Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ94RPDJMCTPGK167T3KTJGK

Run Details

Duration:
26.5s
Cost:
$0.014479
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory gripped the small crimson Heartstone. It pulsed a frantic rhythm against her palm, a living ember. The air shimmered with a distortion that pulled at her vision, like looking through old, flawed glass. A faint, almost imperceptible hum filled the space, a vibration she felt more in her bones than her ears. Nyx stood silent beside her, a deeper shadow against the already dim alley. Isolde, a wisp of silver and pale lavender, watched the shimmering distortion with eyes that saw more than the present. "Almost there," Isolde's voice brushed the air, a whisper of dry leaves. "The path opens." Rory took a breath. The Fae-Forged Blade, cold against her hip, offered little comfort. This was Dymas. She stepped through the shimmering veil. The world inverted. The claustrophobic alley disappeared, replaced by air thick with the scent of ripening fruit and something floral, yet alien. Warm amber light bathed everything, painting the leaves of unfamiliar trees in shades of gold and bronze. Above, the sky hung like a vast, polished jewel, without a sun, only the pervasive, gentle glow. The ground under Rory’s boots was soft, springy, like moss but firmer, woven with tiny, luminous threads that pulsed with the light. She looked back; the shimmering tear in the air had already begun to contract, fading. Nyx solidified beside her, their shadowy form deepening for a moment before resolving into a more definite shape, faint violet eyes sweeping the vast landscape. "This is it," Rory murmured, her voice feeling too loud in the sudden, expansive quiet. Isolde drifted past her, leaving no impression on the luminous ground. "A garden," she said, her gaze fixed on a distant, sprawling structure. "And a gilded cage." Rory walked forward, her curiosity battling a rising tide of unease. Tall, slender trees lined a path, their bark shimmering, not like wood, but like polished obsidian. From their branches hung globular, purple fruits, each larger than her head, exuding a sweet, cloying aroma. Closer to the path, bushes heavy with flowers unfurled petals of iridescent green and deep indigo, their stamens dripping with a thick, golden nectar. Nyx pointed a hand. A vine, thick as Rory's arm, snaked across the path ahead, its leaves a vibrant cerulean. It bore clusters of berries that pulsed with a soft, internal light like miniature hearts. "They glow," Rory noted, bending to touch one. The skin felt cool, smooth, almost gelatinous. A faint hum vibrated from it against her fingertip. "Sustenance for the Prince's chosen," Isolde offered, her hand sweeping towards the expanse of cultivation. "Each fruit, each flower, a testament to desire." Rory straightened, a chill tracing her spine. "Chosen? You mean the helbound souls?" The thought made the sweet, rich air feel heavy. They followed the path, which wound deeper into what felt like an eternal autumn garden. The air grew warmer, the scents richer. Distant music, like harps made of crystal, began to drift on the breeze, accompanied by the low thrum of many voices. Ahead, through a break in the foliage, a colossal structure began to emerge. It wasn't a castle or a palace defined by sharp angles, but a series of interconnected domes and pavilions, crafted from a material that seemed to ripple and shift like molten gold in the amber light. "That must be it," Rory said. "Belphegor's domain." The ground grew more manicured, the luminous threads in the path weaving into intricate patterns. They passed massive fountains, their basins overflowing with a liquid that shimmered with all the colours of sunset, smelling faintly of wine and exotic spices. Statues of figures too plump, too gleeful, adorned the pools, their faces contorted in expressions of endless joy. Nyx’s form wavered, their head tilting slightly. "Motion," they whispered, a sound like dry leaves skittering. "Many. Moving towards the centre." Rory paused, straining her ears. The muffled sounds grew clearer. Laughter, music, the clatter of what sounded like plates and silverware, all swelling into a chorus of opulent revelry. Ahead, the path opened into a vast piazza paved with smooth, dark stone, reflecting the amber sky. The piazza was lined with stalls, not hawking trinkets, but displaying an unprecedented array of food. Towers of pastries, spun sugar as tall as Rory, glistening roasted meats, fruits she could not name piled high on platters of precious metals. Chefs, some with skin the colour of ash and eyes that held the glazed emptiness of the damned, moved with practiced efficiency, preparing dishes. Their movements were precise, yet devoid of any spark. Rory’s gut twisted. These were the helbound souls. A figure, dressed in flowing robes the colour of ripe figs, bustled past a stall laden with iridescent oysters. He paused, picking up a glistening fruit that looked like an oversized plum, and bit into it with a sound of pure bliss, juice dribbling down his chin. His face, though human, held an air of pampered indulgence, his eyes