Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ94MYABF61K70X6HPW4WW4E

Run Details

Duration:
25.7s
Cost:
$0.010531
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The transition through the Veil felt like stepping through a wall of chilled, liquid silk. For a dizzying heartbeat, Rory’s vision blurred into a kaleidoscope of grey and silver, the familiar damp scent of Richmond Park’s ferns replaced by a sudden, jarring vacuum. Then, the pressure snapped. Rory stumbled, her boots hitting ground that felt unnaturally soft, like walking on powdered spice. She gasped, her lungs filling with air so thick and sweet it tasted of fermented peaches and heavy cream. Beside her, Isolde Varga didn’t even sway. The half-Fae woman stood perfectly still, her waist-length silver hair cascading down her back like a frozen waterfall. She left no footprints in the amber-hued dust, her weight seemingly a suggestion rather than a physical law. Behind them, the shadow stretched. Nyx coiled out of the shimmering distortion of the Veil, their form a jagged silhouette against the sudden brilliance of the new world. Glowing violet eyes flickered within the darkness of their hood, scanning the horizon with a predatory rhythm. "Dymas," Nyx whispered, the sound like dry leaves skittering across stone. "The belly of the world. Be careful, little mortal. Here, the hunger never truly ends." Rory didn't answer immediately. She was too busy staring at the sky. It wasn't the bruised purple of a London twilight or the grey sheets of rain she’d grown up with in Cardiff. The sky of Dymas was a deep, radiant amber, as if they were standing inside a giant bead of honey backlit by a dying star. There was no sun, only a pervasive, golden glow that cast long, velvet-edged shadows. She reached down, her fingers brushing the Heartstone pendant hanging from her neck. The deep crimson gem was uncharacteristically hot, pulsing against her skin with the steady rhythm of a resting heartbeat. It was a warning, or perhaps a greeting. On her hip, the Fae-forged blade Isolde had given her felt like an icicle against her thigh, its moonsilver hilt humming a low, discordant note that vibrated in her bones. "It’s beautiful," Rory murmured, though her stomach tightened with a sudden, instinctual unease. "A pitcher plant is beautiful to the fly," Isolde said. Her pale lavender eyes remained fixed on the horizon, where the silhouettes of massive, twisted trees broke the golden skyline. "We walk where the fruit is heavy and the wine is red. Do not taste the air too deeply, Aurora Carter. It has a way of making one forget why they ever wished to leave." They began to move, descending a gentle slope toward what appeared to be a vast, sprawling orchard. The scale of the place was impossible. The trees were gargantuan, their trunks thick as manor houses and barked in what looked like hammered copper. Instead of leaves, the branches were draped in translucent, crystalline veils that shimmered with every movement of the perfumed wind. As they drew closer, the sound hit them—a low, rhythmic thrumming, like a thousand cellos playing a single, vibrating chord. It wasn't mechanical; it was the sound of growth, of sap moving through veins, of a realm that was perpetually over-ripening. Rory stepped over a root that bled a thick, golden resin. The smell was intoxicating—vanilla, scorched sugar, and something iron-rich and raw. She thought of the Golden Empress back in London, the grease-stained menus and the smell of cheap frying oil that clung to her clothes after a shift for Yu-Fei. That world felt like a fever dream now, a thin, grey memory compared to the hyper-saturated reality of Dymas. "Look at the fruit," Rory whispered, pointing upward. Hanging from the copper branches were clusters of fruit the size of pumpkins, shaped like teardrops and glowing with an inner, bioluminescent light. They were deep plums, vibrant oranges, and greens so bright they hurt to look at. Some were translucent, revealing seeds that swam inside like tiny, golden fish. Nyx drifted toward one of the trees, their shadow-form elongating as they flowed up the trunk. "The harvest of Belphegor," the Shade hissed. "Tended by those who thought they could out-eat their grief. Look closer, girl." Rory squinted. Deep within the groves, she saw movement. Figures moved between the trees, dressed in tattered silks that might have been fine centuries ago. They were humans—or had been. They moved with a slow, hypnotic grace, carrying silver long-hooks and woven baskets. They didn't speak. They didn't look at one another. They simply moved from tree to tree, cradling the heavy fruit as if it were made of glass. "Helbound," Isolde said, her voice a cool blade in the warm air. "Contracted souls. Master