Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ94W8Q92KGP4TM1ANYVB1P0

Run Details

Duration:
21.4s
Cost:
$0.009019
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The silver chain of the Heartstone Pendant bit into the back of Aurora’s neck, the crimson gem thumping against her sternum like a second, frantic heart. It wasn't just warm; it was hot, a localized fever that warned her they were nearing the tear. Beside her, Isolde Varga moved through the tall grass of the Richmond Grove with a silence that defied physics. The Seer’s silver hair trailed behind her like a comet’s tail, and as Rory watched, she confirmed the unsettling truth: the wildflowers didn't even bend under Isolde’s weight. She left no footprints, a ghost in a realm of living green. "The Veil is thin here," Nyx’s voice drifted over Rory’s shoulder, a raspy whisper that sounded like dry leaves skittering across pavement. The Shade was a silhouette against the ancient oak standing stones, their form flickering between a solid, towering man and a smudge of charcoal smoke. Their violet eyes glowed with a faint, predatory light. "Can you feel the hunger of the other side, Little Malphora?" Rory tightened her grip on the hilt of the moonsilver dagger tucked into her belt. The Fae-forged blade was a cold comfort against her thigh, literally freezing to the touch, providing a sharp contrast to the humid air of the Grove. "I feel like I'm about to walk into a furnace," Rory muttered, her black hair sticking to her forehead. "Let’s get this over with." Isolde stopped between two massive stones that seemed to vibrate with a low-frequency hum. She turned her pale lavender eyes toward Rory. "The door is not a door, but a mouth," the Seer said, her voice melodic and frustratingly indirect. "To enter is to be swallowed, but only the one who does not chew will survive the belly." Rory sighed, glancing at Nyx. "Translation?" "Don't eat anything," the Shade rasped. Nyx stepped forward, their shadowy hand reaching out to touch the shimmering distortion in the air. The space between the stones rippled like oil on water. With a sudden, violent lurch of Rory’s stomach, the garden scent of Richmond Park—damp earth and blooming jasmine—was sucked away, replaced by the overwhelming, cloying aroma of caramelizing sugar and roasting meat. They stepped through. The transition wasn't a walk; it was a fall. Rory stumbled onto a path made of crushed peppercorns and white salt, her boots crunching loudly in a world that felt suddenly, oppressively heavy. She gasped, her lungs filling with air that was thick, warm, and scented with a thousand spices she couldn't name. "Welcome to Dymas," Nyx said, their form stabilizing into a more solid, obsidian-skinned humanoid shape to cope with the physical density of the realm. Rory looked up and froze. The sky wasn't blue or black; it was a deep, glowing amber, the color of honey held up to a candle. There was no sun, yet the light was pervasive, casting long, soft shadows across a landscape that defied every law of nature she knew. To her left, a vineyard stretched toward the horizon, but the vines weren't wood; they were braided copper, and the grapes hanging from them were the size of plums, glowing with an inner translucent light that suggested they were filled with liquid gold. To her right, an orchard of trees with leaves like spun sugar rattled in a hot breeze. Every branch was heavy with fruit—pears that looked like blown glass, peaches with fur as soft as velvet, and pomegranates that had cracked open to reveal seeds that sparkled like rubies. "It’s... beautiful," Rory whispered, though a primal part of her brain was screaming for her to run. "Excess is always beautiful until it is felt," Isolde said. The Seer began to walk down the salt-path, her silver gown billowing. Even here, in the realm of Gluttony, she left no mark on the white grains. "The Prince Belphegor crafts a masterpiece of the senses. He provides the feast, but the guests are the main course." As they moved deeper into the realm, the sense of wonder began to curdle into unease. The scale of everything was wrong. The flowers lining the path were enormous, their petals thick and fleshy like succulent tongues, dripping nectar that pooled in the salt and turned it into a sticky, grey slush. Rory noticed a movement in the vineyard. A man was there, dressed in a tattered chef's coat that might have once been white. He was hunched over a copper vine, his hands stained dark purple. He wasn't harvesting the grapes; he was shoving them into his mouth with a panicked, rhythmic intensity. His eyes were wide, bloodshot, and fixed on nothing. "A helbound soul," Nyx explained, noting Rory’s gaze. "A master of the culinary arts in life, now contracted to Belphegor. He will eat until he bursts, and then he will wake up and begin the banquet again. The Prince demands perfection