Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ94S4NA3AWQESRGQCTBR1CH

Run Details

Duration:
23.8s
Cost:
$0.013381
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The cold knot tightened in Rory's stomach, twisting further each time a twig snapped behind her. There was no wind. The dense canopy above the Fae Grove held the air still, heavy with the scent of damp earth and something sickly sweet, like overripe plums left too long in the sun. She stopped, shoulder-length black hair brushing her collar as she tilted her head, listening. Nothing. Just the frantic thump of her own pulse against her ribs. "Bloody hell." Her whisper, surprisingly loud in the unnatural silence, broke the spell. She pressed on, pushing through a curtain of ancient, hanging moss that coated the old trees like tattered shrouds. The ground under her boots felt springy, a soft carpet of emerald moss and wildflowers that refused to wither, even in late autumn. The light filtering through the leaves took on a perpetual twilight hue here, green-tinged and muted. It felt wrong, every fibre of her practical existence screaming against the whimsical, unnatural vitality of the place. The small crimson Heartstone pendant at her throat grew warm, a faint, almost imperceptible throb against her skin. Rory reached up, her finger tracing the smooth, cool silver chain, then the thumbnail-sized stone itself. It was more than warmth now, a low pulse, like a slow heartbeat against her oesophagus. It had done this before, a subtle alert when near places that felt… thin. This time, it felt like an insistent demand. She pulled out her phone, the screen showing a frantic battery warning. Zero signal. A quick glance at the time confirmed her unease: 11:47 PM. She remembered checking it just an hour ago outside the Richmond Park entrance — 9:00 PM. Two hours had passed, not one. Or had only an hour passed? The Fae Grove’s reputation for temporal distortion was not exaggerated. A shiver, colder than the evening air, traced its way down her spine. Her objective, a series of crude markings etched into an old cartographer’s map, lay somewhere deep within this pocket of otherworldly greenery. These weren't tourist trails. This was a place whispered about, avoided. A place where things lingered. She stepped between two gnarled, colossal oaks, their bark like faces frozen in silent screams. Suddenly, the strange, cloying sweetness in the air intensified, taking on a metallic tang. Like copper. Like blood. Rory’s nostrils flared. Recent. Then she heard it. A whisper. Not wind, not rustling leaves, but something lower, closer. A murmur, like hundreds of voices speaking just below the threshold of understanding. It ebbed and flowed, almost a song, but too discordant, too *wrong* to be music. Gooseflesh erupted on her arms. "Anyone there?" Her voice cracked on the last word. She hated the tremor in it. Rory Carter didn't crack. She didn't scare easily. But this, this was different. This wasn't some back alley mugging or an irate customer. This was primal. The whispers seemed to coalesce, to focus, drawing closer. She saw no movement, no shifting shadows, yet the air around her thickened, pressing in. The Heartstone pulsed harder against her collarbone, a frantic beat now, radiating heat that felt almost painful. She scanned the dark, unyielding trunks of the trees, her bright blue eyes searching. Each shadow pooled deeper than it should, each patch of moonlight seemed to shift, deceiving her vision. Was that a shape, just behind the thickest oak? A flicker of something pale, gone before she could truly focus. Her quick out-of-the-box thinking, usually her greatest asset, struggled to find a logical explanation. Every fibre of her mind resisted attributing it to anything supernatural, even in a place known for it. *It's just the light. Your eyes are playing tricks.* But the metallic smell grew stronger, filling her head, coating her tongue. She took a tentative step back, then another. The whispers grew louder, now individual words seemed to tear themselves from the cacophony, jagged shards of sound she couldn't quite grasp. *Laila... come... lost...* Laila. Her given name. No one used that name anymore. Not since Cardiff. Not since Evan. A cold dread, far deeper than any Fae oddity, settled in her gut. How did it know? A branch, thin and brittle, snapped underfoot somewhere to her left. Rory whirled, her heart leaping into her throat. Nothing. The silence that followed was suffocating, heavy. Too heavy. It felt like the forest itself was holding its breath. She reached for the worn leather strap of her delivery bag, finding cold comfort in the familiar weight of its contents — a handful of spare menus, her payment terminal, a half-eaten protein bar. Useless. Completely and utterly useless against… *this*. The faint inner glow of the Heartstone flared, crimson light blooming momentarily, then fading back to a dull pulse. Just ahead, the mossy ground dipped into a small hollow, choked with darker, thornier growth. There, at its centre, stood a single, ancient stone. Not an oak like the boundary markers, but a rough, grey slab, almost swallowed by the relentless flora. It bore no visible markings, but pulsed with a faint, deep resonance that seemed to vibrate in her teeth. This was it. This was the place her cryptic clues led to. The source of the intense, raw energy she felt pressing down on her. The whispers intensified again, now a chorus of lamentations, tinged with a predatory hunger. They were not *around* her anymore. They were *inside* her head, pressing against her skull, demanding entry. *Join us, Laila... So cold... So dark...