Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ94Y8T5F14J92CQJ4CDX0XD

Run Details

Duration:
18.0s
Cost:
$0.009273
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The world dissolved around Rory, twisting into a kaleidoscope of impossible light and impossible darkness. Her stomach lurched, the familiar ache of inter-realm travel a dull ghost compared to the dizzying visual assault. Then, as quickly as it began, it ceased. Her boots landed on soil that felt unnaturally soft, yielding with each step like velvet foam. The air, instead of the crisp London chill she’d left behind, was thick and warm, heavy with a thousand intoxicating scents. Sweet, cloying, like overripe figs mixed with something metallic, something like… wine and blood, perhaps. Rory pushed the thought away, her cool-headed nature asserting itself. She blinked, forcing her bright blue eyes to focus, trying to make sense of the new reality. Above, the sky was a deep, unbreaking amber, like solidified honey. No sun, no moon, just this vast, glowing dome, casting everything in a perpetual twilight of gold and bronze. In the distance, impossibly tall trees, their trunks spiraling upwards like twisted corkscrews, bore leaves of burnished copper and deep emerald. Their branches drooped under the weight of fruits alien to any Earth catalogue. She saw spheres of pulsating violet, clusters of luminous green globes, and others that resembled gigantic, segmented jewels, glittering beneath the amber sky. “Hel,” Isolde murmured, her voice a soft, bell-like chime. The half-Fae seer stood beside Rory, her silver hair shimmering, her pale lavender eyes vast with knowing, yet utterly unreadable. She wore a strange, serene smile, as if this place, for all its alien majesty, was simply another variation on a theme. Nyx solidified beside them, a towering silhouette of living shadow against the amber glow. Their faint violet eyes swept across the landscape, unblinking. A low whisper, like wind rustling dry leaves, emanated from their form. "Dymas. The Glutton's Feast." Rory’s fingers instinctively tightened around the hilt of the Fae-Forged Blade at her hip, its moonsilver cold to the touch, a stark contrast to the oppressive warmth of the air. Her crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist throbbed faintly, a phantom echo of a childhood accident, or perhaps just nerves. The Heartstone Pendant, usually a subtle weight against her collarbone, now pulsed with a distinct, insistent warmth. She could feel the faint inner glow against her skin, a constant reminder of the portal they’d just crossed. “Feast is right,” Rory muttered, the words catching in her throat, thick with the saccharine air. The sprawling vineyards stretched into the distance, endless rows of impossibly vibrant vines. Grapes hung in decadent bunches, not just deep purple, but iridescent, shimmering with the colours of spilled oil, each berry the size of a plum. Some were so engorged they seemed ready to burst, their skins stretched taut and translucent, revealing the rich, dark pulp within. They began to walk, the soft, rich earth cushioning their steps. Isolde, true to her nature, left no footprints in the pliable soil. Rory, however, sank slightly with each stride, a testament to the foreign weight of the world. The sounds were as alien as the sights: a low hum that seemed to emanate from the very ground, a symphony of buzzing insects with wings like stained glass, and the occasional soft *thump* of overripe fruit falling from overhead branches. Each time, the impact sent a sickeningly sweet aroma billowing into the air. Rory reached out to touch a vine, her fingers brushing against a cluster of grapes. They felt cool and slick, almost oily. A deep crimson liquid, thick like syrup, slowly oozed from a tiny tear in one of the berries, coating her fingertip. She pulled her hand back quickly. Everything here felt *alive* in a way that was overwhelming, almost aggressive. The vegetation seemed to writhe and undulate with a slow, heavy breath. "This is… a lot," she finally said, voicing the thought that had been rattling in her skull. Nyx’s whisper-voice rippled, "Excess. The very air is sustenance here. The soil, the fruit, the light. All, a banquet." They passed through a grove of what looked like enormous, squat mushrooms, their caps broader than any table, glowing with a soft, bioluminescent light that added layers to the amber sky's illumination. Beneath them, smaller fungi pulsed with slow, rhythmic beats, like subterranean hearts. Rory saw a faint sheen of dew on the caps, iridescent, clinging like scattered jewels. The path, if one could call it that, wound deeper into this gluttonous paradise. Towering structures of intricate latticework, woven from living vines and hardened sap, rose in the distance. They looked like open-air pavilions, designed for vast gatherings. Within the shadows of these structures, Rory glimpsed massive, stone serving platters, some still piled high with skeletal remains of what might have once been exotic beasts, now picked clean. "You said master chefs are here," Rory said, glancing at Nyx. "Helbound souls. Are we likely to run into… staff?" She kept her hand on