chefs, viticulturists, gourmands who traded their eternity for a single perfect flavor. They serve the Prince of Gluttony now, refining the excess of the realm into delicacies for the high courts of Hel." Rory felt a shiver that had nothing to do with the temperature. She thought of her father, the barrister, and the dry, legalistic way he spoke of contracts. There was no fine print that could prepare a person for this—an eternity of tending golden orchards under an amber sky, never allowed to taste the bounty they gathered. A small, crescent-shaped scar on Rory’s left wrist began to itch, a nervous habit from her childhood. She rubbed it absentmindedly, her eyes tracking one of the workers. The man looked up. His eyes were milky and vacant, his mouth sewn shut with fine gold wire. She recoiled, her hand flying to the hilt of the moonsilver dagger. "His mouth..." "To ensure the ingredients reach the kitchens untasted," Nyx said, sliding back down to the ground and solidifying into a tall, humanoid silhouette beside her. Shadows swirled around their feet like ink in water. "Belphegor does not care for theft. In Dymas, to want is a virtue. To take is a death sentence." They pushed deeper into the orchard, the air growing warmer and more claustrophobic. The ground changed from dust to a carpet of fallen blossoms that felt like crushed velvet under Rory’s boots. The scent was becoming overwhelming, a cloying sweetness that made her head swim. She felt a sudden, irrational urge to pluck one of the low-hanging emerald fruits, to feel the skin burst between her teeth, to know if it tasted as sweet as the air promised. Her hand drifted toward a branch. *Clang.* The sound of the Heartstone hitting the silver chain around her neck snapped her back. The pendant was searingly hot now, a physical prick of pain against her collarbone. "Aurora." Isolde’s voice was sharp. The Seer didn't turn around, but her hand was held out, a silent command. "The path is narrow. The hunger here is a sentient thing. It seeks the hollow spaces in your heart. It remembers the girl who fled Cardiff with nothing but a bruised lip and a suitcase. It offers you the fullness you were denied." Rory pulled her hand back, her heart hammering against her ribs. She took a ragged breath, trying to find the cold, logical center she usually relied on. She was a delivery girl for a Chinese restaurant. She was a law school dropout. She was a survivor. She wasn't a guest at this feast. "I'm fine," she lied, her voice shaking. "You are human," Nyx countered, their violet eyes glowing with a strange, flickering light. "To be human is to be a vessel of wanting. This realm is simply the mirror." They emerged from the heavy canopy of the copper trees into a clearing that took Rory’s breath away. In the center of the grove sat a long, winding table made of white marble, stretching so far the end was lost in the amber haze. It was laden with silver platters, crystal decanters, and towering arrangements of food that defied geometry. Steam rose from porcelain bowls in lazy spirals, carrying scents of rosemary, roasted meats, and spices Rory had no name for. But there were no chairs. And the food was rotting. As they approached, Rory realized the "feasts" were in various stages of decay. Some platters held fresh, steaming delicacies, while others were covered in a fine, iridescent mold that shimmered like crushed pearls. Insects with gossamer wings and jeweled shells crawled over the spoils, their buzzing adding to the low thrum of the realm. "The Eternal Banquet," Isolde whispered. "A gift that is never eaten, a feast that is only for the eyes. It is the purest form of gluttony—the desire to possess the thing without the indignity of consuming it." Rory looked at the marble table, then at the silent, wire-mouthed workers moving in the distance, and finally at the amber sky that felt like it was slowly pressing down on them. The wonder she had felt upon entering was gone, replaced by a cold, sharp clarity. This wasn't a paradise of plenty. It was a well-appointed larder. "We need to move," Rory said, her voice firming as she gripped the hilt of her dagger. The moonsilver felt grounding, a piece of winter in this suffocating autumn. "Where is the rift point? The pendant is pulling me toward the center." Isolde nodded, her silver hair shimmering. "The heart of the orchard, where the Prince’s shadow is longest. But be warned, Aurora. The Veil is weak here, but the hunger is strong. Do not let the beauty of the rot deceive you." They stepped forward, three shadows moving through a golden world, leaving trails in the spice-dust that the wind had already begun to erase. Rory didn't look back at the table. She kept her eyes on the amber horizon, her hand steady on the cold silver at her side, walking deeper into the heart of the golden ache.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