* Her logical mind offered a desperate theory: infrasound. Low-frequency sound waves that could induce feelings of dread, even hallucinations. But the specificity of the whispers, the name, shattered that rationalisation. This was intelligent. This was malevolent. She forced herself to move forward, each step an act of pure defiance against the rising tide of terror. She needed to understand. She was close to understanding. Why had she been led here? Who had sent her? As she approached the stone, an unnatural wind, smelling of grave-soil and stagnant water, swept through the hollow, rustling not just the leaves, but the very fabric of her clothes, tugging at her hair. It carried with it a new sound, a low, guttural growl that solidified the presence she felt. It wasn't human. It wasn't animal. She looked down at the old stone. A dark, oily sheen seemed to coat its surface, almost like dried blood, or slime. Her brilliant blue eyes scanned for any detail, any clue. There was nothing. Just the stone, the overwhelming presence, and the frantic heartbeat of the pendant against her skin. Then, at the edge of her vision, a shape detached itself from the gloom behind the stone. It moved with a sickening unnatural fluidity, a ripple in the fabric of the shadows themselves. She spun around fully, but it dissolved back into the impenetrable darkness before her gaze could pinpoint it. The sound of dripping water echoed from behind the stone. Slowly, reluctantly, Rory peered around its rough surface. Nothing. Just the dark, thorn-choked hollow. She closed her eyes for a moment, taking a deep, shuddering breath, trying to regain her composure, to find that cool-headed centre she prided herself on. When she opened them, a spectral face hovered inches from her own. It was a woman’s face, pale as bone, with dark, hollow eyes that held an eternity of sorrow and malice. Its lips, thin and bloodless, slowly parted, revealing teeth too long, too sharp. The air around it shimmered, vibrating with a cold, desperate energy, and the metallic tang grew overpowering, sickening. It was no longer a scent. It was a taste. The whispers surged, no longer distant murmurs but a deafening shriek of a thousand agony-filled voices. The Heartstone erupted with searing heat against her chest, the crimson light pulsing violently, a beacon in the encroaching gloom. The spectral face leaned in closer, a silent scream frozen on its terrifying features, its skeletal hand reaching towards her, a long, bony finger pointing directly at the pendant on her chest. A sudden, sharp pain flared on her left wrist, right where the small crescent-shaped scar from her childhood accident lay. It felt as if something was boring into it, a cold, needle-like pressure. She gasped, staggering back, stumbling over unseen roots. The spectral face gave a silent, bone-chilling laugh that reverberated not in her ears, but deep within her very bones. The Fae Grove, once merely unsettling, now felt like a living tomb, pulling her down into its suffocating depths. The presence was no longer at the edge of her vision. It was here, solidifying, corporeal, a predator finally revealing itself in the dark.
created_at"2026-02-25T00:56:57.779Z" 2/25/2026, 12:56:57 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags2
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences2
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
68.71% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1438
totalAiIsmAdverbs9
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"truly"
count1
2
adverb"completely"
count1
3
adverb"utterly"
count1
4
adverb"very"
count2
5
adverb"slowly"
count2
6
adverb"reluctantly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"truly"
2"completely"
3"utterly"
4"very"
5"slowly"
6"reluctantly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1438
totalAiIsms42
found
0
word"stomach"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count3
2
word"whisper"
count2
3
word"silence"
count2
4
word"tinged"
count2
5
word"whimsical"
count1
6
word"throb"
count1
7
word"tracing"
count1
8
word"warmth"
count1
9
word"traced"
count1
10
word"down her spine"
count1
11
word"etched"
count1
12
word"otherworldly"
count1
13
word"pulsed"
count2
14
word"scanned"
count2
15
word"flicker"
count1
16
word"cacophony"
count1
17
word"familiar"
count1
18
word"weight"
count1
19
word"resonance"
count1
20
word"shattered"
count1
21
word"grave"
count1
22
word"gloom"
count2
23
word"echoed"
count1
24
word"spectral"
count3
25
word"shimmered"
count1
26
word"searing"
count1
27
word"beacon"
count1
28
word"chilling"
count1
29
word"reverberated"
count1
30
word"depths"
count1
31
word"predator"
count1
highlights
0"stomach"
1"pulse"
2"whisper"
3"silence"
4"tinged"
5"whimsical"
6"throb"
7"tracing"
8"warmth"
9"traced"
10"down her spine"
11"etched"
12"otherworldly"
13"pulsed"
14"scanned"
15"flicker"
16"cacophony"
17"familiar"
18"weight"
19"resonance"
20"shattered"
21"grave"
22"gloom"
23"echoed"
24"spectral"
25"shimmered"
26"searing"
27"beacon"
28"chilling"
29"reverberated"
30"depths"
31"predator"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences139
matches(empty)
81.19% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences139
filterMatches
0"know"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences139
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans7
markdownWords23
totalWords1440
ratio0.016
matches
0"wrong"
1"It's just the light. Your eyes are playing tricks."
2"Laila... come... lost..."
