught Rory’s eye. Tall, lean figures, draped in shimmering fabrics that matched the hues of the Dymasian flora, moved through the gardens. They held long, slender instruments, playing a mournful, rhythmic tune that somehow underpinned the cacophony. Their faces were obscured by deep hoods, but Rory could feel their gaze, cold and assessing, even across the distance. They were not human. A chill, deeper than the Fae blade’s cold steel, settled in Rory’s gut. They had stepped from one world into another, but the dangers had only just begun. The beauty was a gilded cage, and they were, most certainly, the new and intriguing morsels in a realm built on insatiable hunger. Her gaze hardened. She pulled the Fae-Forged Blade from its sheath. The cold steel felt familiar, steady, a promise of defiant resistance.
created_at"2026-02-25T00:54:36.299Z" 2/25/2026, 12:54:36 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences12
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
71.85% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1776
totalAiIsmAdverbs10
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"truly"
count2
3
adverb"suddenly"
count1
4
adverb"quickly"
count2
5
adverb"cautiously"
count1
6
adverb"gently"
count1
7
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
1"very"
2"truly"
3"suddenly"
4"quickly"
5"cautiously"
6"gently"
7"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1776
totalAiIsms39
found
0
word"shimmered"
count1
1
word"familiar"
count3
2
word"warmth"
count3
3
word"vibrated"
count2
4
word"chill"
count2
5
word"whisper"
count1
6
word"pulsed"
count3
7
word"down her spine"
count1
8
word"resolve"
count1
9
word"constructed"
count1
10
word"tracing"
count1
11
word"maw"
count1
12
word"echo"
count1
13
word"scanning"
count1
14
word"amidst"
count2
15
word"velvet"
count1
16
word"cacophony"
count2
17
word"silk"
count1
18
word"furrowed"
count1
19
word"desire"
count1
20
word"stark"
count1
21
word"gleaming"
count1
22
word"glistening"
count1
23
word"stomach"
count1
24
word"lurched"
count1
25
word"intricate"
count1
26
word"rhythmic"
count1
27
word"could feel"
count1
28
word"intriguing"
count1
highlights
0"shimmered"
1"familiar"
2"warmth"
3"vibrated"
4"chill"
5"whisper"
6"pulsed"
7"down her spine"
8"resolve"
9"constructed"
10"tracing"
11"maw"
12"echo"
13"scanning"
14"amidst"
15"velvet"
16"cacophony"
17"silk"
18"furrowed"
19"desire"
20"stark"
21"gleaming"
22"glistening"
23"stomach"
24"lurched"
25"intricate"
26"rhythmic"
27"could feel"
28"intriguing"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"clenched her jaw"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences125
matches(empty)
74.29% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount6
narrationSentences125
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences131
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans3
markdownWords4
totalWords1781
ratio0.002
matches
0"thud"
1"was"
2"too much"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions3
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions62
wordCount1683
uniqueNames16
maxNameDensity0.95
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
London2
Heartstone2
Pendant2
Fae-Forged4
Blade4
Fae7
Grove1
Isolde10
Rory16
Evan1
Seer1
Hel2
Dymas1
Belphegor1
Dymasian1
Nyx7
persons
0"Pendant"
1"Blade"
2"Isolde"
3"Rory"
4"Evan"
5"Seer"
6"Belphegor"
7"Dymasian"
8"Nyx"
places
0"London"
1"Fae-Forged"
2"Fae"
3"Grove"
4"Hel"
globalScore1
windowScore1
55.66% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences106
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"glow that seemed to emanate from everywhere and nowhere"
1"felt like a terrible idea"
2"looked like broad, winding paths paved wi"
3"patterns that seemed to writhe and flow"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches7
per1kWords3.93
wordCount1781
matches
0"Not like fabric, but like a wound opening in the very fabric of existence"
1"Not earth, not grass, but a carpet of velvety mosses"
2"not grass, but a carpet of velvety mosses"
3"not one kind of fruit, but dozens, each branch a different species, all growing in grot"
4"neither clean nor"
5"not unlike a badger but with iridescent scales"
6"not unlike flagstones, but glowing with an internal, amber light"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences131
matches(empty)
87.15% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs36
mean49.47
std22.51
cv0.455
sampleLengths
067
171
240
346
455
589
63
753
842
9100
1049
1134
1287
1374
1462
1564
1656
1766
1815
1912
2030
2156
2235
2317
2444
2562
2635
2723
2849
2954
3048
3154
329
3339
3468
3573
99.65% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences125
matches
0"was contorted"
1"were obscured"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs255
matches
0"was coming"
12.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount5
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences131
ratio0.046
matches
0"Towering trees, unlike any she’d ever seen, stretched towards the luminous canopy, their branches heavy with fruits that glowed with an internal incandescence – some emerald green, others sapphire blue, ruby red, all impossibly large, dripping with rich, sticky juices."