90.75% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1621
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
1
adverb"truly"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"truly"
2"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
22.89% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1621
totalAiIsms25
found
0
word"chilled"
count1
1
word"silk"
count1
2
word"kaleidoscope"
count1
3
word"familiar"
count1
4
word"cascading"
count1
5
word"weight"
count1
6
word"flickered"
count1
7
word"scanning"
count1
8
word"radiant"
count1
9
word"velvet"
count2
10
word"vibrated"
count1
11
word"stomach"
count1
12
word"crystalline"
count1
13
word"shimmered"
count2
14
word"rhythmic"
count1
15
word"mechanical"
count1
16
word"perfect"
count1
17
word"ensure"
count1
18
word"marble"
count2
19
word"crystal"
count1
20
word"porcelain"
count1
21
word"desire"
count1
highlights
0"chilled"
1"silk"
2"kaleidoscope"
3"familiar"
4"cascading"
5"weight"
6"flickered"
7"scanning"
8"radiant"
9"velvet"
10"vibrated"
11"stomach"
12"crystalline"
13"shimmered"
14"rhythmic"
15"mechanical"
16"perfect"
17"ensure"
18"marble"
19"crystal"
20"porcelain"
21"desire"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences97
matches
0"felt a shiver"
98.67% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences97
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"appeared to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences108
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen43
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords1
totalWords1616
ratio0.001
matches
0"Clang."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions50
wordCount1315
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity1.29
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Veil2
Rory17
Richmond1
Park1
Isolde7
Varga1
London2
Cardiff1
Dymas2
Heartstone2
Fae-forged1
Golden1
Empress1
Yu-Fei1
Hanging1
Shade1
Shadows1
Seer1
Chinese1
Nyx5
persons
0"Rory"
1"Isolde"
2"Varga"
3"Heartstone"
4"Empress"
5"Shade"
6"Shadows"
7"Seer"
8"Nyx"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Cardiff"
4"Golden"
globalScore0.854
windowScore0.833
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences79
glossingSentenceCount7
matches
0"felt like stepping through a wall of ch"
1"st, her weight seemingly a suggestion rather"
2"felt like an icicle against her thigh,"
3"looked like hammered copper"
4"felt like a fever dream now, a thin, gr"
5"felt like crushed velvet under Rory’s b"
6"felt like it was slowly pressing down o"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1616
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences108
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs36
mean44.89
std22.49
cv0.501
sampleLengths
047
177
245
326
472
570
613
765
862
941
1070
118
1250
1336
1470
1548
1657
1746
1814
1953
2078
216
221
2329
2462
2553
267
2730
2881
2910
3054
3137
3258
3342
3441
3557
83.56% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount6
totalSentences97
matches
0"were draped"
1"were made"
2"was held"
3"was lost"
4"were covered"
5"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs211
matches
0"were standing"
1"was rotting"
2"was slowly pressing"
10.58% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences108
ratio0.046
matches
0"As they drew closer, the sound hit them—a low, rhythmic thrumming, like a thousand cellos playing a single, vibrating chord."
1"It wasn't mechanical; it was the sound of growth, of sap moving through veins, of a realm that was perpetually over-ripening."
2"The smell was intoxicating—vanilla, scorched sugar, and something iron-rich and raw."
3"They were humans—or had been."
4"There was no fine print that could prepare a person for this—an eternity of tending golden orchards under an amber sky, never allowed to taste the bounty they gathered."
82.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1336
adjectiveStacks3
stackExamples
0"long, velvet-edged shadows."
1"small, crescent-shaped scar"
2"silent, wire-mouthed workers"
adverbCount39
adverbRatio0.029191616766467067
lyAdverbCount13
lyAdverbRatio0.009730538922155689
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences108
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences108
mean14.96
std8.54
cv0.571
sampleLengths
015
128
24
315
419
57
618
718
85
923
1017
1111
1215
134
148
1521
1625
1714
1813
1919
208
2130
2213
2310
2420
2535
2617
277
2818
2920
3020
3121
3211
3311
3429
3519
368
3723
3815
3912
4016
417
4213
432
447
4516
465
4713
483
496
56.79% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.4074074074074074
totalSentences108
uniqueOpeners44
71.68% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences93
matches
0"Then, the pressure snapped."