in every ingredient, and the ingredients require... tasting." Rory looked away, her stomach turning. The Heartstone Pendant on her chest pulsed rhythmically, a low thrumming heat that seemed to be communicating with the very ground beneath them. "The pendant is reacting. The portal we're looking for is close." They reached a sprawling plaza where the salt-path opened into a courtyard made of polished obsidian. In the center, a fountain bubbled, but it didn't spout water. Dark, rich chocolate cascaded down tiers of carved bone, the scent so intense it made Rory’s head ache. Around the fountain, long tables were groaned under the weight of a feast that looked like a painting brought to a horrific kind of life. There were roasted boars with skin like crackling mahogany, towers of pastries dusted with iridescent sugar, and carafes of wine that shimmered with the colors of a bruised sunset. "Look at the architecture," Rory said, pointing past the tables. Rising behind the feast was a palace that seemed to be grown rather than built. Its walls were ivory—actual ivory, Rory realized with a shudder—and the window frames were gilded in gold leaf that peeled and fluttered like dead skin. The entire structure looked like a rotting wedding cake left out in the sun. "The Seat of Gluttony," Nyx whispered. The Shade seemed agitated, their edges blurring and sharpening rapidly. "The shadows here are hungry, Rory. They are not like the shadows of Earth. They have been fed on the scraps of the Prince's table." A sound echoed across the plaza—a deep, resonant chime, like a finger being run around the rim of a massive crystal glass. It was followed by the sound of laughter, high-pitched and melodic, coming from the palace. "The diners approach," Isolde warned. She turned to Rory, her pale eyes wide. "The vision I saw was of a silver blade in a field of red. Do not let the sweetness deceive you, Aurora Carter. The sugar here is ground from the teeth of those who forgot their way home." Rory reached for the Fae blade at her hip. As she drew it, the Moonsilver metal hissed in the amber air, a faint blue luminescence blooming along its leaf-shaped edge. The coldness of the weapon crawled up her arm, centering her, a sharp needle of reality in a world of cloying hallucinations. "We need to move," Rory said, her voice Tight-Person Limited perspective sharpening her focus. She spotted a rift in the air near the base of the ivory palace—a shimmering distortion identical to the one they had used to enter, but this one bled a pale, sickly green light. "There. That’s the tear." But as they stepped toward the palace, the ground beneath the salt-path began to heave. The giant, fleshy flowers at the path's edge turned their heads toward the trio. Their petals peeled back to reveal rows of needle-like teeth. The smell of the realm changed instantly—the sweetness vanished, replaced by the pungent, metallic tang of raw bile. "The garden is waking up," Nyx said, their voice dropping to a low, dangerous growl. The Shade’s form expanded, their arms lengthening into smoky claws. "It seems the Prince doesn't like guests who refuse to eat." Rory gripped her dagger, her thumb brushing the small crescent-shaped scar on her wrist—a reminder of a different kind of trap she’d once escaped. She looked at the amber sky, the copper vines, and the weeping ivory palace. The wonder was gone, replaced by the cold, hard intelligence that had kept her alive in the streets of London and the kitchens of the Golden Empress. "Fine," Rory said, her blue eyes flashing. "I was never much for dessert anyway."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences26
tagDensity0.538
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
93.04% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1437
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
37.37% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1437
totalAiIsms18
found
0
word"silence"
count1
1
word"weight"
count2
2
word"whisper"
count1
3
word"lurch"
count1
4
word"stomach"
count2
5
word"velvet"
count1
6
word"sense of"
count1
7
word"rhythmic"
count1
8
word"intensity"
count1
9
word"pulsed"
count1
10
word"shimmered"
count1
11
word"fluttered"
count1
12
word"structure"
count1
13
word"echoed"
count1
14
word"crystal"
count1
15
word"reminder"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"weight"
2"whisper"
3"lurch"
4"stomach"
5"velvet"
6"sense of"
7"rhythmic"
8"intensity"
9"pulsed"
10"shimmered"
11"fluttered"
12"structure"
13"echoed"
14"crystal"
15"reminder"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences75
matches
0"the sense of wonder"
28.57% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount6
narrationSentences75
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences87
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen43
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1428