1"This wasn't the barren, twisted Hel of morbid tales; it was a landscape of obscene beauty, of overwhelming abundance."
2"Their leaves, too, were a riot of color – scarlet, emerald, gold, purple – constantly shifting, rustling like silk in a breeze that never seemed to quite materialize."
3"Suddenly, a sound cut through the drone and the distant revelry – a wet, tearing noise, followed by a muffled squeal."
4"The ground began to slope gently downwards, and the vegetation thinned slightly, making way for what looked like broad, winding paths paved with polished stone – not unlike flagstones, but glowing with an internal, amber light."
5"This wasn't just a party; it was a maddening frenzy."
81.51% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1687
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"deep, saturated orange-gold"
1"enormous, blood-red berries,"
adverbCount80
adverbRatio0.04742145820983995
lyAdverbCount28
lyAdverbRatio0.016597510373443983
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences131
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences131
mean13.6
std7.15
cv0.526
sampleLengths
013
13
224
327
423
515
617
716
823
917
1017
1120
126
133
1414
159
1614
1718
189
1915
2016
2116
2214
235
243
258
263
273
2815
2921
307
3110
3216
3314
3412
355
3623
3717
3840
3915
405
4117
4215
4312
4418
4516
4612
4719
4829
4927
50.89% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.3282442748091603
totalSentences131
uniqueOpeners43
81.97% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences122
matches
0"Only the mission."
1"Too vibrant, too sweet, too"
2"Suddenly, a sound cut through"
ratio0.025
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount36
totalSentences122
matches
0"She gripped the silver chain"
1"She stood a few feet"
2"She’d faced far worse since"
3"She pushed the memory away."
4"She stepped through."
5"She stumbled, knees buckling on"
6"She pushed herself upright, her"
7"Her pale lavender eyes, however,"
8"they whispered, their voice a"
9"She reached out, mesmerized, to"
10"It was spherical, the size"
11"It felt soft, yielding, like"
12"She pulled her hand back,"
13"It was beauty pushed past"
14"She could almost taste the"
15"They began to move, pushing"
16"It was coming from deeper"
17"They passed through orchards where"
18"Their leaves, too, were a"
19"Its moonsilver pommel pulsed with"
ratio0.295
21.48% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount107
totalSentences122
matches
0"The air shimmered, distorting the"
1"Rory’s breath hitched."
2"She gripped the silver chain"
3"The sensation grew, a low"
4"Isolde's voice was a whisper,"
5"She stood a few feet"
6"Wildflowers bloomed in impossible abundance,"
7"Nyx, a silhouette of living"
8"A low, guttural murmur rippled"
9"Rory felt a cold dread"
10"She’d faced far worse since"
11"This, at least, was a"
12"A necessary one."
13"Isolde raised a hand, her"
14"The shimmering distortion before them"
15"The portal widened, a gaping"
16"Isolde stepped through without hesitation,"
17"Nyx followed, dissolving into a"
18"Rory took a deep, shaky"
19"The crescent scar on her"
ratio0.877
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences122
matches(empty)
ratio0
51.50% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences86
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"She gripped the silver chain of the Heartstone Pendant, its crimson gem already pulsing with a warmth that felt too eager against her skin."
1"The sensation grew, a low thrum that vibrated through her bones, a counterpoint to the familiar chill radiating from the Fae-Forged Blade strapped discreetly to…"
2"Nyx followed, dissolving into a wisp of shadow that stretched and reformed on the other side."
3"She stumbled, knees buckling on a surface that felt springy and yielding beneath her worn boots."
4"A deep, saturated orange-gold that bled into a bruised, smoky purple at the horizon, casting the entire world in a perpetual, languid sunset."
5"No sun was visible, just a vast, diffuse glow that seemed to emanate from everywhere and nowhere."
6"Towering trees, unlike any she’d ever seen, stretched towards the luminous canopy, their branches heavy with fruits that glowed with an internal incandescence –…"
7"They began to move, pushing through foliage that felt strangely resistant, yet soft."
8"Nyx, meanwhile, moved like a shadow across a wall, sometimes coalescing into solid form, sometimes dissolving into ripples of darkness that flowed around obstac…"
9"Grand, impossibly ornate buildings, their spires reaching into the amber sky, their facades carved with intricate patterns that seemed to writhe and flow."
10"Tall, lean figures, draped in shimmering fabrics that matched the hues of the Dymasian flora, moved through the gardens."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"they whispered, their voice a dry rustle amidst the buzzing"
1"Isolde said, her voice lilting,"
2"Nyx whispered, their voice chillingly calm"
3"she murmured, her voice a low, resonant hum"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"they whispered (whisper)"
1"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
2"she murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences12
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0.75
effectiveRatio0.5
68.4863%