Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ94VCAHR5J343T9RWHJPXD2

Run Details

Duration:
1m 13s
Cost:
$0.034749
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The air in the abandoned Camden station tasted of iron and ancient, stagnant rot. Harlow Quinn stepped over a rusted rail, her heavy soles crunching on a layer of soot and discarded ticket stubs. Above, the city hummed, a distant vibration filtered through thirty feet of London clay. Her maglite beam sliced through the gloom, illuminating a tiled wall where the white ceramics were yellowed like old teeth. DC Miller leaned against a soot-stained pillar ten yards ahead, his torch beam bouncing rhythmically off the tracks. He looked up as Quinn approached, his face caught in the harsh glare. "About time. Forensic boys are stuck in traffic at the Mornington Crescent junction." Quinn didn't slow her pace. She scanned the ground, noting the way the dust had been disturbed. Not the messy footprints of a panicked struggle. These were clean, deliberate indentations. "What do we have, Miller?" "Male, fifties." Miller gestured toward a dark mass slumped near the edge of the platform. "Suit looks like it costs more than a year of my pension. No ID, no phone. Typical mugging gone wrong. Probably some kid took a swing, the guy hit his head on the tracks, and they cleared his pockets." Quinn knelt by the body. Salt-and-pepper hair caught the silver flickers of light as she turned her head. She didn't touch the victim yet. She observed the angle of the limbs. The man’s legs were crossed at the ankles. His hands rested neatly on his lap. "Muggers don't pose the bodies, Miller." "Maybe he just fell that way." Miller shifted, his leather jacket creaking. Quinn pointed her torch at the victim’s chest. The fabric of the charcoal blazer remained pristine. No signs of a scuffle. No dirt on the elbows. "Look at his feet." "He’s barefoot. So what? They took his shoes. Designer brogues sell for a few hundred on the second-hand market." "Look closer at the skin." Quinn leaned in. The skin on the man's feet wasn't just bare. It was blackened, the flesh shimmering with a dark, iridescent sheen that looked more like oil than a burn. She reached into her kit, pulled out a pair of silver tweezers, and nudged the man's jaw. It remained stiff, locked in a silent scream that didn't match his peaceful posture. She pried the lips apart. A small, jagged object sat on the tongue. She plucked it out and held it up to the light. It was a fragment of bone, carved into a rough circular shape with a hole drilled through the centre. "Miller, does this look like a typical mugging to you?" Miller squinted, his brow furrowing. "A tooth?" "It's a bone token. I haven't seen one of these since the Morris case." The mention of her old partner turned the air colder. Quinn stood, her sharp jaw set as she swept the beam around the station. This platform was sterile, vacuumed of all human debris, save for the body and the strange soot circles on the ceiling. "Where did the tech go?" "The cache? It’s back toward the service entrance. Laptops, tablets, some strange brass instruments. I left PC Henderson to guard it." Quinn ignored him and walked toward the shadows of the platform edge. The darkness there seemed thicker, a physical barrier that swallowed her light. She noticed a faint shimmer in the air, like heat haze over a summer road, but the temperature was barely above freezing. A soft scuffle sounded from the decommissioned ticket booth. Quinn drew her service weapon, her movement fluid and silent. "Police! Step into the light." A woman emerged from the booth. She was small, bundled in an oversized wool coat that looked lived-in. Round glasses sat precariously on the bridge of her nose. She clutched a leather satchel to her chest, her knuckles white. "I didn't do anything." The woman’s green eyes flitted from Quinn to the body on the platform. She tucked a wild strand of red hair behind her left ear. Quinn lowered the weapon but didn't holster it. "Identify yourself. What are you doing in a restricted Tube station at three in the morning?" "Eva. Eva Kowalski. I’m an archivist." "The British Museum is a long walk from here, Miss Kowalski." Eva’s gaze dropped to the bone token still gripped in Quinn's tweezers. Her expression shifted from fear to a sharp, analytical curiosity. "You shouldn't be holding that without protection. It’s still resonant." Quinn stepped closer, her military bearing imposing against the girl's slight frame. "You know what this is?" "It’s a bone token. Entry