3"this"
4"around"
5"inside"
6"Join us, Laila... So cold... So dark..."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions1
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions25
wordCount1436
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity0.42
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory6
Fae4
Grove3
Heartstone4
Richmond1
Park1
Carter1
Laila3
Cardiff1
Evan1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Heartstone"
2"Carter"
3"Laila"
4"Evan"
places
0"Fae"
1"Grove"
2"Richmond"
3"Park"
4"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
14.13% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences92
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"felt like an insistent demand"
1"quite grasp"
2"felt like the forest itself was holding"
3"resonance that seemed to vibrate in her teeth"
4"felt like a living tomb, pulling her do"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches6
per1kWords4.167
wordCount1440
matches
0"Not wind, not rustling leaves, but something lower, closer"
1"not rustling leaves, but something lower, closer"
2"Not an oak like the boundary markers, but a rough, grey slab, almost swallowed by the relentless flora"
3"not just the leaves, but the very fabric of her clothes, tugging at her hair"
4"no longer distant murmurs but"
5"not in her ears, but deep within her very bones"
94.72% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount3
totalSentences139
matches
0"Was that a"
1"used that name"
2"shattered that rationalisation"
88.65% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs27
mean53.33
std24.55
cv0.46
sampleLengths
077
189
272
376
438
537
648
741
841
983
109
1145
1233
1339
1441
15105
1631
177
1836
1938
2057
2151
2251
2350
2473
2568
26104
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences139
matches
0"been led"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs224
matches
0"was suffocating"
1"was holding"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences139
ratio0.014
matches
0"She remembered checking it just an hour ago outside the Richmond Park entrance — 9:00 PM."
1"She reached for the worn leather strap of her delivery bag, finding cold comfort in the familiar weight of its contents — a handful of spare menus, her payment terminal, a half-eaten protein bar."
72.19% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1445
adjectiveStacks3
stackExamples
0"smooth, cool silver chain,"
1"small crescent-shaped scar"
2"silent, bone-chilling laugh"
adverbCount74
adverbRatio0.05121107266435986
lyAdverbCount20
lyAdverbRatio0.01384083044982699
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences139
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences139
mean10.36
std7.29
cv0.703
sampleLengths
016
14
231
314
41
511
613
719
823
916
1018
1118
1216
1316
1413
151
168
1712
182
1911
2016
216
226
2310
2413
2522
264
277
285
2915
3014
312
322
333
341
354
362
379
3813
3915
405
419
426
434
444
455
4610
473
489
4915
41.49% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats19
diversityRatio0.33093525179856115
totalSentences139
uniqueOpeners46
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount9
totalSentences121
matches
0"Just the frantic thump of"
1"Suddenly, the strange, cloying sweetness"
2"Then she heard it."
3"Completely and utterly useless against…"
4"Just ahead, the mossy ground"
5"Just the stone, the overwhelming"
6"Then, at the edge of"
7"Slowly, reluctantly, Rory peered around"
8"Just the dark, thorn-choked hollow."
ratio0.074
71.24% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount45
totalSentences121
matches
0"She stopped, shoulder-length black hair"
1"Her whisper, surprisingly loud in"
2"She pressed on, pushing through"
3"It felt wrong, every fibre"
4"It was more than warmth"
5"It had done this before,"
6"She pulled out her phone,"
7"She remembered checking it just"
8"Her objective, a series of"
9"She stepped between two gnarled,"
10"It ebbed and flowed, almost"
11"Her voice cracked on the"
12"She hated the tremor in"
13"She didn't scare easily."
14"She saw no movement, no"
15"She scanned the dark, unyielding"
16"Her quick out-of-the-box thinking, usually"
17"*It's just the light."
18"Your eyes are playing tricks.*"
19"She took a tentative step"
ratio0.372
79.83% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount92
totalSentences121
matches
0"The cold knot tightened in"
1"The dense canopy above the"
2"She stopped, shoulder-length black hair"
3"Her whisper, surprisingly loud in"
4"She pressed on, pushing through"
5"The ground under her boots"
6"The light filtering through the"
7"It felt wrong, every fibre"
8"The small crimson Heartstone pendant"
9"Rory reached up, her finger"
10"It was more than warmth"
11"It had done this before,"
12"This time, it felt like"
13"She pulled out her phone,"
14"A quick glance at the"
15"She remembered checking it just"
16"The Fae Grove’s reputation for"
17"A shiver, colder than the"
18"Her objective, a series of"
19"These weren't tourist trails."
ratio0.76
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences121
matches(empty)
ratio0
60.04% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences69
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"She stopped, shoulder-length black hair brushing her collar as she tilted her head, listening."
1"The ground under her boots felt springy, a soft carpet of emerald moss and wildflowers that refused to wither, even in late autumn."
2"The Heartstone pulsed harder against her collarbone, a frantic beat now, radiating heat that felt almost painful."
3"It bore no visible markings, but pulsed with a faint, deep resonance that seemed to vibrate in her teeth."
4"As she approached the stone, an unnatural wind, smelling of grave-soil and stagnant water, swept through the hollow, rustling not just the leaves, but the very …"
5"It carried with it a new sound, a low, guttural growl that solidified the presence she felt."
6"It felt as if something was boring into it, a cold, needle-like pressure."
7"The spectral face gave a silent, bone-chilling laugh that reverberated not in her ears, but deep within her very bones."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags2
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
79.0732%