1"Instead of leaves, the branches"
ratio0.022
73.76% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount34
totalSentences93
matches
0"She gasped, her lungs filling"
1"She left no footprints in"
2"She was too busy staring"
3"It wasn't the bruised purple"
4"She reached down, her fingers"
5"It was a warning, or"
6"Her pale lavender eyes remained"
7"They began to move, descending"
8"It wasn't mechanical; it was"
9"She thought of the Golden"
10"They were deep plums, vibrant"
11"They were humans—or had been."
12"They moved with a slow,"
13"They didn't speak."
14"They didn't look at one"
15"They simply moved from tree"
16"She thought of her father,"
17"She rubbed it absentmindedly, her"
18"His eyes were milky and"
19"She recoiled, her hand flying"
ratio0.366
46.02% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount77
totalSentences93
matches
0"The transition through the Veil"
1"Rory stumbled, her boots hitting"
2"She gasped, her lungs filling"
3"The half-Fae woman stood perfectly"
4"She left no footprints in"
5"Nyx coiled out of the"
6"Nyx whispered, the sound like"
7"Rory didn't answer immediately."
8"She was too busy staring"
9"It wasn't the bruised purple"
10"The sky of Dymas was"
11"She reached down, her fingers"
12"The deep crimson gem was"
13"It was a warning, or"
14"Rory murmured, though her stomach"
15"Her pale lavender eyes remained"
16"They began to move, descending"
17"The scale of the place"
18"The trees were gargantuan, their"
19"It wasn't mechanical; it was"
ratio0.828
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences93
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences58
technicalSentenceCount15
matches
0"Rory stumbled, her boots hitting ground that felt unnaturally soft, like walking on powdered spice."
1"Glowing violet eyes flickered within the darkness of their hood, scanning the horizon with a predatory rhythm."
2"The sky of Dymas was a deep, radiant amber, as if they were standing inside a giant bead of honey backlit by a dying star."
3"She reached down, her fingers brushing the Heartstone pendant hanging from her neck."
4"On her hip, the Fae-forged blade Isolde had given her felt like an icicle against her thigh, its moonsilver hilt humming a low, discordant note that vibrated in…"
5"Instead of leaves, the branches were draped in translucent, crystalline veils that shimmered with every movement of the perfumed wind."
6"It wasn't mechanical; it was the sound of growth, of sap moving through veins, of a realm that was perpetually over-ripening."
7"She thought of the Golden Empress back in London, the grease-stained menus and the smell of cheap frying oil that clung to her clothes after a shift for Yu-Fei."
8"Some were translucent, revealing seeds that swam inside like tiny, golden fish."
9"There was no fine print that could prepare a person for this—an eternity of tending golden orchards under an amber sky, never allowed to taste the bounty they g…"
10"The ground changed from dust to a carpet of fallen blossoms that felt like crushed velvet under Rory’s boots."
11"The scent was becoming overwhelming, a cloying sweetness that made her head swim."
12"It was laden with silver platters, crystal decanters, and towering arrangements of food that defied geometry."
13"Some platters held fresh, steaming delicacies, while others were covered in a fine, iridescent mold that shimmered like crushed pearls."
14"Rory looked at the marble table, then at the silent, wire-mouthed workers moving in the distance, and finally at the amber sky that felt like it was slowly pres…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"Nyx whispered, the sound like dry leaves skittering across stone"
1"Rory murmured, though her stomach tightened with a sudden, instinctual unease"
2"Isolde said, her voice a cool blade in the warm air"
3"she lied, her voice shaking"
4"Nyx countered, their violet eyes glowing with a strange, flickering light"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
1"Rory murmured (murmur)"
2"Rory whispered (whisper)"
3"the Shade hissed (hiss)"
4"she lied (lie)"
5"Isolde whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.417
leniency0.833
rawRatio0.6
effectiveRatio0.5
70.6681%