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions62
wordCount1172
uniqueNames22
maxNameDensity1.79
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Heartstone2
Pendant2
Aurora1
Isolde5
Varga1
Richmond2
Grove2
Seer3
Rory21
Shade4
Fae-forged1
Nyx7
Park1
Gluttony1
Rising1
Fae2
Moonsilver1
Tight-Person1
Limited1
London1
Golden1
Empress1
persons
0"Pendant"
1"Aurora"
2"Isolde"
3"Varga"
4"Seer"
5"Rory"
6"Shade"
7"Nyx"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Grove"
2"Park"
3"London"
globalScore0.604
windowScore0.5
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences67
glossingSentenceCount8
matches
0"sounded like dry leaves skittering across"
1"stones that seemed to vibrate with a low-frequency hum"
2"looked like blown glass, peaches with fur"
3"heat that seemed to be communicating with the very ground beneath them"
4"looked like a painting brought to a horri"
5"palace that seemed to be grown rather than built"
6"looked like a rotting wedding cake left o"
7"seemed agitated their edges blurring and sharpening rapidly"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.7
wordCount1428
matches
0"not a door, but a mouth,\" the Seer said, her voice melodic"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences87
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs29
mean49.24
std28.35
cv0.576
sampleLengths
0103
167
265
358
46
56
658
73
853
924
1093
1148
1217
1357
14113
1549
1640
1799
1810
1954
2041
2137
2251
2352
2452
2557
2636
2765
2814
67.84% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount8
totalSentences75
matches
0"was sucked"
1"were braided"
2"were filled"
3"was hunched"
4"were groaned"
5"were roasted"
6"were gilded"
7"was followed"
8"was gone"
63.25% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs195
matches
0"were nearing"
1"was screaming"
2"was shoving"
3"wasn't harvesting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount9
semicolonCount5
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences87
ratio0.138
matches
0"It wasn't just warm; it was hot, a localized fever that warned her they were nearing the tear."
1"With a sudden, violent lurch of Rory’s stomach, the garden scent of Richmond Park—damp earth and blooming jasmine—was sucked away, replaced by the overwhelming, cloying aroma of caramelizing sugar and roasting meat."
2"The transition wasn't a walk; it was a fall."
3"The sky wasn't blue or black; it was a deep, glowing amber, the color of honey held up to a candle."
4"To her left, a vineyard stretched toward the horizon, but the vines weren't wood; they were braided copper, and the grapes hanging from them were the size of plums, glowing with an inner translucent light that suggested they were filled with liquid gold."
5"Every branch was heavy with fruit—pears that looked like blown glass, peaches with fur as soft as velvet, and pomegranates that had cracked open to reveal seeds that sparkled like rubies."
6"He wasn't harvesting the grapes; he was shoving them into his mouth with a panicked, rhythmic intensity."
7"Its walls were ivory—actual ivory, Rory realized with a shudder—and the window frames were gilded in gold leaf that peeled and fluttered like dead skin."
8"A sound echoed across the plaza—a deep, resonant chime, like a finger being run around the rim of a massive crystal glass."
9"She spotted a rift in the air near the base of the ivory palace—a shimmering distortion identical to the one they had used to enter, but this one bled a pale, sickly green light."
10"The smell of the realm changed instantly—the sweetness vanished, replaced by the pungent, metallic tang of raw bile."
11"Rory gripped her dagger, her thumb brushing the small crescent-shaped scar on her wrist—a reminder of a different kind of trap she’d once escaped."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1191
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"solid, obsidian-skinned humanoid"
1"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount28
adverbRatio0.023509655751469353
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.007556675062972292
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences87
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences87
mean16.41
std8.82
cv0.537
sampleLengths
026
118
219
328
412
522
625
79
811
915
1026
1119
125
1314
148
1518
1618
175
181
196
2016
2110
2232
233
249
2524
2620
2724
285
2921
3024
3143
3217
3331
3417
3510
3612
3715
3820
3916
406
4130
427
4316
4412
4517
469
478
4841
496
52.49% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.39080459770114945
totalSentences87
uniqueOpeners34
46.30% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences72
matches
0"Dark, rich chocolate cascaded down"
ratio0.014
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount16
totalSentences72
matches
0"It wasn't just warm; it"
1"She left no footprints, a"
2"Their violet eyes glowed with"
3"She turned her pale lavender"
4"They stepped through."