the Fae-Forged Blade. It was meant to be effective against demons. She wondered if the 'chefs' counted. "Perhaps. Or guests," Nyx replied, the whisper fading slightly as their form flickered, their shadows deepening in the gloom of the massive vines. "Dymas beckons all who hunger." Isolde stopped, her head tilted, her long silver hair falling over her shoulder. She closed her eyes for a moment, then reopened them, the pale lavender glowing. "The whispers here… they are not of hunger, but of desire fulfilled. And renewed. A cycle unending." They came upon a river. But it was not water that flowed there. This river was a slow, viscous current of what looked like molten honey, glowing faintly from within. Large, fleshy fruits, like swollen pumpkins, bobbed sluggishly in its golden depths, their skins sticky and glistening. The scent here was overwhelmingly sweet, almost nauseating, a thick layer of vanilla and caramel hanging heavy in the air. Rory had to fight the urge to gag. "The nectar of the land," Isolde mused, her gaze serene. "From root and bloom, a living chalice." Rory couldn't help but feel a primal unease. This place was too rich, too perfect, too much. The beauty was overwhelming, threatening to suffocate. It felt like walking through a dream, or a nightmare of consumption. She longed for the harsh grit of London pavements, for the smell of concrete and rain, for something solid and real. She ran a thumb over the polished moonsilver of the Fae-Forged blade. Its coldness was a comfort. Moving away from the honey-river, they discovered a clearing. Here, the ground was not soil, but a carpet of velvety mosses and gigantic, fleshy petals, all in shades of crimson and deep rose. In the center, a colossal tree, unlike any other they had seen. Its trunk was a smooth, obsidian-like surface, and instead of branches, it had vast, curving platforms, each laden with different arrays of incredible food. Clusters of iridescent caviar, mounds of glistening, purple-fleshed meat, towers of pastry spun like gossamer and filled with liquid light. The sheer quantity was staggering, an altar to indulgence. "This," Rory breathed, "this is what they mean by gluttony." Nyx moved closer to the tree, their shadow form seeming to drink in the dark trunk. "A larder for Belphegor, perhaps." The thought of the realm's prince, the demon of gluttony, sent a shiver down Rory’s spine. Prince Belphegor. The place felt like it was waiting for someone, something, to devour from this bounty. Isolde, however, walked towards one of the lowest platforms, her ethereal form gliding over the petal-strewn ground. She extended a delicate hand, her fingers hovering over a perfectly symmetrical pyramid of what looked like crystallized, multi-colored sugar. "To partake of such delights… is to be bound." She didn't touch it, but the implication hung heavy in the air. Rory felt a different kind of fear claw at her gut. Not a fear of physical danger, not yet, but a fear of the seductive power of Dymas. What would happen if she touched that sugar? If she took a bite of that glistening fruit? Could the very act of consumption bind her here? The heavy, sweet air, the endless visual stimuli, the sheer overwhelming *abundance* — it was a trap in itself. She noticed, then, a faint glint from beneath one of the lowest platforms. Pushing aside a curtain of thick, fleshy leaves, Rory saw a discarded chalice. It was exquisitely crafted, wrought from a dark, polished wood, intricately carved with swirling patterns. But it wasn't the chalice itself that caught her eye. It was the faint, lingering scent clinging to its rim. A rich, musky aroma, utterly distinct from the pervasive sweetness of Dymas. It was the scent of something animal, something predatory. "What's this?" she asked, her voice low. She pulled the chalice out, careful not to touch its rim directly, but holding it by its base. Isolde approached, her pale lavender eyes fixed on the chalice. "A vessel. To hold that which fuels the appetite." Nyx stood beside her, their shadow form rippling. "A hunter's cup, perhaps. Or a hunter's warning." Rory examined the carvings. They depicted lean, sinuous figures, vaguely humanoid, but with elongated limbs and sharp, beak-like mouths. They seemed to be in various states of pursuit and consumption, preying upon smaller, more ethereal creatures. It was a stark visual contrast to the decadent feast above. The chalice was cool in her hand, almost cold like her blade, but without the blade's reassuring weight. It felt… hungry. Rory suddenly felt a chill that had nothing to do with the warmth of Dymas. This exquisite, overflowing world wasn't just about leisurely indulgence. There was a lurking predator here, a dark undercurrent to the ocean of sweetness. Dymas was a feast, yes, but for whom? And what, or who, was the prey? She looked up at the amber sky, then back at the endless vineyards and orchards, the silently swaying trees laden with impossible bounty. The silence, broken only by the hum of insects and the thud of falling fruit, suddenly felt less peaceful, more expectant. They had walked into a trap, she knew it. The question now was: what kind of trap, and when would it spring?