fee. For the Market." Eva’s fingers drummed against the worn leather of her bag. "The Veil Market?" Quinn’s voice dropped. The rumors had been circulating in the back alleys for months—a place that didn't exist on any map. "It moved tonight." Eva looked at the shadows. "It was supposed to be here. I was late. Something went wrong." Quinn reached for the satchel. "Let's see what a British Museum researcher carries to an underground black market." Eva pulled back, but Quinn was faster. She flipped the lid of the bag. Inside lay several heavy, leather-bound books and a small brass object. The casing was thick with green patina, the face etched with symbols that seemed to shift and writhe under the torchlight. The needle didn't point North; it spun in erratic circles. "Give that back! You have no idea how delicate that is. It’s tuned to the rift." Quinn didn't hand it back. She held the Veil Compass in her palm, feeling a faint thrumming through her glove. It felt like a heartbeat—slow, rhythmic, and utterly alien. "Miller! Get over here." "Who's the girl?" Miller trotted over, looking confused. Quinn held the compass out. "Look at the needle." "It’s broken. Probably dropped it." "It’s not broken." Quinn walked toward the body. As she got closer, the needle’s spinning slowed. When she stood directly over the victim, the needle snapped into a fixed position, pointing directly at the man's throat. "The cause of death wasn't a fall, Miller." Quinn used the tip of her torch to nudge the victim’s collar. Beneath the expensive silk, the skin was translucent. The veins weren't blue or red; they were a shimmering silver. "He wasn't mugged. He was emptied. Someone used a rift to pull the energy right out of him. That’s why he’s posed like that. Rigor doesn't set in normally when the biological electricity is gone." Eva watched from the side, her face pale. "The Shade artisan who made that compass... he told me the Market was becoming unstable. The boundaries are thinning." Quinn turned to the girl, her brown eyes hard. "Why were you coming here, Eva? What were you looking for?" Eva reached into her satchel and pulled out a small, tattered notebook. "The same thing you are, Detective. I’m looking for what happened to the people who disappeared three years ago. I’m looking for why the Metropolitan Police files on DS Morris are redacted." Quinn felt a jolt of ice in her chest. "Lying is a poor choice for someone caught at a murder scene with a prohibited artifact." Quinn stepped closer to Eva, her shadow stretching long and distorted across the yellowed tiles. "I'm not lying. I think the Market is the reason he's gone. But you won't find the answers in a standard forensics kit. You need to know how to read the signs." Eva pointed to the soot on the ceiling. "Those aren't smoke marks. That’s residue from a forced closure. Someone shut the door to the Market in a hurry. They left him behind as a buoy." Quinn looked at the body, then at the compass in her hand. The needle remained locked on the man’s throat. She reached down and unbuttoned the man’s shirt. Nestled in the hollow of his collarbone was a second bone token, this one glowing with a faint, sickly green light. "Miller, call it in. Tell them we have a homicide with unusual environmental factors. And tell them to send a containment team, not a standard coroner." "Ma'am? Containment? For a mugging?" "It wasn't a mugging, Miller. It was a harvest." Quinn turned back to Eva, pocketing the bone token. The archivist didn't move to run. "You're going to keep that compass, aren't you?" "It’s evidence in a murder investigation." "It won't work for you. Not unless you know how to talk to the shadows." Quinn adjusted the leather strap of her watch. "I've spent eighteen years talking to people who hide in the dark, Miss Kowalski. I imagine the shadows aren't much different." She looked at the tracks, where the darkness seemed to breathe. The Camden station grew quiet, the hum of the city above feeling further away than ever. The needle on the Veil Compass began to twitch, no longer pointing at the body, but toward the tunnel that led deeper into the earth, toward the heart of the city's hidden veins. Quinn didn't wait for Miller's response. She stepped off the platform and onto the tracks, her torch beam cutting a path through the shimmering haze. "Where are you going?" Miller shouted from the tiles. Quinn didn't look back. "To find the rest of the currency." The tunnel swallowed her light as she moved away from the crime scene. The air grew colder, the scent of ozone thickening