5"She gasped, her lungs filling"
6"He was hunched over a"
7"He wasn't harvesting the grapes;"
8"His eyes were wide, bloodshot,"
9"They reached a sprawling plaza"
10"Its walls were ivory—actual ivory,"
11"It was followed by the"
12"She turned to Rory, her"
13"She spotted a rift in"
14"Their petals peeled back to"
15"She looked at the amber"
ratio0.222
57.22% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount58
totalSentences72
matches
0"The silver chain of the"
1"It wasn't just warm; it"
2"The Seer’s silver hair trailed"
3"She left no footprints, a"
4"Nyx’s voice drifted over Rory’s"
5"The Shade was a silhouette"
6"Their violet eyes glowed with"
7"Rory tightened her grip on"
8"The Fae-forged blade was a"
9"Rory muttered, her black hair"
10"Isolde stopped between two massive"
11"She turned her pale lavender"
12"the Seer said, her voice"
13"Rory sighed, glancing at Nyx."
14"the Shade rasped"
15"Nyx stepped forward, their shadowy"
16"The space between the stones"
17"They stepped through."
18"The transition wasn't a walk;"
19"Rory stumbled onto a path"
ratio0.806
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences72
matches
0"To her left, a vineyard"
1"To her right, an orchard"
2"Even here, in the realm"
ratio0.042
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences49
technicalSentenceCount14
matches
0"Beside her, Isolde Varga moved through the tall grass of the Richmond Grove with a silence that defied physics."
1"The Shade was a silhouette against the ancient oak standing stones, their form flickering between a solid, towering man and a smudge of charcoal smoke."
2"Isolde stopped between two massive stones that seemed to vibrate with a low-frequency hum."
3"Rory stumbled onto a path made of crushed peppercorns and white salt, her boots crunching loudly in a world that felt suddenly, oppressively heavy."
4"There was no sun, yet the light was pervasive, casting long, soft shadows across a landscape that defied every law of nature she knew."
5"Every branch was heavy with fruit—pears that looked like blown glass, peaches with fur as soft as velvet, and pomegranates that had cracked open to reveal seeds…"
6"The flowers lining the path were enormous, their petals thick and fleshy like succulent tongues, dripping nectar that pooled in the salt and turned it into a st…"
7"The Heartstone Pendant on her chest pulsed rhythmically, a low thrumming heat that seemed to be communicating with the very ground beneath them."
8"Around the fountain, long tables were groaned under the weight of a feast that looked like a painting brought to a horrific kind of life."
9"There were roasted boars with skin like crackling mahogany, towers of pastries dusted with iridescent sugar, and carafes of wine that shimmered with the colors …"
10"Its walls were ivory—actual ivory, Rory realized with a shudder—and the window frames were gilded in gold leaf that peeled and fluttered like dead skin."
11"The Shade seemed agitated, their edges blurring and sharpening rapidly."
12"The coldness of the weapon crawled up her arm, centering her, a sharp needle of reality in a world of cloying hallucinations."
13"The wonder was gone, replaced by the cold, hard intelligence that had kept her alive in the streets of London and the kitchens of the Golden Empress."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"Rory muttered, her black hair sticking to her forehead"
1"the Seer said, her voice melodic and frustratingly indirect"
2"Nyx said, their voice dropping to a low, dangerous growl"
3"Rory said, her blue eyes flashing"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Rory muttered (mutter)"
1"Rory whispered (whisper)"
2"Nyx explained (explain)"
3"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
4"Isolde warned (warn)"
dialogueSentences26
tagDensity0.462
leniency0.923
rawRatio0.417
effectiveRatio0.385
69.4692%