created_at"2026-02-25T00:59:45.866Z" 2/25/2026, 12:59:45 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she finally said [finally]"
dialogueSentences18
tagDensity0.667
leniency1
rawRatio0.083
effectiveRatio0.083
61.52% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1689
totalAiIsmAdverbs13
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count2
1
adverb"utterly"
count2
2
adverb"slightly"
count2
3
adverb"very"
count3
4
adverb"slowly"
count1
5
adverb"perfectly"
count1
6
adverb"suddenly"
count2
highlights
0"quickly"
1"utterly"
2"slightly"
3"very"
4"slowly"
5"perfectly"
6"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1689
totalAiIsms45
found
0
word"kaleidoscope"
count1
1
word"stomach"
count1
2
word"lurched"
count1
3
word"familiar"
count1
4
word"velvet"
count1
5
word"chill"
count2
6
word"sense of"
count1
7
word"weight"
count4
8
word"unreadable"
count1
9
word"whisper"
count3
10
word"stark"
count2
11
word"oppressive"
count1
12
word"warmth"
count3
13
word"throbbed"
count1
14
word"echo"
count1
15
word"pulsed"
count2
16
word"could feel"
count1
17
word"reminder"
count1
18
word"testament"
count1
19
word"symphony"
count1
20
word"rhythmic"
count1
21
word"intricate"
count1
22
word"flickered"
count1
23
word"gloom"
count1
24
word"desire"
count1
25
word"depths"
count1
26
word"glistening"
count3
27
word"perfect"
count1
28
word"crystallized"
count1
29
word"implication"
count1
30
word"glint"
count1
31
word"predator"
count1
32
word"silence"
count1
highlights
0"kaleidoscope"
1"stomach"
2"lurched"
3"familiar"
4"velvet"
5"chill"
6"sense of"
7"weight"
8"unreadable"
9"whisper"
10"stark"
11"oppressive"
12"warmth"
13"throbbed"
14"echo"
15"pulsed"
16"could feel"
17"reminder"
18"testament"
19"symphony"
20"rhythmic"
21"intricate"
22"flickered"
23"gloom"
24"desire"
25"depths"
26"glistening"
27"perfect"
28"crystallized"
29"implication"
30"glint"
31"predator"
32"silence"
33.33% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches3
maxInWindow3
found
0
label"couldn't help but"
count1
1
label"hung in the air"
count1
2
label"sent a shiver through"
count1
highlights
0"couldn't help but feel"
1"hung heavy in the air"
2"sent a shiver down"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences116
matches
0"felt a chill"
93.60% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences116
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences123
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen41
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans3
markdownWords3
totalWords1690
ratio0.002
matches
0"thump"
1"alive"
2"abundance"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
92.57% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions45
wordCount1567
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity1.15
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory18
London2
Earth1
Fae-Forged3
Blade2
Heartstone1
Pendant1
Nyx6
Isolde6
Belphegor1
Dymas4
persons
0"Rory"
1"Earth"
2"Nyx"
3"Isolde"
4"Belphegor"
places
0"London"
globalScore0.926
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences103
glossingSentenceCount9
matches
0"something like…"
1"seemed ready to burst, their skins stretched taut and translucent, revealing the rich, dark pulp within"
2"hum that seemed to emanate from the very ground, a symphony of buzzing insects with wings like stained glass, and the occasional soft *thump* of overripe fruit falling from overhead branches"
3"looked like enormous, squat mushrooms, th"
4"looked like open-air pavilions, designed"
5"looked like molten honey, glowing faintly"
6"felt like walking through a dream, or a"
7"felt like it was waiting for someone, s"
8"looked like crystallized, multi-colored s"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches6
per1kWords3.55
wordCount1690
matches
0"not just deep purple, but iridescent, shimmering with the colours of spilled oil, each"
1"not of hunger, but of desire fulfilled"
2"not soil, but a carpet of velvety mosses"
3"Not a fear of physical danger, not yet, but a fear of the seductive power of Dymas"
4"not yet, but a fear of the seductive power of Dymas"
5"not to touch its rim directly, but holding it by its base"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences123
matches
0"touched that sugar"
99.18% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs32
mean52.81
std26.26
cv0.497
sampleLengths
041
179
287
351
439
586
675
793
873
917
1019
1159
1269
1342
1428
1544
1675
1717
1874
1998
2010
2121
2233
2358
2473
2582
2625
2719
2816
2947
3074
3166
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences116
matches
0"was meant"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs229
matches
0"was staggering"
1"was waiting"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences123
ratio0.008
matches
0"The heavy, sweet air, the endless visual stimuli, the sheer overwhelming *abundance* — it was a trap in itself."