until it stung her nostrils. She followed the twitching needle, her footsteps echoing in a rhythm that didn't quite match her own pace. Behind her, the rustle of paper and the soft clink of Eva Kowalski’s satchel followed her into the dark. Quinn stopped in front of a heavy iron door marked with a fading Victorian crest. It hadn't been opened in decades, yet the dust on the floor was swept clean. She pressed her hand against the metal. It was vibrating. "It's right behind here." Eva whispered, appearing at Quinn's shoulder. "The anchor point." Quinn gripped the handle. She didn't think about the paperwork or the protocol. She thought about Morris and the way his eyes had looked in the hospital—clear, terrified, and seeing something she couldn't. She pulled the door open. A rush of air hit her, smelling of incense, old parchment, and something metallic. The space beyond wasn't a maintenance room. It was a cavernous hall, lit by hanging lanterns that flickered with blue flames. Stalls made of bleached wood and bone lined the walls, draped in silks that changed colour as the light hit them. "Detective." Eva grabbed Quinn's sleeve. "Don't touch anything. In here, if you touch it, you've bought it. And they don't take Sterling." Quinn looked down at the bone token in her pocket. She wasn't here to buy anything. She was here to close the case. She saw a man at a nearby stall, his back to them. He wore a uniform—a Metropolitan Police jacket, scorched and tattered at the edges. "Morris?" The figure turned. It wasn't Morris. The face was a hollow shell, the eyes replaced by smooth, polished obsidian. It held out a tray of shimmering glass vials, its head tilting with a mechanical jerk. "Fresh memories." The figure croaked. "Two tokens for a decade. One for a year." Quinn backed away, her boots hitting the stone floor with a sharp metallic ring. The market didn't just sell goods; it sold parts of people. "We need to go. The gate is shifting. If we stay when it moves, we won't find the way back." Quinn looked at the obsidian-eyed man in the police jacket. She saw the name tag. It wasn't Morris's. It was a name she didn't recognize, but the date on the jacket was from twenty years ago. She reached out and grabbed a handful of the man's collar, hauling him toward her. "Where did you get this jacket?" The figure didn't struggle. It leaned in, the black stones in its eye sockets reflecting her own distorted face. "The lost and found. Everything that falls through the cracks ends up on the stalls." She released him, her breath coming in shallow hitches. She turned to Eva. "How do we find the person in charge? The one who ran the harvest on the man on the tracks." Eva looked toward the far end of the hall, where a curtain of thick, black velvet hung from the ceiling. "The Overseer. But you don't want to talk to him. He doesn't trade in information. He trades in shadows." "I have eighteen years of shadows. I think I can afford the price." She started toward the curtain, the Veil Compass in her hand now glowing with a steady, pulsing light. The needle pointed straight ahead, no longer spinning. As she walked, the market vendors fell silent, their hooded heads turning as she passed. She felt their hunger, a cold, predatory interest that made the hair on her neck stand up. She reached the velvet curtain and pulled it aside. The room beyond was small, filled with the hum of a dozen clicking clocks. A man sat at a desk made of dark mahogany, his fingers dancing over a ledger. He didn't look up as she entered. "Detective Quinn. I’ve been expecting you since three years ago. You’re late for the auction." Quinn levelled her gaze at him. "The auction is over. I’m here for my partner." The man looked up. His eyes were perfectly normal—a clear, piercing blue—but his reflection in the glass of the desk showed something entirely different. "Your partner isn't here, Harlow. He’s the one who sold the bone tokens you’re carrying." Quinn froze. The bone token in her pocket felt like it was burning through the fabric. "He didn't die for a case. He died to settle a debt. And now, I believe you’ve brought me the interest." He pointed to the compass in her hand. "That belongs to me. And the girl behind you belongs to the British Museum. You, however, are an unlisted asset." Quinn lunged forward, her hand reaching for the ledger, but her fingers passed through the desk as if it were smoke. The room blurred, the ticking of the clocks accelerating until it became a deafening roar. The last thing she saw before the darkness took her was Eva Kowalski