heavy-lidded with satisfaction. He wasn't one of the chefs. "This is… a lot," Rory breathed, a mixture of awe and revulsion warring within her. The sheer volume, the extravagance, the endlessness of it all. It felt like a trap. Isolde’s pale eyes, usually fixed on visions unseen, surveyed the feast. "A banquet without end. A hunger never sated." She offered no further explanation. Nyx, meanwhile, stepped closer to one of the stalls. Their shadowy limb reached out, hovering briefly over a platter of what looked like candied flowers. The chef behind the stall, an older man with wisps of grey hair and a permanent slump to his shoulders, didn't react, his gaze fixed on stirring a cauldron of thick, crimson stew. Nyx pulled their hand back, a subtle ripple passing through their form. Before moving on they spoke, quieter than usual. "Emptiness," Nyx observed. "A core of nothing." Rory shivered. "They're just going through the motions," she said, watching another ash-skinned chef meticulously arranging tiny, jewelled tartlets. There was no joy, no pride in his craft, only unending repetition. "Do they feel anything?" Isolde's voice was soft, barely audible above the growing din of the piazza. "Their torment is in the memory of taste, never truly found." She looked at Rory, her lavender eyes holding a depth that suggested ancient sorrows. "To be surrounded by all nourishment, yet starved." A wave of intense, sweet-spicy aroma washed over them from a nearby roasting spit, where a monstrous, golden-skinned fowl slowly turned. Rory's stomach gave a strange lurch, a mixture of hunger and nausea. The sheer opulence was overwhelming, almost suffocating. The air hummed with indulgence, a palpable energy born of excess. Rory felt the Heartstone thrum harder against her side, a low pulse echoing her own quickening heartbeat. She realised it wasn't just near a portal that it pulsed, but perhaps in the presence of strong Hel energies, strong sin. This entire realm was a giant manifestation of Gluttony. Ahead, past the stalls and the perpetually feasting patrons, a grand archway curved into the largest of the golden domes. The sounds of revelry were loudest there. Rory tightened her grip on the Fae-Forged Blade at her waist. This wasn't merely a garden; it was a consumption engine. They moved into the flow of patrons, a river of beings focused entirely on the act of consumption. Brightly dressed figures, many with an unhealthy pallor beneath their rosy cheeks, navigated the stalls, their hands constantly reaching, tasting, discarding, and reaching again. None paid the small group any mind, consumed by their own insatiable appetites. A sudden flash of movement caught Rory's eye. A small, scuttling creature, like a grotesque, multi-legged crustacean, snatched a dropped candied nut from the ground and disappeared under a food stall. Its shell was a dull crimson, its mandibles snapping. Rory watched it vanish, a flicker of unease turning into a knot in her stomach. Even the vermin were partaking in the gluttony. The air grew thicker, richer, as they approached the grand archway. The golden material of the dome shimmered, displaying shifting patterns of light and shadow, like reflections on a vast, curved pool of honey. They passed under the arch, and the sheer scale of the interior swallowed them whole. It was an immense hall, stretching further than Rory could discern, its ceiling lost in the amber glow. Tables, long and heavy with food, carved from what looked like petrified, jewelled wood, extended into the haze. Patrons of all shapes and sizes, some human-like, others subtly monstrous, reclined on silken cushions, perpetually eating. The sounds were deafening now – laughter, slurping, groans of pleasure, clinking glasses, the constant tear of food. Rory shielded her eyes momentarily against the onslaught of sensory information. The aroma here was almost physical, a crushing weight of sweet, savoury, pungent, and rich. A nearby table held a roasted beast, glistening, its many limbs splayed, eyes replaced with glistening candied fruits. It looked vaguely familiar, yet utterly alien. "This is Belphegor's court?" Rory mumbled, trying to make sense of the chaos. Isolde's distant gaze swept over the hall. "His grand design. Where excess is worship, and the soul is the offering." Nyx remained silent, their presence a quiet counterpoint to the roaring indulgence. They watched the feasting figures, their violet eyes unblinking. Rory followed their gaze, noticing a pattern. Many patrons, after eating to the point of visible discomfort, would then purge themselves, their bodies writhing, only to immediately resume eating. An endless cycle. Rory's stomach churned again, more violently this time. This was more than just indulgence; it was torment dressed in luxury. The helbound chefs, the endlessly eating patrons, the very air, all saturated with a sick, ceaseless hunger. She felt a profound sense of wrongness, despite the dazzling visuals. The Fae-Forged Blade felt like a cold anchor in this sea of warmth and excess. The deeper they plunged, the more the wonder gave way to a chilling understanding of Dymas's true nature.