93.68% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount847
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount40
adverbRatio0.047225501770956316
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.01770956316410862
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences123
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences123
mean13.74
std6.53
cv0.475
sampleLengths
015
118
28
316
421
511
64
710
817
911
1019
1121
1213
1323
149
1520
1622
1714
189
1912
204
2130
2220
2317
2419
2516
2613
2725
2821
2911
3012
3116
3241
3313
3415
357
3621
376
3812
3912
4017
4119
4232
4312
4415
4514
4616
479
4830
4911
62.06% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.3821138211382114
totalSentences123
uniqueOpeners47
29.76% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences112
matches
0"Then, as quickly as it"
ratio0.009
84.29% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount38
totalSentences112
matches
0"Her stomach lurched, the familiar"
1"Her boots landed on soil"
2"She blinked, forcing her bright"
3"Their branches drooped under the"
4"She saw spheres of pulsating"
5"She wore a strange, serene"
6"Their faint violet eyes swept"
7"Her crescent-shaped scar on her"
8"She could feel the faint"
9"They began to walk, the"
10"They felt cool and slick,"
11"She pulled her hand back"
12"she finally said, voicing the"
13"They passed through a grove"
14"They looked like open-air pavilions,"
15"She kept her hand on"
16"It was meant to be"
17"She wondered if the"
18"She closed her eyes for"
19"They came upon a river."
ratio0.339
49.29% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount92
totalSentences112
matches
0"The world dissolved around Rory,"
1"Her stomach lurched, the familiar"
2"Her boots landed on soil"
3"The air, instead of the"
4"wine and blood, perhaps."
5"Rory pushed the thought away,"
6"She blinked, forcing her bright"
7"Their branches drooped under the"
8"She saw spheres of pulsating"
9"Isolde murmured, her voice a"
10"The half-Fae seer stood beside"
11"She wore a strange, serene"
12"Nyx solidified beside them, a"
13"Their faint violet eyes swept"
14"A low whisper, like wind"
15"Rory’s fingers instinctively tightened around"
16"Her crescent-shaped scar on her"
17"The Heartstone Pendant, usually a"
18"She could feel the faint"
19"Rory muttered, the words catching"
ratio0.821
44.64% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences112
matches
0"If she took a bite"
ratio0.009
77.92% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences77
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"Her boots landed on soil that felt unnaturally soft, yielding with each step like velvet foam."
1"She saw spheres of pulsating violet, clusters of luminous green globes, and others that resembled gigantic, segmented jewels, glittering beneath the amber sky."
2"She wore a strange, serene smile, as if this place, for all its alien majesty, was simply another variation on a theme."
3"The sounds were as alien as the sights: a low hum that seemed to emanate from the very ground, a symphony of buzzing insects with wings like stained glass, and …"
4"Everything here felt *alive* in a way that was overwhelming, almost aggressive."
5"They passed through a grove of what looked like enormous, squat mushrooms, their caps broader than any table, glowing with a soft, bioluminescent light that add…"
6"But it wasn't the chalice itself that caught her eye."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"Isolde murmured, her voice a soft, bell-like chime"
1"Isolde mused, her gaze serene"
2"She didn't, but the implication hung heavy in the air"
3"she asked, her voice low"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
1"Rory muttered (mutter)"
2"Rory breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences18
tagDensity0.389
leniency0.778
rawRatio0.429
effectiveRatio0.333
70.7276%