standing in the doorway, her round glasses reflecting the blue flames of the market, her hand reaching into her satchel for a book she hadn't shown Quinn—a book bound in the same charcoal silk as the victim’s blazer. Quinn felt the floor drop away. The smell of copper and coal returned, but it was accompanied by the sound of a train—a train that shouldn't be running on an abandoned line. The light of her maglite died, leaving her in a silence so profound she could hear her own heart slowing down to match the pulse of the compass. She wasn't in the station anymore. She wasn't in the market. She was in the crack between. And the needle on the compass had finally stopped moving. It pointed at her own chest. Quinn reached into her pocket and pulled out the bone token. It was no longer bone. It was silver, and etched into the surface was her own name. "Harlow." A voice whispered from the dark. "You shouldn't have followed the breadcrumbs." It was Morris. But he wasn't wearing a police jacket. He was weeping a thick, silver liquid that glowed in the dark. "I didn't follow the breadcrumbs. I followed the evidence." Quinn gripped her service weapon. She reached out and turned the dial on the brass casing, reversing the sigils just as the girl had mentioned. The needle spun clockwise, then snapped. The darkness shattered. Quinn blinked. The harsh glare of a forensic floodlight hit her eyes. "Ma'am? You okay?" Miller stood over her. She was back on the platform. The body of the man in the charcoal suit was still there, but he was no longer posed. He was a messy heap of limbs. "You just stood there for a minute. Staring at the wall. I thought you’d seen a ghost." Quinn looked at her hand. The Veil Compass was gone. In its place was a standard-issue evidence bag containing a piece of jagged bone. She checked her pocket. The bone token was gone. "Where’s the girl?" "The archivist? She left five minutes ago. Said she’d given her statement to PC Henderson." Quinn looked toward the ticket booth. It was empty. The soot on the ceiling was just soot—black, greasy, and entirely mundane. She walked over to the victim and pulled back his collar. The skin was bruised and purple. A standard strangulation. "ID came through on the portable scanner. Small-time accountant. Involved in some money laundering for a firm in Camden. Looks like they caught up with him." Quinn stood up, the damp cold of the station finally seeping through her boots. She checked her watch. The leather was worn, the time was correct. Everything was back to normal. Every piece of evidence pointed to a simple, violent crime. She reached into her bag for her notebook and felt a sharp sting on her finger. She pulled her hand out. A small, silver sliver was embedded in her skin. She drew it out. It wasn't metal. It was a shard of glass, and as she held it to the light, she saw a tiny, distorted reflection of a blue-eyed man sitting at a mahogany desk. "Detective?" Miller called out from the tracks. "Coroner’s here." Quinn tucked the shard into her inner pocket. She looked at the shadows in the corner of the station, where the darkness still seemed just a little too thick. "You go ahead, Miller. I need to make a call to the British Museum." She turned and walked toward the exit. She passed the ticket booth one last time. Scrawled in the dust of the window were three words. *Don't look back.* Quinn didn't look back. She climbed the stairs toward the surface, toward the city that thought it was real, while the shard in her pocket hummed against her hip. The cold Camden air hit her, the smell of rain and exhaust replacing the scent of ozone. She pulled her phone from her pocket and scrolled through her contacts until she found a number that shouldn't have been there—a number with no name, just a string of symbols that looked like a compass dial. She hit dial. The phone didn't ring. It whispered. "Market's closed, Detective. But the archives are always open." Quinn ended the call and looked at the moon hanging over the London skyline. It was full, pale, and looked remarkably like a bone token tossed onto a velvet sky. She started her car, the engine turning over with a mechanical grind that felt loud and honest in the morning air. As she drove away from the station, the maglite on her passenger seat flickered once and died. Quinn didn't replace the batteries. She didn't need light to see the shadows anymore. She knew exactly where they were hiding.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags20
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences79