created_at"2026-02-25T00:56:43.193Z" 2/25/2026, 12:56:43 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences23
tagDensity0.609
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
84.87% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1652
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"truly"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
3
adverb"utterly"
count1
4
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"truly"
2"slowly"
3"utterly"
4"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1652
totalAiIsms42
found
0
word"pulsed"
count4
1
word"shimmered"
count3
2
word"whisper"
count1
3
word"resolving"
count1
4
word"structure"
count2
5
word"vibrated"
count1
6
word"testament"
count1
7
word"desire"
count1
8
word"chill"
count1
9
word"tracing"
count1
10
word"crystal"
count1
11
word"intricate"
count1
12
word"wavered"
count1
13
word"glistening"
count4
14
word"stomach"
count3
15
word"lurch"
count1
16
word"palpable"
count1
17
word"pulse"
count1
18
word"echoing"
count1
19
word"navigated"
count1
20
word"flicker"
count1
21
word"weight"
count1
22
word"familiar"
count1
23
word"sense of"
count2
24
word"roaring"
count1
25
word"churned"
count1
26
word"ceaseless"
count1
27
word"profound"
count1
28
word"warmth"
count1
29
word"chilling"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"shimmered"
2"whisper"
3"resolving"
4"structure"
5"vibrated"
6"testament"
7"desire"
8"chill"
9"tracing"
10"crystal"
11"intricate"
12"wavered"
13"glistening"
14"stomach"
15"lurch"
16"palpable"
17"pulse"
18"echoing"
19"navigated"
20"flicker"
21"weight"
22"familiar"
23"sense of"
24"roaring"
25"churned"
26"ceaseless"
27"profound"
28"warmth"
29"chilling"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"stomach dropped/sank"
count1
highlights
0"stomach churned"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences118
matches
0"a flicker of unease"
94.43% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences118
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences127
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen36
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1653
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions8
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
68.99% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions55
wordCount1543
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity1.62
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Heartstone2
Rory25
Fae-Forged3
Blade3
Dymas2
Isolde7
Nyx8
Hel1
Gluttony1
Ahead3
persons
0"Rory"
1"Blade"
2"Dymas"
3"Isolde"
4"Nyx"
places
0"Gluttony"
globalScore0.69
windowScore0.833
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences104
glossingSentenceCount7
matches
0"felt like an eternal autumn garden"
1"material that seemed to ripple and shift like molten gold in the amber light"
2"sounded like plates and silverware, all sw"
3"looked like an oversized plum, and bit in"
4"looked like candied flowers"
5"looked like petrified, jewelled wood, ext"
6"felt like a cold anchor in this sea of"
79.01% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.21
wordCount1653
matches
0"not like wood, but like polished obsidian"
1"not hawking trinkets, but displaying an unprecedented array of food"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences127
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs39
mean42.38
std22
cv0.519
sampleLengths
053
133
215
323
456
537
625
715
827
968
1035
1124
1223
1322
1492
158
1658
1721
1846
1981
2068
2130
2224
2378
247
2535
2646
2751
2848
2948
3055
3163
3249
3371
3451
3513
3620
3753
3881
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences118
matches
0"was lined"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs249
matches
0"were partaking"
1"were deafening"
52.87% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences127
ratio0.031
matches
0"She looked back; the shimmering tear in the air had already begun to contract, fading."