tagDensity0.253
leniency0.506
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
96.86% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3185
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"utterly"
count1
1
adverb"perfectly"
count1
highlights
0"utterly"
1"perfectly"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Henderson"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
54.47% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3185
totalAiIsms29
found
0
word"gloom"
count1
1
word"scanned"
count1
2
word"pristine"
count1
3
word"furrowing"
count1
4
word"imposing"
count1
5
word"etched"
count2
6
word"rhythmic"
count1
7
word"silk"
count2
8
word"standard"
count4
9
word"footsteps"
count1
10
word"echoing"
count1
11
word"flickered"
count2
12
word"mechanical"
count2
13
word"velvet"
count3
14
word"dancing"
count1
15
word"the last thing"
count1
16
word"silence"
count1
17
word"profound"
count1
18
word"pulse"
count1
19
word"shattered"
count1
highlights
0"gloom"
1"scanned"
2"pristine"
3"furrowing"
4"imposing"
5"etched"
6"rhythmic"
7"silk"
8"standard"
9"footsteps"
10"echoing"
11"flickered"
12"mechanical"
13"velvet"
14"dancing"
15"the last thing"
16"silence"
17"profound"
18"pulse"
19"shattered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences216
matches
0"felt a jolt"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences216
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
2"started to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences275
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen52
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords3
totalWords3175
ratio0.001
matches
0"Don't look back."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions97
wordCount2295
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity2.18
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Camden3
Quinn50
London2
Miller9
North1
Veil4
Compass4
Eva15
Kowalski2
Victorian1
Morris4
Metropolitan1
Police1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Miller"
2"Eva"
3"Kowalski"
4"Morris"
places
0"London"
1"Police"
globalScore0.411
windowScore0
57.41% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences162
glossingSentenceCount6
matches
0"seemed thicker a physical barrier that swallowed her light"
1"symbols that seemed to shift and writhe under the torchlight"
2"felt like a heartbeat—slow, rhythmic, a"
3"quite match her own pace"
4"felt like it was burning through the fa"
5"looked like a compass dial"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount3175
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences275
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs111
mean28.6
std22.46
cv0.785
sampleLengths
068
131
213
330
45
554
646
76
812
926
104
1119
125
13105
1410
157
1614
1745
185
1921
2065
215
2239
2329
2424
256
2611
2732
2817
2919
3024
3120
3218
3356
3416
3529
364
378
389
395
4036
4139
4235
4327
4420
4544
469
4731
4867
4949
92.27% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount8
totalSentences216
matches
0"been disturbed"
1"were crossed"
2"was blackened"
3"been opened"
4"was swept"
5"was accompanied"
6"was gone"
7"was gone"
8"was embedded"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs391
matches
0"was vibrating"
1"was burning"
2"wasn't wearing"
3"was weeping"
4"were hiding"
18.18% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount10
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences275
ratio0.044
matches
0"The rumors had been circulating in the back alleys for months—a place that didn't exist on any map."
1"The needle didn't point North; it spun in erratic circles."
2"It felt like a heartbeat—slow, rhythmic, and utterly alien."
3"The veins weren't blue or red; they were a shimmering silver."
4"She thought about Morris and the way his eyes had looked in the hospital—clear, terrified, and seeing something she couldn't."
5"He wore a uniform—a Metropolitan Police jacket, scorched and tattered at the edges."
6"The market didn't just sell goods; it sold parts of people."
7"His eyes were perfectly normal—a clear, piercing blue—but his reflection in the glass of the desk showed something entirely different."
8"The last thing she saw before the darkness took her was Eva Kowalski standing in the doorway, her round glasses reflecting the blue flames of the market, her hand reaching into her satchel for a book she hadn't shown Quinn—a book bound in the same charcoal silk as the victim’s blazer."
9"The smell of copper and coal returned, but it was accompanied by the sound of a train—a train that shouldn't be running on an abandoned line."
10"The soot on the ceiling was just soot—black, greasy, and entirely mundane."
11"She pulled her phone from her pocket and scrolled through her contacts until she found a number that shouldn't have been there—a number with no name, just a string of symbols that looked like a compass dial."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2313
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"heavy, leather-bound books"
1"faint, sickly green light."
adverbCount54
adverbRatio0.023346303501945526
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.00648508430609598
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences275
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences275
mean11.55
std7.49
cv0.649
sampleLengths
014
120
214
320
418
513
613
75
812
98
105
115
1215
1339
145
1513
166
177
188
197
206
2112
228
238
245
255
264
2719
285
293
309
3119
3217
3314
345
358
3611
3719
3810
395
402
4114
4210
4314
4421
455
4621
4712
4812
4922
39.09% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats30
diversityRatio0.23272727272727273
totalSentences275
uniqueOpeners64
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences213
matches(empty)
ratio0
69.77% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount80
totalSentences213
matches
0"Her maglite beam sliced through"
1"He looked up as Quinn"
2"She scanned the ground, noting"
3"She didn't touch the victim"
4"She observed the angle of"
5"His hands rested neatly on"
6"It was blackened, the flesh"
7"She reached into her kit,"
8"It remained stiff, locked in"
9"She pried the lips apart."
10"She plucked it out and"
11"It was a fragment of"
12"She noticed a faint shimmer"
13"She was small, bundled in"
14"She clutched a leather satchel"
15"She tucked a wild strand"
16"Her expression shifted from fear"
17"She flipped the lid of"
18"She held the Veil Compass"
19"It felt like a heartbeat—slow,"
ratio0.376
2.25% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount195
totalSentences213
matches
0"The air in the abandoned"
1"Harlow Quinn stepped over a"
2"Her maglite beam sliced through"
3"DC Miller leaned against a"
4"He looked up as Quinn"
5"Quinn didn't slow her pace."
6"She scanned the ground, noting"
7"These were clean, deliberate indentations."
8"Miller gestured toward a dark"
9"Quinn knelt by the body."
10"Salt-and-pepper hair caught the silver"
11"She didn't touch the victim"
12"She observed the angle of"
13"The man’s legs were crossed"
14"His hands rested neatly on"
15"Miller shifted, his leather jacket"
16"Quinn pointed her torch at"
17"The fabric of the charcoal"
18"Quinn leaned in."
19"The skin on the man's"
ratio0.915
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences213
matches(empty)
ratio0
63.49% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences99
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"It was blackened, the flesh shimmering with a dark, iridescent sheen that looked more like oil than a burn."
1"She was small, bundled in an oversized wool coat that looked lived-in."
2"The casing was thick with green patina, the face etched with symbols that seemed to shift and writhe under the torchlight."
3"She followed the twitching needle, her footsteps echoing in a rhythm that didn't quite match her own pace."
4"It was a cavernous hall, lit by hanging lanterns that flickered with blue flames."
5"It held out a tray of shimmering glass vials, its head tilting with a mechanical jerk."
6"Quinn lunged forward, her hand reaching for the ledger, but her fingers passed through the desk as if it were smoke."
7"The last thing she saw before the darkness took her was Eva Kowalski standing in the doorway, her round glasses reflecting the blue flames of the market, her ha…"
8"The smell of copper and coal returned, but it was accompanied by the sound of a train—a train that shouldn't be running on an abandoned line."
9"She pulled her phone from her pocket and scrolled through her contacts until she found a number that shouldn't have been there—a number with no name, just a str…"
10"She started her car, the engine turning over with a mechanical grind that felt loud and honest in the morning air."
75.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags20
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Miller shifted, his leather jacket creaking"
1"Quinn stepped, her shadow stretching long and distorted across the yellowed tiles"
99.37% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"Miller shouted (shout)"
1"Eva whispered (whisper)"
2"The figure croaked (croak)"
3"A voice whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences79
tagDensity0.051
leniency0.101
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.101
74.5387%