1"This wasn't merely a garden; it was a consumption engine."
2"The sounds were deafening now – laughter, slurping, groans of pleasure, clinking glasses, the constant tear of food."
3"This was more than just indulgence; it was torment dressed in luxury."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1550
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"intense, sweet-spicy aroma"
1"monstrous, golden-skinned fowl"
adverbCount60
adverbRatio0.03870967741935484
lyAdverbCount23
lyAdverbRatio0.014838709677419355
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences127
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences127
mean13.02
std6.72
cv0.516
sampleLengths
06
111
217
319
413
520
612
73
84
910
103
116
123
1319
1417
1517
1622
1715
1825
1915
2011
2112
224
2311
2416
2517
2624
274
2816
2915
308
317
329
3315
348
357
3615
3715
387
3921
4013
4136
426
432
4415
4525
4618
477
489
495
55.12% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.3543307086614173
totalSentences127
uniqueOpeners45
57.97% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences115
matches
0"Brightly dressed figures, many with"
1"Even the vermin were partaking"
ratio0.017
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences115
matches
0"It pulsed a frantic rhythm"
1"She stepped through the shimmering"
2"She looked back; the shimmering"
3"she said, her gaze fixed"
4"It bore clusters of berries"
5"They followed the path, which"
6"It wasn't a castle or"
7"They passed massive fountains, their"
8"they whispered, a sound like"
9"Their movements were precise, yet"
10"He paused, picking up a"
11"His face, though human, held"
12"He wasn't one of the"
13"It felt like a trap."
14"She offered no further explanation"
15"Their shadowy limb reached out,"
16"she said, watching another ash-skinned"
17"She looked at Rory, her"
18"She realised it wasn't just"
19"They moved into the flow"
ratio0.226
20.87% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount101
totalSentences115
matches
0"Rory gripped the small crimson"
1"It pulsed a frantic rhythm"
2"The air shimmered with a"
3"A faint, almost imperceptible hum"
4"Nyx stood silent beside her,"
5"Isolde, a wisp of silver"
6"Isolde's voice brushed the air,"
7"Rory took a breath."
8"The Fae-Forged Blade, cold against"
9"This was Dymas."
10"She stepped through the shimmering"
11"The world inverted."
12"The claustrophobic alley disappeared, replaced"
13"The ground under Rory’s boots"
14"She looked back; the shimmering"
15"Nyx solidified beside her, their"
16"Rory murmured, her voice feeling"
17"Isolde drifted past her, leaving"
18"she said, her gaze fixed"
19"Rory walked forward, her curiosity"
ratio0.878
43.48% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences115
matches
0"Before moving on they spoke,"
ratio0.009
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences71
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"The air shimmered with a distortion that pulled at her vision, like looking through old, flawed glass."
1"They passed massive fountains, their basins overflowing with a liquid that shimmered with all the colours of sunset, smelling faintly of wine and exotic spices."
2"He paused, picking up a glistening fruit that looked like an oversized plum, and bit into it with a sound of pure bliss, juice dribbling down his chin."
3"Many patrons, after eating to the point of visible discomfort, would then purge themselves, their bodies writhing, only to immediately resume eating."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount7
matches
0"Isolde's voice brushed, a whisper of dry leaves"
1"Rory murmured, her voice feeling too loud in the sudden, expansive quiet"
2"Rory noted, bending to touch one"
3"Isolde offered, her hand sweeping towards the expanse of cultivation"
4"they whispered, a sound like dry leaves skittering"
5"Rory breathed, a mixture of awe and revulsion warring within her"
6"Rory mumbled, trying to make sense of the chaos"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"Rory murmured (murmur)"
1"Rory noted (note)"
2"they whispered (whisper)"
3"Rory breathed (breathe)"
4"Nyx observed (observe)"
5"Rory mumbled (mumble)"
dialogueSentences23
tagDensity0.391
leniency0.783
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.522
74.8533%